FAN FIC - Page 5

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Guys this time its a lenghty part.....have fun......

In heritage house….

Suraj returns from America….He has returned a day before since

he has completed his work early….

Shakuntala sees suraj and says

S: arre suraj beta………tum to kal aane wale the naa…to aaj kaise

aa gaye…. 😊

Su: (touching her feet) maa who kaam khatam ho gaya jaldo to…..


S: jeete raho…. Achcha fresh ho jao……… hmm waise mansvi aur main tumse bahut naaraz hain 😡


Su: mujse ….kyun maa ????

S: sirf tumse hi nahi balki arjun se bhi naaraz hai..... hum sab

Su: par baat kya hai……humse aisi konsi galti ho gayi….

S: tum aur tumhara bhai….jabse ghar se gaye hain ek phone tak nahi kiya hai……..ye bhi nahi ki ghar main log kitne pareshan honge…..chalo tumne to ek baar phone kiya tha pahunchne ke baad par tumhara bhai……………usne to who tak nahi kiya……..

Isiliye mansvi bahut gussa hai tumse………..jaakar usse baat karo

Su: theek hai main baat kaarta hoon.........

In suraj's room….

Mansvi is standing near the table checking some files with her back facing on the door.....

Suraj enters the room and sees that mansvi is too engrossed in her work that she doesn't notice him………..

He walks slowly without making any sound of footstep enters the room and slowly spreads his arms around mansvi………….. 😳

Mansvi is stunned ………but recognizes suraj…..but doesn't say anything

Su: (in a romantic tone) hmm mama keh rahi thi ki meri patni mujhse bahut naaraz hai……..

Mv: (breaks herself free of suraj's arms and turns other way to face another shelf without looking at him)

tumhe isse kya matlab…tum jaakar apna kaam ….apna business sambhalo….(her voice stern) 😡

Su: hmmmmm! Lagta mamla iss baar kafi serious hai………..lagta hai humari madam humse kafi naraaz hai

Mv: nahi to …. Main bilkul naraaz nahi hun…(still not looking at him)

Su: achcha to yehi baat mujhe dekhkar kaho

Suraj holds mansvi and turns her so that she could face him….and then takes the file from her hand….

and puts it down the table…seeing this mansvi's a bit frowned………

Mv: array suraj mera file(making an expression)

Trying to reach the file …….but suraj stops it by holding her hand………Mansvi still doesnt look at him ….

she looks down (still angry) 😡

But suraj frees her arm and cups her face in his both hands and brings her face up so that he could see her face………….

but mansvi turns her eyes angriliy to other side

Su: hmmm!! Kitne din ho gaye iss khoobsurat chehre ko dekhe huye….Bhai hume to raat ko neend bhi nahi aata tha iss chehre ko dekhe bagair……….

sirf ek tasvir ka sahara tha….aur aap hai ki humme iss tarah tadpa rahi hain………. Ye to nainsaafi hai naa(smiling)

Mv: (slowly turning her gaze to his face) aur mera kya woh socha aapne…..main bhi itne din aapke bagair thi……..

yeh nahi ki ek phone kar de……….achcha meri chodiye zara khushi ka khayal to karte……..lekin nahi janab ko fursat jo nahi……… 😡


Suraj quietly listens to all these complaints ………thinking that

she should free her mind from all these things……….


Mv: aur jab maine aapko phone kiya tab…..chilla kar phone patak diya……… 😡


Su: who mansvi maine isiliye………..(smiling trying to pacify her)


Mansvi interrupts….: chup……….chup bilkul chup 😡


Suraj shuts his mouth…..and mansvi continues


Mv: manti hun ki kaam hota hai…..par kya raat ko bhi kaam hota hai…..bolo…

Suraj doesn't say anything………

Mv: ab kuch bolo bhi…..yun bhuth(statue) banker kyun khade ho……

Su: tumne hi to kaha tha chup rehne ko…isiliye chup hoon….. 😆

Mv: who to……..suraj mera mazak bana udha rahe ho(getting even more angry)

Su: nahin mansvi main tumhara mazak kaise udha sakta hoon….

After a moment……..

Su: mansvi mujhe bahut kaam tha aur phir jis din tumne phone kiya tha tab main ek bahut zaroori meeting main tha ….aur us din kafi tension main tha…..

isisliye tumpar baras pada….aur phir insane apno par to barista hain……….tum se jyaada kaun hain mera apna…..


Mansvi is still not convinced……..


Mv: achcaha to chillane ke liye humaari yaad aata hai……..

Su: mansvi….aisi baat nahi hai……aur phir kya main phone nahi karoonga to does that mean I don't remember you……

mansvi tum to mere sanson main basi ho….

tumhe to har pal yaad karta hoon…sach mansvi bahut kaam tha mujhe warna main zaroor phone karta tumhe….

aur phir aaj tak aisa huwa hai ki maine jaan bujke phone na kiya ho……..

plz mansvi maaf kardo mujhe………apne pati ki is choti si galti ko maaf nahi karr sakti……


Mansvi looks at him………suraj makes an expression that he is sorry and mansvi laughs….

Suraj is relieved to see this………

Su: thank god!! Aap hasi to sahi…….aapka gussa dekhkar to lag raha tha ki iss janam main mera patta kath gaya……….

Mv: theek hai theek hain is baar to maan gayi par agli baar(raising her finger)

Su: ahh(holding the fingers of the hand she had jus raisen) agli baar ye gustakhi is nachheez se nahi hogi…(kisses her hand) 😳

Mansvi blushes…….


Su: hmm!! Yehi sharmate huye chehre ko dekhne ke liye to hum itni door se kaam jaldi khatam larke jaldi aagaye….. 😳

Mv: (suddenly realizing) array haan aap itni jaldi kaise aa gaye….aap to kal aane wale the naa…to phir……….

Su: mansvi kaha naa…..tumhare is pyaare se chehre ko dekhne ke liye jaldi…..

Mansvi interrupting………

Mv: uh! Suraj mazak nahi sach kaho naa ……itni jaldi kyun aa gaye tum……..

Su: lo aab mera is ghar main jaldi aana bhi mana hai……


Mv: who baat nahi hai

Su: arrey mera kaam jaldi khatam ho gaya isiliye main jaldi aa gaya……..


Mv: phir theek hai…….


After a moment

Su: waise manasvi (naughtily) waise jo arjun keh raha tha who galat bhi nahi hai…naa 😉 😉

Mv: (confused looking up at him) arjun? Arjun kya keh raha tha……..

Su: wahi(smiling)who khushi ko ek bhai dene ki baat ………..

Mv: (looks up in surprise) Surraajj!! 😃

Su: aise kya expression de rahi ho…..

Mv: suraj tum bhi naa…(looks other side)

Suddenly mansen comes in……

M: haan bhai waise is baar arjun ka sujhav bura nahi hai………….

Suraj and mansvi are shocked to see and after a moment are

embarrresed……..and look at each other……

M: ahem!!ahem!!(looks on other side)

Suddenly both realize that in which position they are standing…..suraj abruptly releases his arms……and mansvi goes a bit far……

Then mansen looks again them……..

Su: (still embarrassed) who papa main…… 😳

M: hmm!! To kya irada hain (looking at mansvi )mujhe phir se dada banane ka…huh!!!

Manasvi feels completely embarrassed :papa aap bhi ……..

And leaves the room feeling shy……and mansen laughs…..

Then looks at suraj………

M: waise suraj……….tum itni jaldi ……….tumhari mama ne bataya ki tumhara kaam jaldi khatam ho gaya……….

Su: (confidently) jee papa…..

M: saari meetings to theek se huyi naa..

Su: jee papa

M: mujhe apne bete par poora bharosa hai………


Suraj smiles……..

After a moment mansen says coming a little to suraj……


M: waise woh sujhav shaayad utna bura nahin tha nahin………..woh mere phir se dada banne ka………


Suraj blushes………..

Su: papa….!!


Mansen pats on suraj's back and leaves from there………….

wow it's soooooooo romantic.gr8 writing 👏

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U r a fabulous writer 😃