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ANANYA ROY

@yakkudimag

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Posted: 16 years ago

SAFAR(THE JOURNEY)

PART 1

Sometimes the greatest journey to be completed is the distance between two people...aisa kahte hain..shaayad..do insaan saath me hain..par unke beech ka faasla.utna hi jaise Aasmaan aur Zameen..Sawaal yeh hai..k is faasle ko tai kaise kare?kaise saari doorian mita kar do insaan ek doosre k kareeb aa sake..

Ek dor toh hoti hai..humen khinchti hai humesha..unki taraf ..jinse humen milna hai.Varna yeh kaise mumkin tha k usidin Raj bhi usi mandap me maujood tha jis mandap me Naina ki shaadi ho rahi thi,kisi aur k saath.Aise me pata chala..Dulha bimaar hai..dimaagi taur pe..gharwalon ne jhoot kaha tha..k ladka sirf shaadi ki wajah se tensed hai.Ahen mauke par ladke ko Hysteria k attacks aane lage..Naina darr gayi..uth kar khadi ho gayi..aur apne Bhaiya k peechhe jaakar chhoop gayi..Naveen marne maarne par utaaroo ho gaya..uski Bahen ki zindagi k saath itna bada khilwad??!!Us din agar Raj ne Naveen ka haath nahi roka hota..toh Dulhe k ek aadh gharwaalon ko Naveen apne Kripan se zaroor kaat daalta.

Ladki k gharwale pareshaan..ab ladki ka kyaa hoga?

Kismat kahe..yaa kuchh aur..Naina ne saat phere Raj k saath hi lie..Kuchh relatives zara naakhush hue..k Non-Punjabi family ka ladka..ladki ko biha kar le jaa raha hai..Naveen ne kisiki ek naa suni..aur Raj khud aage aaya tha, Naina se shaadi karne k lia..aur koi aitraz ki gunjaish rahi hi nahi..

Raj jab Naina ko lekar apne ghar pahucha..tab sab ko khushi isi baat ki thi..k achha hai,Naina ki zindagi barbad hote hote reh gayi.Bachpan se Naina ko dekhte aa rahe hain sab..Naina ka bura koi nahi chaahta hai..Raj k ghar me.

Rajveer..Naveen ka dost..Naveen k ghar woh Naveen se milne jata tha..sach hai..par ek waqt k baad,us ghar me jaane ki ek aur wajah bhi ho gayi.. Naina. Kab Naina itni badi ho gayi..Raj ko pata hi nahi chala,ek din achanak Raj ne mehsoos kia k Naina achhi hai..bahut achhi hai..achhi toh woh humesha se thi..par ab woh aur bhi achhi lagne lagi..Achanak se puri duniya hi Raj k lia aur bhi khubsurat ho gayi.Par,yeh samaj,jaat,biradari..in deewaron ko paar karna mushkil tha.Aur jiske lia zamane se ladhne ka irada tha,usi k jazbaaton k bare me Raj ko koi andaza nahi tha.

Raj ne apne dil ko samjha lia yeh keh kar..k zaroori nahi,jisse tum pyaar karo woh bhi tumse pyaar kare.Raj ne dil par tala laga kar,chaabi dariya me fek dia.Shaadi kar k jab Raj Naina ko ghar lekar aa raha tha..tab kuchh bhi nahi kaha ..naa Raj ne naa Naina ne..Raj chup chaap Car chala raha tha..Naina chup chaap ro rahi thi.

Raj(mann hi mann)--Mujhse pyaar nahi karti..par maine isse shaadi ki..kyaa faida?Aur rishta nibha toh legi..par dil se mujhe kabool nahi karegi..mera ehsaan maanegi..par meri mohabbat ko nahi samjhegi..is majboori k rishtey ko kyaa naam doon?Ek baat tak nahi ki abhi tak..itna bhi nahi poochha..k ..mere gharwale isko accept karenge bhi ya nahi.Waise darr toh mere mann me bhi hai..Gharwale kyaa kahenge?Isko accept karenge naa?Agar nahi karenge..tab main kyaa karoonga?Iske lia ghar chhood doonga?Yaa fir... nahi..abhi itna kuchh kyon soch raha hoon??Main toh itna bhi nahi keh sakta..k kitna pyaar karta hoon isse..kahi gharwalon ne isko sweekar nahi kia..tab kyaa boloonga?Khamokha iske dil me..abhi se ummeed jaga kar.. kyaa faida?Kismat bhi kyaa khel khelti hai?Jab se pyaar ko samjha.. isise pyaar kia..zahen me ek hi sawal tha..k kaise isko haasil karoon..par aaj jab isko haasil kar lia hai..tab mann yeh saari baatein..kya mujhe meri mohabbat pat yakeen nahi raha?Yaa main khud par yakeen nahi kar paa raha hoon?

Naina(mann hi mann)--Sab kuchh meri wajah se..naa mere saath aisa hota.. aur naa Raj mujhse shaadi karta..Raj khush nahi hai mujhse shaadi kar k..ab yeh zabardasti ka rishta..naa main nibha paaoongi naa Raj..Bhaiya ka dost tha..dosti nibha di Raj ne..par ab aage kyaa?Aisa bhi toh ho sakta hai..Raj kisi aur se pyaar karta hai..aur majboori me mujhse shaadi ki Raj ne..ehsaan kia hai mujh par..ab main kyaa karoon?Sab ne apna apna farz nibha dia.. Bhaiya ne Bhai hone ka farz..nibhaya..us paagal se bacha kar..Raj ne dosti ka farz nibhaya..mujhe badnaami se bachaya..ab mera farz kyaa hoga?Main kyaa karoon?Nahi..meri wajah se Raj ki zindagi barbad nahi honi chahie... aur..Raj..woh mujhse pyaar nahi karta..aur uska parivaar..kyaa woh log mujhe apnaayenge?

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6 saal beet gaye hain is baat ko..

Naina aaj bhi nahi bhool paati..woh tamasha..jo Ritu ne kia tha..

Naina aur Raj k reception Party me aakar ..Ritu ne kaafi hungama khada kia tha..Ritu ki family aur Raj ki family humesha se chaahti thi k in dono ki shaadi ho jaaye..aisa hona bhi tai tha..par Naina beech me aa gayi..

Ritu--Arre bhai..mere mangetar ki shaadi ka reception hai..main kaise naa aati?

aur bhi kuchh kadvi baatein...Raj Ritu ka haath pakad k doosri side le gaya tha..

Ritu--Wow..great job indeed...

Raj--I am sorry..

Ritu--Meri puri zindagi jala kar..tum aisa bolte ho?

Raj--kyaa karta?Naina jis haalat me thi...

Ritu--arre..mere Dayasagar...ehsaan karne ka bahut shaukh tha?Waha par aur koi ladka nahi tha?

Raj--dheere..Ritu..dheere..listen..I am sorry..that's all I can say...

Ritu--Tumne shaadi toh kar li..par tum usse kabhi pyaar nahi kar paaoge.. kyonki tumne kabhi usse pyaar nahi kia...aur tum dono ka rishta..kabhi bhi kamyab nahi hoga...

Raj--Let's see...

Ritu ko pahle se jaanti thi Naina..uske gusse se bhi waakif thi.Naina peechhe gayi thi undono k..saari baatein Naina ne sun li..

Raj ne dekha Naina ko...

Naina-- I am sorry...meri wajah se sab ko takleef hui..I am really sorry..

Raj wahi khada raha..

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bahut kuchh badal chuka hai..

Ritu mar chuki hai..

Asal me woh Naina ko jaanse maarne aai thi..Naina usse bach rahi thi..palat kar vaar karne k haalat me nahi thi...Naina ko delivery date saamne thi..Ritu khanjar lekar uski taraf badh rahi thi..aur achanak se goli ki awaz....Raj ne Ritu par goli chala di..Naina behosh hokar geer padi.. Naina ko jab hospital me hosh aya..Raj ko Police arrest kar chuki thi..Raj nahi tha..Hospital me..aur usko mari hui bachchi paida hui thi..Raj ko 3 saal ki saza ho gayi..Naina ki jaan bachane k lia usne Ritu ko shoot kia..isi lia usko sirf 3 saal ki saza hui..

Aaj ki taarikh hai 10th October,2007.

ghar me khushi ka maahol..is diwali me Raj unke saath hoga..aaj Raj reeha ho raha hai..3 saal ki saza usne kaat li..

Raj ko khushi hai..k Naina k paas jaa raha hai..

Par Naina ahiste ahiste ghum k ghere me gheerti jaa rahi hai..

Ritu..mar kar bhi zinda hai...aaj bhi..uske aur Raj k bich..kuchh logo ne toh Ritu ka Naina par humla karna sahi bhi laga..unhone kaha..."Ritu ne jo jhela.. gusse me paagal hona..koi bhi ho sakta hai..Ritu ..poor girl.."

Naina ki bachchi mari hui paida hui..is haadse ki wajah se..Naina buri tarha zakhmi hui isi haadse me..par Naina k lia unke dil me koi humdardi nahi thi..Ritu..mari..aur Naina ko bhi jeete jee maar gayi..

Edited by yakkudimag - 16 years ago

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Rituka

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Posted: 16 years ago

story line is good
update soon...............

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Vertika Srivastava

@Vartika07

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Posted: 16 years ago

Tum ne bahut tuff subject choose kar liya hai na Anu is baar, par tum to ho hi outstanding humesha kuch alag aur sab se accha karna hi tumhari quality hai. 👏

Becahri Naina jis ne zindagi me sab se jyada gum sahe hain us k saath logon ko jara bhi sympathy nahi hai😲, kya samaaj hai humara vaah vaah.👏

Ritu jaise do kaudi ki ladki k liye sympathy hai 😡par Naina jaise ladki k liye nahi jis ne apna baccha bhi khoya aur us ka pati bhi jail chala gaya Ritu ki wajah se.😭

Vahan Raj hai jo bus Naina se pyaar karta tha😛 aur us ne ek nek kadam utha kar Naina ko rusvai se bachane k liye us se shaadi bhi kar le😃 par shayad kahin dono k beech Ritu ka diya hua shraap nahi khatam hua us ne apna asar dikhaya.😕

Ab dekhna ye hai ki Naina ki zindagi me Raj k wapas aane par kaise vo accept karti hai Raj ko.😕

update soon it's really nice.⭐️

Edited by Mahak Sinha - 16 years ago

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Shaina_b

@Shaina_b

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Posted: 16 years ago

Too good!!!!Awesome!!!!

Naina ki shaadi kisi aur se ho rahi thi aur woh pagal nikla!!!!!😲 😲 😲 😲 😲

Navin is good brother!!!!😊 😊 😊 😊Apne bahen ko bacha liya aur bahut gusse mein tha!!!!

Raj aage aaya bachane Naina ko aur unki shaadi ho gayi!!!!😛 😛 😛 😊 😊 😊 😊Great!!!!!👏 👏 👏 👏 👏

Raj ke gharwale bhi khush thhe!!!!!😛 😛 😛 😊 😊 😊 😊Thats nice!!!!😊 😊 😊 😊 😊

Raj pehle se hi Naina se pyaar karta tha magar kuch keh nahi paya!!!!!😊 😊 😊 😊 😳 😳 😳 😳 😳Bechara!!!!😔 😔 😔 😔 😔

Aur shaadi karke le jaa raha hai tab bhi nahi kaha dono ne kuch bhi!!!!!😒 😒 😒 😒 😒O God!!!!

Raj khamokha soch raha tha parivaar apnayenge yaa nahi!!!!!😛 😛 😛 😛Apna hi liya tha naa!!!!😊 😊 😊 😊

Raj ne yeh bhi nahi kaha ke kitna pyaar karta hai Naina se aur Naina bhi kuch aur samaj rahi thi!!!!!😒 😒 😒 😒 😒 😒

Dono ke dil mein hi kash-m-kash chal rahi hai!!!!!😊 😊 😊 😊

Ritu ne kitna tamasha kiya tha!!!!😡 😡 😡 😡 😡 😡 😡 😡 😡 Yeh Ritu bhi naa anap shanap bolti hai!!!!!😡 😡 😡 😡 😡 😡 😡 😡 😡

Naina ne saari baatein sun bhi li!!!!😔 😔 😔 😔Mar gaye!!!!

Yeh bhi sun liya Raj usse pyaar nahi karta jab ki yeh baat sach nahi hai!!!!!

Yeh Ritu kabhi nahi sudregi!!!!😡 😡 😡 😡 😡 😡 😡 😡Naina ko marne aayi thi woh bhi tab jab Naina pregnant thi!!!!😡 😡 😡 😡 😡 😡 😡 😡

Raj ne Naina ko bacchane ke liye Ritu ko mar daala!!!! Good for him!!!!!👍🏼 👍🏼 👍🏼 👍🏼Kitna pyaar karta hai woh Naina se!!!!😊 😊 😊 😊 😊 😳 😳 😳 😳 😳

Naina ka baccha mara huya paida huya tha aur Raj bhi tab tak arrest ho chuka tha!!!!😭 😭 😭 😭 😭 😭 😭 😭Thats so sad!!!!😭 😭 😭 😭 😭 😭

Raj ko sazza ho gayi 3 saal ki!!!😭 😭 😭 😭 😭 😭 😭But finally woh wapas aa raha hai ish diwali mein!!!!!😊 😊 😊 😊

Bechari Naina!!!!!!😭 😭 😭 😭 😭 😭Ritu ne usse sab kuch cheen liya!!!!!😡 😡 😡 😡 😡 😡 😡Ish gum mein bhi woh akeli thi!!!!😭 😭 😭 😭 😭 😭

Logo ko Ritu ka humla karna bhi sahi laga!!!😲 😲 😲 😲 😲Thats disgusting!!!!!😡 😡 😡 😡 😡 😡 😡 😡 😡

Naina ko jeete jee mar diya iske liye koi humdardi nahi!!!!!!!😭 😭 😭 😭 😭 😭 😭

I hope Raj aayega toh sab theek ho jayega!!!!!😊 😊 😊 😊

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sania_58

@sania_58

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Posted: 16 years ago

superb

darun interesting

eta ki pujor gift??????????????

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404_NotFound

@404_NotFound

Sparkler

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Posted: 16 years ago

wow nice concept...it's a good subject..interesting one👏👏👏
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Ah i feel sad for naina and raj..raj had to be in jail just beacuse of ritu..how sad....but Raj and naina rishta was a compromise then how come naina was pregnant?? naina has to go through so much i hope now she gets her share of happiness...and raj too

Edited by yyyy - 16 years ago

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ANANYA ROY

@yakkudimag

Dazzler

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Posted: 16 years ago

Originally posted by: rituka7
story line is good
update soon...............

thanks for liking my short fic..I will update soon..

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ANANYA ROY

@yakkudimag

Dazzler

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Posted: 16 years ago

Originally posted by: varshita
G8 darling cont soon.

Sure..and thanks a lot for reading my fic..

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ANANYA ROY

@yakkudimag

Dazzler

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Posted: 16 years ago

Originally posted by: Mahak Sinha
Tum ne bahut tuff subject choose kar liya hai na Anu is baar,==yes..the matter is very sensitive this time..

par tum to ho hi outstanding humesha kuch alag aur sab se accha karna hi tumhari quality hai. 👏==thanks😳
Becahri Naina jis ne zindagi me sab se jyada gum sahe hain us k saath logon ko jara bhi sympathy nahi hai😲, kya samaaj hai humara vaah vaah.👏==logo ko aur koi kaam toh hai nahi...😡

Ritu jaise do kaudi ki ladki k liye sympathy hai 😡par Naina jaise ladki k liye nahi jis ne apna baccha bhi khoya aur us ka pati bhi jail chala gaya Ritu ki wajah se.😭==Ritu..is really a vamp and witch..😡

Vahan Raj hai jo bus Naina se pyaar karta tha😛 aur us ne ek nek kadam utha kar Naina ko rusvai se bachane k liye us se shaadi bhi kar le😃 par shayad kahin dono k beech Ritu ka diya hua shraap nahi khatam hua us ne apna asar dikhaya.😕==Raj loves her a lot..but..Ritu made a big mess...for sure..

Ab dekhna ye hai ki Naina ki zindagi me Raj k wapas aane par kaise vo accept karti hai Raj ko.😕==Yes..how she accepts Raj...that is the main part of this story...

update soon it's really nice.⭐️==yes..sure..