Alfaaz - A ShraMan FF - Now Moved to Wattpad - Page 40

Originally posted by: Nik03

Res 😊
Finally am back!!

Good to see you here!😳
Feels tooo good 😃
Will unres soon...Well I'll try 😆
This time I took really long to reply!

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Unres 😃
Zealous Si Zoya... 🤗
Nikka Sa Nik! 🤗

Sowiii!!
Am later than late.

I beat you to it 😆
Kaan pakad ke sorry...*Best Puppy Face*
Arey chill bro!

Oh Man I miss you!!
I miss you too!
Finally Am able to unres...Uff!!

Finally I'm able to reply.. Uff!😆
So without the usual chatter Patter...I'll go straight to the upii 😛
Inaayat...Blessing...Do I need to say I love it??

Nope, I know that already!
No na?!!...Smart Zoya.😉
How beautifully it fits here ❤️
Aww yey!!!
Eric...What a lively character!!
A perfect friend of Shravan that he needed badly.
If there is a fun side of him, then there is that much needed understanding n serious side too.
Haina! Inside secret, Eric's character is based to Resh and Prii😆
Mr. Blinding grin...Oh how badly we want to see that smile of our Shravan.

Me too!!!
N what an observation Mr. Observant Eric.!!😉
Aage aage dekho hota hai kya!
What are you on? Energy bar? Protein shake?...😆
I would say, its neither protein shake nor energy bar...Its Sumo Power.
It's friendship power more to say 😉
Aww!!
Concerned Eric..😳
Life, I'm high on life Eric.....❤️
N am high on emotions.😊
Hahaha ... That's my Takiya kalam, I'm high on life😆

Jealous Eric...😆
He is a cutie pie.😳
Ekdam se cutie pie!
What? You are friends with a Sumo wrestler who's a girl? Where did you find her? And more importantly how are you'll friends? She could beat you to a pulp Shrav!...Oh My My!!
🤣 🤣

Eric...Soo many questions!!
Curious soul !!
He's a bit cray cray 🤣
[IPTell me when you want to, if you want to. And I'd love to speak with her someday..[/I]...Aww!!
Isnt he the bestest buddy here.
Seriously this guy is just love...For me, he is filling the empty slot of Pushkie Pie in Shravan's life in London somehow.
He's doing that and a lot more... 😃
Sumo...Too much happiness.😃
Itni khushi ke chupaaye na chupe😳
But ofcourse she wont tell anybody about it!!
There wasnt anybody close enough to share her happiness n sorrows with them in Sumo's Life.
Well there was Nanu for one😉
Nanu...The Angel of ShraMan.
Sumo's excitement...Made me smile wide.I so wanted to give her a tight hug there.
Here I can see that excited chota Shravan on the mention of Sumo or in her company.
They were good innocent souls.. IDK when they became manipulative asses...
You know Zoya, I always had this thing in my mind that somewhere Chota Shravan didnt got his share of justice. I wanted to see Sumo apologizing to Chota Shravan in a convo same as Bada Shravan-Choti Sumo had.Somewhere that innocent Shravan who was ditched by his loved ones didnt recieved their apologies.
Shravan was wronged time and again and yet he was made to stand in the spotlight of wrong. I hated it. By the end I was fast forwarding so many scenes... I couldn't handle it baba...
What was life without Nanu and Shravan was a question she never wanted the answer to, but she knew, it wouldn't be life at all....So True!!
Sumo's whole world revolves around these two.
It's surprising really.. As out going as she was, her support mechanism was just two people...
I loved Shravan-Pushkie convo and specially the way you wrote the starting. It seems real like how a normal convo begins.
Shukriya!
Yaad aa rahi thi aapki...A very simple sentence but had much more to feel.When someone close to you say this to you, it feels that you are worthy enough for him/her.
This thing I so love about you Zoya (Ofcourse apart from mannnyyy more 😆).You write these simple things but effective ones.
N these makes your writing much more realistic ones. 😊
Thank you so much hon! Unfortunately, very few notice that...
Shravan... the first thought or rather a certain someone came to his mind the instant Pushkar asked about happiness...This is pure Love ❤️

Ji!
Mai, ab khush?...#ShraManGoals
#PushkarBond007
😆
Pushkie pie is a jaan!
Drama Queen...Naam to suna hi hoga Zoya 😉😛
Of course 😆
Ramayan khatam ho gayi, ab aap pooch rahe ho Ram kaun hai?...At some point of time, this was my ultimate dialogue.😆
Mine too! And I used to feel like I've dropped a bomb arse dialogue!
Pushkie Pie aa gaya point pe...😆
Are Shravan ye bhi koi sochne ki baat hai?
Ofcourse its that obvious!!
Aur kya!
Messenger...😆
Well he was to be true!!
Bechara baccha 😆
I love you..❤️ ❤️
And I'm proud of you, more than I can tell you...Pushkie n Zoya you too...I love you both for saying this to him.❤️
Awww! I love you too!
Pushkar was really a gem.N Lalaji ❤️
The most loving n innocent duo in Malhotra clan apart from Shravan.
He's going to make a comeback soon... Everyone will be coming in the updates in the near future...
Shravan and his beloved diary...
How much I love this part always Zoya.❤️
Me too!!!
That theory...Moments Of Impact❤️ ❤️
What to say here Zoya?!

You caught it! Makes me happy!
I can only say, for me your every writeup is a Moment Of Impact!!
Aww ya! Aren't you the sweetest!
Nirmala leaving Shravan was definetly the moment in his life that had left the worst impact on him ever. I am not gonna say anything about her as I can write a whole paragraph on it.
Leave that to me 😎
In Sumo's case, it'll be a fading one...Partially coz of her heartfelt apology n second coz for Sumo, he was a different Shravan altogether no matter what.
Agreed bro!
Do you know the breath you take in immediately after you forgive someone is liberating?...Oh Hell it is!

A biggg relief.!!
Just forgive n forget. Holding grudges is neither healthy for you nor for that person.
It's a waste of time and effort... Life is way more important than all of that!
Shravan's love is pure...You cant hate whom you loves n you cant love for whom you have hatred in your heart.
Word bro!
Her liberation brought me peace too...Mee tooo😃

About Shravan's decision of staying back...This is for the betterment of him.
He can understand himself, his worth , his capacities, capabilities and use them in right direction.
I'm glad you appreciated the thought process that went into it 😃
The way he thought of Sumo, Ramnath and Nanu. To make himself worth that they feel proud...It shows his Love n care for these three most important people of his life. ❤️ ❤️
His markaz!
I guess at this tender age, ShraMan can only see themselves as friends and their hidden love as theur friendship bond.N for now both are content with it n me too 😃
Oh you bet! As they grow the changing dynamics, let's just say will leave you surprised...
ShraMan taking each other's names simultaniously with that content smile on their faces, happy hearts...Just Loveddd it ❤️ ❤️
Me too!
ShraMan's Convo...My heart cried with them, smiled with them and now is content with them.Bas!!
Am at peace.😃
Well then, mission accomplished!
He hated it when she cried but the last statement made her weep more....Shravan Shravan!!
How can you be YOU?!!!
Along with Sumo, my heart cried.
Sowwiii...
Seeing Sumo was never Shravan's thing.No matter what he cant see her tears. They melt him in an instant just like that.Such was their love.

Tera dil itna bada kyun hai?"A question no one had any answer to.
And no one cared either... Nonsense!
Ab itna toh haq banta hai na mera?"
"Haan poora haq banta hai tera.."....Aww!!
Dil le liya Zoya.
Ye dekho...❤️ ❤️
Loveddd it to the core.!!
Dil accepted, lekin ab iska karoon kya😆
Suman had been bowling him googlies and he didn't know what to do with them...Kuch nahi Shravan, you are bowled out.
Hit wicket ho chuka tha woh pehle hi...
Himmat nahi hui.....Oh Sumo.
This Sumo is just pure love ...Or should I say, she is the REAL Sumo!!
WORD!
Darr...The inner Sumo is speaking who is afraid of losing him.
She's lost so much already... She couldn't lose him too...
Tu kehta bhi nahi, mera darr tha,...Aww!!😳
Kya likhti ho Zoya!! 👏
Who knows Shravan better than Sumo?
Shukriya...
Mujhse dosti karegi, phirse?... ❤️
Ek nayi shuruwaat!!
Pakki Dosti, Sacchi Dosti!!
Always waali!
Nahi.. yeh ke library mai tere paas hone ka ehsaas hota tha, padthi thi toh lagta tha tu wahin hai..."...Sumo ❤️❤️
Mera dil...
Want to give you a beary hug ya Sumo. 🤗
Mujhe de de!
Toh wapas aa ja na yaar.."...These types of lines gives real ShraMan feels. ❤️
Love them Zoya...❤️
Thank you hon!
ShraMan's understanding...Oh My My
Their timing...Love it ya ❤️
Sumo is hiding about her parents' debt...Right?
Yup! You got that right!
The ending was too good. ShraMan slept a peaceful sleep ❤️
Yeyy!
Zoya Zoya Zoya Zoya... 🤗 🤗
You are a magician creating a magic with words n hypnotize me with your words.
Ab itna bhi sar pe na chadha!
See...I again wrote a mini OS 😆
Kya karu O Zoya,
Main hu aadat se majboor...
Huzoor huzoor, Main hu aadat se majboor 😆
Did you say Mini OS🤣
Agar yeh Mini hai toh I don't want to know normal size kya hai😆

Ho gayi meri bakwaas puri 😛
Thanks for the pm n cont soon 😊
Always welcome sweets!
But am not gonna unres soon 😛
Exams honge na.😕
Par ha...res karne time par aa jaaungi 😆
Res toh kar hi diya tu ne😉

Loads n loads of Love n tight, bone Crushing 🤗 🤗
Nikka Sa Nik❤️
Lots of hugs back at you!
P.S Kripya ignore the typos😛
There can be mistakes n no proofread 😆
#DramaQueenNik
😛

Originally posted by: _Eternity_

zoyi...awesome update like always..

Ranju meri jaan 🤗

I missed you!

Thank you ji!
title fabulous...in fact loved it..

I'm glad you did!
Eric ah that guy is really cute and understanding...

Haina!
pushkar baby and his Sherlock homes brain..lovely..

Jaan!
finally shraman back to friends and happy..

Happy yes! Friends yes! But who knows when the tables may turn😉
diary note that was so good..

Yeyy!
love it...
thnx for pm dear..

You're welcome!

Originally posted by: amlavs

Unres on PG 47

Originally posted by: bworm

Beautiful. ...their relationship is so beautiful.

Indeed a blessing.

I completely agree with you!

Thank you for the awesome chapter and pm

You're always welcome hon!

Originally posted by: Faith28

Super update zoya... Loved their cute phone convo😊 And eric has become my fav pal😳

I'm glad you're enjoying it! Thank you!

Good shravan decides to stay back...he has lot more to achieve 👍🏼

Absolutely!

Originally posted by: ArpitaSingh1806

Holla!!!

Main yaad hu?

Hopefully haan aur agar nahin to😭

Pehle to I'm really sorry I haven't unressed on 3 chapters straight..that's literally half of the ff..

More? Abhi to padhe bhi nahin...

So here goes my samohik Res for 3 chapters...ek-do din main unres karungi pakka😉

Love

Arpita

Originally posted by: ---awe10some---

Beautiful Zoya

Wonderful writing

Thanks for pm

Originally posted by: devilaonmoon

Unres

Hey! I'm sooo late in commenting! Sorry, dear. 😭 So here I'm giving my reviews for both the chapters.

That's alright Lara, I understand 😛

First of all, I love the titles of your chapters. And also the fact that you're translating the meanings of them in English, I'm learning more beautiful but complex hindi words. ☺️

Urdu, the words are in Urdu😆

And I'm glad you're loving it! I have a thing for one word titles and urdu too, so I'm glad you're loving them!

And now to the best part - the emotions.

My evil mind leaps in happiness whenever one or the both of ShraMan go into

depression mode. 😈 So, yes, I admit I enjoyed reading Suman missed Shravu. And also, how Shravu had all negative mental calculations about Suman's mental status regarding him. All the pent up pain, regret, yearning and every bit of tears truly made the long wait for that damned password recovery process utterly worthwhile. 👏👏👏

Yeyy! I'm glad you liked the nuances! Makes me so happy!

That moment when they finally talked, 😭 their sobs 😃 and the angst- everything about the reunion was epic. 👍🏼

Thank you so much love!

The words with which you ended the chapter left me maha excited to know about that destiny you were talking about. The apt way to end the chap. ⭐️

That bit will take a while to unfold. Destiny ain't hasty, is she?

Now, the next chapter starts with my fav side character in this story - Eric bhai. 😃

"Blinding grin", damn I love Eric! 😆

Itna ke bhai bana diya😆

Finally, everything is right between the Shraman. I'm now hoping for a long distance relationship - of some sort? So eager to know what happens now.

Ummm... We'll see about that😉

A little request, or something that in my opinion would flourish your writing more - that is... more actions and expressions tagged with the dialogues. So that, I can see their faces (and sometimes surroundings) when I'm reading. Like a lift of brow when he is amused or her twitching of lips when she's fighting a smile or biting lip - you see... more of these stuff. I know it's double the work, but that's a desire of mine to read more from you. 😳 While the dialogues are already apt, I'm moreover wanting to see their expressions as they speak. I want to see Shraman how you imagine them while they talk in your mind.

Lara trust me I want to do that, but the time I find, it's a miracle I get an update ready. I've tried something different, with minimal dialogues in the last OS of Mrs. and Mr. Malhotra, I think you haven't gotten to reading it yet. Check that out, you might like it. And I am trying to incorporate expressions as you asked... Let's see how well I can handle it...

I guess I'm irritating you being so demanding! 😭😕 But can't help it, you see. Your potential makes me want to demand from you more.😃

Not at all. I like honest opinions, so please keep them coming!

Pheww..., that's it for now.

Lots of love and hugs,

Lara.