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Posted: 14 years ago
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yr plz sid ko wapas laooooooooooooo.............gud os.............
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Posted: 14 years ago
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i just read it all and im in tears right now...please continue and PM me if you can...really touching and expressive...LOVED IT COMPLETELY...
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Posted: 14 years ago
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Originally posted by: jasangel

yr plz sid ko wapas laooooooooooooo.............gud os.............



Hez coming.. he coming bt patience is very much needed wen reading this OS....bt hey isnt tht wht SRians are best at ~patience~
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Posted: 14 years ago
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Originally posted by: QueenbeePallavi

i just read it all and im in tears right now...please continue and PM me if you can...really touching and expressive...LOVED IT COMPLETELY...



Thank you and will surely PM u!though dnt worry the tears parts are almost over!
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Posted: 14 years ago
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Part 6

Shop scene (technically: SR)
Riddhima sits infront of a tv screen in the shop and waited impatiently for the DVD to load. She thought of wht all she had done till now. Held a fortune teller by the collar, forced him to give her the CD and nw forced a Sales Person to play her CD in his shop. But for Sid she wud go to any given extent.

(Video)

Sid: toh meri senior doc aapney apni dusri CD paa li.
(she smiled thinking of his reaction if only he had known wht all she had done)
Sid: jee toh abh chalkey hum dusra task deytey hain... Iss kaam ko pura karney ke liye aapko Panchgani jaana hoga.

Wahan peh aap apney dusrey phase mein pohnch jeyengi. Dusrey phase mein todi bohot changes aayengi. Please Riddhima remember after every sunset therez a sunrise.... Iss liye anger ko control mein rakh na...

(Riddhima desperately tries to divert her thoughts because once again she was close to tears after hearing his voice. She thinks of wht he meant by the last line... Wht ws gonna cause her to be angry.)

On the road to Panchgani scene (Riddhima)

She reaches the bus station and climbs on a bus tht stops at hill station near Panchgani frm where she'd have to take another bus to reach Panchgani. The bus reaches the hill station. She stays inside not willing to see the beauty of nature. How much did beauty matter when the most beautiful she'd seen and felt has been snatched away.
She looks forward and finds this little boy with a cup of cappacino and a small note. She smiles frm her heart after a very long time.
She takes the cappacino and opens the note which says:
Abh aap aisi hi beti rahengi toh agla session kahan seh aayega. Happy Singh hai aapkey agley target ka naam aur Riddhima remember after every sunset there is a sunrise.
She lets go of the cappacino without actually drinking it. She gets off the bus and desperately looks around to spot a Happy Singh like person. She spots a Sardar hu ws busy serving ppl in his dhabah. She walks over.

Dhabah scene (Riddhima and HS)
Riddhima: hello sardarji

HS: helloji hello kahyeh kya lengi aap?

Riddhima: CD

HS: ji?

Riddhima: Sid Modi ka diya hua CD... Riddhima Modi ke liye

HS: ji nahin aapke liye koi CD nahin

Riddhima: haan haan mein jaanti hoon usney kaha tha Riddhima Gupta ko CD deyna tha aur main hi...

HS: jee aisi koi baat nahin onho ney mujhe CD nahin cassette di hai

Riddhima: CASSETTE? Nahin sardar ji app dekho CD hoga. Aap dobara dekho.

HS: dobarah dekhney seh cassette CD vich badal toh nahin jayega. Behenji merey paas woh cassette hi chod key gaye they..

Riddhima: aisa kaisey ho sakta hai. Sid ney toh kaha tha ke... Dekhye Happy Singhji aap mujhe ghussa mat dilayi ye. Agar yeh koi mazaq hua toh aap peh bhari parega

(she stares him dwn)

HS: oh ji! Aap toh Happy Singh ko Sad Singh kara keh chodo gi. Oh ji! Main keh raha hoon woh cassette chod gaye the.. Agar pehley pata hota toh yeh bhi nahin leta!

(he leaves the cassette on the table and goes to serve his customers. Riddhima in tears fyts back the lump in her throat. She desperately tries to hold back her tears. Why wud he do this? Wht is the point of all this if she cnt see him... She thought miserably.
She gets back on the bus and plays the cassette)

(Audio)

Sid: Riddhima dekho mujhe pata hai ke tum cassette ko dekh ke shayad hurt hui ho aur hona bhi chahiye leken zara socho Riddhima kya fayda iss sab ka agar tumhara lagav barta chala jaye. Issiliye uss bartey lagav ko kam karney yeh karna pareyga. Waisey ek baat bataoon iss cassette ke akhir mein tumhey apney barey kuch bataoonga jo main kabhi tumhey bataya naa ho. Iss liye keep listening.
Hw ws ur day.... Acha abh yeh jo dusra stop aaney wala hai yaheen par tumhey uttarna hai.
(Sid keeps quiet for a little while and children could be heard calling on to the bus passenger to buy chai.)
Sid:waiseh jab tumhari bus iss chai station sai guzrey toh chai khareedna mat bhoolna. Abh tape pause kar sakti ho aur bus stop par play kardein na.
(she realises he ws in the same bus as she ws. The thought makes her smile. She
reaches the chai station and buys chai and her gaze drops and freezes on the kid's shirt. It said tht : Riddhima jitna mein tumseh pyar karta hoon utnahi mein chahta hoon keh tum aagey baro. Before she cud reach out for his shirt the bus moves forward.
She reaches her stop and gets off the bus. She plays the tape and before she cud walk for more thn a minute a boy comes running to her with a pair of sneakers. He asks her to take off her shoes and says
Kid: aap yeh pehno aapke heels problem bann saktey hain.

Riddhima smiles and remembers the night when Sid had taken off his shoes for her sake. She looks at the sneakers obviously not the same ones he gave her thn. She knew tht he wud never give her anything tht belonged to him for obvious reasons. Her eyes fill with tears and she thinks whether she cud allow herself to cry since she had promised never to cry again. But these are tears of joy maybe i cud... She argued with herself and finally decides nt to because she wnted to be as strong as Sid. To learn to love like Sid she needed to be patient; be it with her own tears.

She moves forward and another child comes with an umbrella shading her and himself. Sid jitna chahey mujhseh door jaana woh utnahi merey paas aajata hai she thought.
Sid finally starts speaking:
Sid: eik baat baataoon I actually thought tht chaloo nahin bataa tha well acha bata dey tha hoon.... Hamarey honeymoon mein jab tum cockroach seh dar keh merey bahon mein aayi thi toh tabh mein nahin darra tha.. Woh toh bas mein moqey ka fayda utta raha tha...
(she smiles remembering the moment and it seemed even more beautiful since Sid willed for it to happen)
Sid: Acha abh tum meri tarah bewaja smile karna band karo. Mein toh akela hoon leken tumharey aagey peechey log hain... Unko lagey ga ke pati ka sadma bardaasht nahin kar payi.... Acha acha i noe bad joke. Mujhe apni maut ka mazaq nahin urana chahiye! Aagey samney ghar dhik raha hai na Riddhima? (she nods). Abh tum uss ghar mein gusso. Kaisey ghusso gi yeh tumhara problem hai leken mein tumhey jo todi bohot training di hai woh tum use kar sakti ho. Waisey i wud enjoy it more agar tum kuch creative kar sako. Bye bye.

Riddhima: Sid Sid.. Ek minute mein kaisey....

(she realises at tht moment tht the ppl around her were watchin her talk to a tape recorder.)

* Okai I noe tht cockroach part ws nt at all the way they hav explained it in the serial bt its my OS so i took advantage of the liberty. Acha ppl so keep reading and watch this post for part 7 which will be uploaded quite soon! Oh im open to suggestion if anything is nt liked by u or u wud wnt to add something thn dnt hesitate to leave a comment and i will make amends!

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Posted: 14 years ago
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OMG OMG OMG 😊
what an fabulous updatesssssssss 😃
im crying 😭, smiling😊 , laughing at times a😆nd crying again
superb Os
its sooo amazing i cant tell u
im soo in love with it
gr8 job 👏
plz update soon 😳

and dear thank u sooo much for pming and sorry 4 late reply
my net was sucking
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Posted: 14 years ago
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thanks for the pm n great part
this was a great part...love how sid has arranged this things n knows his wifey so well...can' t wait to see whats in the house so continue soon
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Posted: 14 years ago
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nice part 👍🏼
thanks for the pm 😊
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Posted: 14 years ago
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wowwww what an amazingggg update. i am crying and smiling at the same time. it's really good! plz do continue!
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Posted: 14 years ago
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OMG! That was one awesome update! It made me feel so many different emotions at once! :)

Updateeeeee! And PM me when you do? :]

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