Arakshi SS : Jatishwar *ch 5 & 6- pg 15* updated

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IArmageddonI

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Posted: 10 years ago

#51

Originally posted by: kunchu
oye why didnt i read it before?
itna acha jarahi hai
cant wait to read more
abhi bhi title ka meaning ni samjha
koi n teacherji samjha denge nxt time na😳

KOi gal nahi, I can understand why u get busy 😉 By the way, just asking... should I send the promised gift from here? 😈

Jatishwar woh insaan hota hai jisko apni past life yaad rahe.

Lots of evil love,

BUHAHAHAHAHA

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IArmageddonI

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Posted: 10 years ago

#52

Twenty one comments and twenty six people wanting me to continue this.

Am I glad or not!

Loads of love to all of you,

Using Avni ji's words, this is fiction so please take it with not only grain of salt but also paani, pepper, roti, sabzi.. everything...

This is going to be a fast paced story so expect changes SOON.

With love,

CHAPTER 2

You know who :)

P.S : DON'T forget to scroll up to read the replies to your comments!

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0913155

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Posted: 10 years ago

#53

Dhasuuu😛😃 masttt plz continue soon

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shaheen82

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Posted: 10 years ago

#54

superb update...just loved it...plz continue soon and thanx for pm 😊

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TereLiyeMINU

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Posted: 10 years ago

#55

Well that was pretty well chapter.Loved the introduction of Sameer and outburst of Arjun.Some lines are beautiful purple patches.Have you read 'The Ultimate Safari' by Nadine Gordimer?? If yes then I want that you should put/mention a rough passage of turbulent times.As ur backdrop and setting is the refugee camp I sincerely request to build the pensiveness of backdrop scene.I found the characters well groomed but felt that the stage on which it is set is sometimes being superficially neglected.Hope u didn't mind.:)
I am an ardent lover of ur every single word and emotion.I just hope this story become a magnum opus of urs.With wishes.Keep writing with unabated spirits.

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Shivani P

@Lovelost_shivi

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Posted: 10 years ago

#56

Very nice...
Sameer is so funny...
Harishchandra ki Aatma...haha..lol..
Arakshi moment...ahaan..ahem..ahem..Loved it...
continue soon..

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IArmageddonI

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Posted: 10 years ago

#57

Originally posted by: TereLiyeMINU
Well that was pretty well chapter.Loved the introduction of Sameer and outburst of Arjun.Some lines are beautiful purple patches.Have you read 'The Ultimate Safari' by Nadine Gordimer?? If yes then I want that you should put/mention a rough passage of turbulent times.As ur backdrop and setting is the refugee camp I sincerely request to build the pensiveness of backdrop scene.I found the characters well groomed but felt that the stage on which it is set is sometimes being superficially neglected.Hope u didn't mind.:)
I am sn aredent lover of ur every single word and emotion.I just hope this story become a magnum opus of urs.With wishes.Keep writing with unabated spirits.

Thank you for your comment dear. I am glad for your suggestions, it does mean a lot to me!

No I haven't read it yet but perhaps once I find more time for myself I shall definitely look into it!

As far as your concerns with the backdrop is concerned I 100% agree with you regarding that. In fact, since I love sharing ideas let me say that I had started off working on the bg of the situation of West Bengal.

It comes right after this. But honestly speaking I was unsure whether I should post that or not because it just didn't fit in with the flow of chapter 2...

I truly hope that you will love the next chapter which comes up, would send a draft of it to you when I am done with it.

Would love your views on that!

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sairam175

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Posted: 10 years ago

#58

Awesome part

Sakshi wake up and search for arjun

Like Sam and sakshi bond

Wow arakshi fright is nice

Like there pov

Con soon

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Delusional Minx

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Posted: 10 years ago

#59

Awesome update dear

Loved it

Shaakhi is relaxed to find her little bro happy! good!

Sameer n his wierd accent, but he's really sweet! Teasing Shaakhi with Arjun's name, yahan bhi enjoy kar raha hai! Shaakhi-Sameer share a sweet relation, beautifully written!

Poor Shaakhi, Sameer isn't leaving any chance to tease her, though unknowingly! Arjun buying clothes for her, oh my!!

the fierce convo of Arakhi, it was burning! Sameer was still enjoying in teasing his friend!

Arjun was shopping for her, Shaakhi, you've really got a bad timing! very bad! The next scene that followed, I'd already guessed it n it was the same, but I enjoyed it thoroughly!

"Enough for Arjun to sigh,... be miles away from her." I don't think you'd want that at all!

She gave her gold chain, whoa, n Arjun was freaked out! Arjun get a grip, you're losing yourself! haha! The girl is busy shouting n he's in his lala land! Oh God!!

He asked her to help them, n she agreed! Good!

She isn't beautiful, oh really?!? another fiery convo!

"To accept an apology..." loved this line to the core!

He spoke of trust, well that's a wonderful beginning!

do continu soon

thanks for pm

Love,

😊

p.s. - Christmas surprise.. oh that's quite long! But will wait! :P

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Tabassum Nitol

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Posted: 10 years ago

#60

Awwwsssmmm Update
Loved It
Beautifully Written
Loved the bonding Sam-Shaakhi share Sooo Sweet
Awww he was teasing her with Arjun's name
Aye, bunu... Arjun da ikane neyi ." Loved this line :D
Wow! Arjun was shopping for Shaakhi Lovely but his outburst hurt her
Loved Arakshi's heated convo Supper Awwwsssmmm
Arjun want her to help them n she accept nice
Continue Soon
Waiting eagerly for next part
Thanks for the PM