SWARON SS:Swayam and Me(Current Track)UPDTD PART5 - Page 6

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Posted: 11 years ago
#51
sachi

amazing

u made me cry

pls give d update soon

emotions aur wait nahi kar sakte

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Posted: 11 years ago
#52
😭 mein ro rahi hu...sab log aaye hai par swayam kaha hai??pleae update jaldi plspl,s
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Posted: 11 years ago
#53
Wow!
Simply beautiful update...

You write everyones reaction so welll...
My god !

So nicely penned.
Waiting fr Swayam's arrival n reaction!.

N death...naaahh...Swayam hai na...😳

Update next jaldi jaldi...
Sakshi...
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Posted: 11 years ago
#54
read all the 3 parts in a go!
this is brilliant writing sachi!
i hate ruhi!
and i loved the way you have written sharon's POV
everyone is so concerned for sharon..
eager for swayam to enter..
nice one.. :)

cheers
nishi
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Posted: 11 years ago
#55
FANTASTIC JOB DI
IT WAS REALLY AWESOME CHAP.
SPECIALLY THE CONVERSATION BETWEEN SANG AND SHARON
FAB DI
👏
UPDATE SOON
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Posted: 11 years ago
#56
res
unres
amazingg update as always
i was very happy to read tis update
becoz not only it had a very substantially strong
monologue from sharon's pov
which was emotional n heart-touching
but i cud the real essence of frnship here
everyone trying earnestly to get sharon back
all in all a very well formed pleasing read 😛

Edited by rosyrkohli - 11 years ago
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Posted: 11 years ago
#57
Read all the parts in one go. Really well written😊
part 3 was very emotional, Sharon's monologue and her dad's and gangs conversations
but where is Swayam is al this? update quick and please PM me.
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Posted: 11 years ago
#58
Sachi!! Sachi!! Sachi!!
I'm really very very Impressed girl 😃
There has been such a remarkable improvement in you as writer 👏
You have caught the right emotions and put them across beautifully with your words
I liked your idea of writing the entire SS from Sharon's POV 👍🏼
The way you are progressing with the story is marvellous 👏
But 1 complain..
Give longer Chapters ya!!! 😭

The 3rd Chapter was so freaking emotional
The realisation and each persons emotions were beautifully penned down
And yeah also 1 question
WHERE IS SWAYAM??? 😲

Update soon dear..
Really eager to read ahead 😉
And Sharon ko jaldi theek kar do

P.S Sorry for the late comment was really caught up with hell lot of things


Love
Tanvish 😃
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Posted: 11 years ago
#59

This was tremendous piece of work. I mean the monologue and the feelings that sharon is feeling.
They were so well thought and so well penned down.
The way you showed sharon's POV and the way you wrote it. 👏
You certainly have improved as a writer.
Thanks for the PM. The way the story is turning out is great. 👍🏼
Please continue soon.

PS. sorry for the late feedback.
Studies.
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Posted: 11 years ago
#60

Thank You so much guys for all the support! I hope I raise your expectations with every UPDATE! I am Overwhelmed that Ghaent Punjabis won the BCL , so this UPDATE is dedicated to Shantanu and Vrushika for making me happy and also a proud fan :D !

PART FOUR

I felt knots forming near my chest, lungs. Suddenly, I felt difficult to breathe. It pained badly near my chest. I knew this would be my last day. Doctors were rushing in. They injected some injections in me and I do not remember anything after that. It was total Black out. But the uneasiness and the pain I felt near the chest had gone. How can the pain disappear so easily? I guess I am dead. This is end of Sharon Raiprakash. How can I die before seeing Swayam?

The unanswered questions were answered gradually. I felt someone holding my hand.. But wait a sec. How could I feel? That means I am alive. Oh, yes I am alive! Everyone has visited me so who is holding my hand now?

Person:- Sharon, main apni Bahu ko vapas Ghar lane aaya hu. Chalo beta ab bohot ho gaya, Main tumhe iss halat me nahi dekh sakta.Swayam pagal hai beta jo usne tumpe bharosa nahi kia. Sharon voh innocent hai, emotional hai. Please use maaf kardena Pata hai Sharon mene jab tumhe pehli baar dekha tha ,mujhe tumme apni jhalak dikhi thi,jo main humesha Swayam main dhundne ki koshish karta tha. Your attitude and caring nature made me proud of Swayam's choice. I was sure that Swayam and You would make the Best Couple in the World. Sharon tumne mere aur Swayam ke beech ki saari dooriyan meeta di, tumne Taani ko support kia. You are the Best Daughter in Law one could ever have.Yes, I already consider you as my Daughter in Law. Pls get well soon beta, I am waiting for you.

Oh my God. Papa is so sweet. Did I just say Papa? He has already decided that I will be Swayam's Wife. But after what happened, can things really be alright between us?

And God answered this one too.

Swayam came near me and he took my palm in his. Yes, I knew it was him. I recognize his walk, scent, touch even on deathbed. He was silent this time, he did not speak a word unlike last time.

5 Days earlier-

(Swayam came to meet Sharon, he followed the ritual of meeting her when no one was around at around 4 pm. It was 5th day of Sharon in Hospital).

Swayam:- Sharon, mana galti ho gayi but is this a way to give punishment? You are hurting me, you are hurting yourself. Kab tak aisa chalega Sharon? Uth jao na..Pls wake up, please.

Ohh Baby, don't cry. I will be well soon. It hurts me to see you to like this. It gives me pain, a lot of pain.

Swayam screamed, cried on the top of his lungs. Nurse took him out of the ward and warned him about his actions.

Today he was just him, no noise, nothing, only SILENCE.

But as they say "Silence can be form of aggression or defeat or may be just loss of words''. I think Swayam felt defeated today. He has been talking, pleading, crying, screaming, begging me to wake up but my body did not respond. It gives me immense pain to see him like this. I have to wake up for Swayam, for Dad, for Papa, for Rey, for Kria, for Simmi, for Rinni, for Vicky, for Nilesh, for Bharat, for Amar, for Aashi and most importantly for myself. Its time for The Diva to return.

I felt tears on my palm, Swayam is crying..Oh don't cry dear please.

And tears started flowing from my orbs seeing him cry. That's a good sign, Doctor said. Everyone was happy that I responded in some way.

Day by day I was recovering. I finally opened my eyes to see 12 elated face infront of me.

Please give reviews , if you liked this part. I am sorry to not give longer updates, because I felt it could spoil the essence of the story.

Cheers,

Sachi.

Edited by sachi123 - 11 years ago

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