Lapsus Linguae: Ch 7: Pg30: Rejoice (Mayur)

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Kankshita

@thegameison

Stunner

+ 4

Posted: 15 years ago

#201

Hi Sookie! 😳

This was by far the best update of this FF.

Casual, happy and random. On the whole, it was F A N T A S T I C.

Continue soon. :)

-Kanky

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Garima

@ScatteredCastle

Voyager

+ 2

Posted: 15 years ago

#202

reserved..

*back here.. :D

aah! The part.. what shall I say? Magnificiently and skillfully written. There was nothing to complain about, there generally isn't 😆!

Of-course, it was a lovable update. Couldn't distinguish between, what I liked and what I loved. On whole it was just fantastic, soothing, pleasant and synonyms. :P

It was Mayank, throughout the part. He was aweosome. Nothing special, yet loved him. :D

and then there Nupur, me too missed her, glad she's back in herself. Though, both sides were not publicized enough.. but still, umm happy, being herself.

Gunjan, loved her unspoken feelings about her sister and.. come-on, you didn't show anything else. :l

Loved the phase where both of 'em..well, lied down on the grass, feeling... ... themselves. I could imagine in.. I actually did. It was just beautiful.

Then, I loved Nupur as in Nupur, swirling and twirling in the rain.. and then Mayank, I already told, was awesome. 😳 And then, Mayank at last... smiling to himself. I liked him there too.

Bestest part, Mayank and his mother... P.S. dunno why! :S

I haven't told you about the verses, Have I?

All of them were good, but I personally loved the one Nupur wrote.. asking him to confess his apology.. it was just mind-blowing. You've gotta be an established author :) *I was about to type.. 'when ya grow up* 😆 😆 ahaha.. :D

So, what else! It was great. Thumbs Up :)

Keep the speed up! Cuz, Lady Bug likin' it..

Edited by Angel-Pebby - 15 years ago

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Escapist

@Escapist

Voyager

+ 3

Posted: 15 years ago

#203

hey sookie,

hey this was an awesome piece of work....im spellbound and rendered speechless
by ur words...esp the verses used to describe the emotions....
they were so raw yet so splendid and enticing.....

the apology part was so serene....and natural having a beauty of it's own....

"Words spoken in silence have more beauty than spoken aloud !! " (well i wrote this after reading d update !! 😆..😊 )......

truly wonderful....evn d rain part...
nupur is so innocent yet not naive....
.a very rare amalgamation of an introvert n an extrovert girl..!!..

evn mayank is described wonderfully !! the way he apologises to nupur in the most subtle of manners...and also he realizes his mistake evn before "smalltown_girl" points to him... the verses nupur wrote to him...and evn the ones tht she wrote after experincing the rains n mayank's other side were simply marvellous dear !!

the scens betwn mayank n his mom to were wonderfully portrayed...love the way his mom is !! truly a frnd n guide 😊....

smwhre i thnk i can relate to nupur when it comes to hiding urself and shying away
not because wht sm1 esle will thnk.....but bcz u dnt want them too....intrude ur private space....
i'm sayn ths in context to d virtual world..!!..

companionship yup it's far more deeper emotional connection.. evn deeper than romantic relationships......

ur words are so eloquent!!
there so much enigma to enfold !!
so many emotions are surging ....in my heart reading not only this update
but the whole ff!! 😊

this story this write up is really a very wonderful one !!

and i must say ur an awesome writer....you cld end up writing a wonderful novel .....!!....

ur really a very talented writer sookie....and i'm glad i gt to read ur work !!
and do u write those verses ?? If yes they r awesome i'm in love with them !! 😊

take care,
fatima

Edited by charming.angel - 15 years ago

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Sri

@RadiantTreasure

Dazzler

+ 5

Posted: 15 years ago

#204

Reserving for now..
Will come back..
Edit:
It was so good to read this part..that apology seems to be one of a kind and i totally loved it..
The monsoon seems to hit u r story too n i am totally flooded by the sweet scent of it..the poems..great..
Looking ahead to see how this virtual N may be now real companionship goes...
Good wishes..
Sri:-)

Edited by sri_4 - 15 years ago

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ammygurl

@ammygurl

Dazzler

+ 3

Posted: 15 years ago

#205

AAAAArghhhhhhhh!!!!!!!!!!!
I have read this part for the 4th time now and I am still not satisfied.. I want it to keep it as a memoir.. To revive it and read it in my mind whenever I want to.. Without switching on the computer...
So, I assume you have read the fics I mentioned to you in my last post and got back to your standards!!!
I can feel how difficult it must have been for you to write a part like this.. But the end results are amazing!!!!
Sookie, you have made me very very happy today! :)
The rainy season always make me happy and now here, feeling the rain and the MAYUR's Re-created magic.. I am in AWE! in Awe of you, your writign skills and of course, the MAYUR magic!
It has been stored in my mind... and all the wonderful words you have used..
This time..
I don't have any particular verse that I like.. coz I love them all..!!! This part has been an amazing inspiration for me.. i don't know how or why.. But I am inspired! :)
Please continue writing more of this kind! :)
Take care
A very happy lady today..
Ananya[I][/I]

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Beet

@Beet

Rocker

Posted: 15 years ago

#206

Sookie :))

This was a Beautiful update. It was so carefree, light and wonderful.

I absolutely have fallen in love with the verses this time. They were beautiful and took me off to another world.

A M A Z I N G work Sookie. Brilliant

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samira

@-Samira-

Rocker

Posted: 15 years ago

#207

awesome n mindblowing update lov

thnx 4 d pm

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Divya

@myownarea

Stunner

+ 4

Posted: 15 years ago

#208

Lovely update sookie!! :)

everything from the unsaid apology to the swirl in the rain, it was quite magical to imagine,,.

somehow the rain itself is just what a girl celebrates whether she associates it with her home town or not.. but yeah the connections are stronger if it has an underlying significance!!

Loved the words, there is more than just a simple change in mayank (and nupur..) :)

loved reading it!! :)

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Let-It-Go

@Let-It-Go

Sparkler

+ 4

Posted: 15 years ago

#209

heyy Sookie !! U are amazin girl .. i loved the way MayUr fight affected Nupur...n the way u showed it from Gunjan POV ..it was flawless

i loved the non-verbal apology was amazin ..

n it seemed realistic too....aww...great re !

then bubbly-chirpy Nupur back to action..that was too good !!!

aww...rain sequence was the best !!

it was not the sappy-cliched thingy but a sweet-innocent part ...

loved it to core..

and then mom-mayank scne iz alwayz my fav .!

n i loved the way MM reacted to mayank's condition..!! :) :)

in short a PERFECT update !!!

n ur verses were amazin.....truely !!!

luv '

ruchi

PS : thanx for the pm :)

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Sookie

@-Sookie-

Voyager

+ 4

Posted: 15 years ago

#210

Originally posted by: -afsha-
Nice update

Liked that how witout words Mayu apologized to her n she witout words forgave him

Their frndshp was growing

Gun really cares for her sis a lot n obesreves all her behaviour n evn give her time so that she shares it wenevr she wants it

Mayur got wet in rain awesum

MM was actually shocked to c his son like this

She knws M very well

Liked the way both were thking of each other

Hello,

Thanks for stopping by. Yeah, they are getting little closer and I think its now safe to call them as borderline friends.

Thanks for liking it!

S

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