STORY - Aakhri Chunauti Last Part - by Visrom

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visrom

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Posted: 14 years ago

#61

Originally posted by: sunnyp1414
Abhi back in danger again. . twist after twist. Loving it

Is smiley ka kya matlab hai???? It looks like some professor looking at someone copying in an exam.

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sunny

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Posted: 14 years ago

#62

Originally posted by: visrom
Is smiley ka kya matlab hai???? It looks like some professor looking at someone copying in an exam.

🤣 . good one
Abhijeet jumps into danger quickly. I know situations demanded such and he did right thing it was most appropriate action at that time but so smoothly without any handwork Abhijeet always land himself in danger (my reaction was to just this). It was just a casual reaction don't take it too seriously.

Your story is going awesome way.

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visrom

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Posted: 14 years ago

#63

Originally posted by: sunnyp1414
Abhijeet jumps into danger quickly.

I know....Abhijeet is known for such impulsive actions.

He did that even in 50000 enemies, didn't he?

Edited by visrom - 14 years ago

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prettywomen22

@prettywomen22

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Posted: 14 years ago

#64

visrom I loved the below lines

Daya : Yeh dunno kaun hai sir?

ACP : Mere naye CID officers. (And gave a smile .... Daya gave an understanding nod)

This is very emotional.... well written 👏 👏 👏 👏 👏

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visrom

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Posted: 14 years ago

#65

I don't know....maybe I am like that. I am ok with telling something within a person's mind, but when it comes to expressing emotions in front of someone, I fail.

I feel that there are certain unexpressed things which are better when not explicitly mentioned. I am glad prettywomen, you could catch that. 😊

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prabha.

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Posted: 14 years ago

#66

What a scene that would be I can actually see Daya Sir act that out. It touched my heart. Yaar why can't these people give us such simple joys, it is so easy to please us, one logical reaction, one logical detection, one correct dialog and we are sorted but no they will go to paris but not give us a decent story.

@Viz : I noticed it too Viz but since I was one of the first to read did not mention it, did not want to quote so soon.

Edited by prabha. - 14 years ago

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visrom

@visrom

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Posted: 14 years ago

#67

Chalo everyone...please read and comment. Those who have missed, I have added one more scene -some action. I'll continue when I get time.

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Bhavanab

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Posted: 14 years ago

#68

I've not read it 😔 !! Haven't read a single comment so that I continue from the boyish grin without knowing anything !!! Will start now 😃

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Bhavanab

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Posted: 14 years ago

#69

Visrom !!!! With every part it's getting more and more thrilling and interesting !!! Pakka AC ki Aakhri Takkar lag rahi hai !!!First of all very Haapy to know everyone's safe [:D

There were parts I loved in the latest update first is definitely when ACP sees Daya alive !! You've explained his reaction very nicely !!

The reason you gave as to why they hadn't told they were all were safe earlier !!!

And my favourite part of the latest update was Daya sir's reaction to ACP mentioning about new-comers !!! Very nicely written !!!

Abhi sir phir phass gaye !!!! Anyways waiting for it to get more and more interesting !!! Loved Abhi sir's instant plan !!
All the best for the rest !! Waiting for it !!