Manveer OS - The RIGHT to TOUCH!!!

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NAVINA

@HunsraJ

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Posted: 12 years ago

#41

Originally posted by: panchaali

She sat on a rock and stared at the rough sea , the angry waves creating thunderous noises ... bringing an unusual smile to her face. She closed her eyes and relived every moment she ever spent with Uday ... it was finally dawning on her ; what he had come to mean to her!

Best lines of the story 😊 Awww , thanks so much😳.

I was just imagining all these scenes..kash serial mein bhi aisa hota!!! The serial NEVER showed us anything we wanted to see ... so we have to write it for ourselves😉!

Par koi baat nahi tumne to wo kadr diya!!! ab main bahut kush hu...Haan nahin toh😃 And I'm happy that I made u happy !

Thank you Payel di , for such a lovely comment 🤗 .

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NAVINA

@HunsraJ

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Posted: 12 years ago

#42

Originally posted by: ...anju...

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NAVINA

@HunsraJ

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Posted: 12 years ago

#43

Originally posted by: anushruthi
amazing os Navi

Loved it very much

as always ur works are beautifully written

the concept was so nice

Great Job

Thanks Anu , for such kind and encouraging words 🤗 .

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NAVINA

@HunsraJ

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Posted: 12 years ago

#44

Originally posted by: annabh
hey barfi jiji
Hi Anni
awn the os was super good
Thank you 🤗

aha it was woth waiting

I'm glad u felt that way!
loved it to every bits
it was so good

Thanks dear.
each time made my heart skip beats
but the end was awesome

Yep ... poor Majnu 🤣!!!!
thanks for the scraps
Welcome

hugz

Same to you 🤗

Thanks for this lovely comment Anni 🤗 .

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Gargi

@sweet_gargi

Dazzler

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Posted: 12 years ago

#45

How can a OS written by you be just average?.😳..Even with the plot given to us by the horrible PH of DEK, you made such a beautiful n cute OS.👏👏...this was once again very cute, sweet n amazing. M had always been stupid, so you rightly described her character here. she understands things late...i felt majnu very funny here, and specially when he jumped from the running train, after seeing M in the station, when M was about to faint due to the acute perspiration of majnu...m sure she could have relished the perspiration of Uday instead 🤣🤣🤣

i liked the last part when manyata breaks the knot n goes back to uday, while J falls on the ground...that part was very much M like and also hillarious🤣

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panchaali

@panchaali

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Posted: 12 years ago

#46

Originally posted by: ...navina...

Thank you Payel di , for such a lovely comment 🤗 .

Thanks to you for giving us such a lovely os 😊🤗

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Kavya

@Kavi.Kapoor

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Posted: 12 years ago

#47

Omg RIGHT TO TOUCH , u posted it.

Wonderful OS di.

Loved da part when Manyata told Uday dat he was forgettiung her😳. Dat was so sweet and romantic.

Di , u should write another part and pair up Akash and Jai😆.

Loved it loved it loved it. Too good!

Y U didn't send me a pm or scrap 😭?

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NAVINA

@HunsraJ

Rocker

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Posted: 12 years ago

#48

Originally posted by: andy.1
hi navina. Hi Andrea😊. iam a new reader 😃 Ahhh , nice to meet you!
just read your os and i loved it Thank you 🤗 .

hey navi, guess who iam ??😉 Ummm 🤔 , is it Mrs ANDREA ARVIND , or could it be MRS ANDREA ADHIRAAJ?

i was here alone and i thought of giving you another surprise comment, lol "ANOTHER COMMENT" 😕!!!!!! Why , which was your first😉?

you told you would write one os a year, do rethink that, because i just love anything you write Awww , u say the sweetest things😳. But frankly ... I find my writing senseless.

and so wont you write please We'll see😆!

love

a "new " reader

andrea😊 Thank u NEW READER ANDREA😉!

Loved your second comment Andy 🤗 .

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Safia Rafiq

@safia25

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Posted: 12 years ago

#49

Navi you know what YOU ARE HILARIOUS!! 😃😃😃

as you know i was out of city and ofcourse out of my home too.. so i couldn't read it.. SORRY for that!!🤢🤢🤢
but as i returned to my sweet home late night ,😭😭 i couldn't wait but to put off my shoes, open my lappy and read your OS - THE RIGHT TO TOUCH..⭐️⭐️⭐️

and by GOD Navi , it was Superb, beyond expectations..

awww!! i wish it was an SS rather than an OS so that it could continued for a long time..

Full on dhamaal update, totally enjoyed it.. i like AKASH dumb-founded asusual..😆😆
you should made it more long, though it was quite long...😉😉
You know Navi, you have something magical in your handwritting that makes your updates the MAGICAL ONE!!

I like its total Bindass ending, A HAPPY ENDING..
as in the beginning , my heart PANIC, reading the word AKASH AGAIN..😡😡😡

but after reading the FLASH BACK got confused that why Uday took that marriage for only TWO YEARS and m still confuse..😕😕😕

MANVEER one night was LOVELY yet Romantic one..😳😳😳 and many more shall come in the future too because now they are ONE!! 😉😉😉

i got worried what if Uday never read that letter..
but thankfully Manyata herself stopped him...
Poor Uday was found DUMB-FOUNDED..
awww!! atleast they deserved one more night in this OS and that too the most romantic one...❤️❤️❤️

Jai again left alone..hope either AKASH or JAGAT get her ANAARI..🤣🤣🤣

LOL she was a nice fellow yar, don't know why all hate her..she hate her sister because Manyata suddenly took her all space..obviously Anyone if was inplace of Jai would have behaved like she did...🥺

Loved the way Manyata burnt that piece of paper that so called DIVORCE PAPER..🤬

NAVI, personally and honestly just AMAZING UPDATE...👍🏼
Keep writing like this..
waiting for ur next OS.. like this one!!
Hugss..
😊😊😊 SAFIA 😊😊😊

Edited by safia25 - 12 years ago