The unknown son (An Arjuna-Iravan FF) Part 8B-Page 23 - Page 8

a beautiful and touching story... you have captured the mood and the feelings very well...can almost picture this happening
I especially liked how you introduced Draupadi into the conversation between father and son

Thanx for the PM... but m really sorry for replying late. I went thru all the 5 parts in one-go and I must say that u have brilliantly captured the emotions of a son who has never in his life met his father in person but yet he longed to meet him.

I especially like the part where you have beautifully penned the hesitation of Iravan to mention about his father Arjun to his uncle Nakul.

I also liked the conversation between Yudi & Iravan.

I also liked ur last part where both Arjun-Iravan finally broke the ice between them with their archery skills... finally the father-son conversed with each other after a some hesitation.

Though I hav heard about Iravan but never knew much about him. Ur OS has given me an insight of a son's emotions who is unknown to his father & his family.

Plz do update ur next part soon... would ❤️ to read it.

Hey,
Just read all the updates...just amazing dear...
How could i miss such an amazing story...

Just loved Iravan's character...his hesitation n longing for his father's love was so real...
I almost felt like crying...

Please continue... 😊

wow. nice insight about iravan. your description is so human & real👏. Wish they had shown us this in⭐️MB. there were so many characters n stories to explore .. dunno why they were in a hurry to finish it off. please update soon

Originally posted by: Yajnaseni

Thanks everyone for reading and commenting guys. I am very glad that you liked it. Please read my other FF too-

http://www.india-forums.com/forum_posts.asp?TID=4063965

@Yagyaseni- Can u PM me the link to ur FF.

@iturkhans- Thankx fr following the story. What may I call u?

@frappie di- Thanx for reviewing.@Amritat- Thankx for reading. Hv u read the earlier parts. If not at least read part 3. If u liked this part, then u would like that also.

Part 6

"Arya, Arya wake up." Arjun eyes opened to see Subhadra bending over him. She had wrapped a shawl over her slender body. She was looking concerned.

"Arya, why are you sleeping on the ground like this?"

Arjuna noticed that he was not in his tent. He could see the wide expanse of the sky above him. Arjuna slowly raised himself. The early morning dew was visible on the grass. No one else had woken up. The Sun was halfway on his path to come out of the horizon. The surrounding looked beautiful but the breeze seemed to be held. There was something in the atmosphere which could send chills down your spine. Everything was silent just like the silence before the storm.

Arjun looked about to see Iravan sleeping peacefully beside him. He bent over and kissed his son on the forehead. Iravan's sleep broke with the soft touch on his forehead. He rose from his sleep and touched the soft imprint. He looked at Arjun as if not able to recognize him for a moment. Then the happening of last night dawned on him. He smiled happily as one smiles after watching a nice dream which is soon to be gone and forgotten. Arjun smiled back.

Both the father and son got up from the ground. Arjun said," Subhadrae, meet your eldest son Iravan."

Subhadra gave Iravan her ashirvad as he bent down to touch her feet, "May you gain glory in battle."

"Arya, how is that you are introducing a mother to her son. I can recognise my son, especially when he looks so much like you." Subhadra said to Arjun. Then she addressed Iravan "Krishna jiji must have woken by now. She is very eager to meet you. Why don't you come and seek her blessings?"

Iravan nodded at this. Arjun and Iravan drew water from the nearby well and washed their mouth and feet. Then they followed Subhadra to the tent of the Samrat and Samragi. Arjun stood outside the tent while Iravan followed Subhadra into it. The Samrat had woken up. He smiled as he saw Subhadra and Iravan enter. Both of them took his blessings. "So didn't I give a good piece of advice?" he asked Iravan.

Iravan smiled at this.

Iravan noticed a woman sitting in front of a mirror, long and dark hair curling down her back. "Subhadra" she called without turning to see them "What brings you here so early in the morning?"

"Jiji, how did you know that it was me who has come when you have not seen me?"

"I know the sound of your steps, my little sister." Draupadi turned to look at them with a smile on her face, "Dear Subhadra, who is this young warrior with..." Panchali stopped. "You must be Iravan. Aren't you?"

Arjun stood outside the tent. He had been dreading this day for a long time. Arjun felt helpless. He had to kill him- his Grandsire by hook or by crook. The war had inflicted pain on millions but today the greatest pain had to be inflicted. Today both the Pandavas and the Kauravas will bear their greatest loss. A shelter they had grown up under since they were kids would be snatched. Arjun had gone out last night, into the open air to try and find some peace. But all he could smell was the stink of dried blood. Agony loomed in the air. There was nowhere he could find any relief. Piercing his Grandsire with arrows would pierce Arjun's own heart. But Arjun was not afraid of the agony it would give him, Arjun was afraid of the agony to be dealt. To strengthen his will Arjun started practicing. Then he saw an outline of a person. Mistaking him for a spy Arjun charged his arrows at the stranger to find out that it was his own son. Panchali had somehow managed to remove his apathy towards Iravan. Arjun found himself relieved to see Iravan. He wanted to talk to his son, give him the love that Arjun had received from his Grandsire.

Arjun found himself intrigued by his son enough to have forgotten the upcoming day. For sometime God had given Arjun a way to relieve himself from the pain. But now it all came back to him. His mind and heart were tortured again.

I know this is not the best of my updates but please do comment whether you like it or not. Most probably I will post another update and then end the story.

Adbhut, tia!!! Wonderful way of writing you have!!! The way which you portrayed Yagyaseni's entry in to the story was just awesome!! Will be eager to read the next update!!!

nice update.. waiting for the next.👏