Samyukta 1&2-Dharam and Veer-Story so far

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OSR~Samyukta~.::Dharam and Veer::.

A historical tale...of brotherhood…of love...and of ideals

I have dedicated this story to the name Samyukta which signifies togetherness, unison and interdependance. This story is set in 13th century Northern India. It is a story of two cousin brothers - one royal, the son of the ruling monarch (Dharam) and other one brought up as a royal (Veer). The story is no doubt about the trials and tribulations that the brothers face, about their ideals, their relationships and their circumstances - However, the underlying message of the story being that unity is victory!

Hence named - Samyukta of Dharam and Veer

OSR Samyukta part 1 - Introduction - The setting of the story so far...

Since the story begins with an incident in the lives of the boys after their schooling and education (Gurukul), I have etched a brief introduction of the kingdoms (Part 1) and the growing up and lifestyle of the princes up and until that point of time...

Hundreds of years ago, in about the 13th century AD; there were independent peaceful clusters of cities situated towards the Northern boundaries of the Indian subcontinent. These cities governed by local chieftains, were primarily inhabited by Shramiks; the very name reflecting their class and livelihood (Shramik = worker) The arid climate signified that the society's economy depended principally on metallurgical, sculpting and constructional skill trading, in exchange for spices, grains and cotton.

Eventually, the harmony of these clans was threatened with constant invasions by more powerful neighbouring kingdoms. One such powerful kingdom ruled by a dynasty called the Aryavarts (derived from the word Arya-noble i.e. people who considered themselves Aryan descendants) were successful in asserting their power over a large area. Time and again, rebellious chieftans were ousted and one large kingdom was formed – the kingdom of Aryanagar; with its capital, the city of Aryanagar.

Originally, what seemed to be a genuine attempt at maintaining unity within the Shramiks and organizing trade, helped to maintain a brief consistency in the economy. However, one after the other; as monarchs became increasingly indulgent in royal pleasures, they raised taxes on the commoners and gradually usurped even their basic rights. Shramiks were reduced to no more than slaves used in construction of lavish structures. This gave rise to blind hope in the form of folklore amidst the Shramiks about the arrival of a saviour or a messiah to rescue them from eternal bondage.

The 15th century saw the crowning of an underachieving monarch Aryavardhan, who was a mere puppet at the hands of his vindictive older brother Jaivardhan. Aryvardhan was controversially chosen for the throne due to a fall out between Jaivardhan and the assembly nobles when they questioned him about the escalating brutality in his governance.

The torturous rule led to the immediate thwarting of mounting pockets of resistance by disgruntled Shramiks. One such brave rebel leader Mahadev was brutally murdered in front of the entire city to see, including his pregnant wife, Pari and young daughter, Sakshi.

Few days later, during an eve of royal family celebration with the monarchs' firstborns Dharam (son of Aryavardhan) and Agnivardhan (son of Jaivardhan); a soothsayer approached Jaivardhan to reveal a dark vision. He uncovered his fears about the birth of a Shramik child that would be capable of bringing an end to the menacing rule of the Aryavart lineage. To ensure that the words of the soothsayer were never proved true, the vicious Jaivardhan covertly ordered the death of all Shramik newborns to take place during the middle of the night.

Trying to flee from the cruel havoc caused in the cities and villages, Mahadev's wife, Pari; was one of the many mothers who tried to escape with her two children that night. The long winding pursuit took her to the powerful Aryavart temple of Shankarnath. Fearing for the safety of her children, the desperate mother offered her child at the Lord's feet, crying out to him to protect her son and the Shramiks from the torturous regime. However, the hastening soldiers left the grieving mother with little choice but to place the baby in a flower basket and let go of it in the river nearby. Unable to give up her brother, the tearful young Sakshi follows the course of the basket along the banks of the river, not minding the calls of her worried mother.

At a considerable distance away in the same river, the widowed sister of Aryavardhan and Jaivardhan, Nivritti; stood defeated as she drowned her miscarried infant in the cold water. Having lost her two sons, husband and her kingdom to rival fractions, she decided to end her woeful lonely life along with her baby in the strong currents. As she waddled lifelessly in chin-deep water, a basket gushing through the water caught her attention. As fate would have it, she grabbed on to it and was shocked to find it cradling a healthy new born baby, wailing aloud. In a frenzy of deprived maternal emotions, she hugged the baby tearfully, wanting to claim it as her own.

The puzzled sister observing this spectacle from the other end of the bank felt a wave of inexplicable relief, as she saw her brother subjected to luxuries and emotions that she was never fortunate enough to be blessed with.

Suddenly distracted by the distraught cries of her maid servant Sunanda, the horrified Nivritti decided to rush back towards the bank, with the bundle of joy and the new responsibility in her arms. After rescuing and reprimanding her mistress for worrying her family and palace residents, the shocked maid; Sunanda noticed the Shramik child in Nivritti's hand. The desperate Nivritti then took an oath from her alarmed maid, ordering her to maintain the secrecy of her child's origin.Thus began the fateful pledge of an Aryavart mother that would change the course of history of the Aryavart dynasty.

Introduced to the relieved family as Nivritti's own, the baby is then officially named in a formal ceremony as Veervardhan i.e. Veer.

As the months go by, scenes of Veer holding the little finger of Dharam while taking his first steps, agni hiding a saddened Dharam's toys and Veer pleading innocence to all mischief; echo laughters of joy in the palace rooms. The princes grow up to be the apple of their parent's eyes enjoying all comforts of the palace, while the life of the Shramiks outside is anything but. Veer's Shramik family are reduced to catching a few glimpses of him growing up, as the young royals are rarely allowed to step out of the royal gardens.

As they approach their sixth year, the princes are sent to the Ashram of the revered sage Brahmadatta to gain knowledge in all aspects of politics, language, literature, war, art and religion. Dharam, true to his name and upbringing; excels in politics and shastras, thus displaying stiff competition to Agni and all other fellow Gurukul members in lessons and scriptures. Veer on the other hand grows to be rebellious, consequentially suffering punishment many a time at the hands of his Guruji. However, his unsurpassed courage and intelligent instincts on the play-fields make him a fiercely competitive warrior, leaving even his tutors amazed. Dharam and Veer remain inseparable and supplement each other's weaknesses when and wherever necessary. Much to the dismay of Agni, the brothers grow up to become incredibly protective and fiercely defensive of the other. They also strike friendship with a fellow Aryvart noble's son, Balaram i.e. Bhalla.

On the day of their departure from the ashram, their tutor blesses them to be together for ever and to take their kingdom to greater heights – one like Shri Ram, following promises and duties and the other like Lord Krishna, fighting for the right cause.

The three princes come home to a royal welcome and celebration, where the onlookers include Veer's jubilant Shramik family. They spend their initial days in fun and frolic, occasionally joined by Bhalla too; where their games and adventures chiefly include competing with and distressing Agni and his disgruntled group of friends. In this process, many-a-time they end up undoing the propaganda of the irked king, having to consequentially make up for all of it. Their shielded and spoilt youth results in the fact that they hardly pay second thoughts to the immoral happenings in the kingdom around them. Many months pass by in such frisky mischief, until one fine day, one of their pursuits; bursts their bubble and leads them a few steps closer to reality...

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This is an outline of the family and the characters (for those who dont follow the serial)

Characters of Dharam Veer

Dharmavardhan (Dharam) – Dashing, handsome, matured, patient, obedient, responsible, truthful, a perfect gentleman proud of his lineage. He is a very good fighter, but duty always comes before anything else for this true prince. Of traditional beliefs, he believes that a well-organized class system works for the betterment of society.

Veervardhan (Veer) – Vivacious, naughty, adorable, brave, short-tempered, adventurous, impatient, impulsive, protective, emotional and a courageous prince, who has no qualms about questioning authority; if the situation demanded it. He is an excellent fighter but tends to use his heart over his head on some occassions. He admires simplicity, even though his bringing up was in a royal household.

Aryavardhan – The king of Aryanagar! Though not cruel at heart and always seeking to set an ideal organized society, he is weak and always depends on his older brother to make his decisions for him. He blindly trusts his older brother in the running of the empire, thus unable to be an independent strong ruler.

Jaivardhan (Jai)– Extremely ambitious, evil and a hateful monarch, jealous of his younger brother's accession to the throne. He is cruel to the Shramiks, greedy for power and protective of his son. He would go to any lengths to achieve what he sets out to.

Agnivardhan (Agni) – Jealous of Dharam and Veer's friendship and popularity, the son of Jaivardhan doesn't think very different from his father. He is as cruel, if not more than his father. He lacks any conscience about committing every crime that would lead to the destruction of Dharam and Veer, and lead to his succession to the throne.

Nivritti – She fears for Veer day and night, as she is aware that if the truth of his birth is known to her brothers; they would destroy him in no time. A loving and caring mother to Veer, with great respect for Dharam too.

Swathi - Of traditional beliefs, Swathi is affectionate towards her family and an ideal queen for Aryanagar. A good friend to Nivritti, she manages both her affairs and her family with equal ease.

The original family of Veer -

Mahadev – The Shramik father of Veer – a rebel leader, killed in his youth

Pari – The Shramik mother of Veer who is very protective of her children. She doesn't want Veer's origin to be known to anyone, in fear of the fact that he might be killed by the Aryavarts, once revealed.

Sakshi – The shramik sister of Veer, who is as rebellious, independant and short tempered as he is.

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OSR Samyukta Part 2 - A rude awakening ...

The two princes race against each other vigorously, as sweat trickles from the brows of their muddy faces. Fleeting through the rough terrains and increasingly shabby lanes that the elongated game has taken them through, the persistent princes continue; oblivious to the dipping light. Eventually, a considerable distance from the centre of the kingdom, dejection begins to set in about not having been able to locate the route to Agni's treasure. As the game begins losing its charm; Dharam and Veer become discomforted by the escalating unfamiliarity of the silhouettes and they reduce their pace to a trot.

Dharam looks at Veer pleadingly for approval "It's getting very dark…shall we sop now… everyone at the palace must be getting worried... it is going to take us a while to get back...."

Veer smiles "Ok…but we will start again tomorrow...even earlier...what do you think?"

Dharam smiles thankfully "We would need to ask someone the quickest route back home though… "

Looking at Dharam's sunken face, Veer trots around the deserted place in circles and then mutters "You wait here… I will quickly locate someone to help us with directions...I will be back in a short while..."

No sooner than Dharam endeavours to stop him, Veer kicks his horse briskly and rides off to enquire. Dharam nods his head and tugs the reigns of his restless horse in an attempt to calm it, while he waits patiently in the dark for Veer's return. A few moments later, a faint sound of muffled cries alerts him and he quickly darts around to locate the direction of the noise. As the cries echoing through the dense shrubbery become increasingly prominent, he descends from his horse stealthily and leads it to a tree nearby. He pacifies his tired steed by whispering into its ears and then fastens its reigns to the branches of the tree.

Clinching to the hilt of his sword, he tip toes through the rustling leaves and shrubbery. Peaking through the branches of a tree, he is taken aback to find the scarred faces of three ruffians glaring at him. The royal observes how the thugs were tightly holding down and muffling a young girl who was trying to kick them off. Taking a few moments to comprehend the gravity of the situation, Dharam slowly advances towards them.

One ruffian scowls at Dharam "Looks like a spoilt brat lost his way..."

Another ruffian adds "Why doesn't he just mind his own business and get going? Seems like he wants to die…"

Dharam smirks "No! I just came to show off my sword!" he moves forward carefully, ordering them "leave the girl alone..."

The third ruffian replies "Enough of this nonsense! Let's finish off with this quickly... I am hungry"

Two of the thugs step away from the girl and remove their weapons, as they come face to face with the prince. After a few ensuing tense moments, Dharam swiftly pulls out his sword and a long fierce battle follows. He defends himself against the swift strikes of sharp daggers, while consequently inflicting grave wounds on the two ruffians. To ensure the girl's safety, he gradually leads the ruffians away from her. The battle continues for a while, till he starts feeling the day's adventures beginning to take a toll on his stamina.

A sudden hard blow from behind knocks the sword off his hand. As he quickly composes himself to turn around, he feels the sharp sting of metal enter and exit the flesh of his shoulder. Trying not to think of the blood soaking his robe or the cackling jeers from the ruffians; he ducks a few blows, before he is finally hauled to the ground. One thug picks up the royal sword in admiration and then runs towards Dharam to inflict the final blow. Distracted by the loud screams of a menacing rider on a horse charging towards them, he turns around alarmed.

Veer jumps off the galloping horse kicking two of the ruffians out of balance. The third man scrambles to pick up his dagger and charges towards the injured prince. The blade is stopped in its tracks by the fierce grip of Veer's bare hands. Veer stares at the ruffian, who looks shockingly at the blood trickling from Veer's wounded fingers down the blade.

The brave prince exhales deeply "Did you think you would get away with it? Don't dare... don't even dare...." He then turns in Dharam's direction "Dharam, which of these unfortunate men had the audacity to hurt you?"

As Dharam indicates in his direction, Veer takes the hint and then smiles cynically at the hapless man. He lunges forward and rapidly finishes off the offender with one victorious stroke of his sword. The remaining men quickly find themselves no match for the skilful young warrior. As they desperately try to flee the area, Veer draws two knives from his hilt aiming it at them, in an attempt to kill one of the thugs and maim the other. He triumphantly walks up to the injured man and questions him about the girl. The defeated quivering ruffian explains everything about their plot to kidnap the child in return for a ransom from her parents and then reveals the details of the girl's address.

Veer nods his head "Now that your clever ploy has been foiled...and that your companions have left you all alone...would you like to join them now...or maybe later?"

The man starts wailing, desperately begging for mercy. Responding to the sobbing man, Veer casually suggests "Ok... we will leave you here to the mercy of the forest...for the night. If you are lucky to survive the forest through the night, the soldiers will come to fetch you in the morning...." he shudders "if not...a hungry animal or two might..."

Not minding the pleas of the injured man, Veer then worriedly faces his injured brother. Dharam however, reacts by sternly pointing in the direction of the unconscious girl, indicating Veer to tend to her. Veer sighs for a moment and then runs towards her. He loosens the tight ropes around her and fetches some water from a lake nearby, to sprinkle on her face. Waking up trembling and shivering with fear, the girl finds herself being shushed and hugged by the caring Veer. The prince carries her to the foot of the tree, places her besides Dharam, removes his robe and wraps the girl in it warmly.

He then approaches his brother and examines his shoulder slowly. As the injured Dharam winces with pain, the concerned Veer asks "Is it painful.... a lot....I ..."

Dharam brushes him away "No....no... that's enough of fussing over me... I am all right...I'll live..." he grabs the piece of cloth from Veer and starts tying it around Veer's injured hand instead "It will get septic... you always want to show off...don't you?"

Veer retorts "Dharam! How grateful! You are alive because of me! Have you forgotten how to thank someone?"

Dharam smirks "oh... so.."

Their argument is abruptly interrupted when the insecure child starts sobbing.

Dharam moves close to her, strokes her hair and puts his hand around her protectively "Don't worry. We are going to take you to your parents. No one will harm you now... are...are...are you feeling hungry?"

The girl nods her head and weeps "No...I just want to go back to my parents now..."

They smile at her coyly, following which; Veer carries her towards his horse, while Dharam takes his sword and proceeds to his horse.

The child wipes her tears and utters "If the king of this country, Raja Aryavardhan; was as brave and caring as you both, we wouldn't have to face all these troubles. He doesn't even care for this part of the country... or what goes on here.... I am very very lucky...thank you both so much... "

Edited by lashy - 17 years ago
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wow, lashy i am trying to find words to describe how beautifully you have written 👏 👏 👏

I think you should be the script writer of Dharam Veer as you are covering all aspects of their lives from their background, families and the strong friendship bond developing between them. 😊

I loved the way you have described the history of Aryavrats and Shramiks and how their roles changed as the monarch's changed.

I also loved the way you describe 👏 :

    the reason for the folklore of "messiah" the way the tearful daughter runs after her brother, I can imagine the pain of both mother and daughter letting go of their only son. the oath taken by sunanda and once that oath is broken "havoc" will be caused in everyone's lives the scenes of Veer and Dharam growing up together and a "Veer pleading innocence to all mischief, echo" i think everyone will go 😍 😍 😍 over these scenes. I can so imagine veer enjoying doing mischiefs and dharam trying to defend him. me so wanted to see these scenes as it would have made the audience more connected to Dharam and Veer how they went to the ashram to study and how protective and inseparable they are 👏 their friendship with bhalla
  • how one is like Shri Ram, following promises and duties and the other like Lord Krishna fighting for the right cause. described so lovely 👏 👏

and how once their bubble bursts with the truth coming out leads them a few steps closer to reality. 😊

Edited by dee7 - 17 years ago
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Its awesome and wonderful....please keep on writing...maybe later on you can make a collection and change them into a book of long stories or novels.....i am amazed by your vocabulary and creativity skills...i can actually imagine everything.....i dont know what else to say.....i am in short of words....if you plan to write more please post it on IF....even if it is not related to dv.....post them somewhere where i can read them.....or you can pm me...and if you wrote any fan-fics in prc forum please gimme the links or sth....so that i can read them.... 👏
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wow Shraddha... Its beautiful. totally enjoyed... plus the story is going in sane direction. unlike the actual one where misunderstandings already started before they even know whats happening in their own kingdom..

Your charactors are so much smarter.. 😛
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Wondefully written! 👏 👏

This story kinda reminds me of 'The Prince of Egypt' isit by any chance made of it or is this based on factual events!? 😃
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WOW did you write this???...
really good man 👏
i'm Speechless
👏 👏 👏
Edited by Ron16 - 17 years ago
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very well-written,shraddha! 👏
u should really be creative head or story writer of dv
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Good lord!!

you are just incredible!!you have explained it all so ably and it is anything but captivating!even though the whole frame discusses more about the serious situation of the times you have emoted the feelings extremely near to heart...

aww... you rock!!

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oh my god this is awesome lashy......i am completely speechless.....if the serial was just like u hv described to phir to mein sara din video pe repeat hi repeat dekh ti..........its just so beautiful

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