***TANHAI......*** - Page 4

the part really awesome 👏 ....par ye kya keh dala uss doctor ne.....

It was really nice RIVER 👏 👏 👏

that was..... exceptional zeenish..
i mean... brilliant piec of writing yaar... 👏
Arjun is no more... thats a real tough one on gauri.. ur storyline i stooooooo good !!!!!!!!!

really waiting for the next part.. plzzzzzzzzzzzz update soon

TANHAI.....
AFTER TWO DAYS(IN MUMBAI)
gauri:(see at the dead body of arjun, tears in gauri's eyes)arjun, yeh arjun nahin ho sakta, mera dil nahin manta
papa:bete......(crying)
gauri:no papa that cant happen(song played at backgrond kehna he kya from "bombay" movie)
sooraj:(tears in eyes)gauri apne apko sambhalo
gauri:(shouting)kaise sambhaloon, (crying)arjun, tum nahin ja sakte.......(get fainting)
sooraj:gauri.... gauri, papa gauri ko dekhen
papa:bete isko kamre mein leke jao
gauri:(low voice)nahin mein kahin nahin jaoonge
sooraj:(taking her to the room)
AFTER A WEEK
gauri:(sitting near the window)thinking
ashi:mama.....mama......
gauri:(giving no attention)
sooraj:(looking from the door)
ashi:mama ........
sooraj:(wave hand to ashi to dont disturb her mom)
ashi:(went outside the room)
sooraj:(sit inside the room)
gauri: bhai......is se pehle keh aap mujhse koi baat kare mein apse kuch kehna chahti hoon
sooraj:(heran)
gauri:aaj agar apki behen is halat mein he to uske kasoor war aap hein aur bhabi hein
sooraj:(shocked)
gauri:aap logon keh kehne par arjun geye , na woh jata na yeh accident hota aur na woh hum subse yuoon door jata
sooraj:(put his hand on gauri's shoulder)
gauri:(away sooraj's hand)bhai aap log kasoor war hein, aap log(crying)
manasvi:(get entered into the room)gauri aise nahin kehte
gauri:(angriness in eyes)bus bhabi mein kuch sunana nahin chahti arjun to apne kaam keh jane keh liye bhi tayar nahin tha woh to bhai ne itni dafa unko kaha keh unhe jana para
manasvi:gauri hum hone ko kisi surat nahin rok sakte
gauri:rok sakte hein bhabi........(tears in eyes)
sooraj:gauri meri ankhon mein dekho aur mujhe such such bataoo keh aaj jo tumne kaha kya tum such mein yehi samajhti ho ke mein aur manasvi arjun ki muat ki wajah he
gauri:(hiding eyes)
sooraj:bolo na gauri
manasvi:gauri bolo, warna hum apne apko kabhi maaf nahin kar sakey ge
gauri:(crying)nahin bhaiya........par mein kya karoon,kis se gila karoon , bataye ne bhaiya......kis se koi he aisa
sooraj:gauri is waqt agar tumhari subse zaada kisi ko zaroorat he toh woh yeh ane wala mehmaan he jo keh tumhare pas arjun ki amanat he, apna khayal rakho
manasvi:aur ashi ki fikr mat karo hum sub uske liye majood hein(get fainted)
sooraj:manasvi.....manasvi ankhein kholo
gauri:(get upset)bhabi.....bhabi...
sooraj:mein doctor ko phone karta hoon

to be continued.......

nice part......erm infacct very very nice 👏

manasvi:(on bed)
sooraj:doctor manasvi faint kyun ho gaye thi
doctor:darasal inka jo accident hua tha, uske side effects samne a rehe he
gauri:(upset)
sooraj:doctor side effects.......leken yeh to bilkul theek hein eik hafte se
doctor:dekhe us accident keh kya side effects the unka jald pata chal jana, aise nahin hota, patient ki recovery keh saat saat humay yeh pata chalte jate hein, aap inko kal check up keh liye le aye jaga
sooraj:ok doctor,bye!
gauri:bhaiya mein bhi chalti hoon, ashi kamre mein intezaar kar rahi ho ge
sooraj:ok good night!
gauri:good night!
AFTER ONE WEEK
gauri:yeh papa aaj meri doctor se appointment he
papa:bete apna khayal rakhna hosakta he keh mujhe do din lag jaye
gauri:dont worry! papa
manasvi:papa aap bilkul fikr mat karey mein aur sooraj hein na
papa:i know after all u r my darling daughter
manasvi:(smiling)
gauri:papa mujhe phir aap drop kardenge
papa:ha bete chalo
manasvi:bye!
manasvi:(walking upstairs, suddenly everything gets dull infront of her eyes )yeh mujhe kya ho reha he............(suddenly some flashback comes infront of her eyes)(in the flash back){arjun saying bhabi,................manasvi saying ok! by smiling)
kaka:betiya....manasvi betiya.....
manasvi:(suddenly)kaka aap
kaka:betiya aaj khane mein kya pakoo
manasvi:(get irritate)kaka kuch bhi bana le:(come in her room, talk to her self)yeh mujhe kya ho reha, mujhe aisa kyun lag reha he keh mein kuch.....bhool rehi hoon,
sooraj:(come in room)manasvi kya hua , kya soch rahi ho
manasvi:sooraj tum.......
sooraj:kyun bhai heran kyun ho rahi ho
manasvi:nahin aise to koi baat....nahin.....he
ON DINNER
sooraj:gauri to ab tumne medicine lena shura kardi he
gauri:je bhaiya, aaj se he shuru ki he
sooraj:manasvi tum khana nahin kha rahi
manasvi:(look at her plate)woh......
gauri:bhabi aaj dupeher se mein apko dekh rahi hoon aap kuch badli badli lag rahi hein
manasvi:(smiled)nain toh......mein aap keh liye sweetdish lati hoon(went inside tha kithchen)
kaka:betiya mein lata hoon sweetdish lata hoon aap bethein ja kar
manasvi:theke(suddenly same happened with manasvi, a flashback comes infront of her eyes){flash back; arjun saying bhabi phir milenge.........manasvi said ofcouse..............................................acciden t,bachao)bachao....bachao
sooraj:yeh toh manasvi ki awaaz he
gauri:(pareshan)bhabi
sooraj:tum yahi betho mein dekhta hoon
manasvi:bachao...
sooraj:manasvi.....manasvi kya hua
manasvi:(shocked)look here and there
sooraj:kya hua
manasvi:pani...
sooraj:kaka pani dena
manasvi:(drinking water)sooraj mujhe woh accident yaad a geya tha
sooraj:manasvi tum apni medicines nahin le rahi na,plzzzz doctor ne kaha tha baqaidge se leni hein par tumna.....
manasvi:(talking to herself)arjun mujhese yeh kyun keh reha tha keh woh mujhse phir milega......mein kis kashmakash mein phus gaye hoon
sooraj:kya manasvi......tum kuch keh rahi thi
manasvi:kuch nahin

TANHAI........
in room
manasvi:ashi bete bahir nahin khelna, apki mama ne mana kiya he na
ashi:(smiling)
manasvi:bete yahi rehna, mein abhi aati hoon(went away)
ashi:(went outside)
manasvi:ashi....ashi bete kahan ho
kaka:betiya ashi to bahir gaye he
manasvi:kaka...apne mana kyun nahin kiya(running on stairs)
ashi:(walking towards the swimming pool)
manasvi:ashi...........ooooooouuUUUUCH(get slipped on the stairs)
AT NIGHT
manasvi:(in dream){the whole situation of accident come infront of her eyes)
sooraj:manasvi .....
manasvi:(suddenly wake up)soraj....
sooraj:kya hua
manasvi:soraj.........woh......arjun zinda he
sooraj:(shocked)
manasvi:ha sooraj mein such keh rahi hoon
sooraj:manasvi yeh tum kya keh rahi ho
manasvi:ha sooraj mein sahi keh rahi hoon
gauri:(on door)arjun zinda he.....
sooraj:(look at gauri)
gauri:(get fainted)
IN HOSPITAL
doctor:maine aap logon se pehle bhi kaha tha keh inki condition itni achi nahin, inko koi bhi shocking news eik dumse sunana sahi nahin ho ga, ab dekh le unke halat kitni crucial ho ge he, is halat mein unka bloob pressure zaada ho jana sahi nahin he, kuch bhi ho sakta he
sooraj:(angrily looking at manasvi)
manasvi:(looking below)
sooraj:(shouting at manasvi)aaj gauri ki yeh halat tumhari wajah se he,
manasvi:sooraj par......
sooraj:manasvi arjun ab is dunya mein nahin he , aur hum sub uski dead body bhi dekh chuke he, phir tum kaise kuch keh sakti ho
manasvi:sooraj pata nahin, par mujhe lagta he keh arjun zinda he
sooraj:manasvi, u got mad(shouting)aur ab gauri se aise koi baat mat karna usne poocha to mukr jana(angrily gone)
manasvi:(crying)
NEXT DAY
sooraj sitting with manasvi's doctor
doctor:mr sooraj, apki patni ki reports agayi he aur.......brain ke x ray se pata chala he keh unke memory trcks par kuch injuries aye hui he jo yeh indicate kar rahi heen keh unke yadasht par asar pare ga
sooraj:(thinking of yesterday)
AFTER TWO MONTHS(IN HOSPITAL)
nurse:mubarik ho apka beta hua he
gauri:(smiling)
sooraj:congratulations gauri
manasvi:(smiling)
IN SPECIAL CHILD CARE WARD
gauri:(standing with the cot)bete kaash tumhare papa bhi humare saat is waqt mojud hote, par.......(crying)
arjun:(standing at the back of the mirror)
gauri:arjun......(smiled)
arjun:(carrying rosses and smiling)
gauri:(look at arjun and ignore him)
arjun:gauri
gauri:(shocked)
arjun:humara beta hua he
gauri:(still in shock)arjun(touch arjun)AAARRjjunn tum(very happy)
arjun:ha gauri mein......
gauri:(hug him)tum mujhe chor kar kahan chale gaye the
arjun:woh sub mein tumhe baad mein bataoon ga
gauri:arjun(hug him)tum is tarh kyun chale gaye the
IN THE EVENING
arjun:(telling about what happened two months ago)uncle mein aur bhabi jub wapas a rahe the toh mujhe eik mujhe eik buhat zaroori kaam yaad a geya, maine bhabi se aha keh woh jaise he ghar pohanche driver keh saat gauri ko bata deen keh shaid mujhe eik hafta aur lag jaye, uske baad jis jaga mujhe jana tha mein jb wahan pohancha toh wahan ka mausam buhat kharab ho geya jiski wjah se saare communication system kharab ho gaye aur mein aap logon ko contact nahin kar saka, aur yahan a kar pata chala keh car ka accident ho geya tha, aur bhabi bhi buhat se baatein bhool gaye thi, ufsos to mujhe us driver par ho reha he jiski muat ko aap log meri muat samajh bethe the, i m really very sorry
manasvi:i m sorry arjun, agar meri yadasht......
arjun:bhabi isme apka to koi kasoor nahin he
gauri:(smiling)
arjun:and all of u kal aap sub ko meri tarf se invitation he, subne aana he
NEXT DAY
sooraj:bhai arjun surprise kya he, yeh tumne humay kahan bulaya he
arjun:wait......(laugh)
manasvi:lo gauri bhi a gaye
arjun:gauri yeh lo scissor aur is project ka aghaz karo
gauri:(confused)arjun meri toh kuch smajh mein nahin a raha
arjun:tum ribbon to kato
gauri:(cut the ribbon)
sooraj:wow.......
manasvi:wonderful.....
gauri:office.....arjun yeh.....
arjun:gauri tumhe politics buhat pasand the na aur tum logon keh liye kaam bhi karna chahti thi. isi liye maine tumhare liye yeh NGO kholi he aur yeh firm ab tumhari he tum jo karna chahti ho tum yahan logon ki falah keh liye karsakti ho
gauri:arjun(very happy)
arjun:aur janti ho is office ko banane keh liye aur tumhe surprise dene keh liye he mein bhabi keh saat shimla geya tha......
gauri:(hug arjun)i luv u arjun
arjun:me too
sooraj:(smiling)
manasvi:kisi ne apni patni keh liye taj mehal banwa diy , toh kisi ne apni patni keh liye firm khol de aur eik mere pati dev he ....
sooraj:(laughing)
manasvi:(ignore him)
gauri:bhabi(laughing)
THE END

what yaar end of the fan fic........i mean ur fan fic was really good.....always intresting and good to read and also very hatke.....

But the parts were really really good....... 👏

really really good 👏 sorry for not replying