SwaRon OS-Joining the broken pieces of heart?part3

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Posted: 13 years ago

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Originally posted by: jumrulzz
Omg!
wat a OS.. .seriously i felt each and every emotion.. BUT WHT THE HELL?!?
i didnt lyk the last part..
yu shud've continued!
this OS made me Feel.. the emotions...
and cry along! 😭

Really a Beautiful OS!
i wish yu had Continued...

Jum thank you first for reading it thrice and about continuing, i will think upon it but it will take time cause i am a bit busy with my studies this week. So can't say, hope you understand dear. Personally i feel the first part should be the last part but since you and some peolpe want me to continue i will try my best to do so😊

Originally posted by: Swayamd3
a beautiful OS!
really amazing!
but yu shud have continued..
It ws really Emoish! :)
and sharon's POV!
was true!

Thanks arshak for commenting and yeah about continuing i will try my best to come up with something😊

Originally posted by: namratajadhav
Wow..
Amazing...
Beautiful...
Wonderful...
Fantastic...
Mindblowing...
Outstanding...
N all d adjectives jo meko ab yaad nhi aa rahe..!!
It touched my heart...
U hav really written it beautifully...
Hatz off 2 u fr givin us such an amazing os..!!
Loved it 2 d core...

Ahh namrata that many adjectives for this OS, i don't no what to say dear, 😳don't know whether my work truly deserve this.

Originally posted by: surbhimathur
Firstly! You chose a splendid and historic swaron scene..👏

Well rutu i dun think there is a need of writing anything after reading your OS or mentioning good things present in it..coz it had soo many awesome things and beautiful lines and the way u explained and detailed there feelings and emotions and all..it was wow! 👍🏼

I totally loved dat portion where you portrayed sharon's feelings

She couldn't see him like that knowing she was responsible and so closed her eyes, surrendering herself completely to him.

and after dis..the whole thing was hell-wow-spellbound for me! 😍

⭐️special mention⭐️ to that para where you wrote about how her
"minute pieces of heart" felt wen he detached himself from her!
I havn't read dis level of innovation mahn..!

and yes you are ryt...sharon's POV was d forte of dis OS or scene!

An unforgettable OS i must say!

Well you said it right that scene was one of the historic scenes in SwaRon history i completely agree on that part. And Sharon's pov was the most needed. Thank you surbhi for the long comment, i am glad you liked it and for mentioning the small things that i included😳

Originally posted by: Ankithate
Ah! That was something special,
all flashback started in my mind and could actually feel the emotions!
Tyx a ton for writing such a fab. OS!

Thums up! 👏

Glad you could feel all the emotions Ankit by reading this, thank you for commenting.😊

Originally posted by: marauder
First of all you chose one of the most epic SwaRon scene for the plot of your OS. I have read many version of this scene in various OS's and each has been better than other. This one is also class apart. Loved the changes you did and loved the way you potrayed their emotion. It was beautifully penned. Loved this OS to the core.

Yes the scene was epic, i can never forget. Can't say whether this scene was the turning point in their relation(considering what happened the next day all the yelling, the insults, your-place-in-my-shoe thing, i really didn't understand that part). But it was etched in my heart. Anyways i am happy you felt this OS could also manage to be in lines of some of the other works on this scene by amazing writers. I feel good, thanks for commenting😊

Originally posted by: SwaRonluver666
dude that was awesome.. intense.. but what happened after that?? did she talk?? did he listen?? tell na

As i mentioned in my note SwaRon can never resist each other, so you know what might have happened next😉 Thanks for commenting😊

Originally posted by: Sravani...
Do I really have to say something?? It was amazing.I liked the way you kept the sequence same and also the dialogues.I think its one of those few OS's which are written without changing the characters of SwaRon.

Aww Sravani thank you for the comment, the scene although was my version but i tried my best to stick to the original sequence😊

Originally posted by: kritzzz_ArSha
nice one

Thanks dear😊

Edited by Rutu - 13 years ago

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Posted: 13 years ago

#32

OMG OMG how amazing is this OS?!?! 👏

brilliant piece of writing😊

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---Priya---

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Posted: 13 years ago

#33

Rutu u have chosen one of the epic SwaRon moment...
I loved the way you penned down swaron's feelings..
One of the best OS i have ever read..
Way to go girl... This was defo a master piece of writing 👏

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Posted: 13 years ago

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wat a OS.. .seriously i felt each and every emotion.. BUT WHT THE HELL?!?
i didnt lyk the last part..
yu shud've continued!

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Phantasm

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Posted: 13 years ago

#35

Originally posted by: neetha
ahh..wat an epic selection..we had just discussed abt this scene in AT..it is an amazin piece of work rutu..i love ur romantic writings..

Slowly and steadily she moved her face up to make him reach her easily and parted her shaky lips a bit which told him to take them in his calm ones, waiting to feel them

this particular line..had goosebumps ..one thing wic i loved the most abt this os is that swaron finally had their first kiss..no matter even they fought..kash we wud hav seen this in the epi..the epi wud hav been in the pages of swaron's historic love story..

once again i loved it.👏.m actually runnin out of words

Thanks a ton neetha...well i didn't intend to show romance in this one...thoda intensity dikhana tha...but i am happy you liked it dear😳

Originally posted by: luvSwaron4ever
amazing...perfectly put...this scene was an amazing turn for swaron...wish show mein ithna brief se dikhaaya hotha...i mean the emotions and their feelings...its beautiful...this is how swayam and sharon are...

I know...by the end of that episode we all were so confused about where exactly does this leave SwaRon...kash in depth mein dikhate. Anyways glad that you liked it😊

Originally posted by: Sawyer_Tom
Very descriptively written Rutu. 👍🏼 I really like the way you handled the whole showdown. The original scene was a bit open ended. They didn't show how they to that place. We had to assume a lot. But you managed to fill in all the gaps very effectively. And the best part was you manage to stick to the original storyline as much as you could.Nice work. I actually wanted to read something on that showdown. Thanks a lot for writing such a beautiful OS. And yeah, thanks for the PM.

Thanks Nidhi, i am glad that you liked it. And yeah the scene was ended in a very abrupt manner. What we thought was Sharon would realize her mistake and something constructive would brew up between the two of them. But as usual CV's didn't think of showing that on the show. And yeah i tried to go according to the actual scene but some changes were needed, and so here was the OS.😊

Originally posted by: kool kanz
👏👏👏awsum...very well portrayed feelings...if possible, continue...thanks for d pm

thanks dear...i will try my best to continue(provided i get some idea😊)

Originally posted by: tanukaswaron
amazing os rutu !!
one of the brilliant os i have read on the historic swaron scene 😃
fantastically written and described 👏
i liked the changes u made to the whole scene 😃
i loved how u gave sharons pov and described what she was going through .
i actually cried while reading abt SwaRons pain , guilt and the undying love that they feel for each other .😭
keep up the good work .👍🏼
thanks for the pm.

Tanuka thanks dear...indeed the scene was historic and yeah i tried to include changes especially from Sharon's side. Cause that was much needed. I am glad that you liked it dear😳

Originally posted by: troublemagnet
One of the FINEST and REFINED work of yours..👏

Great OS..😊

Thanks a ton😊

Originally posted by: ABBY92
Beautifully described...I'm actually at a loss for words...You wrote it exceptionally well and if it's not too much to ask, could you please continue the OS and actually write about what happens the next morning ??

Thanks a ton Abby, and about continuing i will try my best to come up with something...gimme some time😊

Originally posted by: sadiyaswaron
Awesome os rutu
I really loved the changes n it was beautifully written
Please if possible continue it
I really want swaron together after this

Thanks sadiya...i am glad you liked the changes...and about continuing i ll try my best, but after few days...bit busy with studies🤓

Originally posted by: swayamsharon
it was just amazing!!!!! u have chosen that swaron scene which has broke heart of all swaron fans!!!!! I always want to know sharon pov in that scene, becoz cv's never clearly clarify wat sharon think, it is always we fan have to assume & i must tell it was just perfect!!!!

hey plz continue want to know wat happen next

Thanks a ton, i am happy you liked it...and continuing na ..i ll try for sure😊

Originally posted by: -Sakina-
*Reserved*

Will get back to this in the evening.:)

*Edited*

Your BEST work,so far.I LOVED how you took one of SwaRon's landmark's scenes,and delved deeper into their psyche...defining every move with explanations.Beautifully worked.:)

You are a great writer,sweets.:)

Keep writing more on SwaRon.:)

Thanks a ton Sakina...i am happy you liked it dear. And thanks for your always encouraging and awesome comments. I will try to write more for sure😳

Originally posted by: ShrutikaSwaRon
Amazing os
it is one of d swaron scene which holds place in our heart...n u have just made it more heart-touching by adding d kiss n sharon's pov...thnx for pm

Thanks Shrutika, and yes this scene does hold a place in our heart. And we will remember this scene forever😳

Originally posted by: Sudha-SK
Awesome OS Rutu.
Beautifully written, with keeping the main storyline intact the emotions you have shown..were superb.
and as u rightly said in ur note..SwaRon can never be away from each other for long..can they?

Thanks sudha, glad that you liked it. And yeah its true that they just cant resist each other😳

Edited by Rutu - 13 years ago

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Posted: 13 years ago

#36

omg i simply loved it

so wont u continue, i knw its mentioned that its the end bt i wanaa read more n know more

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Phantasm

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Posted: 13 years ago

#37

Originally posted by: chimpukli10
hey dear it was awesum..i liked d fact that u incorporated d necessary changes which were left to be shown in actual epi..nd while reading dis all d scenes wer flashing in front of my eyes..will u continue dis ?i really wish to see their confrontation..

Thanks a lot Vaishnavi...i am glad you liked it. And yeah i am thinking of continuing, but gimme some time.

Originally posted by: Suku_SwaRon
yaar Rutu you made me emotional 😭. I watched the whole episode and Rutu really the depth of the scene is totally and fully interpreted by you. Any loopholes the CVs had is fully cleared by you. How beautifully you write yaar, it is really a pleasure to read the OS at the same time heartwrenching. Really this is the real swaron not the one we see in D3 now a days. Gosh yaar, hats off to you for giving us such a beautiful OS.
🤗

True Suku, our old SwaRon is lost somewhere, and i am missing them badly.

Anyways i am glad you liked it dear, thank you for your always encouraging and awesome comments🤗(My 1 hug to your 4 hugs😳)

Originally posted by: Anindita91
awesome os rutu...i will again say the same thing...i am speechless n out of words...really dear its outstanding...i had tears in my eyes...u have written it brilliantly...if u can then plz continue this os...would love to read it...awesome dear...great job...hats of 2 u...thanx for the pm...

Anindita thanks a ton dear for your comments, i am happy you liked it...and continuing na gimme some time, this whole week was really hectic for me, so my brain is still to come out of that, but i will try to continue😊

Originally posted by: abhilasha_dream
Man wasn't I able to replay the whole scene in my head and that too with every minute details in it...

I loved it, plz do continue the OS and don't end it here, show the destiny as per ur lines, just don't leave it hanging here... PLZ PLZ PLZ😊

Thanks abhilasha for your comment, i will try to show what destiny had store in for SwaRon..gimme some time😊

Originally posted by: nature7
a beautiful OS!
really amazing!

Thanks a ton😊

Originally posted by: swaron_d3
i very well agree with everyone that you've chosen one of the best scenes ever...which the CVs have stopped making ..!
well,i'm very much impressed with your OS...it hass left me spellbound.
each and every line of your had a deep meaning...
you very well justify the meaning of the word "intensity"..
a word which was reflected throughout the OS!
you presented sharon's POV which is amongst the most neglected souls among others...her POV is the one which adds a lot of weightage to the situation...but as i said neglected...her POV is never displayed!
well,enough of stupid talks!
lets come straight-way to the pt. i luved ur os!
it was amazing!

Ahh thanks ananya...i am glad that this OS did reflect intensity and Sharon's POV was indeed needed...i tried my best to show it, thank you for commenting dear that too with a big comment😳

Originally posted by: Nehal92
whoa!! it made me feel all the emotions... ah!! but continue it.. plz!! :)

Thanks nehal...i will try to come up with next part😊

Originally posted by: misha24
Amazing

Thanks misha😊

Originally posted by: Nirju99
awesm os

Thanks a lot😊

Originally posted by: mahirahmarium
OMG OMG how amazing is this OS?!?! 👏
brilliant piece of writing😊

Thanks dear for your comment😊

Originally posted by: ---Priya---
Rutu u have chosen one of the epic SwaRon moment...
I loved the way you penned down swaron's feelings..
One of the best OS i have ever read..
Way to go girl... This was defo a master piece of writing 👏

Priya thanks a ton dear for your comments...i am glad you liked it😳