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Posted: 15 years ago
EPISODE:-13
Maj Rajveer ne ek baar us glass ki khidki se ander jhaanka...!!! Naina bed par baithi hui thi....doc Shalini thi us k paas...aur ek doc aur do nurses bhi...
us ka bandage ho raha tha...!!! do boond anshun toh aaye Maj Rajveer k ankhon me...unhone use chupa bhi liya aashani se...!!! purani aadat hai un ki...dard ko ander samet lena...Naina k har ek dad ko khud me mehsush karna...!!!
voh ander jana chahte the...door par capt Gunny kafi sharp look se unhe dekh rahe the...!!! un k ankhon me sawal abhi bhi the...aur ek nafrat bhi...!!!
Maj Rajveer...hospital se bahar aaye...!!! Alekh aa raha tha...Maj Rajveer ko dekh kar ruka..
Alekh:- "sir...maine head qtr me inform kar di hai...!!! voh log aate hi honge...!!!"
Maj Rajveer:- "jab tak voh sab nahi aa jate...tum log Naina ka khayal rakhoge...!!! ek baat ka dhyaan rakhna...Naina ko kisi bhi halat me akele mat rahne dena...!!! sayad us ki jaan ko khatra hai...!!!"
Alekh hairan hua...Maj Rajveer ki awaz barf jitni thandi lagi use...aisa lag raha tha...jaise voh ander hi ander khud ko kisi baat k liye saza dena chahte hain...!!!
Maj Rajveer chale gaye...Alekh hospital k ander jane laga...
achanak Maj Rajveer ne apne kandhe par kisi k hath ko mehshush kiya... unhone turn kar k dekha...voh capt Gunny the...
capt Gunny:- "aap ne jan bujh kar Naina par goli chalayi...par kyoun...??? aap chahte toh sirf un terrorists ko maar sakte the... naina ko chot bhi nahi lagti...!!! phir bhi aap ne yeh sab kuch jaan bujh kar kiya...!!! mujhe aisa lag raha tha...jaise aap sach me sirf Naina par hi goli chalana chahte the...!!! aur agar yeh sach hai...toh main aap se ek hi baat kahna chahuga...!!! chahe kuch bhi ho jaye... aap Naina ka kuch bhi bura nahi kar sakte...!!! kamm se kamm tab tak toh nahi...jab tak main zinda hun...!!!"
Maj Rajveer ne ...capt Gunny k ankhon ka gussa...saaf dekha...!!! voh thoda sa mushkuraye...capt Gunny k hath ko apne kandhe se hatate hue kaha:- "baht khushi hui...yeh jan kar ki...Naina ki 'caring list' me koi aur judd gaya hai...!!! vaise sach kahun capt... Naina ko sach me kuch nahi hota...aur na hi kuch hoga...jab tak main zinda hun...!!!"
capt Gunny hairani se dekhte rahe Maj Rajveer ko...voh hospital k gate ke bahar chale gaye...
kisi k piche khade hone ki aahat hui toh...capt Gunny ne turn kar k dekha...Huda aur Alekh khade the...
capt Gunny:- "tum dono yahan...???"
Huda:- "aap se kuch baat karni thi...JARURI...
capt Gunny:- "kaho...
Alekh:- "baat sirf ek hi line me khatam hoti hai...aur voh yeh hai ki... 'Rajveer sir se dur rahiye'...!!! hum un ki zindagi me aur ek Abhimanyu ko bardast nahi kar sakte...!!!"
capt Gunny:- "tum dono ko pata hai...tum kya kah rahe ho...??? aur tum jante kya ho...Maj Rajveer k bare me...??? tumhe pata hai yeh sab kaise hua...??? yeh sab...
Huda:- "hum sab jante hain...aur yehi aap ko batane aaye hain ki aap Maj Rajveer k kaamon me dakhal na den...!!!
capt Gunny ne gusse se kaha:- "tum kuch nahi jante...??? tumhe sayad pata nahi ki Naina par goli...
capt Gunny k baat ko complite karte hue Alekh ne kaha:- "Maj Rajveer ne jan bujh kar chalayi...yehi kahna chate hain na aap...???"
capt Gunny shocked the...unhe lagta tha ki yeh sirf voh hi jante hain...aur koi nahi...
Huda:- "Rajveer sir...hamare liye kuch bhi kar sakte hain...!!! hum ne bhi dekha tha yeh...par hum yeh bhi jante hain ki Rajveer sir...kabhi khud ko maar nahi sakte...???"
capt Gunny:- "main samjha nahi...???"
Alekh:- "sir...Huda ne kaha...'khud ko'...matlab...Rajveer sir...apne hi hathon se apni jaan ko nahi maar sakte...!!! aur Naina un k liye kya mayne rakhti hai...sayad hi aap na jante ho...par hum jante bhi hain...aur apni ankhon se dekh bhi chuke hain...!!!"
Huda:- "aur agar Rajveer sir ne kuch bhi kiya hai na...toh voh bhi hum me se kisi ki bhalai k liye hi hogi...!!! ek pal k liye main khud par bharosha karna chod sakta hun...!!! par us inshan par apna bharosha phir se utha nahi sakta...jis ne hamari jaan bachane k liye...apna future... apni izzat...apna reputation...apni jaan tak...sab kuch daav par laga diya tha...!!!"
Alekh:- "isiliye behtar yehi hoga aap k liye ki aap hamari ya Rajveer sir ki zindagi me capt Abhimanyu bann kar na aaye...!!! us baar toh hum ne capt Abhimanyu ko chod diya tha...!!! par is baar... humain khud pata nahi hai ki hum kya kar sakte hain...???"
Alekh aur Huda...itna kah kar...hospital k ander chale gaye...
capt Gunny hairani se khade the...un k junior officers ne un k muh par unhe dhamki de kar gaye the...!!!
capt Gunny ne khud se sawal kiya:- "kyoun...??? yeh log kyoun itna trust karte hain Maj Rajveer par...??? sab kuch jante hue bhi... yeh sab unhi ko support karr rahe hain...par kyoun...???"
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sunsan rashte par akele chal rahe the Maj Rajveer...manzil abhi bhi dur hai... phir bhi unhe pahunchna hai...vahan par...!!! lekin pair aaj kafi thake thake se lag rahe hain un ko...!!! aaj khud me voh kafi kamzor mehshsuh karr rahe hain...!!! voh jante the ki Naina ko kuch nahi hoga...!!!
haan...unhone jan bujh kar goli chalayi thi Naina par...!!! phir bhi Naina k har ek chote aur bade dard ko apne ander mehsush karna jaise un ki aadat ban gayi hai...!!! har baar khud me Naina ko mehsush karte karte...unhe aisa lagne laga hai jaise Naina kahin aur nahi...bal ki un k ander rahne lagi hai....
aaj phir se vohi hua...jo barshon pahle hua tha...!!! tab un k hath me gun tha...aur samne...un ka dost... Naveen......
aaj itihaas phir se dohraya gaya...!!! aaj un k hath me phir se gun tha...aur samne tha...un ka pyar...Naina...
tab bhi unhone jan bujh kar Naveen par goli chalayi thi...aur aaj bhi unhone jan bujh kar Naina par goli chalayi...!!!
tab me aur aaj me farq tha toh sirf is baat ka k tab Naveen chahta tha ki un ka dost Rajveer un ko shoot kare...!!! aur aaj Naina ko pata bhi nahi tha ki unhone jan bujh kar Naina par goli chalayi thi...!!! aur yeh plan un ka kafi der se tha...!!!
"kya jab Naina ko pata chalega toh voh mujhe maaf karr payegi...??? sayad hi Naveen ki maut ki wajah ko voh bhul payi ho...par kya voh mujhe is tarah se swikar kar payegi...???"
Maj Rajveer k samne yehi sawal tha...jo sab se bada tha...!!! thak kar voh ek jagah par baithe...
"yeh hai meri kahani
khamosh zindagani
sannata keh raha hai

kyun zulm seh raha hai

ek dastaan purani

tanhayi ki zubani

her zakham khil raha hai

kuch mujh se keh raha hai

chubtay kantay yadoon ke daaman say chunta hoon

girti deewaron ke aanchal mai zinda hoon

bass yeh meri kahani

benishaan nishaani

ek darr beh raha hai

kuch mujh se keh raha hai

chubtay kaanten yadoon ke daaman se chunta hoon

girti deewaron ke aanchal mein zinda hoon (movie:- Zinda)

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cut to Huda n Alekh...
Huda:- "kisi se kuch batane ki jarurat nahi hai...!!! jitna tune dekha...hai ya phir maine...voh hum dono k bich hi rahe...!!! na Naina ko batayenge... aur na hi Rajveer sir ko ki...hum yeh jante hain...!!!"
Alekh:- "sahi hai...!!! sayad waqt is sawal ka jawab de de...!!! par tab tak sab ki khairiyat isi me hi ki hum chup rahe...!!! ek kaam karte hain..tu Naina par nazar rakh...aur main Rajveer sir par...!!! kuch toh gadbad hai...!!!"
Huda:- haan...yehi karna padega...!!! par us Gunny k gale me bhi ghanti baandhni padegi...us par bhi nazar rakhni padegi...!!! Ali ko bole is kaam k liye...???"
Alekh:- "nahi...abhi rahne de...!!! dekhte hain kya ho raha hai...!!! agar kuch gadbad laga toh apna pura gang hai Rajveer sir k sath...!!!
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thodi der baad ek jeep aa kar ruki...jiss me se kareeb 10 soldiers nikle... hathon me gun liye...!!! aur hospital k gate se le kar Naina k cabin tak voh sab positon le kar khade rahe...!!!
ek senior officer...us doc se baat karr rahe the...jo dr Shalini k sath mil kar Naina ka treatment karr rahi thi...!!! paas me capt Gunny bhi khade the...!!!
ek bench par...Ali, Neelu, Pooja aur Naaz baithe hue the...!!! thodi hi duri par Alekh aur Huda khade the...!!!
Alekh:- "dekh raha hai Huda...sirf ek mamuli se Lft k ghayal hone par kitne sare soldiers aa gaye hain use protection dene...???"
Huda:- "haan...main vohi dekh raha hun...!!! baat itni simple nahi hai...jitna hum soch rahe hain...!!! kuch baat toh hai...!!! sayad Naina ko kisi baat se...
Alekh ne us ki baat ko complite karte hue kaha:- "KHATRA...!!! hmm... ho sakta hai...!!! aur is bare me sab se achhe se Rajveer sir ko pata hai...!!!"
Huda:- "yun dekha jaye toh...sayad yeh sab Rajveer sir ka sayad plan ho ki...Naina ko aise protection mile...!!!"
Alekh:- "haan...ho toh sakta hai...!!! par sari baat toh sirf Rajveer sir ko hi pata hogi na...!!! phil-hal humain Gunny par nazar rakhni hai...kahin yeh vahan kuch bakk na de...Rajveer sir k bare me...!!!"
dono apni tez kadmon k sath vahan gaye...Gunny ne unhe dekha...aate hue aur khud aaya un k paas aur kaha:- "dont worry... main us bare me kuch bhi...kisi se bhi nahi kahunga...tab tak...jab tak khud Maj Rajveer is bare me mujhe sab kuch na bata dete...!!! agar unhone kuch nahi kaha...toh... mujhe yeh baat apne seniors ko batani padegi...!!!"
Alekh ne baht hi calmly jawab diya:- "toh abhi batayiye na sir...!!! Rajveer sir k sath sath ek aur soldier bhi hoga...un k sath jail me...apne senior par goli chalane k jurm me...!!!"
Huda ne Alekh ka sath dete hue kaha:- "galat bol raha hai Alekh...ek nahi do soldiers honge...!!!"
Gunny thoda sa mushkuraya aur kaha:- "tum dono ko nahi lagta ki tum dono Maj Rajveer par kuch jyada hi trust karte ho...???"
Huda:- "aap ko abhi bhi shaq hai keee...??? humain toh yakin hai...
Alekh ne...Ali aur Yudi se kaha:- "Rajveer sir ne kaha ki Naina ko akela na choda jaye...!!! sayad kuch khatra hai...!!! main aur Huda... yahin rukte hain...!!! tum dono kal subah aa jana...!!! abhi tum dono...Pooja, Neelu aur Naaz ko le kar camp chale jayo...!!! vaise bhi yahan par itne sare log hain Naina k liye...!!!"
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Naina ko thodi si neend aa gayi thi...voh so rahi thi...!!! jab voh neend se jaagi toh...dekha...us k room me capt Gunny the...aur un par nazar gadaye...Huda khada tha...!!!
Naina ne idhar udhar dekha...!!! tabhi Alekh ander aaya...
Alekh:- "kise dhudh rahi hai...??? Rajveer sir ko...???"
Naina:- "nahi toh...ahh...actually haan...!!! dikhayi nahi de rahe hain...camp wapas chale gaye hain kya...???"
Huda:- "tujhe lagta hai...voh tujhe is halat me yahan chod kar camp wapas ja sakte hain...???"
Naina mushkurayi aur kaha:- "chedna bandh kar Huda...bata... Rajveer sir kahan hai...???"
Alekh ne apna fone...Naina ki taraf badhate hue kaha:- "tu fone kar k unhe bula le...!!! yehin kahin honge aa jayenge...!!!"
Naina ne fone liya us k hathn se...par no lagane se pahle...un sab ki taraf dekhte hue kaha:- "tum sab ko nahi lagta ki patient k room me jyada bheed nahi honi chahiye...???"
Huda hassa...aur bola:- "yeh bol na ki tujhe akele me Rajveer sir se baat karni hai...!!!"
Alekh ne Gunny ki taraf dekh kar kaha:- "chale sir...???"
Gunny ne Naina ki taraf dekh kar kaha:- "tum dono jayo...mujhe Naina se kuch baat karni hai...!!!"
Alekh aur Huda ne ek dushre ko dekha aur Gunny k kareeb aa kar Alekh ne kaha:- "aap baat kal bhi kar sakte hain sir...aaj Naina ko Rajveer sir se baat kar lene dijiye...!!!"
Naina kab se Gunny ko dekhe ja rahi thi...
Gunny:- "tum dono kuch dare hue lag rahe ho...??? par mujhe Naina se baat abhi karni hai...!!!"
Huda k chehre par gussa saaf jhalak raha tha...us k hath tight hote ja rahe the...jise Alekh ne thama...!!! tabhi Naina bich me bol padi:- "tum dono jayo...agar capt Gunny mujh se kuch baat karna hi chate hain toh thik hai na...!!! tum dono jayo...!!!"
Alekh aur Huda nahi gaye...Naina ki taraf dekhne lage...
Naina mushkurayi aur kaha:- "maine kaha na...tum dono jayo...!!! sab thik hai...aur sab kuch thik bhi hoga...!!! samjhe...???"
Alekh aur Huda bahar aaye...door k paas ek soldier khada tha...!!! phir bhi unhone ander k baat sunn ne k liye...ek window k paas khade rahe...!!! jahan koi bhi nahi tha...
Gunny...Naina k kareeb aaya...aur use dekhne laga...Naina ne use ek smile pass karte hue kaha:- "aap ko bass...mujhe dekhna hai ya phir kuch aur bhi kahna hai...???"
Gunny ne kafi dheemi awaz se kaha:- "tumhe pata hai tumhe goli kaise lagi...???"
Naina...ne usi tarah mushkurate hue kaha:- "haan...mujh par Rajveer sir ne goli chalayi thi...!!!"
jitna shocked Gunny tha...utna hi shocked Alekh aur Huda bhi the...!!!
Gunny:- "phir bhi tum unhe...
Naina ne usi tarah mushkurate hue kaha:- "aap ko pata hai mujhe goli kahan lagi...??? mere kandhe ko goli chu kar nikal gayi...!!! Rajveer sir ka nishana janti hun main...baht hi sharp shooter hain voh...!!! agar unhe mujhe marna hota...toh voh sidha mere dil par goli chalate...kandhe par nahi...!!! aur humain ek aise resturant par nahi late...jo is hospital se sirf 5 min k duri par ho...!!! aur koi bhi inshan dinner karne k liye apni gun sath me le kar nahi aata...!!! aur sab se akhiri baat...jo goli mujhe lagi thi...voh rajveer sir k gun se nahi thi...!!! maine dekha tha...jis gun se rajveer sir ne mujh par goli chalayi...voh gun army ki nahi thi...!!! baat itni simple bhi nahi hai capt...jitna aap samajh rahe hain...!!! mujhe voh inshan nahi maar sakta...jis k ander main basi hui hun...!!! jo mere liye khud ko maut de de...voh inshan mujhe nahi maar sakta...!!! ab aap plz thodi der k liye bahar jayenge...mujhe Rajveer sir se kuch baat karni hai...!!!"
Gunny ka muh khula tha...!!! Naina sach me ek intelligent officer hai...us ne baht kuch observe kiya tha...jise Gunny nahi dekh paya tha...!!! voh chup chap bahar aanewala tha...phir piche se Naina ne rok diya...
Naina:- "sir...
Gunny ne turn kiya toh...
Naina:- "ek req hai...!!! aap ne mujhe behn kaha tha...toh is liye ek req karna chahti hun...!!! jo maine kaha...ya phir jo aap jante hain...voh plz...kisi se bhi mat kahna...!!! mera vishwas jo aap par hai...use mat todna...!!! kyoun ki main Rajveer sir k vishwas k sath bandhi hui hun...!!!"
Gunny ne kuch nahi kaha bahar aa gaya...
Huda...Naina ki cabin k ander ja raha tha...!!! Alekh ne rokk liya...
Alekh:- "abe...kahan ja raha hai...???"
Huda kafi khush lag raha tha...:- 'Naina ko jhappi marne...
Alekh:- "kya...???"
Huda:- "dekha nahi us ne kaise us ustad ki ustadi ko naak se pani peela diya...!!!"
Alekh hassa aur bola:- "baad me jhappi le lena...philhal use Rajveer sir se baat kar lene de...!!! is waqt Rajveer sir ko Naina ki kafi jarurat hai...!!!"
Huda:- "sahi hai...par ek baat hai...dono hi dono ko sambhal lenge...!!! apni tension yeh dono nahi hain...!!! bal ki kuch aur hai...!!!"
Alekh:- "haan...aur voh kya hai...sirf Rajveer sir hi bata sakte hain...!!! lekin tabhi batayenge...jab unhe bolna hoga...!!! tu chahe sar k bal khada ho ja voh phir bhi batayenge...!!! yeh bhagwan bhi na...1200 saal me ek hi aisa inshan banata hoga...!!!"
Huda:- "ha ha ha...kya baat kahi hai...
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cut to Naina...
Naina ne no dail kiya...us ki nazar wall-clock par padi...subah hone me abhi bhi kuch pal baki hain...!!! khidki se bahar abhi tak andhera chatta nahi hai...!!!
cut to Maj Rajveer...
un ki nazar un k hath par tha...!!! left hand k palm par unhone apni ryt hand se gun taan rakhi thi...!!! voh khud ko saza dena chate the...Naina par goli chalane ki saza...
achanak un ka fone ring hua...!!! unhone dekha...screen par Alekh ka no tha...!!! unhe darr tha ki kahin Naina ko kuch hua toh nahi...??? unhone jaldi se fone uthate hue kaha:- "Alekh...sab thik toh hai na...??? Naina thik hai na...???"
Maj Rajveer k kanon me Naina ki awaz sunayi di:- "kahan ho aap...??? sabhi hain yahan par...par aap hi nahi ho...??? maine phir se kuch galati kar diya hai kya...???"
Maj Rajveer ki ankhon se do boond anshun nikal kar zameen par gire... par un k honthon se bas ek hi word nikala:- "NAINA...
Naina:- "mujh se yahan milne aa sakte hain plz...abhi...???"
Maj Rajveer...phir bhi khamosh the...chah kar bhi voh kuch bol nahi pa rahe the...
Naina:-" agar nahi aayenge...toh main aap ko phir se RAJVEER SIR kah kar pukarungi...!!!"
Maj Rajveer k chehre par ek halki si mushkan aayi...jab ki ankhen abhi bhi namm thi un ki...
Maj Rajveer:- "main abhi aa raha hun...!!!"
Naina:- "main aap ka intezar karungi...
Naina ne fone cut kiya...ek khubshurat si mushkan aayi us k chehre par...!!! khidki se bahar jhanaka...paas hi kisi mashjid se subah k azaan ki awaz aa rahi thi...!!! aashman me suraj toh abhi tak nahi aaya tha...par us k aane ki aahat...jarur thi...
background...

"aye dil-e-naadaan

aye dil-e-naadaan

aarazoo kyaa hain,

justajoo kyaa hain

Naina (n her breath):- "main aap ko phir se nahi kho sakti...!!! Pooja ne sahi kaha tha...aap kuch karte ho toh mere liye...aur kuch nahi karte...toh voh bhi mere liye...!!! kabhi kabhi lagta hai ki aap baht pyar karte ho mujh se...!!! phir khud hi sapne ko tod deti hun...darr kar k kahin kho na dun phir se aap ko...!!!"
"hum bhatakate hain,
kyon bhatakate hain....dashta-o-sehara me...

aisa lagta hai, mauj pyasi hai

apne dariya me....

kaisi uljhan hai,

kyon ye uljhan hai...

ek saya sa, ru-baru kya hai...

Naina bed par ankhen bandh kiye soyi hui thi...Naina ko laga...koi us k behad kareeb khada hai...!!! us ne ankhen kholi...samne Maj Rajveer khade the...!!!
Naina k chehre par ek fake gussa tha...us ne kaha:- "ajeeb inshan hain aap...??? mujhe dinner k liye sath le kar aaye the...aur phir yahan par akele chod kar chale gaye...!!!"
Maj Rajveer kuch nahi bole...us bed par baithe...Naina k kareeb...
aye dil-e-nadaan
aye dil-ye-nadaan

arazoo kya hai,

justajoo kyaa hai

Maj Rajveer:- "i m sorry...Naina...
yeh Naina bhi janti thi aur Maj Rajveer bhi ki yeh 'sorry' unhone kyoun kaha tha...!!!
Naina k ankhon me halke anshun dikhe...voh Maj Rajveer k ander k dard ko bakhubi samajh rahi thi...!!!
us ne bass itna kaha:- "maine aap ko baht miss kiya...!!! tab bhi kiya tha...jab aap mujhe pahle chod kar chale gaye the...!!! aur aaj bhi kiya... jab...
Naina ne aage kuch bhi nahi kha...voh chup ho gayi...
"kya kayamat hai...
kya musibat hai....

kah nahi sakte....kis ka armaan hai...

zindagi jaise khoyi khoyi hai...

hairaan... hairaan hai...

Maj Rajveer ne apne hath se touch kiya...Naina k kandhe ko jahan use chot lagi thi...!!! un ki ankhen mili...Naina se...!!!
Naina k chehre par ek halki si mushkaan thi...!!!
Maj Rajveer:- "tum par goli...jaan bujh kar maine chalayi thi...!!!"
Naina ne usi tarah se smile karte hue kaha:- "janti hun...!!! aur yeh bhi janti hun ki aap ne yeh mere liye kiya hai...!!! wajah chahe kuch bhi ho... lekin itna jarur janti hun ki meri zindagi...mujh se jyada ...aap k liye mayne rakhti hai...!!! par ...kyoun...???"
Maj Rajveer chup the...!!! kuch der baad kaha:- "kyoun itna bharosha karti ho mujh par...???"
Naina:- "kyoun ki main aap ko phir se khona nahi chahti...
dono kuch pal k liye khamosh rahe...sayad dono k khamoshi me chupe ek dushre k ahmiyat ko parakhna chahte the...
ye zameen chup hai...,
aashmaan chup hai...

fir ye dhadkan si. ..

chaah su kyaa hai...

Maj Rajveer jhuke...Naina k kandhon k kareeb...kafi tightly hug kiya use...!!! Naina ne response kiya...unhe apne bahon me thama...!!! voh mehshush karr rahi thi...Maj Rajveer k anshuyon ko apne neck par...
aye dil-e-nadaan
aye dil-e-nadaan

aarazoo kya hai,

justajoo kya hai

Maj Rajveer ne dhire se us k neck ka baht kareeb us k kanon me kaha:- "main Naveen ko kho chuka hun Naina...par tumhe nahi khona chahta...!!!"
Naina ki bhi ankhen namm thi...us ne halke se mushkurate hue kaha:- "ek baar main bhi baht dari hui thi...!!! mujhe bhi laga tha ki main aap ko kho dungi...!!! main bhagte hue aayi thi aap k paas...!!! aur aap ne hi mujhe kaha tha ki 'main aap ko kabhi nahi kho sakti'...yaad hai aap ko...???"
Maj Rajveer ne sar uthaya...Naina k chehre ko gaur se dekha......!!! dono ka chehra ek dushre k baht kareeb tha...!!!
Naina:- "main aaj aap ko vohi kahna chahti hun...'aap mujhe kabhi nahi khoyege...!!! jo aap ka hai...use aur koi cheen nahi sakta...
Maj Rajveer k chehre par ek smile aayi...!!! voh thode se jhuke...Naina k mathe par...apne honthon se touch kiya...us k forehead ko...!!! Naina ki ankhen bandh thi...
aye dil-e-nadaan

aise raahon me

kitane kaante hain

aarzo oon ne

har kisi dil ko

dard baante hain

kitane ghaayal hain,

kitane bismil hain

is khudaee mein

ek tu kyaa hai... (movie:- Razia Sultan...by Lata Mangeshkar)

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Edited by Sweet-Lioness - 15 years ago
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Posted: 15 years ago

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Etiquetty & Manner Class:->
Alekh:- "sir...apun 1 no ja rela hai...!!!"
Bhargav:- "aise nahi Cadet Alekh...bolo ki...'sir kya main wash room ja sakta hun...???...!!!"
Alekh:- "Lekin apun ne pahle bola tha...isiliye apun pahle jayega...!!!"
General Knowledge Class:->
Yudi:- "ma'am...what is Love...???"
Shalini:- "In France...Itz a comedy...

In England...Itz a tragedy...

In Italy...Itz a Wonder...

In Germany...Itz a Drama...

Yudi:- "what about India...ma'am...???"
Shalini:- "Well....yeh yahan ka national game hain...sabhi khelte hain...!!!"
Chemestry Class:->
Chandok:- "Which liquid turns to solid on heating...???"
Huda:- "Besan Ke Pakode...!!!"
General Science class:->
Nair:- "aisi koun si chiz hai...jise tum dekh toh sakti ho...par pakad nahi pati...???"
Pooja:- "Sir...aap ki muchain...!!!"

Social Science Class:->

Lolita:- "Ali...tumhare ghar me kitne log rahte hain...???"
Ali:- "meri 5 bahnain...4 bhai aur main...aur mere parents...!!!"
Lolita (shocked):- "tumhare ghar kabhi family planningwale nahi aaye...???"
Ali:- "ek baar aaye the...par Nersery school samajh kar chale gaye...!!!"
Special class:->
Naina:- "sir...what is a kiss...???"
Rajveer:- "In Math...'Kiss is the SHORTEST DISTANCE b/w two lips'...

In Economics...'Kiss is the thing for which DEMAND is always

higher than SUPPLY'...

In Physics...'Kiss is the PROCESS of CHARGING a human

body'...

In Computer science...'Kiss is just like a BLUETOOTH, in which

two bodies are connected without any DATA CABLE'...

Then...Theory class k baad...Rajveer sir ne Naina se practical class karwaya...!!!
Edited by Sweet-Lioness - 15 years ago
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Posted: 15 years ago

NOTE:-

yeh UD dedicate hai hamare pyare Mana jee...Dhara jee...N Guglu jee ko...!!! Kyoun...???yeh bhi bata deti hun...!!!
for Mana:- "Maam ne teen 3-4 din pahle mujhe order diya ki main is fic ko UD karun...!!! jab ki maine UD likha hi nahi tha...!!! lekin in ka ek aur order bhi tha ki main RN ka confession karwa dun...!!! maine us tym toh kuch bhi nahi kaha tha...!!! par yaar...mana...ek baat bata...agar maine confession karwa diya...toh mere Fic k naam ka kya hoga...??? ANKAHI...is naam ko roshan kaun karega...???"😆 😆 😆 😆 😆 😆
For Dhara:- "tumhe mere FB se...i mean to say ki last part k FB se confused dekh kar maine is baar ek bhi FB nahi rakha...!!! kise apni jaan pyari nahi hoti hai yaar...??? mujhe toh mera future saaf dikhayi de raha tha...'jeeju mere piche Kripan le kar pade the...ki...kyoun mere Dhara ko pagal banane pe tuli hui hai...main khud ko Gadar ki Amrish puri aur Jeeju ko Sunny deol me dekh rahi thi...!!!'😆 😆 😆 😆 😆 😆
for Guglu:- "ma'am ko mere dream seq se prob hai...!!! last jab maine 'bhutte ka scene' rakha tha toh voh mujhe dhundh rahi thi...aur sabhi se kah rahi thi ke...'Priya ko pakad kar maarna chahiye'...!!! hadh hai...itni pyari bachhi ko maregi toh paap lagega...samjhi...???" 😆 😆 😆 😆 😆 😆

PS*

@Yogi:- "sorryyyyyyy Yogi...maine tere comments k bina hi UD kar diya...!!! kafi late ho chuki thi main na...isiliye...kar diya...!!!😃

@Naina....mere ud post karne se pahle hi tumne Reserved ka board laga diya...!!! ha ha ha...😆is baar bhi tum sab se pahle...😃
Edited by Sweet-Lioness - 15 years ago
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Posted: 15 years ago

awesomeeeee too good very nice part waitinggggg for next asap.


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Edited by sweta2005 - 15 years ago
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hi Priya....

thanks for the pm......

tumhare charo fics mein ankahi is my favorite for the obvious reason that it is lrl based.....har baar Ankahi ke ud padh ke mein sochti hoon ki kaash lrl me aisa hua hota....

on second thoughts, agar kabhi lrl ka sequence bana (😍) to Ankahi ko bhej sakte hai as the story....

chalo ab is baar ki ud par aate hai.......

it was excellent, awesome, fantastic, brilliant, mind blowing, fabulous....and so on.......u see meri vocab kam padh gayi hai.......

waise pinku ne mujhe kuch words udhar diye hai uski dictionary se....chalo wo use karti hoo........ok ud was rapchick, dhamaal. dinchaak, maska,paisa wassol, mast, dhamaakedaar.....(credit goes to pinka ji for these awesome adjectives 😆😆😆)

in short, ud was 👍🏼👍🏼👍🏼

ok ab taarif bahut ho gayi....ab actually ud me kya achcha laga wo to bata doo.....sorry kuch galat likh diya.......kya achcha laga kehna hi galat hai.......poori ud hi bahut achchi lagi........

Rajveer Naina ke pain ko apne ander feel kar raha tha, khud ko saza dena chahta tha, naina ko chot pahuchaane ke liye.......uske liye to jaise uska past ek baar fir uske saamne aa ke khada ho gaya tha.....pehle Naveen ko shoot karna pada....and aaj Naina........uski helplessness ko bahut hi achche se portray kiya tumne 👏👏👏

and sirf helplessness hi kyu, naina ke liye uske pyaar, uski parwaah ko bhi to ek hi dialogue me show kar diya.......when he tells gunny that uske rehte naina ko kabhi kuch nahi ho sakta....kya dialogue tha , wow 👏👏👏

waise gunny apni jagah sahi hai....Raj pe shak karne ke liye....
abhi tak wo jaanta hi kya hai RN ke baare me jo unke relation ko samajh paaye, infact wo to ye tak nahi samajh paaya hai ki sirf Naina hi nahi, Raj apne har cadet ke saath ek special bond share karta hai.....tabhi to wo surprised hai....sabhi ka Raj par trust dekh ke....wo hairaan hai ki Raj ne Naina par goli chalayi, ye jaante hue bhi huda aur aalekh Raj ka saath de rahe hai.......
jaanti hoon maine hi kaha ki wo apni jagah sahi hai....lekin phir bhi mujhe uspe utna hi gussa aa raha tha jitna lrl me wo Abhimanyu pe aata tha.....jabardasti RN ke beech ghus raha hai......😡😡😡

par huda and Aalekh ne mast hool diya gunny ko.....specially jab Aalekh ne unhe dhamkaya ki agar unhone Raj ke against kuch kiya to Raj ke saath saath koi aur bhi hoga jail me apne senior officer par goli chalane ke liye.....and jis par huda ne kaha....1 nahi 2 honge 😆😆😆.....direct dhamki......i just loved that scene......
Waise Aalekh to shuru se hi samajhdaar tha....lekin huda me akal daalne ka credit tumhe jaata hai 👏👏👏 dono ne samajh liya ki agar Raj ne Naina par goli chalayi hai...to sirf use security dilaane ke liye.....and ye bhi decide kar liya ki Naina and Rajveer ko kuch nahi batayenge ki wo dono sab jaante hain........ek baat hai......Aalekh ne sahi kaha ki Raj jaisa koi 1200 saal me ek baar hi aata hai......infact mein to kehti hoon 1200 saal bhi kam hai.........usse bhi jyada time lagta hoga Raj jaise kisi ke liye.....

waise agar Aalekh samajhdar hai and Huda to tumne aqal ki tablet khila di hai.....to Naina to really sabki guru nikli....use bhi pehle se pata tha...waise Raj ki protege thi....smart to hogi hi na......but seriously it was really cute to see ki sab jaante hai ki goli kisne chalayi and sab chup hain.......specially naina ka reaction......it was really heart touching to see her belief in Raj.....she knows that Raj can never hurt her ❤️❤️❤️ so sweet.......and best tha uska Raj ko bulaane ka tareeka.....agar nahi aaye to mein phir se aapko Rajveer sir bulaungi 😆😆😆

and gunny par agar huda and Aalekh ki dhamkiyo ka asar nahi bhi hua hoga , to bhi i am sure, naina ki baato se to use bhi akal aa hi gayi hogi....and naina ki baatein sunkar jab huda use hug karne jaane ko kehta hai na....wo scene bhi bahut cute tha....mujhe actually tumhara huda lrl ke huda se better lag raha hai.....👏👏👏

Now coming to the best part of the ud.....obviously RN conversation.....I know many of ur readers have demanded a confession between RN......lekin i would say.....tum aise hi fabulous scenes likhti raho.....tumhari fic ka naam bhi justify hota rahega......and hum bas unke unsaid emotions ko feel karte rahenge.....really unhe confession ki jarurat hi nahi hai......bina kahe hi tumne unka love itni beautifully portray kar diya hai.......and actually.....this ud was closest to a confession.....and u have perfectly depicted the trust and understanding between them.....na Raj ko apne action ki justification dene ki jarurat padi......and na hi Naina ko koi shikayat thi......it was really perfect.....tumne really unki unkahi feelings ko apne shabd de ke unhe bahut achche se describe kar diya........bas aise hi achche scenes likhti raho......i don't need a confession.....

waise abhi bhi kuch sawal baaki hai......Naina ki jaan ko khatra kyu hai ?? Last ud se pehle wali ud me Raj, Naina ko leke pareshaan tha.....wo pareshaani sirf Naina ko shoot karne ko leke thi....yaa abhi koi aur badi baat baaki hai........pls update soon yaar......

and yes, bina lrl jokes ki baat kiye mein comment close kaise kar sakti hoon........the classes were too gud.....bas ek question hai....admissions kab se open hai ??? i am sure many would be interested in joining them........mujhse mat poochna ki mein interested hoon ya nahi......kyuki wo to secret hai 😆😆😆

Edited by neha10.for.u - 14 years ago
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Hi Priya
Nice part..
Rajveer was so unhappy ..He was feeling really guilty coz he had had shot Naina knowingly..But something is really very wrong..I think Raj Naina ko protection dilana chahta tha jo ki goli lagne ka baad usko mil gayi..
Yeh gunny kyun villian ka role play kar raha hai yahan par..He is exactly like Abhimanyu n I hate them both.😡😡😡
Huda n Alekh ne sahi kiya..They both warned Gunny regarding Rajveer..Gunny is shocked to see that all the 6 cadets or Lts trust Raj with their life..
Naina was missing Raj n Gunny was adamant to tell her the truth..Huda was trying hard to control his temper..But unfortunately for Gunny Naina already knew the fact that Raj shot her knowingly..But she had full faith on him..
Raj was so surprised to hear Naina's voice..He came o meet her n he was so sad to see her like this..But he didn't had any option..
Naina was so happy to see him and she told him that watever may b the reason of all this she never wanna loose him..Raj is so happy to her this from her..
That song was really beautiful..never heard of it but now I'll definetely try to hear it.It was a sort of silent confession between them just like its title..😃
I think abhi iss update mein RN ka proper confession to nahin hua hai.I HOPE NEXT PART MEIN WOH BHI HO JAAYE..😉😆😆
Pls continue soon
Bye
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LRL jokes were really too funny 🤣 🤣🤣🤣🤣🤣 n the last one was romantic too.😆😆😉😉
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Thank you mujhe yeh ud dedicate karne ke liye...aur usse bhi bada thank u ud karne ke liye....😛😛

Yeh kya jhamela ho raha hai...sab kehte hai kisi se mat kehna...lekin malum sab ko hai....😆😆😆

Yaar maza aa gaya...fir se yeh vishwaas and all that padh ke...missing lrl all the more....😭

Yeh new classes ka segment ekdum mast tha...nair ke muchein...besan ke pakode....lol...!!!


Puchna bekaar hai lekin wen can we expect the next update...????😕
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comment bhi karna hai 😛😛............. can only say 1 thing .................wow.......... 👏👏👏...........too good........ superb 👏👏👏👏..........

starting was emotional 😭...........Raj ke do ansu........to use rota dekhkar mere 4 😭😭............😛😛..... good u didn't made him cry much 😊😊😊............ & also didn't made naina a fiesty character like DJs 😛😛
gunny i'm coming to kill u.....guess alekh & huda will help me....... 😆😆😆😆.........

waise sabko sach pata tha.......fir bhi ek dusre se chupa rahe the 😆😆😆........even i also knew 😆😆😆😆.....rajveer naina ko kabhi nahi mar sakte 😳😳😳......

what u were planning to do in end........... 😕😕😕............. Raj shooting his hand 😭😭😭..........thank god phone rang at right time...... 😃😃😃........

aaaww the last scene was cute 😍..........all hugging shugging....... when the practical classes will start 😉😉😉.......... make rajveer inspire from ur LRL classes.........😛 😛............i also wanna attend Rajveer sir class.........guess naina will kill me 😆😆😆😆..........

so now continue soon ......... pretty soon 😃😃😃

Edited by Puri_2711 - 15 years ago
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Umm.....mujhe na....bahuuuuuuuut kuch kehna hai.....lekin I am actually speechless.....😳😳 Phir bhi....Raj ki khatir thodi der ke liye ek speech de hi deti hu....wat say? 😉 Ab tum kuch bhi say karo....maine to decide kar liya hai....so here starts my pakao comments!!! 😈
Do u knw I love Raj?? 😳 ☺️ Ahh...of course u do.....but do u knw U make me love him all the more?? 😉😳....well....agar nahi pata tha....to abhi jaan lo....I love the way u characterize Raj....in ur each fic.....and after TN this is surely my fav....😉 Aur pata hai kya....tum nahi keh sakti...meri YE fav fic khatam hone jaa rahi hai....coz ye to bas kuch din pehle hi shuru hua tha na....😆
Ab point par ati hu yaar....to be honest....I cant say wat am feeling ryt now....its not sumthing I can express....the way u described 'gestures' were brilliant!! Iss baar jaise dialogues se zyada 'gestures' me dum tha....in fact u actually wrote an 'Ankahi' UD this tym.....jahan har Ankahi baat mujhe chhu rahi thi....Wo Zinda wala sequence.....and all the descriptions of that sort....were simply beautiful!! 👏👏👏
Gunny Raj ko samajh nahi paa raha hai....well....ye department to sirf Naina ke liye hai....he doesnt hav an access na....😆😆😉.....I Loved Raj's dialogue to him "Naina kuch nahi hota.....aur na hi kuch hoga....jab tak main zinda hu" 😳😳.....and it was sooooo nice to see Aalekh and Huda right there....giving sum dose to Gunny Ustaad...😆...bechare ko pata nahi hai....ye Gang aur Raj ka rishtaa kaisa hai....I dont balme him actually....iss rishte ko aise samjha nahi jaa sakta....hai na? 😉😉
So basically Gunny, Aalekh, Huda, Naina and of course Raj knw that the bullet was shot intentionally.....😊....lekin hamein to aage ki kahani janni hai.....but as Aalekh said...."Bhagwan 1200 saal me aisa ek insaan banata hoga"....and we so hav to w8 for Raj to say all....😛...or rather we hav to w8 for PriyaJi.....to hav sum mercy on us....in this respect!! 😉😉
Chahe jo bhi ho I'll just go wid the flow....sawal poochhke fayda thodi hai....😆😆....I loved Naina n Gunny's convo as well....Naina is surely a gud observer.....aakhir protigee kiski hai!! 😉😳😉
Now the phn call....thanks to u it was made....warna Raj to pata nahi kya karne jaa raha tha....😲😳....and then the way Naina told him to cum....and he was on his way....that small talk said so much....unhone zyada kuch nahi kaha....phir pata nahi....mujhe laga kitna kuch keh gaye....😳
Waise....waha tumne 'namaz' ki awaz likha hai....it wud be 'azaan' ki awaz.....ho sake to edit kar dena....and yeah....that meantym when Naina was w8ing for him to cum.....ohh...that was such a serene scene.....mujhe bahut hi soothing laga wo jagah.....and of course as Raj came....and watever followed by that.....it was allll toooooooooooo gud!!! Loved it Priya....just loved it!!! 👏👏
Phew....kitna likh liya maine....however thoda aur baki hai....😆....those classes....I loved the 'Love-National Game' wala class.....👏👏...and of course I need not say.....other classes were gr8 as well....😆😉😆😆
Of course....last but surely not the least....our spl class....dont I say Rajveer is a genius....Kiss ko kya describe kiya hai yaar....mashallah!!! (That goes for u actually😉)
Abhi chalo bahut zyada ho gaya I guess....I'll stop now....take care.😊😃
Luv,
Sumi.😛

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