Counting those Days l AR One shot :) - Page 6

Originally posted by: lupin_roza

awesome one ,its a bit tiny mini but liked it very smoothly written 👍🏼keep it up n thanks 4 d pm.

Originally posted by: smriti.tweety

Hey Neeta!

Gr8 to see another one shot from you! Thanks a ton for the pm; I am extremely sorry for the delay in commenting, its been pretty hectic off late and I didn't wish read this one in a hurry and comment.

Back to the one shot after my blabbering which can go on forever.

This one reminded me of Embraced moments and Almost in Love. The former for Ridhima's state and the latter for its ending on a hopeful note. I like the fact that your fics end on such a note rather than the happily ever after fairy tail endings. Hope I feel is the driving force behind a majority of human actions and a story that leaves the reader scope for imagining his/her own conclusion is always a welcome change for me!

I guess it is similar to those in some way :P I so agree with the last statement. There is this saying in Hindi - "Ummeed pe duniya kayam hai" 😃 Hope is the driving force behind most human actions 😃

Ridhima's reaction to Armaan leaving her was bang on! Even though every individual reacts differently to a given situation, I found that I could again very easily associate her behavior with my own. The tendency to shut out the pain, submerge oneself mechanically in work and know subconsciously that one is still hurting deep down is all too familiar :)

Thankyou! 😃 I'm so glad you could relate to that. It's very imp. for a reader to be able to connect, the feel doesn't come across otherwise :D

The ostrich truly loves to bury its head in the sand and maybe sometimes in work! : D

😃

It takes but a moment for us to let go of the barriers that we erect around for fear of appearing weak and emotionally foolish to the people around us and I absolutely loved her reaction on seeing Armaan. It was an accurate mix of being instinctively on guard and at the same time a futile attempt to not let herself hope and be happy; the battle quite a lost cause for the heart tends to win in the matters of heart! :)

Smriti, I need to see a FF from you soon. You write brilliantly ⭐️ Perhaps a one shot ? You're simply awesome 😃 Once again, thankyou! I was trying hard to get the reaction right, hopefully I did :DD

It wasn't the most unique of ideas in terms of the situation but your portrayal of the same gives it your own special touch!

Good one Neeta!

Thanks a ton Smriti! Your comments are always most awaited 😃

Love

Smriti

Originally posted by: prernawaghray

hey neeta
its simply mesmerizing
thats all i wanna say dear

Originally posted by: teenorchid

niccccccccccccccceeeeeeeeeeeeee

Originally posted by: -Neetz-

You rock ⭐️

Originally posted by: smriti.tweety

Aww.... Neeta! You are really very sweet.😃 Thanks for awaiting my comments. I especially love reviewing your one shots. Haven't read any of your proper stories. Would love to read those too, though I don't know how soon. As I said in my comment that its been pretty hectic and I wouldn't want to do injustice to your work with a hasty read.
As for writing a FF myself; I haven't really thought on that track, somehow I feel it might not be my cup of tea especially in front of all you talented writers on IF :)
But thanks a ton for thinking that I should, maybe someday....... *sigh*

Love! 🤗
Smriti

Originally posted by: *Huma*

Ahem ahem.. I am here...😛

Reserved

*EDITED*

Neetu' kaan pakad ke maafi mangti hu, sorry for the long delay in posting a comment. Have just been a bit caught up and top of that my bro's been using my laptop coz his is broken, and we both refuse to use our ancient computer. Lol. Anyhow coming to the comment, Neety this is way different to your previous one shot, it's complete opposite in terms of writing. The writing here is lighter and simple to follow, though the one thing common between both is the straightforward way of story telling.

Yes, both are absolutely different in terms of concept and writing. :)

I like that the whole story was set within the space of an hour. Like I told you previously that I like anonymity in stories, but for some odd reason I was wishing that you had dwelled on the reason of him leaving her. For some reason, I found it hard to connect or feel anything for her character. I don't know may be it was just me or just that I read it in a very dreary mood. Though I give you full points for conveying her vulnerability and her contradictory emotions really well.

I see where you're coming from, but while writing the story, I couldn't understand where to fit in the reason, because I generally present facts in a vague manner, and it was probably how I interpreted it, but I couldn't find the *Bang* place to dwell on the reason..if you know what I mean lol 😆

Thanks Humz!

I like the characterisation of Ridz here; I think I prefer this story over the other one, may be because this seems more real, whereas the other I thought it to be more fairytale-ish. Even though I found it hard to connect with Ridz, but I could see a person like that in reality.

I wouldn't say that the other was fairytale-ish, but yeah this was a character which appealed to a larger audience, I mean more people can identify with this woman.

Neetz are you specialising in Maths or commerce by any chance, its just I find your writing to be very calculative and measured, as in its written in a very analytical manner or it might be that your writing is such.

Um, I have taken commerce + maths in 11th grade lol. OMG Do I exude Commerce-like characterstics ? 😲 Dang!

The rush of emotions that might have gone through her in seeing him was well written, but yet again it brings me to the point that I would have liked to know the reason for his departure. It would have added more depth to her feelings upon seeing him and his apology. I know that you wanted the reader to imagine what they wanted, but I think sometimes a person prefers a set full course meal, than to think and order, the same thing applies here. Ah I don't know if I have put it exactly the way I wanted to.

I know what you mean lol, but like I said, dwelling on the reason somehow seemed...jarring, I guess 😕 well atleast to me lol. But I shall take your suggestion into consideration!

Lastly I have to say my favourite part of your writing was the last couple of paragraphs where you were describing the shedding of the shell to reveal a pearl hidden within. In both your writing, I always seem to find something that I love.

Thanks Humz! 😃

It was a lovely one shot Neetu, and I watched the KaSh vm it was fabulous, I love the instrumental version better than the actual song. I wish you had done the whole instrumental version. It does go well with the story; it felt like Ridz was remembering her past times. Damn I miss KaSh now, sigh.

OMG Yes! You need to comment in my gallery! :D Thanks for the comment on the VM btw :) I wasn't too happy with it..well, I never am lol :P

Love

Huma

PS: I know I haven't commented on your VM gallery, sorry I will soon.

Um well, let's pop this to page 1 :P

Originally posted by: -Neetz-

*Reserved* Hehe! The queen is here! *Bows down* 😛 😃

*Edit: Thankyou so much Huma! Your comment always brings a smile to my face! I'll take your suggestion seriously and incorporate it next time :D

Love

Neetzy :D