Fan's Fiction: 'Bhagya Lekh' - Page 6

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Posted: 14 years ago
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wowww loved the upd
Keep it up Indu! Update soonnn. 🤗
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Posted: 14 years ago
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@ indu :
indu ki bachchi !! mujhe ek pm nahi kar sakti thi ?? grr😡!! yeh thread agar 1st page par nahi dekhti main to shayad teri update padhti hi nahi !! *shouting * 😡waise update achchi thi . rihan is back wid a bang wid his "yojana" 😉 !! bdw, yeh Vijay kaun hai..B or P 😕??
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Posted: 14 years ago
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Originally posted by: polly_03

@ indu :
indu ki bachchi !! mujhe ek pm nahi kar sakti thi ?? grr😡!! yeh thread agar 1st page par nahi dekhti main to shayad teri update padhti hi nahi !! *shouting * 😡waise update achchi thi . rihan is back wid a bang wid his "yojana" 😉 !! bdw, yeh Vijay kaun hai..B or P 😕??

Oh sry, rah gaya hoga maine re-check nhi kiya na...i'm so sry.😭

Vijay Digvijay hai, aru di ka suggested Character.
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Posted: 14 years ago
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ohh wowww .. lovely

so welll. i love it


n ur way of writing is gr888
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Posted: 14 years ago
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aha 😛 ekdam dhansu update...chandu is finally taking some actions against dhannanand 👏 and peihu 😆 ..o teri meri jaan... 😉 😆 maza aaya 😃 ..keep updating ⭐️ ur writing style as usual brilliant 👏
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Posted: 14 years ago
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@indu - ohhh..my bacchu called me..kaash sach mein aisa hojaaye😍 nd woh dialog..
u read my mind dear😆 coffee gvs me rashes bt rushi k liy mujhe wo bhi manzoor hai...aur
mera patta kaat diya indu😭 jaane do..kahani mein hi sahi atleast i got a date with my jaan😃
awesome update..kp writin..
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Posted: 14 years ago
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Originally posted by: peihu

@indu - ohhh..my bacchu called me..kaash sach mein aisa hojaaye😍 nd woh dialog..
u read my mind dear😆 coffee gvs me rashes bt rushi k liy mujhe wo bhi manzoor hai...aur
mera patta kaat diya indu😭 jaane do..kahani mein hi sahi atleast i got a date with my jaan😃
awesome update..kp writin..

Nhi di nhi patta nhi katta, kuch dino ka rest de diya hai...phir bulaloongi...
Kahani abhi baki hai mere dost...😆

@all- thank u so much for ur valuable comments
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Posted: 14 years ago
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Introducing, Ambhik as Police inspector Mr. Nirbhay Mishra.
Part 7 continued...

As he move inside, we faints him with the help of chloroform n tie him to the chair. Its about after half an hour.. he slowly opens his eyelids..and close several times' now he is completely cognizant.

"Kahan hai hum , is garmi mein'."

"Koi hai yahan, kisne bandha hai hume.. koi kuch bolta kyun nhi"

I walked in front of him'

"Tum'"

"Haan main'."

"Hum kyun nhi samaj paye ki itni moorkta tum hi kar sakte ho.."

"Idhar-udhar ki batayen mat banao Dhanand..Batao mere papa ko kyun mara?? Humare business ke liye'tumhari salary bhi to kam na thi 50,000 rupees per month + tips'" I shout on him.

"Nauker aur Malik mein bhi toh farq hota hai'"

"Nauker ko paise milte hain aur malik ke pass paise hotey hain..", he devilishly smiles.

"Dhanand tune yeh nahi dekha ki un paison ko kamane mein bhi mahnet lagti hai'."

"Chup ho ja'moorkh nhi toh tere baap ki tarah tujhe bhi tadpa tadpa ke maaronga'",he is gazing at me with his bloody eyes'

"Inspector culprit ne apna jurm kabool kar liya, ab aap isse arrest kijiye."

Hearing this Dhanand's face turns pale. A man of about 25 comes out from the darkness into the glowing light of oven room, he similes on seeing Dhanand.

"Arey Mr. Nirbhay Mishra aapne toh hume dara hi diya tha'"

I blankly keep gazing on both the faces,

"Humari 50 crore ki diamonds ki deal hai kal' toh 50% aapka.."

He turns back n shoots the two other officers with him.

"Dhanand ji, aapko pta hai na maine deal sabke samne nhi karta." Then they both rupture into malevolence mirth.

"Inspector yeh mere papa Mr. Abhimanyu Maurya ka Qatil hai, aap ise saja den eke bajaye'"I argue.

He puts his gun on my head ,"Ae ladke chup-chap khada rah aur jayada chapad chapad kari na'toh yeh goli aur tera sir."

"Kyun Dhanand ji, kaun se case mein fasason isse' chori karke'police ka encounter karne ke ya'."and he made Dhanand free by opening the knots.

"Nahi nahi aisa kuch karne ki jaroorat nahi, ise toh hum apne saath le jayenge aur apne ghar ka saara kaam karyengey.." he clutches my neck in his fingers as a worm in eagle's mitt, it choked my throat and he constrain me over the floor n throw me in his car, I tried to gratis myself'but all in vain.


Malini(Rihan's mother)POV:-

The next day when I wake up I don't find Rihan in home. I looked for him in neighbouring houses but don't get him..Tears shed from my eyes, "Mera Rihan..kahan chala gaya tu'Rihan". I am running through the streets like barmy. Then I reached at Mr. Nath's corner, where I'm working since last 5 yrs. I asked the people there, but no one has answer. Then I went in oven room, "Aditya, Shashank' tum toh Rihan ke ache dost ho kahan hai who.."

They remain silent . "Maine kuch poocha hai tumse jawab do, kahan hai Rihan"

"Woh'Woh Aunty ji, Rihan ko na Dha'."

"Dha kya Dha bolo'"

"Haan, Rihan ko naya dhandha mil gaya hai."

"dhandha?" I surprised and sink into the chair.

"Matlab kaam, kaam mil gaya hai. Subh aap so rahi thi to usne aapko jagana thik nahi samjha isilye hume bta kar chala gaya."

After hearing this I felt a bit relax and left for my work.

'''''


Shashank n Aditya r conversing with each other'..

"Yaar aaj toh humne jhoot bol diya, per kal jab rihan inhe nhi dikhega tab kya bolengey.."

"Haan maine bhi yahi soch soch kar pareshan ho raha hoon."

"Hum kitne dino tak yun jhoot ka sahara lengey.."

"Bus ab to yahi dua hai, ki rihan jald se jald wapas aajaye"

''''..


I become a slave in his house since 1 week. Why I'm saying his house it was once my one where I happily live with my parents.

He lives here with his Ps Radhi, she is nice girl by heart..not as wicked as him. He don't let me sleep, compel me to do all household works from sweeping to gardening..n even sends me to market to buy vegetables.

This day I'm also in market..

"Bhaiya jara 1kg Tamatar dena"

This voice is familiar to my ears, as I turn ,"Murli sir!!"

He look at me. I hugged him tightly and fell on his limbs..

The vegetable vendor says," Lagta hai inka koi door ka rishtedar hai, jo bahut lambe waqt baad mila hai."

He hold me in his arms " Rihan, Rihan'. Utho.."

😳~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~😳

Edited by indupriya2008 - 14 years ago
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Posted: 14 years ago
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Oh no..ye Dhananand😡
grt writing.👏.
bechari Malini😭
Ab Murli sir aagaye...to koi prob nahi hogi...hope so
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Posted: 14 years ago
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Originally posted by: Ritu278

Oh no..ye Dhananand😡
grt writing.👏.
bechari Malini😭
Ab Murli sir aagaye...to koi prob nahi hogi...hope so

Itni jaldi padh liya..😕...anyways ..thank u 😳
Edited by indupriya2008 - 14 years ago

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