YuNa FF: Unshared Secrets Chp 2 - pg 3 - Page 3

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Posted: 15 years ago
#21
aww nice chapter MJ...so i am guessing this is flashback?
loved how you write this chapter on Jiggy and his friendship with Naina...shows how deep bond they have
cant wait for the next one!
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Posted: 15 years ago
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"They say follow your heart. But when your heart is in a million pieces, which way do you follow?"
She sighed, knowing that some questions are never meant to be answered, and in her life, Yuvi was one of those questions.
she didn't even know when her thoughts became her tears and flowed out of her eyes.
👏
Mj u have beautifully expressed Naina's rollercoaster f emotions......n the last sentence above so simply conveys the magnitude f her pain n heart break!!!
Thnx 4 updte n pm 🤗
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Posted: 15 years ago
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wow lady beautifull update abt naina's feelings n jig's frndship!!!

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Posted: 15 years ago
#24
aww such a cute ff..loved the way u expressed naina-jiggy's frndship..it's sad to see everyone being sad..
awesome work MJ, and thanks for the PM :)
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Posted: 15 years ago
#25
first u derserve a big bear hug for the xcellent job 🤗.......the story is building up on me...............
very good writing, seriously love ur thoughts and your hands honey..
keep writing

"They say follow your heart. But when your heart is in a million pieces, which way do you follow?"

LOVE these lines.
GOD BLESS U
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Posted: 15 years ago
#26
I loved IT!!!!! 😛
SOOOO saaaad for Naina 😭
Please cont soon and add me on your buddy list and PM LIST 😛
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Posted: 15 years ago
#27
Wow MJ pyaar kare toh koi tumhare fanfic se kare, heheh just saw mohabattein .........n loved this part totally awesum blossom.

Well NAINA is now a strong girl, with determination, with dediacation, she dont want to ruin her life by just yelling n crying in his feeling n memories

.Well now yuvi should get a his medicincinal touch.He should realise what he has lost.*HUG U*.....this was cute n adorable yet painfull ploe.I mean i loved naina's bonding wid JIGGY-her best buddy who stood by her side in thick n thines a and yet hurted to see YuNa apart.....plz plz continue.........
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Posted: 15 years ago
#28

you say crticism is welcome...

how can anyone criticise such a flawless writing...
we feel the hurt, the frustration while reading it just like our YuNa does!
and the quotes at the starting of the parts... too good.
i love these!
just get them together fast!!!
Luv,
Pree!
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Posted: 15 years ago
#29
mj dat was awesome....

n i luv sentiments b/w friends..

cotinue..dear.. luv it
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Posted: 15 years ago
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Hey Guys..
hope you all are fine and ok.
Apologies for the mega late update. I have been extremely busy - so much so that have not watched one DMG since Sidhimma got married... lol.. :( 🤢
And i know i promised to comment on all your wonderfull comments that really touch my heart ! 😳Thanks for all your lovely comments, but I barely had the time to finish writing this chapter.. so i will focus more on writing the FF but i will try my best to reply to your lovely comments. 😊
Here's the next update - plz be kind and ignore any mistakes that i may make, and to make up for my delay, this is a loooooonnngggg update!! :D

Chapter 3:

"Love is like heaven, but it can hurt like hell."

Why was he here? What was he trying to prove? That he could forget her! Or that he was trying his hardest and failing miserably. This had been his usual stop for the past 3 days. He felt lost. He felt like his whole world was spinning, spinning out of control and he could see it. Yet he could not do a thing. It made him feel helpless.

"Ek aur Dena" he heard himself screaming. He was determined to forget everything and her also, if that was even possible.

"leikin sahib, aap toh bohot pee chuke. Aapko mein aur nahin..," he said trailing of when he saw the man in front of him blazing with anger. He was scared. He recognized that he was a short, bald man who had no chance of fighting against this young man. So he gave in, "laata Hun Sahib." he said running towards the bar.

"what's with everyone?! Here I am asking for a drink and he has a problem. There all I want is forgiveness and she still has a problem! "he blabbered.

"it's time to close. You have to leave." intervened another Man. Yuvi looked up to see 6'5 strongly built man who probably weighed twice his own size. Not a good idea to pick a fight with him, but who cares? "do what you can, I am not leaving" he said firmly.

Before he knew it, he was on the floor holding his stomach. He looked up and he could not figure out where he was until he heard the man speak.

"I asked you to leave and you relented, so now I threw you out. Don't come back" he said pointing a finger threateningly.

"Kya karloge huh?" he said arrogantly. "you can't do a thing"

"I can call the police"

"Go ahead, see if I care. Nothing matters anymore. She hates me now and nothing, I mean nothing is worse than" He slurred his way through the sentence and falling flat on the floor by the end of it.

Yuvi? Was she seeing him now? Naina could not believe what she saw. She was uncertain if she was hallucinating or not. In front of her eyes was Yuvi, drunk, arguing with someone who looked like a bouncer of the place. "stop the car!" she almost screamed at the taxi driver, who jolted the car in response. "I need to get off here"

"But Naina, where…" asked Jiggy and stopped as he saw her flustered expression as she was fumbling for the taxi fare in her purse.

"Jiggy, JP, Thanks for the meal. It was lovely, but I have to go!" she said sternly, getting out of the taxi and shutting the door. "I'll be fine " she said through the window, assuring them, though she knew that was something she would never be.

"Per Naina…" she heard Jiggy scream as the taxi left the place and she ran towards him.

She saw him lying on the floor, sprawled around like a lifeless being. Panicking she checked his breath. Thanks Bhaggu, she sent a silent prayer as she found his pulse points. She realized he was unconscious due to over consumption of alcohol. Annoyed, she tried getting him to stand up when the bouncer came to her rescue. "Let me help you"

"Thanks a lot" she replied, waving for a taxi as it stopped.

He helped her get Yuvi in the taxi and as they were about to leave, he said, "Madam, he loves you a lot"

Stunned, "no no, you are mistaken"

He shook his head, "no madam, I am not. I have seen lots of lover's separating and I know one when I see them. And you love him as much as he loves you, maybe more. I am sure"

"Anyways, thanks for your help. Bhaisaab chaliye." She motioned the taxi driver to leave.

He knew she had been here. He had seen her leaving, but truth be told, even if he hadn't seen her leaving, he would have known. He could recognize her scent anywhere. She was not only in his soul but in every breath he took. She was not only his life, but now his reason for living. He sat down on the sofa, confused at her reaction towards him. Why didn't she shout at him? He knew she hated the very scent of alcohol and abhorred anyone who drank it. Yet last night she was calm as ever. Like she knew the reason yet chose to leave the matter. More precisely, ignore it. He had been dreading the day she would talk to him for weeks now, but nothing happened yesterday.

He reached Sanjeevani in the midst of these thoughts. Confused he sat the locker room bench thinking about Naina. She was acting like nothing ever happened between them. He froze, as he realized what he just thought. is that what she wants?

"We can never understand them Dude" said Sid walking into the room angry.

"It is complicated, I thought she would yell, scream, and hit… but not this"

"I know."

"Now what do I do?"

"Tell her sorry and make it up to her"

"She does not even want to look at me"

"Toh persist karo, and if she does not agree, then papa ko sorry boldo"

"Papa?" he asked confused. Where in the world, did Papa come from? How was her papa involved in all this?

"Haan, Dr. Shashank se mein baat karunga, I am sure he will understand."

"You were talking about Dr. Ridhimma?"

"Yes, what were you talking about?"

"Same… I think you should tell Dr.Shashank the truth."

"How can I tell him that I took the pictures of me and Ridhimma just to get back at Ridhimma?"

"Well, honesty never fails Sid. I have learned it the hard way."

Sid looks up at him. He said that in a peculiar manner, as if he was regretting something. "Is everything ok, Yuvi?" he asks concerned as he sensed that Yuvi was very disturbed.

"Haan Sid.. Everything's fine"

"Well, if you ever need me, you know my number. And I know you don't like taking any obligations even though I am your friend; then you can think of the help as payback for standing by my side."

"Thanks" he replied curtly, preparing to leave.

"wait dude... where are you off to?" asked Sid, getting a why-do-you-care look from him in response.

"Duty, Sid. Otherwise Dr.Keerti hum sab ki band bajayegi and its not like Ridhimma is extra nice to you either, so you too should get going," he said walking away.

Comments and Criticisms Welcome,

MJ

xxx

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