Tose Naina Laage(RN)..Part 6 @ Page 17 24/02/10

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nihatri

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Posted: 16 years ago

#31

u write so well. pls continue soon

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Shaina_b

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Posted: 16 years ago

#32

Too good!!!!!Awesome!!!!!

Roop is teasing Raj ke uske liye bahut ristey aayenge ab!!!!!😉 😉 😉 😉 😆 😆 😆 😆She is really very sweet and devar and bhabhi seem to share a good rapport!!!!!😊 😊 😊 😊

World War II shuru ho gayi hai aur Raj ki posting do din mein hai aur aise waqt mein kisi se shaadi karke woh uski zindagi muskil mein nahi dalna chahta!!!!!😛 😛 😛 😛 😊 😊 😊 😊He is so considerate!!!!!!! 😊 😊 😊 😊

Everyone is encouraging Raj mujra dekhne jaane ke liye but he is really not interested!!!!😊 😊 😊 😊

Naina is known as Nazar jaan and is supposed to write great poetry and they were all praises of her beauty!!!!!😛 😛 😛 😛 😊 😊 😊 😊

But Raj toh usse bala bol kar dur bhagna chahta hai usse!!!!!😛 😛 😛 😛 😆 😆 😆 😆 😆

Rajwaadon ke jo buri aadatein hoti hai woh Raj mein nahi hai aur usse ismein koi izzat ki baat nahi dikhti!!!! 😊 😊 😊 😊He is so nice!!!!!😊 😊 😊 😊

But he knows ke koi ladki apni marzi se kothe par nahi baithi!!!!😔 😔 😔 😔Though he sees both sides of the coin he still prefers to stay away from them!!!!!😊 😊 😊 😊

Raj and Naina finally met and in a very different way!!!!!😊 😊 😊 😊 😊

The lines were beautiful!!!!!😊 😊 😊 😊

Naina ne kuch nahi kaha aur chali gayi aur Raj bas dekhta hi rahe gaya usse!!!!!!😊 😊 😊 😊 😍 😍 😍 😍

Raj ne Naina ko ek baar dekha aur soch raha hai kitni gehrai thi uski ankhon mein!!!!!!!😊 😊 😊 😊 😊 😳 😳 😳 😳 😳 😳 😳 😳 😳

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Shaina_b

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Posted: 16 years ago

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Anu has got a serious leg injury and therefore will not be able to update any of her fics for the time being!!!!!

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digimon_pokemon

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Posted: 16 years ago

#34

Get well soon anu .wish u a speedy recovery

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ANANYA ROY

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Posted: 16 years ago

#35

Originally posted by: Shaina_b
Too good!!!!!Awesome!!!!!

Roop is teasing Raj ke uske liye bahut ristey aayenge ab!!!!!😉 😉 😉 😉 😆 😆 😆 😆==Naturally..

She is really very sweet and devar and bhabhi seem to share a good rapport!!!!!😊 😊 😊 😊==Yes..they have..

World War II shuru ho gayi hai aur Raj ki posting do din mein hai aur aise waqt mein kisi se shaadi karke woh uski zindagi muskil mein nahi dalna chahta!!!!!😛 😛 😛 😛 😊 😊 😊 😊He is so considerate!!!!!!! 😊 😊 😊 😊==Raj aisa hi hai..

Everyone is encouraging Raj mujra dekhne jaane ke liye but he is really not interested!!!!😊 😊 😊 😊==Same answer..Raj aisa hi hai..

Naina is known as Nazar jaan and is supposed to write great poetry and they were all praises of her beauty!!!!!😛 😛 😛 😛 😊 😊 😊 😊==After all she the main female lead..

But Raj toh usse bala bol kar dur bhagna chahta hai usse!!!!!😛 😛 😛 😛 😆 😆 😆 😆 😆==Hota hai,,aisa hota hai..

Rajwaadon ke jo buri aadatein hoti hai woh Raj mein nahi hai aur usse ismein koi izzat ki baat nahi dikhti!!!! 😊 😊 😊 😊He is so nice!!!!!😊 😊 😊 😊==Has to be..

But he knows ke koi ladki apni marzi se kothe par nahi baithi!!!!😔 😔 😔 😔Though he sees both sides of the coin he still prefers to stay away from them!!!!!😊 😊 😊 😊==Arre..baat toh obvious hai..

Raj and Naina finally met and in a very different way!!!!!😊 😊 😊 😊 😊==Hmm..that's the eternal RN style..

The lines were beautiful!!!!!😊 😊 😊 😊==Thanks..

Naina ne kuch nahi kaha aur chali gayi aur Raj bas dekhta hi rahe gaya usse!!!!!!😊 😊 😊 😊 😍 😍 😍 😍==Shaina..control yaar..

Raj ne Naina ko ek baar dekha aur soch raha hai kitni gehrai thi uski ankhon mein!!!!!!!😊 😊 😊 😊 😊 😳 😳 😳 😳 😳 😳 😳 😳 😳==Yes..Naina k Nainon me dekha..Tose Naina Laage..

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ANANYA ROY

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Posted: 16 years ago

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@bakula_gandhi,digimon_pokemon,nihatri,watch rajeev

Thanks to all ..for your comments..and thanks for waiting..

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ANANYA ROY

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Posted: 16 years ago

#37

@ kads_8302

Thanks..but you never know..my fics are full of shocks.

@ springsign29

Love knows no boundaries..that is true..but lots of hurdles are there..family..status..and their own conflict..

@ fanatic 21

Thanks a lot for the comment..

@ prerna 1

Thank you..keep reading..

@ Mahak Sinha

Raj is always an exceptional case..Raj is not the Typical Royal Sons..but keep watching.. you never know..what is waiting at the next twist..

@ swtrider

Thanks a lot..keep reading..

@ desaiprachi07

Well..keep reading..Nazar Jaan ek tawayaf hai...iska asar toh padega..you never know...

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ANANYA ROY

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Posted: 16 years ago

#38

@ riyaa_1985

Riya..this fic is going to be really interesting..don't worry...I think it will be a bit controversial..

@ dazzling_glory

Thanks..World War 2 is there..and the Royal Touch is there...and yes..I will make sure that there will be several controversies..

@ sumaiya wahid

Thanks for reading it..keep reading..

@ sea_nyx

Hmm..jab maine punarjanam ki concept batai..tab sab ne aisa hi guess kia tha..well..keep guessing..and keep reading..

@ watch rajeev

Well..Tose Naina Laage will be a difference for sure..keep reading..

@ digimon_pokemon

Thanks Sarah..just aage padho..toh khatiya khadi ho jaayegi...

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ANANYA ROY

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Posted: 16 years ago

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PART 2

Lt.Sodhi k saath Lt.Shekhawat baat kar rahe the..

Sodhi--So..Shekhawat..aas paas ghoom aaye?

Raj--Jee..

Sodhi--Kaisi lagi yeh jagah?

Raj--Achhi hai..jaisi bhi hai..yehi par rehna hai..duty karni hai..

Sodhi--Kyaa baat hai?

Raj--Nahi..kuchh nahi..

Sodhi--Rajputana me kisi k paas apna dil chhod kar aaye ho kya?

Raj--Aisi koi baat nahi...

Sodhi--Toh..aaj chalo..humare saath ..Goahar Jaan ki mehfill me...

Raj--Sodhi..I told you earlier..in sab cheeson me mujhe koi dilchasbi nahi hai..tum log jaana chaahte ho toh jaao..mujhe mat khincho in sab k beech..

Sodhi--As your wish..

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Saare Officers jaa chuke the mehfil me..kuchh Superior Officers the..jinko zaroori meeting karni thi..Rajveer Commander se mil kar apne mess me waapas aaya..kuchh toh hai jo usko pareshaan kar raha tha..woh kyaa tha?Ghoom fir kar wahi baatein jo Raj ne us kagaz par padhe..woh baatein chaah kar bhi bhool nahi paa raha tha Rajveer.Itni bechaini kabhi
mehsoos hi nahi hui.Shaam hone hi waali thi..aur Raj k paas koi aur kaam nahi tha..thand bhi thi kaafi,,,Rajveer nikal pada..apni duty jeep le kar.Usne garam kapde lie..aur saath me ek whisky ki bottle bhi li..

Raj aise hi jaa raha tha..kidhar pata nahi..dimaag kaam nahi kar raha tha...achanak kyaa socha Raj ne..woh ussi jheel ki taraf chal pada..

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Udhar Raja Saab ki mehfil me taalion ki goonj thi..rupai ki barsaat thi..sharaab paani ki tarha beh rahi thi..Gaohar Jaan ne mehfil hi aisi sajai thi..par ek hi afsos tha sab k mann me..Nazar Jaan ki ek jhalak aaj nahi mili..doosre din toh woh ek aadh baar mehfil me aa jaati hai..Salaam kar k jaati hai..par aaj nahi dikhi Nazar Jaan.

Sodhi--Aaj Shkehawat ko laa nahi paaya..achha hai...Nazar Jaan toh aai nahi..

Rathore--Relax Sodhi..ek naa ek din toh Shekhawat bhi aayega..

Khanna--Tum log bas...yaar..Shekhawat ko beech me kyun laate ho..Nazar Jaan kabhi akele me nahi milti...ek din mil jaaye..toh ..kyaa bala hai...ek baar uska swad chakhna hai..

Sodhi--Control yourself..Goahar Jaan..raazi nahi hogi..kabhi..Nazar Jaan uski Beti jaisi hai..

Rathore--Kab tak bachegi...ek naa ek din toh...

Mehfil apne zor par thi...gaanewalian gaa rahi thi..naachnewalian naach rahi thi...par Nazar Jaan ki ek jhalak k lia sab log taras rahe the..par Nazar Jaan nazar hi nahi aai..

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Raj ki nazar padi...jheel ki taraf..koi jheel k paani me doob rahi thi..jaan boojh kar doob rahi thi..jaise woh marna chaahti thi...

Raj ne sahi socha tha..koi khud ko khatam karna chaah rahi thi..woh Nazar Jaan hi thi.. apni zindagi se woh tungh aa chuki thi..apni kashmakash kisi se keh nahi paa rahi thi..woh jaanti thi k sirf uski likhi hui shayeri se mann nahi bharega logon ka..kabhi na kabhi usko bhi kisi na kisike bistar me jaana padega..Goahar Jaan ki aankhon me Nazar Jaan ne woh darr dekh chuki hai..kai baar.Raja Saab ka ek Bhatija hai..jo kai baar Nazar Jaan k ird gird chakkar kaat chuka hai..uski shayeri ki taarif bhi kar chuka hai.Us raat sab mehfil me masroof the..Nazar Jaan uske pahle hi nikal gayi ..jheel ki taraf..jheel k paas kuchh der khadi rahi ..fir dheere dheere woh jheel ki gehrai me khud ko saunpne lagi..aaj is zindagi ka khaatma karna hi hai..aisi zindagi ki ummeed usne nahi ki thi..usko yaad bhi nahi padta k kab usko kisine Goahar Jaan k haathon becha tha..kab woh badi hui..kab uska charcha shuru hua mehfilon me..par aaj sab kashmakash ka anth hoga..Nazar Jaan ki maut k saath..ab toh maut hi usko bacha sakti hai..is manhoos zindagi se..

Jheel ki paani me Nazar Jaan doob rahi thi...Naina ki zindagi jo jee nahi paai..aur Nazar Jaan ki zindagi woh jeena nahi chaahti..

Achanak se kisine usko khincha..bahut zor se...aur fir Nazar Jaan ki aankhon k saamne andhera chhaa gaya...

Raj ne us ladki ko bacha lia jo paani me doob kar khudkhushi karna chaah rahi thi..Raj usko utha kar laaya ..paas me ek purana mandir tha..toota hua..Raj usko wahan le gaya.. ladki thand se kaanp rahi thi..behosh thi..Raj jeep se apne garam kapde le gaya...aur whisky ki bottle bhi..aas paas k ped se sukhi dandi tod li..aur aag jalane ka intezam bhi kia Raj ne..aag se roshni hui..aur Raj ne dekha wahi ladki jo us din jheel k kinare baith kar kavita likh rahi thi..wahi ladki..jiske baare me Raj ab tak soch raha tha..

Par ab sochne ka waqt nahi hai..ladki thand se mar jaayegi..aur koi kambal bhi nahi hai.. sirf garam kapdo se uski thand nahi meetegi.Raj ne ladki ko aag k paas sulaya..par woh kaanp rahi hai..Raj ne ladki k pet me haath lagaya..baar baar daba kar paani nikaal raha tha..ladki ki saree bheeg chuki thi...in kapdon ko utaarna hi hoga..Raj ne ladki k naak k paas haath rakha..saanse abhi tak normal nahi hai..Raj k paas aur koi raasta nahi tha...

Raj ne ladki k honthon par apna honth rakha..apni saanse woh ladki k andar de raha tha.. taa k uski saanse chal sake...thand k maare ladki k honth neele pad gaye the..ab honthon ka rang waapas aane laga...aisa bahut der tak kia Raj ne..aur andar hi andar khud sulaghne laga...sirf ladki k andar saanse nahi de raha tha..Raj ladki k honthon ko choom raha tha...apne aap ko rokna Raj k bas me nahi tha..ladki thodi si kaanp gayi...Raj uth gaya ladki k upar se..yeh theek nahi kar raha hai woh..Raj yehan nahi reh sakta...ek pal k lia khayaal aaya..k kisiko bula kar laayega..par yehan is waqt kaun milega..jo Raj ki madad kar sake..?Par Raj aisa nahi kar sakta..us ladki ki zindagi toh bach jaayegi..par Raj khud ko maaf nahi kar paayega..kabhi bhi..

Aisi kashmakash me Raj kabhi nahi pada...ladki ki nas dheemi hoti jaa rahi hai..baahar ki thand..aur paani me doobna..dono hi wajah hai..ab Raj kyaa karega?Raj ne whisky ki bottle utha li...do chaar ghooth pee kar..usne mandir ka darwaza bandh kia..andar se... uske kapde bhi bheeg gaye the...Raj ne apne kapde utaar die..sukhane k lia..apne garam kapdo se woh us ladki ki badan ko garmi pahoochana chaahta tha...ladki k bheege hue kapde utaarna tha Raj ko...Raj ko sharam aa rahi thi..par yeh waqt sochne ka nahi tha..ek aisi ladki k saath woh yeh sab karne jaa raha tha..jiska naa naam Raj ko maloom tha.. kahan se aai thi ..yeh bhi Raj ko maloom nahi tha..ho sakta hai..yeh kisi Krantikari se tallook rakhti hai..jo bhi ho..Raj is tarha ek insaan ko marne nahi de sakta..aur is ladki ko Raj kaise marne de sakta hai jisko pehli baar dekh kar hi Raj itna bechain ho gaya hai..? Abhi iski jaan bachana hi sab se zaroori hai..baad ki baat baad me soch lega Raj..ladki ko jab hosh aa jaayega..tab isse iska pata poochh lega..ghar ka pata..fir baaizzat isse shaadi kar lega...abhi sochna sirf waqt ki barbadi hogi...

Raj ne ladki ki saree utaar di..fir blouse bhi..aur baaki kapde bhi..ladki ka shawl usne aag k paas sukhane dia..garam kapdon se kuchh nahi hoga...Raj ne ladki ko apni baahon me lia..Raj ne ladki ko apne neeche lia..Raj khud ko kos raha tha..par woh koi paap nahi kar raha tha...ek marte hue ki jaan bacha raha tha..

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Raj ki badan ki garmi paa kar ladki dheere dheere theek hone lagi..Raj khud par kaboo nahi rakh paaya..ladki k kandhe aur gale ko baar baar choomne laga..dheere dheere Raj k andar ki aag aur badhne lagi..ladki k honthon ko choomne laga..ladki k seene me apni naak ragadne laga..ladki k badan ki garmi waapas aane lagi...sharab k nashe me Raj dheere dheere bahekne laga..aur fir ladki k ko hosh aaya...usne khud ko bahut bebas mehsoos kia..Raj k niche..ladki k seene k baayen taraf Raj k honth the...ladki ne Raj ka chehra pakda aur dekha..yeh toh wahi hai..jo pahle issi jheel k kinare mila tha...

Raj ne dekha..ladki ki aankhe badi ho gayi...aankhon se aansoon bahne lage..isse pahle k ladki chillati..Raj ne uske hothon par apna haath rakh dia...aur bola ,"Tum paani me doob rahi thi..marne jaa rahi thi..maine bachaya..thand se mar rahi thi..tumhari jaan bachana chaahta tha..issi lia..tumko apne niche lia..mera yakeen karo..aur koi irada nahi tha mera.. main toh tumko jaanta bhi nahi.."

Ladki kuchh bol nahi paai...Raj ne kaha ,"Tumhe tumhare ghar chhod doonga..aur tumhare gharwalon se baat kar loonga..jald se jald tumse shaadi kar loonga..issi maheene..ghabraao mat.."

Ladki khud ko chhoodane ki koshish kar rahi thi..par Raj nahi chaahta tha usko chhodna.. Raj ne kaha.."Tumhe chhodne ka zara bhi mann nahi kar raha hai...yakeen karo..isse pahle kabhi aisa nahi kia..jis din se tumhe dekha hai..us din se..sirf tum hi tum ho..mere zahen me..."..Raj k gale me ladki k naakhoon zor se choobh rahe the...jaise ladki khud ko chhoodana chaah rahi thi...ladki ko dard ho raha tha...fir dheere dheere..ladki ne Raj ko apne seene me chhupa lia..ladki ka kaanpna bandh ho gaya tha..

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Subha jab Raj ki neend khuli..tab usne khud ko akela paaya...dekha ladki chali gayi...uske kapde bhi nahi the..haan..woh chali gayi thi...paas me whisky ki khaali bottle padi thi..Raj ko hosh aaya..woh samajh gaya..k kal raat sirf usne ladki ki jaan hi nahi bachai..bal k bahut kuchh kia..sirf jaan nahi bacha raha tha woh...

Ek pal k lia Raj ki aankhon k saamne andhera chhaa gaya..yeh usne kyaa kar dia?Woh bhi nahi bach paaya..apne khoon k asar se..ek ladki k jaan bachane k bahane se..usne woh kia..jisse bachne woh Rajputana chhod kar aaya tha..woh bhi apne Bade Bhai ki tarha bana..ek hi raat me..zindagi bhar aurat ko izzat se nazron se dekhta aaya..aur jaan bachane k bahane..nahi..sahi nahi hai..aur us ladki ko kahan dhoondhega woh?Uske ghar jaana hai...Raj ka kuchh nahi bigrega..par is raat ka harjana us ladki ko zindagi bhar dena padega..kyaa hoga us ladki ka?Raj ne uski zindagi toh bacha li..par aage ki zindagi ki badhaali k lia Raj hi zimmedar hoga..kal raat ko woh koshish kar chuki hai marne ka.. kahin usne fir se aisi koi koshish ki toh?Tab kyaa hoga?Kaise bhi kar k..usse dhoondhna hoga..par woh gayi kahan?Aur kyun chali gayi?

Raj is tarha choop nahi baith sakta..zaroorat padi..toh is jagah ka chappa chappa chhaan maarega...Raj utha..kapde pahen kar woh nikal pada...jab apne unit pahoocha..tab usne apne fellow Officers k aankhon me bahut se sawal dekhe...apne mess me waapas aaya... Sodhi uske peechhe aaya...

Sodhi--Kal raat kahan gaayab tha?

Shekhawat--Ghoomne gaya tha..

Sodhi--Puri raat ghoomta raha..aur tere gale par yeh kaisa nishaan hai?

Raj ne dekha aaine me..arre ..nishan ban gaya?

Sodhi--Hum log toh mujra dekhne gaye the..tu kahan gaya tha?

Raj--Kahi nahi...please..leave me alone...

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Goahar Jaan ne dekha..Naina subha subha kahin se aa rahi hai..kahan thi raat bhar? Poochhna padega..

Goahar--Kahan thi?

Naina ne jawab nahi dia..

Goahar--Aaj raat..teri nath tootegi..main ab aur nahi rok sakti..Raja Saab ka Bhatija peechhe pada hai...tujhe yeh sweekar karna hoga..laakh rok le..par tu tawayaf hai..ek naa ek din kisike bistar me jaana hoga tujhe..aaj raat..woh aayega..jaa kar taiyyari kar..sirf shayeri se mann nahi bharega yehan k mardon ka..tu khubsurat hai..tere jism ki chaahat har koi karta hai..aur haan..jo mogre ki khushboo hai..usko zara apne chhaati par laga lena..Rajkumar ko mogre ki khushboo pasand hai..aur haan..jo bhi kare..rokna nahi..pehli baar dard hoga..fir aadat pad jaayegi..

Goahar Jaan k jaane k baad..Naina ne darwaza bandh kar lia..aur zameen par geer kar rone lagi..baar baar us insaan ko kosne lagi..jisne uski jaan bachai..par dheere dheere usko ehsaas hua k woh admi sharrif tha..Naina hi bhaag aai..aur ab Naina kunwari nahi rahi..kal raat ko apna kunwarapan us insaan k havale kar chuki hai...shukar hai..Naina ka kunwarapan toota..par ek bhale insaan k haathon..kisi aiyaash Rajkumar k haathon nahi.. Naina nahne gayi..baar baar..apne jism me us admi k haath ko mehsoos karne lagi..uska rom rom kaanp utha..

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Devraj Rana...Raja Saab ka Bhatija..raat ko Naina k kamre me aaya...Naina taiyyar thi.. Naina ko choomna shuru kia usne..Naina ko bistar me le gaya...achanak se Naina k honthon par nazar padi...taza taza nishaan bana hua hai...Devraj ko shak hua..uske Naina ki chunri utaari..gale par bhi nishaan..aur Naina ki choli bhi utar gayi...mogre ki khushboo toh thi..par kisike daant aur nakhoon k halke nishaan bhi the...aur koi shak nahi raha... Devraj uth gaya...Naina ko chhod dia usne...

Goahar Jaan baahar thi..Devraj baahar aaya..

Goahar--Kyaa hua Rajkumar?Itni jaldi baahar aa gaye?Nath nahi todni?

Devraj--Uski nath utar chuki hai..kal raat ko..kal thi nahi yehan..kal uski nath toot chuki hai..uska pura jism is baat ki gavahi de rahi hai..

Devraj Rana apne kamre me waapas aaya...uska dimaag garam tha..Naina k saath aisa kisne kia..wahi jaanna tha..jo haq uska tha..kisi aur ne chheen lia..kaun hai woh?

Goahar Jaan Naina k paas aai..dekha Naina hans rahi hai...

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Prerna

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Posted: 16 years ago

#40

that was really good

plz continue soon

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