The unknown son (An Arjuna-Iravan FF) Part 8B-Page 23 - Page 9

Originally posted by: Meself

I just read all the parts at one go! And I must say tgis before I get lost in the FF that you are one prolific writer. Indeed kudos to you for pulling out one such beautiful chapter out of Mahabharata!!

Iravan, as you have named him, is an unknown son. Arjun and Uloopi hardly had anything between them. While with Draupadi, Chitrangada and Subhadra he shared his realtion in full swing; Uloopi never had that previlage also she didn't care for the same. But in the entire debacle it was undoubtedly Iravam who suffered. I had been reading in the first two chapters that how he felt a bit out of place especially when it was his own family he was dealing with.

It was kind of sad when Arjun showes a masked apayhy towards him but I'm glad both Nakul and Yudhishthir were able to bridge that gap. And our 'priye' Vasudev helped a lot there and so did Krishnaa.

The father son momnet was indeed a treat to read. The way these two bonded and had a heartfelt time to spend was beautiful. At least before his last signing off Iravan got what his heart ached for. And now that he is with Krishnaa I am sure the last bit of reserve that he has in his heart will surely melt away because pf the warmth she eludes!! Please continue soon. I'd love to read more!!

And thank you so much for the PM.

Love,

Shivani.

Originally posted by: Krishnaa_Nair

chapter 2

wow!!1 govind knew him at first sight great!!😳

nakul's comment on uncles..uuummm some past lessons!! 😡

Chapter 3

this one took my heart dear!!

i m at the verge of tears. first meeting. arjun's dilemma and iravan too feeling uncomfortable. poor soul.. both is finding it difficult to mingle.

iravan feeling jealous of babru.. uff!! he might be feeling bad about himself... please make him happy dear!! i'

m crying now... awwwhhh pooorr baby!!
btw awesome work dear!! i like you writing style!1 i can see images of all these scenes playing out

Chapter 4

iravan's and yudi's condition is the same and yet diff.

one have a alive father yet dont know him well.. and other did get time to spend with him!!

contadictory yet similar..

i loved the line

"i do.. dont you??" it have more meaning than juz four simple words!!

Chapter 5

finally the father son combo happened!!

loved the way you showed draupadi. and abhi being panchali nandan!!

cute n sweet!!! feeling relieved!!

i 'm bowing down!! please forgive me on keeping away from this os thread!!

this is awesome!1 i 'm in love with this one!! update soon!!

nice one.. Love it.. Thanks for pm..

Lovely update... don't feel bad about it its really nice. Especially the last part where Jishnu wants some peace and he can only smell dried blood...
Update soon!

continue pls..I want to know his relation with his new brothers..Abhimanyu and suthakirti😊

Sorry, tia I was in a hurry so i couldn't give the detailed reply which i wanted to give. Now here is it:
I just loved the way you developed the bond between arya arjun and putr Iravan which was to be bridged in the first few chapters. Maybe that distance was due to the fact that he was uloopi's son.
Loved the paternal affection of arya nakul and arya yudhistir which also showed how united pandavas were.
The words which showed that heights of maternal affection like a "mother need not be introduced to her children" said by both yagyaseni and subhi just made me speechless
Bonding between my UPs, abhimanyu and iravan was also shown well.
Mere bhratasri govind, you showed him being omnipotent through your wonderful writing in a different way
Iravan's each and every feeling was well defined and well symbolized
Arya Arjun, the waves of feelings which you created for him was awesome. In the last part where you showed that he found peace in lying down with iravan was superb
Subhi, maternal affection was shown well
Lastly swayam ham, the way you showed her kindness, maternal affection and warmth of her love was just marvelous.
Hope i am not too late in doing this!!! Update soon!!!
Please do read my new fF on ArDi when you get time!!

I think I messed up a bit. As far as i remembered Iravan was killed on 10th or 9th day of war. Some sites show he was killed on the 8th. Can one of you provide me a reference to the matter? A bit confused but I know my buddies are always there to help.