Lamhein..With Rajeev(Shot fics)ud pg14 & siggy 1pg - Page 5

Originally posted by: guglu088

Oye Priya...mai to yahan comment karne ja rahi thi...par ye kya baat hui...kya edit kiya tune...unedited version post kar...jaldi...

Originally posted by: princessyogitha

Hiiii Priya.... Hiiiiiii Yogi😃

Fabulous os dear 👏 👏 👏 👏 👏 👏 👏 👏 👏 👏 👏 👏 👏 👏 dhanyavaad maam😃 😃 😃 😃 😃 😃 😃 😃 😃 😃 😃 😃 😃 😃 😃

tune itni wonderful os likhi aur hum sab se chupayi...too bad ..thanks to guari ....because of her kasam u posted this os arre us ka toh Dimag hi kharab tha...aur mera bhi..... jo maine use yeh promise kar diya...varna...??? jane de yaar...

mujhe iski title bahut accha laga yaar .. thanxxxx...last moment par yeh title mere dimag me aaya tha...😃

aur Suman n raj ki love story bhi bahut beautiful n sweet hain ....their feelings, pain every thing u described so beautifully...I loved all the scenes in this os....their first meet is so cute ...the song is so lovely,thank god raj sahi time pe suman ki father se baat kiya ..aur sab kuch tikh hogaya aise kaise thik nahi hota...??? akhir writer koun hai...tujhe kya yaad dilana padega...??? chahe mere lyf me kuch bhi thik na ho...par mere fics me sab kuch hamesha thik hi hoga...!!! itna bharosha rakh sakti hai tu...😃 😃 😃

mujhe sab se jyada kya accha laga is os main pata hain...raj saying to suman in the last part "main tumhe apne se alag nahi karnewala aur jinhe bhi tumhari yaad aaye"...wo khudh aajaye...awesome yaar ...shukriya maam...😃 😃 😃

i think tum meri is comment ke baadh samajgayi hogi ki mujhe ye os kitna accha laga...to i hope tum jaldi se another os post karke hum ko bore karogi nahi...mujhe samajh me nahi aaya ki tumhe kitna achha laga...😕!!! jara pyar se samjhayogi toh aa jayega...matlab tumhare style me...😆 😆 😆

love

yogitha

Originally posted by: sumaiya wahid

Firstly.....sabse mast hai iss topic ka title...."Lamhein wid Rajeev"....haiii!! shukriya Sumi jee😃

Main to dekh kar hi khush go gayi thi Priya....lekin padhke mujhe bada gussa aa raha tha....I mean Bhagwan ne zuban diya hai....kuch to utilize karo....par nahi....baba adam k zamane se the dono....khat likhte rahe!! "I love you"....teen simple se shabd hai....inhe kehne k bajai....kya kya likhte rahe....haath dard nahi kiya kya?? ha ha ha...😆 😆 😆...actally hua yun tha ki meri czn sis ne 'letter' k upar likhne ko kaha tha...!!! aur tumhe toh pata hi hai ki aaj kal 'letters' koun likhta hai yaar...!!! par maine last year ise likha tha...pata nahi use kya achha laga us ne mujhe apne B'day par promise le liya...ki main ise yahan par post karun...!!! aur aage ki kahani tum toh janti hi ho...!!! aur rahi baat Raj aur suman ki...toh agar voh dono pahle se hi sab kuch bata dete...toh meri yeh OS itni lambi-chaudi kaise hoti...😆 😆 😆

Anyways....inpe gussa karke kya fayda?? Inhone wahi kiya jo aap ne unse karwaya madam!! haan...yeh baat toh sau fishadi sahi kaha hai tum ne...😆 😆 😆

Ek to itna gloomy start kiya fic ki....mera to dil dhak dhak kar raha tha....in anticipation....i thought ye Priya ne kuch gadbad to nahi kar dii...one shot likhte likhte!! But however I was glad ki u r still the lioness....and they had got sum brains knocked into them!! Achha hua Raj me mohabbat ka jazba aa gaya tha....warna ghor anarth ho jata!! kuch nahi hota...!!! yaar...fic padhne se pahle apne DIMAGLESS dimag se soch liya karo ki fic ko akhir likha kis ne hai....??? PRIYA ne...jis k paas khud ka DIMAG bilkul bhi nahi hai...jo DDPA ki member bhi hai tum sab k sath...toh voh kaise kuch bura kar sakti hai ...hai na...😆 😆 😆

Waise I loved the way their story were portrayed....like how they came to knw each other....and how they grew fond of each other!! Wo song wala portion badhiya tha....it was veryyyy unique Priya!! I must admire u for that!! sachhiiii😛 😛 😛...chalo is khushi me ek drink ho jaye...!!! oye...main NARIYAL PANI ki baat karr rahi hun...itni garmi jo hai...😆 😆 😆

And then wo towel wala chhotu sa scene.....do I even need to say wat I was reminded of while reading that?? ha ha ha...😆 😆 😆 nahi...main samajh sakti hun...

Khair...anth bhala to sab bhala....btw I liked Raj saying....jisko milna hai wo yaha aa jaye....tumhe jaane nahi dunga....now thats like the perfect husband!! Rajeev har taraf se perfect hi hai...😉

Bas tum Raj ko thodi chhuttiya bhi dila dena....bechare se kitna kaam karwate hai....apni shaadi me bhi usse waqt nahi mila....hehe. Honeymoon pe bhej dena....pls....hehe. lo tumhari baat maan li aur use chuttiyan bhi mil gayi...ab voh aaram se DHAKA me hai...!!! mile tumhe toh plz...kahna ki jaldi se aa jaye...mujhe next fic post karna hai...😆 😆 😆

Chalo....ab next shot bhi post karo....and hamein thoda aur bore karo....bye...take care!! tumhe bore hone ki badi padi hai...thik hai...koi baat nahi...main jaldi hi tumhe phir se bore karungi...😛 😛 😛

Originally posted by: sumaiya wahid

Edit????? 😲 😲 😲 nahi....koi mujhe bachaooo...sabhi meri dhulai karna cahahte hain...😆!!! (@ Gauri....teri wajah se hi yeh sab kuch ho raha hai...tujhe toh main chodungi nahi😡)

Madam....aap ne iss shot ko edit kiya??? meri dimag ka dhakkan band ho gaya tha... jo maine aisa kiya...!!!

Ek to tumne arse baad....gauri ki kasam ki wajah se....ye shot post karne ki zehmat uthayi....we so appreciate u for this...ab isme editing ki dikkat kyun uthayi yaar??? Itna jab bore hue hum....to thoda aur ho jate........huh!! Me very gussa...🤢 ab tumhare khubshrat se chehre par na gusse wala xpression kuch achha nahi lagta...tum mushkurati hui kitni achhi lagti ho...tumhe pata hai...😆??? chalo ab kaan pakdo😆...matlab main kaan pakadti hun ki aage se aisi gushtakhi nahi hogi...😆😃

Originally posted by: sumaiya wahid

Hmm....the last lines sounded better!! Kisi aur shot me.....hmm....I think it will do for me.... ab yeh bhi koi puchnewali baat hai...ofcourse for u...n sabhi...jo bhi tumhare sath mil kar mujhe galiyan de rahe hain...😃

waise agar tumne cut kiya hai.....may be it was for better!! Ek writer sabse zyada achhese samajhti hai na? arre yaar...voh part agar maine EDIT nahi kiya hota toh yeh OS hi nahi rahta...matlab is fic k 2 parts ho jate...😊

Anyways....main na likhna bhul gayi thi.....wo poems/songs.....jo bhi the....they were beautiful!!!👏👏 😉 1st one's a gazal by Jagjeet singh...n 2nd one...ek poem hai...jo maine apne Aunty k dairy me padha tha...😃 😃 😃

Originally posted by: suhana_dixit

Hi Priya Hiii Suhana...😃

Mujhe tumhe maarne ka mann nahin kar raha hai..u know main hinsa mein vishwaas nahin rakhti to shanti se edited part kabhi kissi doosre shot mein post kar dena😃 wow.... tum sach me Gandhi jee k adarsh se inspire lagti ho...!!! is ka matlab pata hai...??? is ka matlab yeh hai ki main kuch bhi karun...kam se kam tumhare taraf se toh safe hun...😆

jaisa sumi ne kaha u r the best one to decide whether to keep or edit the scene in your fiction thanxxxxx a lot....ab main kafi relaxed feel karr rahi hun...😃

Bye😊

Originally posted by: spvd

hey priya dear very beautiful story............. loved it..............they simple and very lovely.................thanxxxxx a lot Deepa😃

but i liked the para u added saying u wont make anything go bad.................lovely story................. actually yeh meri purani aadat hai...main jab bhi kuch likhti hun na...bich me aise NOTES post kar deti hun...!!!😆

Originally posted by: Revolutionbreez

hi pri!!! Hiiiii Mana😃

Wonderful Shot !!! shukriya...😃

and a very appropriate name !!! 👏 👏 👏 👏 thanx...yaar...😃 😃 😃 😃

Bhala ho Gauri ka jisne tumhein kasam di aur tumne yeh shot post kiya....warna...huh..! ha ha ha...task bhi usi ne hi diya tha ki...'letters' k upar fic likh...!!! ab tu hi bata...aaj kal letter koun likhta hai yaar...!!! ajeeb pagal ladki hai voh😆

Gauri...agar aur bhi kuch likha hai inhone and if you know...then plzzzzzz feel free to give her the 'KASAM'....😛 Hum sab ki bahoooot duayein milegi tumhe !! 😉 use toh dua ki jarurat hi nahi hai...bal ki mere dande ki jarurat thi...jo use finally padd chuki hai...😛

coming to the shot....it was simply superb !! thanxxxx😃

All the feelings ....friendship, separation, love, pain...everything was described just perfectlyyyy !!! 👏 ⭐️ ⭐️ is ka matlab 'PAPPU paas ho gaya na...???'😛 thanxxxx yaar...😃

Aur kya kahu? yaar....really am short of words now... main teri BHAVNAYON ko samajh sakti hun...😃

haan...par tumhein apne DUSRE skills dikhane ki zaroorat nahi hai okay? Mujhe pata hai...tumhein bahot ACHCHI EDITING karna aata hai...but isse tum apne shots par use karke prove mat kiya karo....

welll.... You can use your EDITING skills on your ENDLESS NOTES and USELESS EXCUSES for not updating your fics early....😆 😆 😆 arre ek hi kaam toh achha karti hun main...aur voh hai editing ka...aur tum kah rahi ho ki main use bhul jayun...nahiiiiiiiii😆 😆 😆

Chal ab aur khichai nahi karti tumhari.... chalo bach gaye...😃

And..... ab kya...😲

THANKS FOR THE PM !! 😃 tune kabhi kisi doc ko pura bandage me dekha hai kya...??? agar nahi...toh khud ko dekh lena...agar tune dubara PM k liye THANX kaha toh.....😡

( 'Feel free to ignore it , if you are not interested'..huh! Yeh uske liye tha...) tu bhi na kya kya sochti rahti hai...!!! par kabhi kabhi sahi bhi sochti hai...😆

Originally posted by: rituka7

great one
update soon

Originally posted by: esha143

Amazingly nice shot Priya.............superb 👏 👏 👏 👏 👏 Thanxxxx a lot Siri😃 😃 😃 😃 😃

ab kyun ki tere do fics khatam hone waale hai.........toh tu aur bhi shots likh sathi hai...........aisa nahi hai ki I don't want you to start on a new fic but still..........sochna jaroor...........😛 vohi soch rahi hun...par pata hai bas negative thoughts hi aa rahe hain...

this shot is one of the best I have read till now............ sach me tumhe aisa laga...ya phir jhaad me chadha rahi ho...??? par koi baat nahi dost k liye toh jaan bhi hazir hai (hello...yeh jaan wala part seriously mat lena yeh bass aise hi kahte hain toh maine bhi kah diya😆) aur main tumhare liye jhaad par nahi chadh sakti...😃

and jaise Mana ne kaha hai...........THANX FOR THE PM!! lagta hai tujhe bhi MANA ki hi company pasand hai...!!! fiqar not tum dono ko ek sath main hospital me admit kar dungi...!!! aur haan dubara PM k liye thanx kaha toh main pakka yeh samjhungi ki tumhe merii fic achhi nahi lagti tabhi tum aisa bol rahe ho...kyoun ki dubara tum ne PM k liye thanx kaha toh main PM hi nahi karungi... for sure😡

and NO THANX FOR UR NOTE WITH IT !!(agar agli baar aisi galthi hui tujhse toh anjaam bohuth bura hoga...........yaad rakhna........😈) kuch hints toh do...ki kitna bura ho sakta hai...!!! taki main taiyaar toh rahun...😆