Ariya FF:'Deception,Intrigue...?' *Cont. in Thread 2* - Page 35

Originally posted by: Amri174

Wow. Thanks for reading my FF and then coming back to give me such a lovely comment.

I think we've already met once- the time when we were talking about a particular character and how she lacks certain things. Even then, I knew that both of us are great minds who think alike😉

Reading your comment- what can I say? You touched upon each and every chapter, analyzed each and every aspect of my story. I am touched.

Thanks a lot for taking the time and the energy to respond to an author, especially an FF author. We seldom receive such appreciation. But I am blessed to have people like you and many more who respond to me this way.

You also gave me your responses to the progress in each chapter and how you felt at the time. I really appreciate that, because it tells me that as a reader you're relating to the characters as I have presented them.

All I can say is- please do continue encouraging me and this little tale. Both Arjun and Riya are very close to my heart, and this little story is my tribute to them. Hope you like the chapters that follow as well.

Regards

Amrutha😊

P.S. - Did you read chapters 3 and 4? If not, please do;)

Originally posted by: Amri174

Guys, first I thought that I'd be able to finish it by the 9th, but something important came up, so I postponed it to the 10th, please understand😊 But I promise bada wala update, okay???

And I am again here :P

This time for the current update lol!!

So let me start off..

Quite understandably, Rathore and Rawte are shocked to see Riya's 'mom' there.

LOL even at the grave situation the thought of both of them eavesdropping their senior is actually funny.

Yeah back to the story…

Coelho is agitated while Riya's 'mom' is clam and composed..well interesting.

Loos like Coelho wants to reveal something important to the team and that women, Meera..is forbidding him to.

And well Sameer and Arjun heard bits of their convo..and well mentioned Riya..

'His' Riya <3

Arjun's chain of thoughts..his confusion and the sense of betrayal..so beautifully portrayed.

Here Rathore to was thinking along the same lines.. having the similar feeling of disbelief and betrayal.

Both of them are shaken to the core, quite understandably so…Well what else can you feel when you come to know the mere existence of some one really close to you turns out to be a lie, and that too by the person you used to trust.

Arjun thoughts upon his feeling on Roshni's death…the fact that he thought all the moments between him and Riya was fake and unreal broke my heart…

Yet again Arjun was being tossed into a hurricane of emotions….with Sameer being a witness to it.

Ayesha thinking about dammit and what the hell and ofcorse the guy who utters these umpteenth time a day :P How cutee!!

Really liked the way she described Sameer, so very sweetly!!

Well true that..ETF guys are real gentlemen in every sense!!

Hehe well falling in love with your boss can never be too easy right :P So Miss Ayesha is screwed up in love!!

But then enter angry Sameer and grave Arjun..well what a mood killer at the moment.

Damm poor thing got scolded for no reason.

Well Chotu and Shree's phone are on voice mail..well seems that Ayesha's day just got even more worse.

Here again Shree and Chotu are going through the similar feelings of confusion, betrayal and disbelief. They also think that their friendship had been a lie..again I don't blame them…afterall the are friends…

And friends lying to you on your face, well that would be too much to take in for anyone.

Loved Riya's chain of thoughts too….

Well it must be so hard for her to leave the person you love like this..and to know the fact that for him you are'nt even alive…but girl he does care, and he cares a LOT!!

But then duty calls and Agent Riya is ready to go..well that's my girl!!!

So they found of the man behind all the gruesome activities, and well unwillingly so Riya may have to cross paths with ETF again *sigh*

So Siddharth god Tina mudered..which was witnessed by Neha, and she blackmailed him for money thus which ended up in getting herself killed..

So where does Zara comes in between, or her case in different from these two???

Well I guess that breaking into his apartment with throw more light on the case.

Well now that Shree chotu and Sameer Arjun have told eachother whatever they have come to the, their reactions. ..well I did see that coming.

Loved the way you gave a view of each of their reactions.

The sense of betrayal is all over them..and I don't blame them, it hurts a LOT when you find a person you trust has being lying to you on your face. The anger,the frustration is inevitable.

And I cant even imagine when what will happen when they actually come to know that she is alive and Riya will come face to face with the team.

Well and how would Riya actually face it , face them.

Interesting precape, well hoping to see more of Lisa there..and threat to Arjun's life…ok Riya will surely not sit quite then!!

And hell yes, I love the stule of writing as the feeling of the characters and how you portray it is a beauty.

Awesome update, loved the insights to the emotions you gave for each and every person. Waiting for the next update <3

Originally posted by: Leki

Looks like competition for who will post long comment is going on... hmm next time i vl make my comment in two lines

..lol

Originally posted by: SilentSilver

Hello again,

Could not control my curiosity and thus just HAD to read the remaining chapters today itself :P But well as Riya say's 'Curiosity, human nature hai'. :$

Haha, well quoted. God I miss that woman.

So coming to chapter 3

So Mr. Rawte back to business, loved the way he tackled the manager and made him handle all the cctv footage to him. Ya, typical Arjun😃 I wanted to show how capable he is in managing tough situations.

Well also good that he asked to take that teenage boy home and inform his parents. And how he is kind-hearted as well😊

The thoughts of Shree, Chotu and Ayesha tells us that how much they admire and respect their seniors.

While not so surprisingly Arjun's thoughts are on the drug dealer who escaped, nothing can escape the supercop's eyes..can they?? Yup, that's right;)

By the way, I really like the way Tim, and M.K address Riya as boss'.

Haha loved the friendly teasing part between her and M.K. Aww he is blusing, how cute!!

Their relationship is very sweet.You'll get to see more of that later on.

And they got a chit in the girl's hands..and well their reactions tell me that that chit contains some really important clue indeed.

And Riya things that the ETF members have long forgotten her..well you are so wrong girl!! *sigh*

The girl has a lot of issues in my story. Insecurity is one of them

Haha poor Shree, poor thing didn't even get to sleep properly, well and having a Mr.Akdu who doesn't sleep as a boss doesn't really help in that front: P

We already saw that in an episode, remember? I just wanted to include it for fun.

And then his thoughts drifts towards Riya'.and well so true, a seemingly weak link of the team she scarified her life for her country [ well atleast he is thinking on tangent] and well it surely is the bravest thing one can do. Arjun is in pain here, and I wanted to portray that. Nice of you to pick up these lines;)

'No longer a part of their lives. No longer alive.' This parts actually hurts man, really!!

So finally Shree gathered the courage to go to her desk and clear out the things.

Riya an open book..while Shree is laughing at the contents of the desk, here I cant help but smile at the irony.

Haha well the contents of the drawer is not really surprising, typical Miss Hygiene freak :P

Yeah😆

'P.S I love you' hey that book is one of my favorites!! It's actually a nod to one of my friends who is just crazy about the book.😛

The pic, who is Rolu..Riya's nickname or somebody's else..and the girl in the pic, who is she?? Suspense, suspense.😉

Shree is thinking about going to meet Riya's mother..and something tells me that this would bring a major change in the story..

*sigh* Sam and Arjun.. I cant help but feel sad for them, both are going through the pain of losing the same person who was very important to them, but still unable to confide to eachother..on the contrary there is this sense of bitterness among them.

Rathore's resentment towards Arjun's interference is if not justified, but very normal.

And then this thoughts of the contrasting nature of the Arjun, his friend whom he knew..and the Arjun at the present.

I really wish they'd explore more of Rathore and Arjun's relationship in the show. It makes the characters, esp. the former, very human.

Here on the other hand Arjun feels guilty,' for many things.

God these two friends are two messed up K

And then comes the little school girl, with the dimpled smile and red clip clip.

Loved the adjectives you made Arjun to describe Riya.. definite a girl power extraordinaire, I am never forgetting the 'aurat ki kabiliat' line.

And scratch the maybe, its definitely something more Mr Rawte.

Loved his thoughts on the certain Miss Statistics.

Even I have wondered time and again why was Arjun almost obsessed with scolding the poor girl -_-

GOD the first meeting!1 weren't they just SFVBHJNJNHNHBGBBN AMAZING!! ! That first moment, her trying to punch him, him ducking it..her trying to fight back and him over powering her..Goshhh that first meeting had me smitten by this pair!! *sorry for the rant, well when I am in a mood I can actually keep on ranting too much..plus this brought back to many memories*

The way you described arjun's thoughts on her..truly awesome and amazing girl!! Really!!

The first time he felt alive after roshni's death <3 * this vey line tells how much she affected him*

Ofcorse then there is the remorse and the guilt of betraying his beloved dead wife, but that cannot change the fact that he felt something indeed.

The way Arjun described the equation of Riya with the team was beautiful..

"payar ka dard'' again one line which holds too many feels!!

Then the day she used the gun..and the bathroom scene' Riya made the other side of the supercop come up and well and made us watch that there is a still a heart inside him which actually feels.

Then the slow end to the train of his thoughts..for once Arjun, did not know..what he felt and why..

Thanks for liking the Ariya moments and your responses to them😊 Their first encounter is my absolute top favorite, I have watched it a 100 times at least. I loved reliving that moment and writing about what they might have felt at that time.

Shree and Chotu in front of Riya's door..well I cant even imagine what amout of courage must have taken them to finally reach there.

So finally a revelation in front of the shocked duo. The Mukerjee's had never lived in that house.

What the Riya's 'mother' there :O

Loved the pace of the chapters and slow revelation of the things..as well as the thoughts of each and every character.

Thanks😊

And now I have finished drinking two bottles of water while reading this as this chapter brought back so many memories and gave me too many feels.

This was really awesome, and loved it so so much!!

Had thought about reading the next part now only, but currently running out of time but will read it ASAP probably in the next few hours even.

But before that again, awesome work really!!!

Your warmth is appreciated. I would like to thank you from the bottom of my heart for caring to comment, that too in such a detailed manner;)

Originally posted by: SilentSilver

Your welcome anytime..and dont say thank you please :D
😆Yeah we have met once before while discussing the thing you mentioned :P And I remember you too for being crime thriller buff like me..truly great minds think alike😉😳
Well I can very well relate to your charterers and their emotions..and well the thing with me is that I cant like a character until I can actually relate to them. And coming to that your characterization is really very well written.
I surely will read and comment whenever I can..Its just that I cant assure you fast comments..but I will comment on each and every chapter surely😳

Read and commented on chap 3..and well again sorry for making it a bit two long..Cant seem to control my rants😳
and will read chapter 4 ASAP.

Btw Amrutha , I'm Priya :)

Originally posted by: Leki

Looks like competition for who will post long comment is going on... hmm next time i vl make my comment in two lines

..lol

Originally posted by: Leki

Hey its ok yar take your time... give us regular update that will do😛