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itsme92

@itsme92

Explorer

Posted: 12 years ago

#11

mind blowing start!

looking forward to reading the rest

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the notebook

@the_notebook

Sparkler

+ 8

Posted: 12 years ago

#12

Ohkay so this is...

Different!

I was speechless for a few moments. O.O

Keep going! By the way you have awesome writing skills! x

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ashw99

@ashw99

Voyager

Posted: 12 years ago

#13

hey Mari... hope you are fine.
So finally here we begin with "Losing You" awesome start..!!
Loved the character sketch.
ASR... as always dashing and ruthless... with his own aura and his own traits... "eye for an eye" haa... and he has his target already set destroy khushi mend her to re-break her...
Khushi... feeling very sorry for her... Is garima really her mother..??... She is not allowing her daily basics... not even bath... no food... and hell of torture Why.?? Is she insecure of her own daughter..??
add to the khushi's torture list mr.ASR..!!
Lavanya... she is complex... loves her uncle and now is with her friend Arnav just for physical need... Who is her uncle..??
Anjali... again one more victim of Garima gupta..!!
Garima gupta... our "vamp" looks like pretty insecure lady.
I am eagerly waiting to know more about them... do update soon.
Good Luck for your new story.
thanks :D

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archmink

@archmink

Voyager

Posted: 12 years ago

#14

You have very solid emotional grip on your story
You are straight forward to the point
I like the first part

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Breath-Mark

@Breath-Mark

Sparkler

+ 5

Posted: 12 years ago

#15

Hmm.. betrayal this time round. You are really good in expressing emotions. Khushi's state is pathetic and sad. Abusive mom.
Arnav is having a physical relationship with la.
Anjali - twin of Arnav. Why is she afraid of Arnav too?
It's kinda sad that Arnav is preying on khushi thinking of bringing a big loss for garima while things are in the opposite.

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laddoo598

@laddoo598

Sparkler

+ 5

Posted: 12 years ago

#16

Twists galore as always!

Was it Arnav's step father or father who had an affair with Garima? What about his mother?

Lavanya had an incestuous relationship with her uncle?

Khushi is a abused child, and on top of that ASR plans to torture her some more 'cause he thinks torturing her will hurt her mother? What irony!

Great going as always Mari :)

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Sarita

@sarita_barun

Dazzler

+ 5

Posted: 12 years ago

#17

Oh my ... this was just wow!!!
Can't wait for you to continue

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monakaran

@MONAKARAN

Explorer

Posted: 12 years ago

#18

Hello there again!! Awesome start no surprises there. A few observations:

As usual I have more questions than answers - no surprise there either!!😕

I did notice in your "warning" that the start to the story is not a happy one - does that mean the end might be - dare I hope???

Poor Khushi - damn girl you really like to make her suffer don't you!! And that too for no fault of hers! What do you have against her!!

So this is a story that starts in the high school phase - where Arnav is a senior (18?) and Khushi a Junior (17?) is that right??

Wonder what role Khushi's mom played in Anjali's current state!! Hope in this Arnav will be a bit nicer to her (I know I am a hopeless romantic!!)

Can't wait to read more!!! Hurry up and post the next chappy!!

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anonyasr

@anonyasr

Navigator

Posted: 12 years ago

#19

Interesting. Tough situations and tangled/mangled relationships. Looking forward to it unfolding.

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ashnitaa

@ashnitaa

Voyager

Posted: 12 years ago

#20

Garima is such a heartless bi**h..
poor khushi..
arnav is all set to destroy khushi because he think garima loves her..what a tangled situation..
update soon