Samyukta 1&2-Dharam and Veer-Story so far - Page 2

Originally posted by: dee7

wow, lashy i am trying to find words to describe how beautifully you have written 👏 👏 👏

I think you should be the script writer of Dharam Veer as you are covering all aspects of their lives from their background, families and the strong friendship bond developing between them. 😊

I loved the way you have described the history of Aryavrats and Shramiks and how their roles changed as the monarch's changed.

I also loved the way you describe 👏 :

the reason for the folklore of "messiah" the way the tearful daughter runs after her brother, I can imagine the pain of both mother and daughter letting go of their only son. the oath taken by sunanda and once that oath is broken "havoc" will be caused in everyone's lives the scenes of Veer and Dharam growing up together and a "Veer pleading innocence to all mischief, echo" i think everyone will go 😍 😍 😍 over these scenes. I can so imagine veer enjoying doing mischiefs and dharam trying to defend him. me so wanted to see these scenes as it would have made the audience more connected to Dharam and Veer how they went to the ashram to study and how protective and inseparable they are 👏 their friendship with bhalla
• how one is like Shri Ram, following promises and duties and the other like Lord Krishna fighting for the right cause. described so lovely 👏 👏

and how once their bubble bursts with the truth coming out leads them a few steps closer to reality. 😊

Originally posted by: 2773696

Its awesome and wonderful....please keep on writing...maybe later on you can make a collection and change them into a book of long stories or novels.....i am amazed by your vocabulary and creativity skills...i can actually imagine everything.....i dont know what else to say.....i am in short of words....if you plan to write more please post it on IF....even if it is not related to dv.....post them somewhere where i can read them.....or you can pm me...and if you wrote any fan-fics in prc forum please gimme the links or sth....so that i can read them.... 👏

thank you both so much for appreciating my efforts so ardently... its always a pleasure to see both of your comments here... 😳 almost like an additional shot of adrenaline to do the next piece.. 😆 warnaa likhnaa main tho bahut time lagtaa hai yaar..

but thank you both a lotttttttttt 😳

Originally posted by: raiinie

Wondefully written! 👏 👏

This story kinda reminds me of 'The Prince of Egypt' isit by any chance made of it or is this based on factual events!? 😃

hee hee personally i wouldnt copy it if it was my own.. i was just writing a brief history-intro of the story that i am setting out to write... and that based on plugging the leaking holes left by the sagars -

so yes they decided to base the history of their story on moses and the testament.. 😆 i just hope to |Lord we dont end up seeing RT in baba waala dresses a stick and parting the seas to save the shramiks..

(P.S. I am not even trying to mock the great saint Moses😳... just that that story wouldnt suit DV)

hmm seems like something tasty for my grey cells 😉 ...will check it out & reply...long post so will take time to comment 😛

woooow!!!!!!!
amazing one Lashy di 😃 😃 😃
juss kept me spellbound!!!! 😳 u knoww ur words made me picturize the whole scene in mind!!!!! 😳 😳 itzz simplyy amazin!!!! 😃 😃
continuee....cant wait wtt will hppn nowww 😆

awesome work lash, u always leave us speechless 👏

Hey awesome story lashy!! 👏 👏 👏 update soon 😊

Fantastic 👏 👏 👏 Keep it up..Very well written.

thankooo prcfan, ron and ketaki, zunny, diya, minnie, dil and aditi 😳

i am trying to keep a deadline.. as in every friday evening probably to update an episode.. dekhthe hain kitna door hota hai as im doing it for the first time.. but your comments are all lovely and really encouraging.. 😃

Originally posted by: *Jr.Nancy_drew*

Good lord!!

you are just incredible!!you have explained it all so ably and it is anything but captivating!even though the whole frame discusses more about the serious situation of the times you have emoted the feelings extremely near to heart...

aww... you rock!!

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thankooo pumpkin 😳 🤗🤗🤗your comments rock too

Originally posted by: kirantarani2007

oh my god this is awesome lashy......i am completely speechless.....if the serial was just like u hv described to phir to mein sara din video pe repeat hi repeat dekh ti..........its just so beautiful

awwww how i wish too ..... id have made all my wishes and *ahem* your wishes come true 😆 too

oh my god lashy di u write so good 👏 👏 👏
so descriptive, wish i could write like u
infront of u my writing ...let just say sucks badly 🤢

oh my god u r soooooooooo goooooooood

pls write the next part soon i am waiting impatiently 😆

Keep it up 👏

CHing 😃

Whoa!! 👏 That's awesome!The flow is so perfect and rhythmic,unlike the serial where things are just so randomly done with no background work.I must say,we can just read Shraddha's stories,they are so beautifully done with all the minutes added , then there will be no need to waste our 30min everyday on watching the serial which has so much bloopers 🤢 .
Thanks dear 😳