The Thief(last chapter +epilogue)

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Posted: 15 years ago
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Ok this is it folks my 2nd ff'

kashish -is the female lead, who is strong, confident, sexy and sassy. she aint afraid of the world and gets her kicks by anoying and seducing the hell out of sujal...

sujal - is not only the successful arrogant man, but a complete ladies man the playboy and a risk taking adventurer...

sparks fly when they meet and cooperate when their professions force them to...

they hate each other as much as they can... their greatest wish is to see the other going down, BUT if they dont do what the other asks...

they both go down together...




Now I won't give a char sketch right now... that will happen after a week when I post a real part... here is just a prolog... tell me if I shud continue..


Prolog…

Damn it!!! I can't believe this... this can't be happening to me!!! No way!!! I am Sujal Grewal!!!!

Sujal thought while loosening his tie and tightening his grip. Sweat drenched him and his patience rapidly ran out in between getting disapproving looks from the ugliest woman ever and getting pushed by filthy, rotten egg smelling stranger from behind.

This is why I hate India!!! The local transport system!!! By god!!! God only knows what's waiting for me in the government office.

Sujal shifted his weight n his feet and quickly took a seat which was just emptied, earning murderous glare from the ugly lady and several other women….

Well if they wanted him to show chivalry and give up his seat in this bloody, stinky, rickety local bus… they have look and smell better than miss universe. I just can't believe that my car broke down on the middle of highway with no mechanic no mobile service and only this local bus….

"Aaj kal ke log kisi kaam ke nahi hote (these men of today are soooo worthless), jitney paise wale utne hi battameze (the richer they are more manner less they act)", the ugly lady cackled while giving Sujal a super ugly glare. Ignoring her, Sujal pulled the plugs of his iPod in his ears and settled for counting her ugly moles while listening to his fav music and breathing through his mouth(he wud puke if he used his nose).

Finally reaching his destination, a forgotten govt office, he plopped down on the dusty chair in the waiting area. There was no receptionist.

After almost an hour a lady walked in and settled behind the reception. She was middle aged, fat, frizzy and greasy. Her hair was pulled tight in a bun and dripped oil, thick specs on her nose and a large hairy mole on her forehead. Sujal saw yellow stained, gapped teeth when she yawned and uttered a silence curse. Apparently this receptionist was his ugly bus lady. Taking a deep breath, Sujal approached her, "excuse me mam… I am her to see the Mr. A.K.Yadav"

The lady looked up and frowned again, extenuating her mole, she spoke in her shrilly, cackling voice, "appointment hai? (You have an appointment)"

Sujal gulped down his repulsion and forced his amicable smile, "yes mam. It's Sujal Grewal"

"Theek hai, wahan betho. (Alright. Sit there)", she pointed to a seat which he had just vacated.

Straightening his tie Sujal sat, waiting for her to make a call and announce his arrival and then show him some respect, but nothing like this happened. The lay simply took out her knitting and started making some hideous colored outfit.

This was the last straw for Sujal. He had travelled 15000 km to get this stupid permission slip signed and he had gone through jet lag, flat tires, smelly roadways buses and complete hell only to wait here coz this ignorant lady didn't read newspaper to know his name. She didn't know that if he left. Her boss's boss wud come begging to him for his help 2 weeks later. But it wud be too late, he wouldn't be able to help even if he wants to and the money was really good in this govt deal so he wants that slip now. God!!!!! Why the hell do they just have to meet me, 'the owner'… Sujal glanced at his watch 45 mins he has been waiting.

"Excuse me mam, maybe u dint hear me. But I have an important appointment. I need to see Mr. AK yadav right now!!"

"Aur apne humari baat nahi suni, wahan par chup chap baithiye. Jab sahab apko bulaenge, apko bata denge(and u didn't listen to me. When boss calls for u, I will tell u)"

"Par apne to abhi tak baat bhi nahi ki, unko bataya tak nahi hai-(but till now u haven't even talked to ur boss, or told him-)"

"dekhiya humse bahas mat kariye, warna sara din yahin baithoge. Jab time aega apko bata diya jayega(look, don't argue with me or u'll sit here the entire day when the time will come, u will be called.)"

Sujal sat down again dejectedly and waited forever. Finally after two hrs. when the lady was done with her knitting and it was time for her to eat lunch, she got up, looked at Sujal and said "jao andar, sahab ne bulaya hai."

Sujal frowned at the lady and felt like strangling her. After that he went in the office and only thought of work.

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"Did u get it?" a man with a scary scare on his temple asked the woman sitting in front of him.

"ofcourse!! It was a piece of cake."

The man frowned and shook his head, "but it is impossible, he always has it with him always on his body, never leaves his bloody coat!!!"

The lady tossed back a silky wisp of hair falling over her eye and straightened to let the man have look at her and at the same time she shrugged delicately, "u think it's difficult for me to get a man take his coat off??"

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Posted: 15 years ago
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hello every1 this is my 2nd ff..mine first is gonna end soon
tell e if u think its interesting.. i'll put the char ketch of the story later...
tell me if i shud continue and if anyone can think of a better story title...

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Posted: 15 years ago
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hey meggs sweetheart!!! fantastic prologue...congrats on ure new ff...it sounds gr888...loved the introduction...it was fabulous....loved teh way u described the entrie scene and the description of the woman was done really well..i myself was feeling quite sick just imagining it...loved teh intro of Sujal...u described his situation so well..and i am guessing the lady at the end with silky hair has 2 be kash...gr88 ff do carry on n pm me...so sorry 4 not commenting in look through my eyes...been really bzy but i will comment soon...i have been reading evry part though just didnt get time 2 comment!! but gr88 going dear!! lovely start...i am soo excited 4 ure new ff...ure a gr88 writer...lots of luv summi xxx
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Posted: 15 years ago
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hey dear..........the prologue looks interesting...............poor sujal had a tough time..............this is exactly how it works.......and i think the woman is kashish..................cont soon dear.................
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Posted: 15 years ago
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prolouge is really nice sujal ko kitna sehna padega

plese continue soon
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Posted: 15 years ago
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Heya
Nice prologue...
Its really sumthing different !!
Continue soon !!
Luv,
Vandu
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Posted: 15 years ago
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Hey dear.....glad that u came up wid another Sujal-Kashish ff. I'd love to read it.....luved Sujal's characteristics....always the suave n charming lad.....but wat abt this coat taking off?? Mystery??? And the name is also THE THIEF?? Hmm....interesting!!! Hehe....I luv mysteries.... specially from u.....pls keep PMing me when u UD.....asI am very bz, am not able to reply regularly....but will do it as soon as I get sum peace n tym.....till then I'll just say....its a wonderful prologue....n I simply wud love to read wat happens next. But yes.....I wud luv to kill that stupid lady for making SUJAL GAREWAL w8!!!!! Anyways, pls continue soon.
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Posted: 15 years ago
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congratulations for your new fic ! its a grt story. i cannot wait for the tree scne & sujal's secret & yes her special ways. sorry i wnt let the suspense out. i am glad u wrote a 2nd fic. but i really love ur that politics wala sujal story, remember tht black eued, & black hair stry tht we debated abt for hours, atlast u convinced me. i really loved & really looking forward ki kab tum wo stry likhoge & really wanna c that k seduce his black haired husband
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Posted: 15 years ago
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thankyou all so much for such a overwhelming response!!!!😊
i'll definatly continue this story then😃
but😕 i have imp exms coming up so updating of big parts will happen in jan...
till then ciao😉

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Posted: 15 years ago
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awesome promo add me to pm list pls

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