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CarpeDiem_365

@CarpeDiem_365

Sparkler

Posted: 7 years ago

#691

Originally posted by: orion23

Tabby 🤗
I loved it!!!!
The couplet ❤️
I shall reply in detail aaram se!
Take your time...no issues! !😊

And get off the sick leave!
Feel better sooner😳

Thank you!

Feeling better already! !

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orion23

@orion23

Sparkler

+ 4

Posted: 7 years ago

#692

Originally posted by: CarpeDiem_

Thank you!
Feeling better already! !
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That's good to hear..

Stay healthy and happy hon!

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Nik03

@Nik03

Rocker

Posted: 7 years ago

#693

Originally posted by: orion23

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AnuradhaMG

@AnuradhaMG

Explorer

Posted: 7 years ago

#694

Hey Zoya,

This...I would say, is the best interpretation of Sumo's pain and agony that u have done in any of ur stories...all this while u were too biased towards Shravan to think about Suman...but I m glad u did it at last...

Being wanted, being in someone's priority list is a basic feeling to every human and when every second of ur life u keep feeling that u r unwanted, u r a burden, it can be very depressing...I don't have exact words to voice those thoughts...

And when in such a condition u get someone who likes u, u want to hold on to that person in every possible way...may it b by bullying that person, caring for that person, being possessive... just anything can b d spontaneous reaction to d feeling of that person being snatched away from u...

That was a fantastic letter...just loved it...u r amazing n I m ur fan dear...

rgds

Anuradha

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orion23

@orion23

Sparkler

+ 4

Posted: 7 years ago

#695

Originally posted by: CarpeDiem_
Where is the fire 😆 he is cute! !
I agree! Cute he is!
Heard it !! Someone had a great fall !!😭
Eric speaks hindi! ! I like this sangam 😃
Drama runs in our blood! !😳
Yes Sir Yes Sir three bags full😆
Sumo and some sane thoughts! ! It's a pleasing sight! !
A thought of which has annoyed her so much, ,Shravan has seen it all !!
Suman sayani ho ri😉
Sumo is acting like one jalkukdi biwi ya gf...
Itni to tum tang dil nahi... hye! !
Shravan speaks! ! It's liberating! !
(ReshmaNair would really appreciate that! ! Her Shravan always speaks or she makes Sumo do wonders! !)
Yeah? I am yet to find time to read her works... It's good her Shravan talks... When he talks, the world rocks!
Ramu kaka ke shatranj ke mohre to unke apney hi the! !
This Ramu looks different though !!
Haina! I don't intend for him to be bi**h wali kutti sasuma!
Oh! He already knew about nimmo fiasco! ! Bad !!
Emotional pain is much worse than physical pain! ! Double blow! !
🤗 this is for you baby! !
Yes all the hugs in the world 😛
...Zindagi uski aag main guzregi! ! We have witnessed it Nanu ji! !
Us aag main hum sab bhi jal gaye the !!😳
Hahaha you sound pleased to burn😆
Careful what you wish for buddy, who knows fire makes a comeback...
Is dard ka ilaaj to aap hi ke paas hai! !😉 #Nanu
Dude😉
Yet to learn his trade! ! I hope the same trade! !
Ramnath Malhotra had a puran janam is this very janam !! I am in awe !!
Yeyyy😃
Be-taassub nazar main chupa har rishtey ka wajoob hai,,
Zindagi hai naam jiska naqaabil-e-paishangoi hai! !

Lehje ki narmi main chupi kirdaar ki bulandi hai,,
Talkh zubaani ka sila wo ehsaas-e-gunahgari hai! !
Wah wah wah! Kya line maari hai!
See now this is why I await your comments, they are life!
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This is for the elderly and new buds! !😆

Brilliant piece of writing Zoya! !

@Bold Thank you so so much Tabby!

Love you ya!

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orion23

@orion23

Sparkler

+ 4

Posted: 7 years ago

#696

Originally posted by: AnuradhaMG
Hey Zoya,
Hey Anuradha!
This...I would say, is the best interpretation of Sumo's pain and agony that u have done in any of ur stories...all this while u were too biased towards Shravan to think about Suman...but I m glad u did it at last...
Umm I beg to differ... Shravan is someone I have more connect too and yes I have written of him more but I have written about Suman too. I agree to the bias but not to @ Bold. She is my character and I do think about her. There is a reason why she didn't have too many of painful moments cause as her psyche worked she never accepted it not even to herself. That's how she was. Now that her character has grown, I found it right time for her realization.
Being wanted, being in someone's priority list is a basic feeling to every human and when every second of ur life u keep feeling that u r unwanted, u r a burden, it can be very depressing...I don't have exact words to voice those thoughts...
I get you. It is an unconscious need...
And when in such a condition u get someone who likes u, u want to hold on to that person in every possible way...may it b by bullying that person, caring for that person, being possessive... just anything can b d spontaneous reaction to d feeling of that person being snatched away from u...
That's why she needed a slow progression, else it would either come off as abrupt or a character flaw.
That was a fantastic letter...just loved it...u r amazing n I m ur fan dear...
I'm glad you did! Thank you so much hon!
And it means a lot to me when you say that🤗
rgds

Anuradha

@Bold Thank you so so much Anuradha!

I love it when readers voice their opinion and take a stand for characters...

It shows how much you care!

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reshmanair356

@reshmanair356

Voyager

Posted: 7 years ago

#697

Originally posted by: orion23
@Reshma I sure as hell missed your comments!
Thank you so so much!
Mai detail mai laptop se comment karti..
Phone is annoying..

I head you weren't well..
Are you better now?
Feel better sooner 🤗

Hey Zoya..yup missed out on Qasid I guess🥱..too much of travelling was involved.

I saw your detailed reply to Qatra though..i appreciate how you put just as much efforts into your replies as well.

Like I said..Loved Qatra!!

I fell terribly sick..it had to be during my annual trip to my parents ..sigh!...though I am slowly on my road to recovery now😳

.Thanks🤗..

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Lara / Clara

@devilaonmoon

Dazzler

+ 4

Posted: 7 years ago

#698

First of all, sorry for not commenting since a while. 😭

Didn't unres the last res. 😕 Lara... very bad girl.

Now, as I read the chapters, ask me what did I discover?

I discovered you're progressing as a writer with every single update.

You were a fantastic writer already when I first read your works,

and you're on your way to reach an even higher level with passing time.

Your dialogues give me visual now and it truly pleases my heart. 🤗

Shraman relationship is long distance and it has a Byronic touch coated

all over it. It was a game changer moment, when they connected over the butterfly, and they realized their souls were connected.

It's got freaking soulmates written all over it!

However, I can see they're in need of some more eye-opening moments, to reach the next level, love and intimacy. And I hope they get to that level when the

distance will be no more.

That Suman thinks about Shravan as her knight, is another highlighting moment.

That he'll return (whenever that will be), gives hope.

It is good to end a chapter with hope. 😃

(Now I can sleep peacefully)

Will be waiting eagerly for the next chapter.

Love,
Lara.

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Zenab

@Duskyylilac

Sparkler

+ 7

Posted: 7 years ago

#699

Zoya Apii 🤗
Finally agayi main
Update was as usual superb
She called him and he picked up
They have sorted out MUs between them
Whatever is situation but he is there everytime
And Sumos story was touching specially last part of that story where there is hope
Loved it

Lots of Love ❤️
Zainab