New Arshi TS: Moirai's Gambit COMPLETED| Part 3| Page 11| 9/10

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Lepzy

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Posted: 11 years ago

#21

Awesome one...

Continue asap...

Thanks for the PM.

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kondhili

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Posted: 11 years ago

#22

Ahh such a well written story...you made me extremely nostalgic with the train journey.

And you are such a tease to stop right there 😛 i am sure that Khushi is the pretty brides best friend or sister 😉

Looking towards reading the 2nd part real soon now.

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-tardisblue-

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Posted: 11 years ago

#23

Whoops! It's her. Now what?

Somehow this reminded me of The Notebook (Ryan Gosling ❤️ ). Maybe because of the letters she sent him continuously even after being unanswered.

PS: Very well written, C. :)

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mayurisb80

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Posted: 11 years ago

#24

As always CR..you have your way with words. ...you pull us into this arshi world. ..

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Bhool gayi.

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Posted: 11 years ago

#25

Wow. Im speechless after the end.

Such an amazing piece of work! waiting to read next.. I just hope it doesn't end with a sad note.

Well lets see what you've planned, im sure it must be good :)

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ASRphanki

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Posted: 11 years ago

#26

Very good...eager for part 2

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Jay

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Posted: 11 years ago

#27

beautifully penned...

cnt wait for part two

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Pastellitesoulx

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Posted: 11 years ago

#28

It was so beautifully written.
You made me nostalgic with describption of train journey.i loved that feeling.
Arnav is such a stupid,why couldn't he reply back to her damnit?
Hope the bride is not her.
Waiting for next part.

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cineraria

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Posted: 11 years ago

#29

Hey people, Part two has been updated on page 1.

Hope you like it.

Love

Ria

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Sumneet

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Posted: 11 years ago

#30

Reswa Bitiya, kal fursat me padhenge, aur phir commentiya karenge! 😳

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UnRes

I re-read Part 1, one can never get enough of your work. Just a small observation - We are made to believe Akash's cousin was marrying Khushi, since she was on the stage. I have a feeling she is the Dulhan's sister. Arnav is definitely in for a surprise.

Now reading Part 2,

Khushi was not the Dulhan, it was dream? Is she married or not? Who is Devyani?

The myriad of emotion you portray - especially in the case of Arnav, when he sees Khushi on the stage, is woken up by Devyani, his reaction to the letters. 👏 Your use of powerful words creates an impact, which is very real. You should write more, truly dear.

Devyani - She is in love with Arnav would be wrong, she is obsessed. If she truly loved him she wouldn't have hidden the letters and in fact, he could have respected her. Her selfish act didn't leave him with a choice - Khushi was etched into his memories, she couldn't erase that..

Her psychotic behavior brought him back to his senses, made him believe in himself. Keeping things a secret pushed him over the edge, nudged him to accept that he and Khushi were meant to be and that was just not a dream, but his reality. What would have happened, if he hadn't had discovered the letters? One thing we know for sure was Khushi, wouldn't have stopped writing.

How does one love unconditionally - The Khushi you portray teaches that. Why did she write to him consistently? Your tale (the letter, Arnav's reaction to it, thoughts running through his mind) answer the questions not only gracefully but poignantly and with tremendous beauty. (Sorry bad at using adjectives) 😳

I can never get tired of praising you, such is the charisma of your words, your characters, your narration, your thought process, attention to detail, your vocabulary. Always fall short of words, yet come up with the long responses, barely in connection with the story.

P.S - How did Arnav deduce that Khushi was single? I think I might the only one who felt that she was married and unhappy.

Edited by zeffy2k2 - 9 years ago