Swaron SS: Am I just an Outsider? - Page 5

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Posted: 12 years ago
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Nice start 😊
Beautifully penned
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Posted: 12 years ago
#42
wao veryy nic os

loved it plzz update fast
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Posted: 12 years ago
#43
Absolutely,loved it. Update soon, and do PM me!

Thanks
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Posted: 12 years ago
#44
AmaZing start :)
Looking forward for next chappy :)
Update soon !!
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Posted: 12 years ago
#45
Plzzz do update soonnn...waiting for another half..
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Posted: 12 years ago
#46

Originally posted by: sanstina

Nice start 😊

Beautifully penned


Thank you so much 😃

Originally posted by: swaronlove001

wao veryy nic os

loved it plzz update fast



Thanks 😃

Originally posted by: Hafsa94

Absolutely,loved it. Update soon, and do PM me!


Thanks


Thank you 😃

Originally posted by: Suni1986

Wonderful update yaar


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Originally posted by: swaron_pk

AmaZing start :)

Looking forward for next chappy :)
Update soon !!


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Posted: 12 years ago
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Thank you all once again for the beautiful comment...I guess there will be one more Part to this story as I converted the OS into a SS...I tired my level best to live upto your expectations so here is the next part...

Part 2

Swayam suddenly got up and rushed to the girls locker room'.. there he saw Simi standing out and chatting with another girl'..

Swayam: Simi!

Simi (excusing herself): Ya Swayam'.. Kya hua? You look tensed'..

Swayam: Woh Sharon ko dekha kya?

Simi: Haan woh'.. She just left for home'.. Woh bhi bahut upset lag rahi thi'.. Everything fine?

Swayam (stammering): Haan'.. Woh'.. Woh haa.. woh GS hai na toh kuch report dekhane the'.. (he prayed to god that Simi doesn't ask anything further and also mentally smacked himself for such a stupid excuse)

Simi (yet unconvinced but chose to keep quiet): O'.K!

Swayam: Anyways, thanks Simi!

Swayam rushed his way to Sharon's house'.. He stood outside her window whose curtains were open and there he could see her sitting on the bed'.. Sharon looked hurt and lost in her thoughts'.. The hurt on her face was reflected on his face too'.. He immediately got his phone and dialled her number'..

Her phone was ringing but it looked as if her thoughts had numbed all her senses'.. He kept calling her but saw that she didn't barge an inch'.. After trying to get her attention for about 10 minute she finally came out of her trance and looked at her phone'.. There she saw 'n' number of missed calls from Swayam'.. Just when she was about to put down her phone, she saw the same caller flash on her screen'.. She thought of answering it'.

Swayam: Sharon I'm really sorry'.. I know I have hurt you but believe me mera aise koi intention nahi tha'.. I'm really sorry

Sharon: Swayam please! Mujhe abhi kisise koi baat nahi karni hai!

Swayam: Please ek baar mujhse baat karlo'.. Main tumhara yeh sad chehra nahi dekh sakta'..

Sharon: Ab nahi! Please!

She hung up the call and kept her phone aside'.. Again lost in her thoughts'.. Swayam saw her depressed face and cursed himself as he was the reason behind it'..

Swayam (to himself): See what you've done!! Idiot!! Gadha!! Moron!!! Ab aisa kya karu ke Sharon mujhe maaf bhi karde aur uske face pe woh smile bhi aa jaaye'.. Soch Swayam! Khud ko loverboy bulata hai na'. It's time to prove it'.. Think!! Think!!!

Just as he was racking his brain to get the apt idea, his eyes fell on the shop right in front'.. There was a flower vendor and a few kids playing right next to it'..

Swayam (dimag ki batti jali): Mil gaya!!!

Sharon was busy with her thoughts which were now disturbed by the sound of the doorbell'.. She called out for kaka and told him to open the door but got no response'.. Having no other option left she herself got up to get the impatient soul continuously ringing the bell'

As she opened the door completely irritated'.. She saw a boy around 7-8 years of age standing there with a red rose and a chit hanging with a satin ribbon' The boy handed the rose to her and ran away'.

Sharon: Aare sunno'.. Yeh toh batao yeh kisne diya?

But too late he had already left'.. Then she read the chit which said 'I'm sorry''.. Sharon understood who the sender was'.. but she was hurt so she just closed the door and kept the rose on the dining table'.. Just as she was about to step forward the doorbell went again'.. She opened the door to find a girl standing there with a white rose this time and also a chit with it'.. The girl again handed over the rose and ran away'.. Sharon was now irritated'.. She again read the chit that said 'Hurting you is like breaking me'.. But seeing you smile brings life in me'.. Please forgive me''.. A small tear rolled down her cheek reading it but she wiped it off and kept the rose with the previous one'.. But it was Swayam her lover boy, so how could he give up so fast?... The doorbell kept ringing and the kids continued giving her roses each with a different message which read

'Don't shed this pearl as they are precious than diamonds'

'Loving you is my drug and having you by my side is my need'

'A day without seeing that smile of yours is just like a broken pencil'.. Pointless'

etc etc etc...

Her dining table was filled with more than a dozen of roses'.. Now she was hell irritated but somewhere she also loved these cute messages and roses he sent for her'.. Just when she was admiring the beautiful flowers the bell went again'.. This was seriously the limit now'.. She walked up to the door furiously'.. Opening the door with a bang she saw all the kids standing holding their ears and in the middle was her beloved Swayam with a bouquet of orchids kneeling down'.. Swayam gave her flower but she just moved back and was closing the door'.. All the kids along with Swayam pushed open the door as Swayam started singing'.

Link to song

Kids and Swayam: [surrounding Sharon]

I wanna make it up to you, pretty baby, Make it up to you

I wanna see you smile, I wanna see you smile

I wanna make it up to you [Sharon gets herself free and starts walking to her room]

Swayam: [Holding her hand and stops her'.. acts as if someone has stabbed him in his heart in a full on filmy way and dances in a comedy style]

O meri jaan na lele ke meri jaan, Teri ada

Jaan jala na tujhe pe deewana, Mein hoon fida [Kneels down with the kids and opens his arms wide]

Gusstaki maaf karde, Abb tho insaaf karde [Starts doing sit up holding his ears]

Apna dil saaf karde, Kehna tho maan le [walks on his knees with his hand locked together and pleading her]

Kids & Swayam: [kids and Swayam start dancing around her in a circle]

Jaane bhi de jo bhi hua, jaane bhi de

Come on smile now'..[Swayam comes to her and indicates her to smile]

[Sharon get irritated and sits on the sofa with her hands covering her face'.. Kids pull Swayam down and tell him something in his ear'.. He smiles widely and runs to Sharon]

Swayam: [Sitting next to her trying to imitate her and then gives her chocolates, followed by flower and then hariprasad but Sharon just kept everything aside one by one]

Gussa tera jhootha, Jhoothi moothi berukhi hai

Jaanu main to jaanu, Teri naa mein haan chupi hai

Aye sanaam na kar sitam, Tujhko khuda ka vasta [Swayam fell flat on his back on the floor and pointed out upwards while getting up]

hey'.. Gusstaki maaf karde [Kids and Swayam danced the same way they did before but this time Sharon was facing her back to them and giggling looking at Swayam's antics]

Abb to insaaf karde, Apna dil saaf karde

Kehna to maan le

Kids & Swayam:

Jaane bhi de jo bhi hua, jaane bhi de

[The kids keep blocking her way]

Swayam: [started dancing like Manoj kumar and Dev Anand style]

Haayyee'Tanha na kategi zindgani jaanle tu

Meri bhi zarurat tujhko hogi maanle tu

Mar ke bhi na chodunda eri baahien tera raasta [Tried to hug her but she pushed him away faking irritation which resulted in Swayam landing on the floor]

[he with the kids continued dancing like a maniac and Sharon continued faking anger]

gu.gu.gu..Gusstaki maaf karde, Abb to insaaf karde

Apna dil saaf karde, Kehna to maan le

Kids & Swayam: [The kids and Swayam were dancing in front of Sharon]

Jaane bhi de jo bhi hua, jaane bhi de'.

As the song ended Swayam was back to his previous position with the bouquet in his hand and the kids standing next to him and looking expectedly at Sharon...

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So How was it?

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Edited by smartypantstanu - 12 years ago
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Posted: 12 years ago
#48
res!!!
hey was nice...and cute too...
the idea for apology was great... :P
and was frm todays epi too...
of course in a total different way...
waiting for the nxt update...
update soon...

Rohan :(

Edited by rohan_smile - 12 years ago
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Posted: 12 years ago
#49
Sharon's pain ..her anger is right at her place...swayam's cute antics to manaofy his siren cutely written..

Loved the whole song and dance to pacify Sharon...swayam is always the same..lover boy...in order to protect her he hurt her ...i hope she will forgive him and both with fight with Adi together😊

Beautifully written dear..like always 😳
Edited by deep_Tanha - 12 years ago
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Posted: 12 years ago
#50
Super cute...
Swayam manaofying sharon
Update soon!

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