Simply Magic - Spell # 1. - Page 95

beautiful shot kinzu......

beautiful os dear.

awesome os angel....very realistic..i mean the theme of d os....n d end..it can always happen so..ppl chng...😳😃 u write awesome-ly well...too gud!all d deatils u had put in describe thr relationship..was just amazing! loved it all!!

keep writing!🤗.😳

tc keep smiling<3😳

after a long time😔 bt

im sry i cant comment now a days

as im busy with my final sems🤔😡

n im vary happy to see ur pms😃

ur os's really awesome 👏

n very very thanks

ur pm it mean a lot to me🤗

tht was toooooo gud.......

really happy to see tht mayank took rite decision and gave up all his illelegal work......👏


loved it.......😊

am so sorry for commenting so late,

Mehak.wow a great story in OS👏

i remembered a scene from the movie Jeet after reading this OS......😳

n Mayank made the right choice..........n Nupur too😃

this is beautiful writing mahek.a mayank -nupur story with a moral to tell, this is just awesome!!!!!!!!

Dearest Kinza,

You know I don't normally read MayUr FF or OS, I just can't help compare the characterizations to those in my own mind, so that despite the fact that there isn't anything 'wrong' with the piece it never sits well with me. HOWEVER I am glad I made yours an exception. 😃

I loved your delicate embroidering. "you give him a case of fabricated lies and he will present it as a castle of truth." The descriptions bringing the 'action' or rather 'friction' of hearts into verdant vividness. 👏

"I feel the signing amount should have one more zero" Wonderful! 😆 I loved tight humour you wove into the conversation, that '"ok, I will add it, but you sign first", Just genius!⭐️ Slowly building the tension BUT also heightening the humour, I loved '"I don't like working with people who scream" 😆 Really very nicely done! ⭐️

You have a talent for penning good, natural dialogue that keeps your attention. Focused and very sharp lines without that repetitive mundane linking 'haan' and 'na?' A great writer knows how to make those 'boring' yet necessary segueing lines profound and enticing too. Kinza, you are a great writer. 👏⭐️

The simple yet politic '"ye sab chor dejiye.." The subtle layering of personal history of "shiayed tumhain pata nahi hai lekin tumhare dad bhi yehi kaam karte hain princess, so.." YET also an acute observation of the degeneration of society that even our elders, those whom should set the example, fail to achieve any standard. Also highlighting the issue of 'peer pressure,' that to break the mould and leave the norm takes nothing so simple as 'a will to do so,' and yet so far and so hard for those who never even consider. Kinza, so masterfully done. ⭐️Again that '"ur conscious never questions you?" so wryly written. Mayank the lawyer who questions everyone except himself! ⭐️⭐️⭐️ I just loved all those little details of your lines that pulled the whole piece together tightly and made it quite exceptional.⭐️⭐️⭐️

My favourite line '" ap ko nahi pata, a sigh from a helpless heart can even shake the skies, tu main aur ap kia chez hain", ⭐️⭐️⭐️

I loved how you brought in that tone of courtroom interrogation. On trial 'justification' the victim 'justice,' and the two lawyers cross examining the 'moot' point that should have never been a question in the first instance.

I loved the end, ⭐️⭐️⭐️again beautifully so effortlessly linked back to the beginning, for it truly is a happy ending. It isn't having the family, child, house and car BUT the kind of family, child, house and car you seek and attain. The ends never justifies the means. Never. For one day you will pay the heavy price and the shallowness of those things you seemingly gained will not avail you one iota.

Kinza, a pleasure and a honour to read. I loved it. 👏⭐️Love Sabah.