Mil Jaate Hai Jo Bane, Ek Duje Ke Vaaste- Alternate ending - Completed

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Wiccamaya

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Posted: 8 years ago

#21

Jo, this is amazing ... alternate ending... and so sweet ... different. waiting for more ... ... bless you these are lifelines after show . keep writing.😊👏

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Flibbertigibbet

@Flibbertigibbet

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Posted: 8 years ago

#22

Okay so. I had to read this more than once to calm the f**k down. BECAUSE OH LORDY LORD!!

* running around screaming aaa with a stupid grin, giddy eyed, bumping into walls and jazz hands*

This was so good, i almost jumped with excitement but i already have my sister judging me hardcore for smiling too much into my screen at this time of the night XD

THIS WAS SOME NEXT LEVEL AMAZEBALLSSS!!!!!

I love it so much i dont have words sorry.

Flibb surrenders! *haath upar*

The emotions, the words, everything.

The flibbertigibbet has been renderred speechless!

Thanks for that. That amazing vision. And that towel wala shravan vision. *dreamy eyed* i'm having too much fun with this XD

Honestly, Stunning piece zoyu! Cant wait to read more!

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Mitali Gupta

@SleepyPsycho

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Posted: 8 years ago

#23

Res

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Unress

Sorry,Sorry for being this late but never the less here I am.

Oreo,dil jeet liya wapas,you did magic!

You laid out all emotions be it sad,pain,physical proximity,care,concern and the fun elements with utter perfection.

I loved it so much that I lack words to say how much I loved it.

I loved how Sumo did not care about treating Shravan while he sans any shirt and how she didn't give a damn about him yelling Ber yo keep distance.Too much fun

The best would be when she is like 'Heart attack'? And he is like what? And then she says ke 'Dil ka Daura aya hai tumhe' LMAOO!

This was epic.

First went high on emotion then high on concern and then loved how both melted for each other.

Over all it was mind blowing.

Update Soon haan?

Edited by SleepyPsycho - 8 years ago

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Ayesha

@notready.

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Posted: 8 years ago

#24

This was brilliant, Zoya!

The bathroom part 😆 so lighthearted and cute.

Can't wait for the next part :D

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Shambhavi

@lazyshambhavi

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Posted: 8 years ago

#25

wow!wow!wow!

Spellbounded!!!!!👏

l am captivated by this

I like the way story is shaping.

The whole chappy left mel blushing😳

Aditya is such a jerk😡

"ab yahan dard nahin hota,Sumo"-so simple,yet so powerful line.My favourite

shukriya for the gupt sandesh😆

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seabeauty

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Posted: 8 years ago

#26

It's good that you took it in your hands to give the story a nice end

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san2471

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Posted: 8 years ago

#27

Waiting for the next part. Caring for each other after that dil pe ghusa was beautifully explained.

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avni01

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Posted: 8 years ago

#28

That was a cracking last line fighting with someone you love better than making love to someone else. Awesome update. Pls continue.

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Roshni2015

@Roshni2015

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Posted: 8 years ago

#29

Zoya,

Come here.. Wanna give you a big hug for writing this... Alternate ending n how!!!

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Shravan speaks up against Sumo's illogical rant if him being only due to his dad's money... I so wanted that on the show.. That episode had smoke coming out of my ears!!!

The towel scene... Yayy!!

These stories on SS are life savers... They keep SS alive ...

Loved reading this...

And Zoya, yaar if I say that I love you again... It will be scandalous... But still I do... Coz your stories make me feel happy...

It was amazing reading this...

Cheers!!