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Posted: 10 years ago
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Hey!
This seems to be an interesting plot... and you've penned it really well..
Continue soon..
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Posted: 10 years ago
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So here's the first chapter, as promised. I hope you like my work; please do leave your feedback because I am here to improve my writing. This is an old story and probably the write up is not up to mark but still I would love to know where I went wrong.

A big Thank You to everyone who liked and commented. You don't know how much that means to me. And to Ayushi, Ananya, Nishi, Vani20, srinidhi(sorry I don't know your name :| ), thank you so much for coming here to read this though you are not Sandhir fan. I never expected that, really. You guys made my day! :)

And those who want PM for this story, please add my account AlbusPercival to your buddy list or leave a comment. I will add you. Thank you for reading this story.

Chapter 1

Randhir hit the accelerator of his car, his car strained under the speed. He jumped a number of signals purely blinded by fury. He came back after two years in the hope of a better life, a support for himself and what did he find? That better life and support was going to drown in dihydro oxygen and sodium chloride. What was wrong with that girl?

He reached the Malad police station and stormed in, shouting, "Sanyukta". Immediately two constables blocked him yelling in vernaculars to stop. "Sanyukta," he bellowed looking around for her and when he couldn't see her, he turned to them, "Where is Sanyukta?"

"How dare you shout in here?" one of them shouted, "This is a police station."

"Where is Sanyukta?" He growled, irritated.

Hearing all the commotion the head inspector came out of his room followed by her. Sanyukta. The moment Randhir saw her he sobered up. He was shocked to see what she had become. She looked no lesser than a zombie. The gaunt face, the petite arms with scratches around her elbows, was something Randhir felt would haunt him for a long time. The memory of the first time they had met flashed in front of his eyes...

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Randhir was in his room playing with his brother, Rudra. His dad had bought both of them a new gaming console and how could they let it stay untouched. Both of them were alone in the house, happily playing when they heard the sound of smashing of glass.

Rudra jumped, "What was that?"

"Relax," Randhir said, "And don't try to deviate me now that you know I am winning."

Rudra relaxed and continued the game. They heard the same sound again, this time it was accompanied by the scream of a girl. Rudra said, nervous, "Bhai, we should really go see what's happening."

Randhir slothfully agreed. They went down to get the shock of their life. There was a girl with a bat in her hand accompanied by another girl a couple of years younger to her. Randhir saw her raise her bat and hit it right across the window smashing the glass into pieces. She raised the bat and hit the car again.

Rudra rushed forward yelling, "What the hell are you doing?"

He raised his hand to catch hold of her arm. She turned to him raising her bat in his direction screaming, "Don't you dare."

Rudra stammered backwards, horrified. Randhir watched this all from a distance his hands folded across his chest.

She grabbed Rudra's collar and said, "How dare you?" Her every word spit fire. "How dare you try to harass my friend."

There was a group of people watching the drama from a distance, kind of like Randhir. Rudra stuttered, "Wha... What are you talk... talking about?"

"I have seen your car in front of our complex. And if I see you there again, I swear to God... Do you see this car? This will be the condition of you." She spit out.

She left his collar making sure to push him. She walked over to the other girl, who looked triumphant and holding her wrist lead her away.

Randhir looked at her retreating figure, suddenly intrigued by her. Her eyes, those eyes with fire in them burned in front of him. The amount of brevity and strength in that petite figure of hers intrigued him to no end.

Rudra stormed towards him and jerked him making him look away from her. Rudra looked angry, "Did you see what just happened?" Randhir noticed the crowd was staring at them now. He walked in without a word.

"Bhai," Rudra called out annoyed. Randhir ignored him and walked back to his home. Once in, he turned to his brother.

Promptly Rudra started his complaint, "Did you see how that girl behaved with me? How could you let that happen?"

Randhir sat down on the couch and quietly said, "Why didn't you reply to her?"

That shut Rudra up.

Randhir got up and walking over to Rudra asked, "That girl who was standing behind her... she was the same girl I had found you stalking right?"

Rudra did not say anything. Every second Rudra remained quiet made Randhir's anger raise a notch higher. After it reached a critical point when Randhir could not contain it any more, he raised his hand and planted a sharp slap across Rudra's face.

Shocked, Rudra stood in front of him. "I had told you, warned you not to do that. I had told you to leave that girl alone." He screamed. "How dare you cross your line? How dare you intrude in a girl's privacy? Whatever happened today, I don't want that to happen ever again. Do you get me?"

Rudra stood motionless, his face flushed. Randhir stormed back to his room and stopping midway turned to him and said, "Our family has a reputation to uphold, don't you ever ruin it again. Consider yourself lucky if the girl does not complain to the police."

Randhir slammed the door and jumped on his bed. He plugged his earphones in his I-pod and jammed them in his ears, turning up the volume. As his anger slowly faded, those eyes started brimming in front of his again.

He had never seen such a beautiful girl. He recalled the way she shook with anger, the way she boldly grabbed Rudra's collar in front of everyone. Who was she?

He remembered watching her retreating figure and how much he craved to know her name. He closed his eyes and relived the entire scene again, wondering if they would ever meet again.

Edited by srstrulez - 10 years ago
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Posted: 10 years ago
#13
Awsme update yr
Loved it to the core


Rd was going mad
He just want to see sanyu once

He was screaming her name
Her condition was worse

The flashback was superb

Kya solid entry thi sanyu ki
Acha sabka sikhaya uss rudra ko

Rd was lost in her

He's really nice

Cnt wait for next
Update soon

Love u
Keep smiling
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Posted: 10 years ago
#14
amazing story...
just read it...
Sanyu was so bold n dashing before...
den now wat happened now dat she was committing suicide!!!
curious to read further...
continue soon
n if possible pm me next time u update!!
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Posted: 10 years ago
#15
awesomeee update waiting for next
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Posted: 10 years ago
#16
Hey.. I liked the concept a lot.
Its very nyc..
Update soon 😛😛
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Posted: 10 years ago
#17
Great start..
So Randhir came in search of Sanyukta,
I wonder what has happened to her,?
The flashback was nice..
I guess the girl breaking Rudra's car is Sanyukta..
With that she looks like a very strong girl, but what led her to commit suicide..? I guess with coming updates things will reveal...
Randhir did a right thing by slapping Rudra..
Amazingly penned down..
Update soonish..!!
Thanks for PM.😊
-Shivani
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Posted: 10 years ago
#18
superb update as usual... u r brilliant dude... its kinda love at 1st sight frm randhir's side. well well... waiting fr d next update. 😃
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Posted: 10 years ago
#19
Awesome update.
loved it
thanks for pm &
pls update soon
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Posted: 10 years ago
#20
Wow.. Love it yr..
Such an awesome plot
Very exciting
Mysterious... Awesomely penned
Luv it..
Please give regular updates :)
Update asap n pm me if possible

Chandu <3

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