ShraMan FF: Holding You, (C18 pg 102)

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CarpeDiem_365

@CarpeDiem_365

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Posted: 8 years ago

#371

A long and lovely update! !

Beautifully penned !!

Thanks for pm!

Ramadan Mubarak! !❤️

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Nik03

@Nik03

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Posted: 8 years ago

#372

FF...😃

I knew it!!!!

Will read and comment as soon as I can.

Bit busy ...that's why no res yet!!

Ramadan Mubarak dear😊

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Ranified009

@Ranified009

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Posted: 8 years ago

#373

How beautiful this is, and very realistic for the kind of relationship they share. Pure bliss, please continue soon😳

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Faith28

@Faith28

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Posted: 8 years ago

#374

Beautifully penned👏 Every emotion was bang on... Glad he shared hes innermost feelings with sumo.

Superbly written lengthy(which im glad of) update 😳

The story is developing so well...pls write soon😊

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KitkitMkb

@KitkitMkb

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+ 2

Posted: 8 years ago

#375

Originally posted by: SummerRain7
This story is undoubtedly one of the best ShraMan stories that I have come across in recent times .
This is one of the sweetest comment I have ever read

I wandered to this forum looking for a light romantic read.

There is plenty of time for that 😆
But once I started reading , I just couldn't put it down although it was heart wrenching and heavy on emotions.
I feel that the show ended really high on emotions, just following it ;)
You are an amazing writer !! You have portrayed the emotions and actions of the characters so convincingly , something that the makers of the show failed to do.
My favourite chapter is the one where Shravan is running and reflecting. How he sifts through his own emotions and actions , tries to think from Suman's POV , failing to understand but still trying . It was amazingly done! I am also glad that Sumo realized where she went wrong. She may have refused Ramnath's cheque but she did choose her own family over him. In a way I get why she did that but that doesnt mean it would hurt Shravan any less. Last chapter was amazing too.Shravan is beginning to heal and I look forward to their emotional reunion . They are two imperfect people longing to belong .

I am so glad that I came across this story . Now eagerly looking forward to the next chapter.

Thank you so so much, the chapter has been updated ;)

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Spandana

@sptrno

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Posted: 8 years ago

#376

AWWW THIS IS SOOO FREAKING BEAUTIFUL EMOTIONAL INTENSE HEART-TOUCHING AMAZING FAB LOVELY AWESOME FANTASTIC WONDERFUL...KUDOS TO YOU GIRL FOR SUCH A WONDERFUL BEAUTIFUL CLASSIC...THANK YOU SO MUCH HUN...KEEP WRITING PLEASEEE...So sorry for the caps but I had to or else it would be injustice to your Masterpiece!

So sorry for the late reply dear...

Lots of love hugs,

Spandana

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KitkitMkb

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+ 2

Posted: 8 years ago

#377

Originally posted by: ZehriliChidiya
First of all biggest sorry for not reading this before...I never got a PM for this issiliye shayad chut gaya...Sorrie😳
So I read till Chappy 4..U r an amazing writer my dea...!!!Juz spell bounding yaar👏👏👏
Beautiful dialogues..awesome scenes...!!👏I am in love with ur writing and this story too😃
So I read 4 in a go and loved it a lot...
When he took her in their room as she was in the courtyard...That one was amazingly penned..!!!👏
Their deal👍🏼
He didn't take care of her in the party...So we got a drunk Sumo😆
Drunken Sumo is always a fun to read and you have made that scene very beautiful yaar🤗
U have penned Shravan agony in chappy 4 so so marvelously man hats off...his convo with Nimmo.Heart touching and breaking too💔

 "You weren't there when it was all chaos and dark,
you decide to come when there is facility when you see the light at the
end of the tunnel, because you can't deal with the bad side and that's
not love. When you love someone, you deal with every side, every aspect
of their personality, you accept the whole of them you don't give up at a
drop of a hat."

I so so wanted him to say this yaar.Finally he told nimmo that he loved sumo Atleast to nimmo...
ShraMan convo in the courtyard❤️❤️❤️❤️
These 4 chappies were amazingly penned and now I run for the next to read...
And I request u to PM me the updates😳
Anu😃

Thank you so much Anu ❤️
Those lines you quoted are my one of my favorite ;)
I'll buddy you :)

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deltadawn

@deltadawn

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Posted: 8 years ago

#378

Res.

Ye din bhi a gaya that I have to wait to comment on this beauty

----unress

but I cant wait longer so here I am !!😃

You know what I absolutely love about you and this story. the emotional details of it that you never lose out on. there is no haste while you paint this one. steady hands doc !!👏

For Shravan the discovery that Suman loved him is a new lease on life. From where he stood and was trying to recover from, that moment came at such a great time. It can lift spirits manifold which it seems to have.

But Nimmo has to be Nimmo. As a parent always failing to see what is needed and what is wanted.

But good though that Shravan no longer relies on only that corner for emotional support. He has a stronger pillar in Suman now and he did figure it out. Good job there Sal. Anyway shaadi ke baad priorities to badal hi jaati hain insaan ki.😆

Sumo's take on independence. I do agree with it because she said it. If Nimmo had given this justification she would get a tight slap from me.

Independence is only needed when there is a lack of freedom. Otherwise in a family there should always be interdependence. Its about priorities. And no one is making the world a better place by holding on to their jobs as CEOs or Managers of the corporate world so save the gab. Its money we all need and if there is a bigger priority than money then pick it for the sake of love. For Sumo, her priority was a debt, her priority was to not be dependent on her relatives so she is right.

Shravan's defence of his wife. I love him. ❤️ Doesn't mean he needs to understand his excuse of a mother on the same lines. He is released from the shackles of trying to fix it with his non existent mother by delta here😉

As for the beautiful man here holding on to the poor little girl who was underappreciated by all. My heart goes out to the couple. They really need to hold on to each other cause nothing in the nearest vicinity reflects any love or care.

Beautiful update Sal.

Ramadan Mubarak🤗

Edited by deltadawn - 8 years ago

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PrincessAshVik

@PrincessAshVik

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Posted: 8 years ago

#379

Hey!!!

Ramadhan Mubarak to you too!! Have a blessed month!!

This was heartbreaking yet beautiful!!

I always hated Nirmala. And the first part of this chapter proved exactly why. If the show wasn't rushed, I can imagine her doing exactly what she did here. There's a monologue you gave during the scene which was heart wrenching but beautifully written. I could just cry for Shravan. His mum has just taken him for granted. She had and she is. And it's just sad because he is such an amazing being. The type of a child a mum can be proud of. Yeah he has his faults. He has made big (an understatement) mistakes, but something he may never had done if he had the presence of either of the 2 women (or even both) he loves so much, in his life at the crucial juncture when he actually did not.

The remaining chapter was so beautiful and happy. Yeah it had its sad moments but the happy ones were so much bigger!!! They give each other so much happiness. He does not want to burden her and he comes first for her. They have come such a long way from him wanting to hurt her and her putting everybody before him. Sigh. And you have shown that transition so well!!!

My favourite kind of scenes are when a partner is defending the other half when they are not in the scene but around overhearing. And you had this here!! I LOVED it!! The way he stood up for her!!! And her crying in relief, her pain hidden from him.

This was such a beautiful chapter!!!

P.S: I have never asked you this before, what's your name?

Edited by PrincessAshVik - 8 years ago