SS : Love is like the Wind. *COMPELTED* - Page 8

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Posted: 12 years ago
#71
Read all 3 parts together
wow ur awesome
love this SS
raghu is caring but in a different n harsh way
but the care is still there from both sides
im so excited to read this further
plz accept my buddy request
n do pm me next part
update quickly 😉
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Posted: 12 years ago
#72
hey Rachel😊

Just read all the parts and they were fabulous👏

Keep up the good work buddy👍🏼
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Posted: 12 years ago
#73
I just read the first part and i loved it. I like your presentation technique. You write in full sentences. I liked that. Keep writing and do PM me.
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Posted: 12 years ago
#74
I just loved the second part. Simply superb. And you are right. Without hindi dialogue, the story seems less realistic. Please keep on writing dialogues in hindi.
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Posted: 12 years ago
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Thanks all. Part - 4(The last one hopefully) today.😊
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Posted: 12 years ago
#76
Read the third part. The dialogues are well written and are in character. Loved it. Keep on writing.
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Posted: 12 years ago
#77

Originally posted by: LaLaLand.rd

Thanks all. Part - 4(The last one hopefully) today.😊



waiting.. 😃😃😃
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Posted: 12 years ago
#78

very nicely written story. you've captured their dialogues bang on. thanks for the weekend long episode. now lets see if the cvs live up to your level. well done. waiting for more

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Posted: 12 years ago
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Part - 4 guys! I thought I should complete it before the actual show moves ahead of the on-going sequence because then it would be of no use writing all of this. I took out time from my other important works in order to make this up. Part - 5 within half an hour. Until then, I hope you like this short one.
This is the moment when Raghu's heart skips a beat. He gets lost in her beauty. In complete amazement, he lies on top of her. Antara suddenly feels the warmth of his hands on her back and opens her eyes up and finds Raghu over her. Her eyes catch hold of Raghu's eyes(dwindled and trapped) and there is a profound static eyelock. Suddenly, Raghu hears the sound of someone's footsteps and the stirring of leaves. He stands up at once and lends his hand to Antara for support. Antara gets up too. Raghu looks around to find out the source of sound, when he sees one of Shetty's man approaching him.

Raghu : *Pulls Antara close to him and whispers* Shetty's man nearby. Let us creep into the forest.

Antara : *Without a control in her voice* Ramiah Shetty? Here? But how?

Raghu puts his hand on her mouth and they share another eyelock. Raghu looks away in anger and orders her to keep shut.

Shetty's man overhears her voice and tries to locate them.

Raghu : *His hand still on her mouth and in a low husky voice* Sawaalon ki rani, muh band kar le thodi der warna tere tapakne ke baad tere gharwale jindagi bhar jawaab mangenge mujhse.

Antara who dislikes Raghu's answers, is annoyed again. She speaks in her brain, "Hey bhagwaan! Jaldi se mujhe ghar pahuncha do."

Raghu holds her hand and catapults through the woods. He takes quick and careful steps but Antara is dawdling down and figuring out a safe way.

Shetty's man is joined by Shetty and two more men. They all are following Raghu and Antara.

Raghu who is still unaware about it, turns back to see if they are out of danger, and finds out Shetty's man not far from them.

He lifts Antara up in his arms and paces up.

While Raghu is in huge tension, perturbed and trying his level best to locate the way out, Antara, in his arms, looks up to his face and tipping emotions ingrain her heart and mind. She feels safe, comfortable and assured in his arms.

Just then, Raghu looks down, still holding her close to his chest, he can see that gleaming chastity in her eyes. He stops for a moment, Mera Maahi in the background, they stare at each other only when in the interim, Raghu finds Shetty and his men, decked up in prowess, lingering very close to them.

Edited by LaLaLand.rd - 12 years ago
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Posted: 12 years ago
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Part - 5 :
Raghu starts running, and due to commotion and the FAST that Antara has been apparently observing, she feels dizzy.

Antara : Raghu please stop somewhere. I am not feeling well. I feel'giddy.

Raghu : *Replies succinctly* Antara this is not the right time to talk. We are in danger.

Antara : *Keeping her hand across her forehead* Raghu''

Raghu : *Yells gently* Thodi der chup reh na miss call'I can see the rooftop of a shed. We might find something. Let us reach fast.

Raghu turns back to see Shetty and his men. He is not able to locate them anywhere around. He relaxes a bit in his mind and keeps taking big steps ahead.

Antara faints. Raghu experiences a sudden impetus on his left arm. He realizes that something is wrong with her.

He taps her face gently two-three times and calls out her name before he figures out that she has become unconscious.

Raghu : *To himself* Isko kya hogaya. Abhi tak toh theek thi. Chali bhi nahi hai jyada.

And he suddenly remembers that she has been fasting.

Raghu : *Again to himself* Tchech'Iska toh vo vrat tha'ab kya karun.

He again taps her cheeks. *Antara uth, uth Antara*

Raghu feels that it is not right to delay since her health might get worse, he continues towards the shed. This time his speed is faster than ever. The concern and tension is evident on his face.

He reaches the shed with Antara. He can see a small beach nearby. He locates a tattered cloth hanging in a corner. He takes it, spreads it on the floor inside the shed and places Antara on it with utmost care (he remembers her wound). He hurriedly comes out of the shed, trying to find something in which water can be brought. He finds a bottle lying around. He rushes to the beach in order to get water.

Raghu sprinkles water on Antara's face and taps her cheeks. Antara regains consciousness and with half-opened eyes, she can see Raghu very close to her. As Raghu bends closer to support her in getting up, their lips are only a cm away. Raghu gets struck at that position and they share an intense eyelock (Mera Maahi in the background). Raghu upraises her against the wall of the shed. Antara can feel his hands on her back. For the first time, she does not react to it. They look at each other. Raghu takes his hands off her back and moves away. He stands up and turns around.Raghu takes his cell phone out to give a call to MachMach. He finds out that they are out of the coverage area rather he is astounded to see the time. It is very late at night. He realizes that they will have to spend the whole night in the shed.

Antara : *In a soft and light tone* Raghu?

Raghu : Thankyou mat bolna miss call. Vo kya hai na tu jakhmi hai aur bhuki bhi'aur kya jarurat thi tereko ye vrat rakhne ki...tereko kya kisi ko impress karne ko mangta?

Antara : *In a very sweet, soothing, innocent yet explanatory tone* Ye vrat maine apni mummy ke liye rakha tha. Jeevansaathi vo har insaan hota hai jise hum pure dil se pyaar karte hain aur jo hamari jindagi ka hissa ho. Papa ke jaane ke baad, Mumma ki jo tabiyat kharaab hui hai, usne mujhe bahut dara dia hai. Main unhe nahi khona chahti hun. Islie unki tabiyat jaldi theek ho jaye aur vo pehle ki tarah khush rehne lagein, islie maine ye vat rakha.

Raghu : Vo sab toh theek hai'par tujhe apni tabiyat ka bhi toh khayal rakhna chahie. Ab vo kya hai na..tu pura din aaji ka dhyaan rakhti hai,'(He stops abruptly)

Antara realizes that the dancing competition has again got into his nerves.She doesn't revert back anything.

Raghu : Tu yahan pe hi ruk. Main aas-paas dhundta hun kuch khaane peene ka.

Antara : Yahan akele?

Raghu : Sher ko saath baitha ke jaun?

Antara : *Frowns* Nahi par'

Raghu goes near her and lifts her up and comes out of the shed.

Raghu : Ab khush?

Antara doesn't reply and is totally confused.

Antara : *After sometime* I can walk.

Raghu : *Puts her down* Okay. Watch your steps. Be at ease.

They are wandering around in the beach area in search of a stall or two but fail to find any. Moreover, because of lil' moonlight, it is difficult for them to traverse. It suddenly strikes Raghu that he can fetch coconuts, since there are coconut trees all around.

Raghu : You sit down near that tree. I'll fetch some coconuts until then.

Antara : But your hand is hurt. How will you climb?

Raghu : Aye miss call'mujhe lagta tha tere paas thoda dimaag hai par aaj pehli baar main galat saabit ho gaya.Yahan itne saare naariyal gire hain. Main unhe utha ke launga. Kuch nahi se kuch sahi.

Antara is again irritated to hear his reply but ignores.

Antara : Hm. Theek hai. Par door mat jana.

Raghu brings along four coconuts and a piece of wood.He sits beside Antara. He makes holes in all the coconuts and places those against the wall. He picks up one and holds it near Antara's mouth.

Raghu : Have it.

Antara : Hand it over to me. I can have it myself.

Raghu : *Yells* I said have it.

Antara, who is muddled up and scared, listens to him at once,closes her eyes and starts drinking it.

Raghu keeps picking up the coconuts one after the other and Antara who is so thirsty and hungry doesn't realize that she has drank water from four coconuts. After that, Raghu breaks the coconuts into two parts, scrapes the coconuts' cream and gives it to Antara.

Antara : You also have something.

Raghu : Neither am I hungry nor thirsty. All the tension and drama has already filled me up.

Antara feels bad on hearing this. She stops eating the cream.

Antara : *Requests* Please Raghu, have some.

Raghu : Bola na tereko. Nahi khana mujhe.

Antara : Please have it. We have to wait here until tomorrow. And we are not even certain that we will find a way out early tomorrow. I'll feel better if you have some.

Raghu takes the cream that Antara is offering him.There is a silence for a while.

Raghu : *Breaking the silence but looking away* Do not worry. Tomorrow morning, I'll try to locate the network area and inform MachMach. We will find a way out to the town. He will come and pick us up from there.

As Raghu assures Antara and turns towards her, he finds her looking at him. And on the sandy secluded beach, away from indiscreet eyes, under the stars-lit sky, amidst the beautiful night,they share the most passionate eyelock.

Antara : *Getting back in the moment* Raghu? Let us go back to the shed.

Raghu : Ummm..yeah.

And he gets up and lends her his hand. She gets up too. And they leave.

On reaching the shed, Antara is still embarrassed to share the same place with him the whole night.

Antara : Raghu'tum?

Raghu : Tu chinta mat kar. Main bahar baith jaunga. Tu aaraam se so ja andar. Koi bhi pareshaani hogi toh mujhe bata dena.

Antara : Thankyou.

Raghu : Han. Theek hai. Aur ek baat'ye mat sochna ki maine tujhe maaf kar diya hai. Abhi bhi sab mere dimaag main achhe se hai. Baaki baatein wapis pahuchke karenge. Ab so ja.

Raghu sits outside the shed while Antara goes inside. She lays down. Raghu's last words are disturbing her. Suddenly she hears Raghu(who thinks that Antara is asleep) humming the tune of her song. She smiles and falls asleep in a while.

Raghu falls asleep too.

Pseudo-Epilogue : The next morning, they wake up and start off to find out the way to the town. Raghu informs MachMach. They reach a slum area of Mumbai. Raghu calls up MachMach, tells him about their location and asks him to come over and pick them up. They reach back home. Everybody is happy to see them back safely.

P.S. Sorry people. I stretched it too long, I guess. Do not kill me if it bores you to death. I was running out of time so ended it up here. Thanks for your time and comments. Drop in your views and keep reading.

Enjoy. Stay Happy. Love all.

Rachel.

Edited by LaLaLand.rd - 12 years ago

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