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Posted: 13 years ago
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Yeah, okay, so the CV's are acting like complete 🤬. Let's not go there. Anyways, so Raaffeeeyy along with Shishir (boy 😆) here insisted that I write an OS featuring the half-naked Swayam and fabricate the story in a way that we all would have loved to see. That is without the absence of Sharon. So I dug deep into my soul to find that little 'phangurl' voice that helped me to write this OS. And I know Kanks, that you are going to give me major grief about this. I probably deserve it.


Shower Fiasco

Trrriiinnnggg!

He groaned loudly as his hand blindly made its way to where that cursed alarm clock had established itself for the past three years.

He stopped the incessant ringing and tried to go back to sleep, go back to that dream. But that infernal clock had ruined it all. He wondered what personal vendetta it had against him. Every morning at 7.00 a.m. sharp it would start with its annoyingly shrill ringing spoiling the beautiful dreams that regularly featured Sharon. All his Sharon-centered dreams shattered in a matter of seconds.

He reluctantly got up from the sweet, comfortable bed, his body covered in nothing but a pair of three-fourths and a translucent white shirt.

Barely opening his eyes, he headed towards his bathroom.

He saw his groggy reflection in the mirror and tried to shake away his sleep.

It didn't happen.

So he went for a more effective solution.

Without bothering to remove his clothes, he stepped straight into the shower chamber leaving the shower curtains half-open.

He unbuttoned his shirt but kept it on. He then turned the shower knob and lifted his face to feel the water pour itself on his face.

In a matter of minutes, he was fully drenched.

His wet hair clung to his forehead and thick droplets of water made their way down his bare chest. His wet shirt clung sensuously to his half-naked body and he proceeded to run a hand through his wet hair, making it stand up comically.

He stood there with his eyes closed as tiny droplets of water nestled themselves in his eyelashes and shamelessly hugged his lips. He was quite enjoying this refreshing little shower.

So you could imagine his surprise when he heard a barely audible gasp coming from somewhere dangerously close.

He jerked his head to the side to see a stunned looking Sharon in a sky-blue coloured dress with thin black straps, standing near the semi-opened door of the bathroom.

At first, understandably, he thought he was dreaming. How else would he explain her presence in his bathroom? He had hallucinated about her a lot of times before. Apparently it was one of the side-effects of love. So who's to say he wasn't dreaming again?

He looked at her (or the projection of her by his mind, he still wasn't sure) with complete astonishment. Which suddenly gave way to the silly smile that always plastered itself on his face whenever she, real or otherwise, would appear in front of him.

The first thing that tipped him off was that she wasn't smiling. Usually his dream-Sharon would smile a smile as silly as his. But this Sharon wasn't smiling. After the initial look of shock, her expression had now given way to a smirk. An uneasily, evil smirk. Dream-Sharon didn't smirk. She smiled.

Why the hell was she smirking?

The second it hit him, he instinctively grabbed the first thing that would shelter him from that evil-looking smirk. Which happened to be the shower curtain. He draped it around himself and with a panic-stricken look on his face, shouted-

"Sharon?!?"

Sharon, now completely over her shock, smirked even more demonically than was possible.

Oh this can't be good! He thought, his panic level soaring.

"How...wha...how did you come here?" he asked, his voice squeaking a little.

"Ehh, let me see. I knocked on the door of your house and Taani let me in. Then I walked up to your bedroom and the door was open so I walked in. But I couldn't find you anywhere, so I thought you must be in the bathroom since the bathroom door was open and now here I am." She said, still smirking.

"Can't you ask or knock before barging in like this?" he asked, frantically.

"Um I didn't think I needed to. Who takes a bath with the door wide open anyways?" she asked.

"I wasn't taking a bath!" he said, tightly clutching the shower curtain.

"Then what's got your tie in a knot?" she retorted.

"I...jus..just please can you go out?" he pleaded.

"Is that the way to talk to your girlfriend?" she said, mock offended.

"I'm sorry Sharon. I didn't mean to. I'm..." Swayam started.

"Gotcha!" she said, laughing crazily.

His face turned red.

"You've had your fun. Now could you please go out?" said Swayam, almost begging.

"Oh my naive Swayam, the fun's only begun!" she said, the smirk once again making an appearance on her face.

Yup. She was enjoying this. She was enjoying the hell out of this.

"Why do you insist on torturing me?" he asked miserably.

"Because I have the right to and because it's an awful lot of fun." She said, smiling angelically.

"Please Sharon, I'm feeling very uncomfortable." He said.

"That's because you are hiding behind that shower curtain!" she said.

"Well, what else do you expect me to do? You refuse to go away!" he cried.

"Who asked you to hide anyways? Just step away from that curtain and nobody gets hurt." She said, silently laughing.

"No way! Just go!" he said and then added, "Please?"

"I don't understand why you're shying away from me? I'm your girlfriend! If I don't have the right to see your half-naked body then who does?" she asked, grinning her way to glory.

"You're pure evil, you know that?" he said.

"And yet you love me." She said cheerily and at the same time going pink in the face.

He found no reasonable argument to that.

"Come out, come out Swayam. I haven't got all day!" she said, now moving towards him.

He noticed her movement with panic.

"Sharon, what are you doing? Don't come any more near!" he said, tightening his hold on the shower curtain.

"Well, if you won't come to me, I have to come to you, don't I?" she said, nearing dangerously close.

"Sharon, I'm warning you!" he said, moving further into the shower chamber.

But she just kept coming.

He took a sharp breath inside and decided that enough is enough.

He let go of the shower curtain as both of them were now confined in the restricted space of the shower chamber.

She stopped in her tracks and her pupils dilated so much that you couldn't make out the colour of her eyes.

A moment later she began retreating.

This was not what she expected to happen. She was just teasing him. She didn't actually mean to see him like this.

It's like her eyes were bounded by unbreakable chains. They seemed fixated with his semi-naked chest as the water from the shower dribbled down it. She admired his wet features as non-conservatively as possible. Her eyes now broke free and were travelling all over his body. They went up from his chest and now fixed themselves on his shining lips. And then his black, wet hair.

"Do you have any idea how you are looking at me right now?" he asked.

It was his turn to smirk now.

She snapped her eyes away from his body and looked into his eyes instead.

"Suddenly I feel extremely vulnerable." He continued.

"I...I...I...I'm go..." she stammered, turning around to leave.

"Oh, not so fast!" he said, grabbing her wrist and whisking her towards himself.

She bumped lightly into his chest and now both of them stood under the shower.

She looked up into his eyes and they more or less screamed at her that it was time for a little payback.

He neatly glided one of his arms around her waist and pulled her closer still. She instinctively flattened her palms against his bare chest. His other hand placed itself on her right hand pressing it against his jovially beating heart.

In under a minute, she was drenched too as droplets after droplets of water tangled in her hair before continuing their journey downwards.

His smirk grew as he saw her staring at him as if he was the most luscious looking fruit she had ever seen.

"What happened, Sharon? You got what you wanted. Why are YOU shying away now?" he said.

She just gazed mutely at him.

"What happened to the moustache twirling villain who was all set to steal my virtue not a few minutes ago?" he said, smiling.

"Swayam I..." she tried to speak but the words were lodged into her throat.

Evidently she had lost her power of speech.

"Sharon," he said, now turning extremely serious, "don't look at me like that. I won't be able to resist."

She stared deeper still into his eyes which were now looking hazily back at her.

He began to move his face closer to hers, taking his time, savouring the moment. He got not one word or action of resistance from her.

He squinted a little as his gaze fell on her lips and try as she might she couldn't bring herself to close her eyes, afraid that if she did she would miss this moment.

Her right palm, resting on his chest, felt the heart within thumping in excitement. A strange warmth had began exuding itself from his heart, right through his warm skin, that further made its way through her hand and into her very soul.

His lips had barely brushed hers when a loud shout caused them to spring apart like startled cats.

"Oi Swayam!" came a familiar booming voice, from his bedroom.

"Oh crap!" whispered Sharon as they both stood there panicking, unable to react.

A second later, the smiling face of Rey emerged through the bathroom door.

And just as quickly popped back out with an audible 'Oh'.

They rushed out behind him and asked him to stop.

"I'm sorry guys," he began, shaking with silent laughter, "don't mind me. Sorry for the interruption."

"This isn't what..."

"Actually..."

"It's a funny story..."

"You'd never guess..."

They both began searching for excuses that didn't sound lame.

"Its ok guys, I understand." Said Rey, waggling his eyebrows.

"Actually Rey, um, I'm the CS and he is the ACS, so um, I was helping him..." said Sharon, fabricating as she went along.

"To take a bath?" suggested Rey, now openly smirking.

"No! I...um...I have to go. Important meeting. Can't miss it. See you later." She said, saving herself, and giving Swayam a pitying look over her shoulder as she pranced out the door.

"Um...what happened was..." began Swayam, blushing his way to glory.

Rey looked encouragingly at him, raising an eyebrow and grinning a lot. But he couldn't complete his explanation.

"Idiot!" he muttered, shaking his head, giving a last final smile.

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Posted: 13 years ago
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OMG that was awesome !! 🤣 🤣 🤣 Naughty SwaRon 😍 ☺️ 😳
I'm sure in his mind, Rey was trying to figure who blushes more 🤣 🤣 🤣
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Excuse me Rafi (I hate you) and Shishir (boy) - how in the name of Rowling is this ANY BETTER THAN not having SwaRon at all? This is like a cheesecake dipped in chocolate sauce and separately coated in sugar. 🤓 How is THAT SwaRon? 🥱

And En, you! You've penned it miraculously well, so much that I am afraid you've always had it in you. I have befriended you for all the wrong reasons. Your insides are those of a grade A phangurl. 😈

On a rather disquieting note, sure it was a wonderful read but I dun got much to say. 🤔 Not my cup of tea. But your writing ability deserves all the appreciate in the world, cheers!

Thanks for the PM.

-Kankshita



Edited by Savage - 13 years ago
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Posted: 13 years ago
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KD ... u better not lay a FINGER on Sawyerrray 😳 Me and Shishir are to blame 😆


Ahhh ... now where shall I start ..

So Taani let her into the HOUSE and after that Sharon ne "Apna hi ghar samjho" phrase ko kuch zyada hi seriously le liya .. eeeik bar maingate khul gaya toh bass . Baaki ka Sharon khud hi explore kar legi 😆. JUST like Sharon to barge into someone's (Bath) room unannounced 😆

And excuses toh dekho Mohtarma ke .. Darwaza khula thaa toh andar aagayi 😆


Like just cuz the door is open she can saunter in as and when she feels like into someone's private quarters 😆

The sly sly sly MINX !! 😈

Like she didnt hear the water running ... obviously .. someone was all geared up for a semi-nekkid show before pretending it was and accident and she is the coyest coy Maiden in the land of Coy-Dom 😆

Ahhh now what did I like about ur description of her object of fascination?

I love how u didnt fail to appreciate Majnu Bwoys err .. *Cough* errr ... Assets ... 😆 but at the same time .. ur tone of description was that of an objective writer with command over her vocabulary with just about enough appreciation to get the picture accross but not so much as to establish u as one of 'em ladies who watched the episode like a 3784628741 times just to ogle at a nekkid Majnu Bwoy 😆. We read and we know this has been written by an writer with vivid imagination not a PHANGURL. So 👏 for keeping that balance . And I'll tell you what I mean :


Originally posted by: Sawyer_Tom

His wet hair clung to his forehead and thick droplets of water made their way down his bare chest. His wet shirt clung sensuously to his half-naked body and he proceeded to run a hand through his wet hair, making it stand up comically.

He stood there with his eyes closed as tiny droplets of water nestled themselves in his eyelashes and shamelessly hugged his lips. He was quite enjoying this refreshing little shower.


^ See what I mean ? You mention whats ... err .. going to work the reds in Sharon Raprakash's face in a while ... yet you do not forget whats COMICAL .. 😆 True Phangurls would swear by the HAWT bible and find NOTHING remotely COMICAL about the aforementioned Man-Boy 😳. He'd just be .. HAWT . Flawlessly HAWT. 😆

Now onto Swayam ... WHATTAY a way to rouse urself ... stand under the shower .. in a dress shirt 😆 . Even in half sleepy state , ever the Classy gentleman 😆. And ahhh ... when he notices Sharon Standing there .. the silly smile that his lips involuntarily take shape into whenever Sharon is in front of him .. factual or hypothetical Sharon 😆 .. Ahh that bit .. just .. kind of warmed the insides of me .. now how many times have we seen Swayam smile like that ? The kind thats so genuine and so out of ur control it can only come out honest-to-goodness fondness for the other person .. if only the NEW Swayam smiled like that at Sharon 😳 So Nidhi I dunno if I should love you for reminding me of what once was ... or hate you for making me realise what no longer is . And the next very moment when Swayam realises its SHARON ... it REALLY is Sharon .. the PANIC and Shower-Curtain wrap to shield his virtues 😆 . What brilliant choice of words . SIMPLE , yet such smooth read , Swayam's state of bliss switching to sheer shock and panic .. what a smooth transition of emotions 😳. Along with u I would also credit Maheshwari (and Sneha ) for the way you write because ur imagination builds on what they have once shown u .. and you being an FF writer .. take on from there . I love how u write, Honest.


Okay onto the best bit . Now why do I say this is the best bit ? Because that IS what SwaRon really is for u . Sharon ... rules over Swayam's heart and she can and will corner him ... if it serves her interests ... 😆 BUT its SWAYAM who is WELL aware of all the nodes in her brains . Only SWAYAM would know how to disarm Sharon Raiprakash in a situtation where she seemingly has all the control ! I LOVE how the tables turn here .. ! From coquettish to Shy Sharon .. and from flushed to fiendish in a moment Swayam . Thats them alright. I loved this because this has always been their game. Sharon plays the court her way and Swayam lets her ... simply because he would ever want to win from her .. but when Swayam starts playing ... she knows its a game lost . Now being with a guy who knows u THAT well can be an amazing thing ... OR terrifying. And with Swayam and Sharon its both. Which is why those two are seriously screwed up, yet beautiful at the same time. 😊


Onto the next bit which was prolly KD's favourite bit .. she loves the threesome 😆. Again very well written, the bits with Rey's appearance because that is EXACTLY how Swayam and Sharon we knew and loved would have reacted. Sharon Raiprakash, always in control and Swayam Shekhawat .. always ready ... yet when caught in a compromising position by a friend who knows them well enough to know this is exactly what it looks like .. they have nothing better to say to him than "This is not what it really looks like" 😆 .

I loved this OS because this is ... quintessentially SwaRon.

Class writing Sawerrayyy !!! 👍🏼 🤗 VERY few ppl manage to write about Swayam and Sharon the way they really are .. and instead infuse their own fantasy 'Swayam' and 'Sharon' into their core-characteristics ... but u remain true to what it really is , the way it really is . And THAT my dear .. is talent beyond mere flowery vocabulary. 👏



Edited by SwaRon911 - 13 years ago
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Posted: 13 years ago
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WOAHHH...😲

waht to sayy?? i am still not able to digest dis?
wow! so hawt! soo swaron! soo romanticc!! ☺️
hayyee...
D way u described half-naked swayam...ufff...red hawtt ho gye the mere cheeks!!! eeeksss!!! 😳😳😳
😆😆
and sharon teasing swayam..ROFL...besharam ladki..bt wo bhi kya kare...poor laila..awestruck of majnu! 😍

rain sequence..shower sequence..sab padhne ko mil rha h hume iss monsoon mei..thanks to u guys!! 😃
I lovvedd itt..totally! ❤️

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Posted: 13 years ago
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Well Nidhi u hav me in splits rite now...I dont think Im gonna forget this one any time soon...suffice to say u hav definitely kept ur word...an amazingly hilarious OS written with such precision👏...I for one wuld luv to c this element in ur writing more often...right from the wakeup alarm till Rey's final smile u rocked it 😉
Edited by meevee - 13 years ago
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Posted: 13 years ago
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Nidhi, this was a really different piece of work on SwaRon from your side. It's probably the first time you attempted to write something on romance and it was really cute.
The flow of emotions and the way Sharon was gazing at him was beautiful.
All the dialogues, the way Sharon was teasing him initially and then Swayam takes the lead and Sharon is all blushing! :)
It ends on a cute note where Rey enters and both Sharon and Swayam are trying to explain him the situation but he refuses to listen and then Sharon moves out of this awkward situation and tries justifying that she was helping him out as a CS and then Rey's witty remark was hilarious!

I really enjoyed reading this cute and adorable SwaRon episode.
Well penned!
Do write more on SwaRon..!

thanks for the pm
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Posted: 13 years ago
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awesome os nidhi !!
fantastically written .👏
it was hilarious and it totally cracked me up .😆
i loved the way u described swayam half naked , cause when it was shown in the monsoon epi i really couldnt enjoy it . so thank you to rafi di and shishir to encourage you to write an os on swayam taking shower with the presence of shron 😃
naughty swaron was a treat to read , totally adorable 😳
reys interruption just at the right moment was very funny 🤣
keep these amazing os's coming ...
thanks for the pm.
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Posted: 13 years ago
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Originally posted by: Savage

Reserved.


Edited

Excuse me Rafi (I hate you) and Shishir (boy) - how in the name of Rowling is this ANY BETTER THAN not having SwaRon at all? This is like a cheesecake dipped in chocolate sauce and separately coated in sugar. 🤓 How is THAT SwaRon? 🥱

And En, you! You've penned it miraculously well, so much that I am afraid you've always had it in you. I have befriended you for all the wrong reasons. Your insides are those of a grade A phangurl. 😈

On a rather disquieting note, sure it was a wonderful read but I dun got much to say. 🤔 Not my cup of tea. But your writing ability deserves all the appreciate in the world, cheers!

Thanks for the PM.

-Kankshita




😆😆😆 I wish I had something to say in my defence but I really don't. And just for the record, I blame you too, Rafi. 😆

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