Collab FF: IPK 2.0-Doing it right#3, Ch23, p144

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Sharmila

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Posted: 12 years ago

#511

Awesome update ...loved it 🤗

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Aysha

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Posted: 12 years ago

#512

Amazinf Update Maxine

Firstly i have to say im glad this story is going for another round of writers, because its too awesome to end so soon

back to the update now...

akaash and payal ran away to get married, no pheres and dadi who is obsessed with them will go berserk...loved all the references to what happened with a different couple in the show and it fit so well

shyaam humming his favourite tune Daiyya Ho to annoy everyone

Ooohhh challenge between arnav and khushi, they are the most epic, especially now when it is who can flirt the best

love how arnav went all bollywood and it flopped!!!

and an SC reference in there, nice to see

great chapter once again😊

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hatathbristi

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Posted: 12 years ago

#513

👏Just awesome..
"Backless choli..Minimum coverage...Maximum mileage..."👏
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Ab Delhi dur nahi...&Delhi is thousands of miles away and in between "Ki Jiji tere Jethji deewane, kya karein, yeh flirt karna bhi na jaane!"..

And the inner voice of Aakash and Monorama's shade...just mindblowing...I have a cramp while laughing out loudly...

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N0306

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Posted: 12 years ago

#514

Maxine.. you are hilarious.. Akash's entry with his bahuria.. and Maathe with eye makeup.. she does have scary makeup.. you have brought up some facts from the show that was just funny..like Shyam's irritating background music..

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Krishna

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Posted: 12 years ago

#515

I think I died, became an angel, and now am typing this comment! That was hilarious! And the not-so-subtle digs were sprinkles on top of the icing of a very rich and delicious triple chocolate cake. [ I must be hungry...] This update was pure brilliance!

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CheshireBilli

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Posted: 12 years ago

#516

This is why you're one of my favourites Maxine. You pull off this general madness and hilarity with such aplomb and ease.

Akash's little attempt to pull an Arnav was frightfully funny (especially the little jibes at the no-pheras, the suhaag raat and the loony ashram-wali Dadi).

I sympathize with the poor kids. Mami's eyeshadow used to terrify me on a regular basis while the show was on.

I can't. Kumud-sundari and Mr. Goddess of Wisdom Moon Man and mobile Ratnagiri. 🤣 DYING. No seriously. DYING.

Arnavji's voice-- haiii. That description is spot on, I'd listen to him say ANYTHING for hours. He could recite business jargon, he could comment on my aukat, he could try lame pick-up lines-- I'd sigh over ALL of it.

(theincorrigiblemagpie from Wordpress)

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Raila1014

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Posted: 12 years ago

#517

Loved their phone conversation. Hum apke hain kaun? Too funny. What was Arnav doing though? Also love Anjali in his story - much better than the poojarin in the show. Look who wants to start the rituals backwards now? Guess he will be getting more actions than our hero. I want to read about flirty Asr - those bedroom eyes are so hard to resist. Let's go to Delhi!

I have not watched that new show yet but the new eye candy may pull me back to my Indian channels soon! However your reference to it was hilarious.

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Kamala

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Posted: 12 years ago

#518

Liked it. It was hilarious.

From Manorama's reaction to the last part of the chapter, I thoroughly enjoyed reading it..

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SS88

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Posted: 12 years ago

#519

And Maxine strikes again! What a thoroughly entertaining update. I almost fell off my bed while laughing. This was witty and extremely hilarious.The vidhi-purvak vivah twist for Payal and Akash. Shyam's daiyya ho and Anjali's sleeping arrangements.Haha. And Mamiji's eyeshadow, the Raizada young ones being Pavlov's dogs. KumudSundari, and her Goddess of Knowledge/Moon Man. Hahaa. That little bit of twisted geography and parallels between Kumud's network woes and backless cholis. I'm so glad you guys are doing a version 2.0, and with some of my favourite writers on board. This is one of the best FF/collabs out there. Brava!

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clarissajohn

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Posted: 12 years ago

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Kumud lives in Ratnagiri. It's on the Konkan coast of Maharashtra which migrated to Gujarat and floated up to the deserts of Rajasthan during the last Monsoon. It's currently stationed at Delhi near Chandi Chowk. Aur koi sawaal Sanka Devi?"

"Nahi Buaji," said Khushi looking puzzled. She didn't know cities could change states and terrain with so much ease. "Neither does Sanjay Leela Bhansali", sighed Kumud, stuck in poor, old mobile Ratnagiri, once famed for Alphonso mangoes, now an arid desert with nary a working internet caf, forget Broadband. It was like her backless cholis. Minimum coverage, maximum mileage. She hoped Khushi's gotas would add some spice to her wardrobe. God knows she needed the help to entice Mr.Goddess of Wisdom Moon Man.

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superb update