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Neetz

@Neetz

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Posted: 9 years ago

#31

Originally posted by: Hayaa.m
Super awesome 👍🏼

Thanks a lot.😊

Originally posted by: gargpoo
Its awam
Adi is the best character after leap..
U portrayed his emotions very well
Loved it
Cont soon

Thanks. Glad you liked it.😊

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kavya

@s_kavya

Rocker

Posted: 9 years ago

#32

Awww Nee ... That was a really beautiful emotional update.. you portrayed Adi's POV wonderfully here... yes i know you were upset about how Raman refused to take adi to Australia but i never thought it will make you write something like this.. but then its good as we got this beautiful piece of writing from you... 👏

Will be waiting for next update continue soon 🤗

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shreya

@Shre28

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+ 5

Posted: 9 years ago

#33

What a beautiful array of emotions from the point of view of someone who has always been neglected on the show. The Adi that was show in the initial days of the show was a spoiled-brat, a medium through which Shagun could manipulate the Bhallas. However, with Ishi-maa's entry in his life his personality saw a 360 degrees change. Though he was with her for the shortest time, he is presently the reflection of Ishita, her values and beliefs.

Both Raman & Ishita, in their desperation and anger took steps and spoke words that not only changed the course of their lives but also impacted both the families. However, the worst affected was Adi and to top to his woes no one seems to understand, see and bothered by his pain. While Ruhi was instrumental to Ishra, both forgot about Adi in those moments of despair. Ishita attempted to end her life without realizing that she is breaking the world of a young boy who has just started realizing the importance of family. Raman on the other hand lives only for Pihu forgetting that Adi is the same boy for whom he had fought with the world, insulted his wife and in whose memories he cried himself to sleep. In the midst of all this a boy grew up too soon trying to find sunshine back in his life.

Adi, presently is my most favorite character in the show. Here is my only hope of something good happening in the show. I really hope that the CVs show his point of view as well. Till then I am glad that writers like you are choosing to be his voice. Great update. Waiting for the next part.

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Neetz

@Neetz

Voyager

Posted: 9 years ago

#34

Originally posted by: s_kavya
Awww Nee ... That was a really beautiful emotional update.. you portrayed Adi's POV wonderfully here... yes i know you were upset about how Raman refused to take adi to Australia but i never thought it will make you write something like this.. but then its good as we got this beautiful piece of writing from you... 👏

Will be waiting for next update continue soon 🤗

Thank you so much, Kavya ben🤗 I am glad you liked this.

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Neetz

@Neetz

Voyager

Posted: 9 years ago

#35

Originally posted by: Shre28
What a beautiful array of emotions from the point of view of someone who has always been neglected on the show. The Adi that was show in the initial days of the show was a spoiled-brat, a medium through which Shagun could manipulate the Bhallas. However, with Ishi-maa's entry in his life his personality saw a 360 degrees change. Though he was with her for the shortest time, he is presently the reflection of Ishita, her values and beliefs.
Manipulate Raman actually. and toshi ofc. She and her GKC obsession. 🤢

Both Raman & Ishita, in their desperation and anger took steps and spoke words that not only changed the course of their lives but also impacted both the families. However, the worst affected was Adi and to top to his woes no one seems to understand, see and bothered by his pain. While Ruhi was instrumental to Ishra, both forgot about Adi in those moments of despair. Ishita attempted to end her life without realizing that she is breaking the world of a young boy who has just started realizing the importance of family. Raman on the other hand lives only for Pihu forgetting that Adi is the same boy for whom he had fought with the world, insulted his wife and in whose memories he cried himself to sleep. In the midst of all this a boy grew up too soon trying to find sunshine back in his life.

You have said it all here. Bang on. The underlined line..👏

Adi, presently is my most favorite character in the show. Here is my only hope of something good happening in the show. I really hope that the CVs show his point of view as well. Till then I am glad that writers like you are choosing to be his voice. Great update. Waiting for the next part.

He is my fav too. And hoping for the same but tbh, i dont trust the CVs.
Thank you so much. Glad to know that you liked it. Updating in a few minutes. 😊

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Neetz

@Neetz

Voyager

Posted: 9 years ago

#36

Hello ppl.😊

I am back with Part B of the story. I am so sorry for the delay in updating this. I was aiming to wrap this up in two parts but the update got too lengthy so it will now have one more part after this.

This particular part has more of self talks of the characters, their realizations of where they have gone wrong. I really hope you guys like it

P.S. This one is specially dedicated to my fav girl, Anku. Thank you again. And a very very happy birthday in advance. You're such an amazing soul. I hope you have a great year. Love u sistaa😳

Update in the next post.

Edited by Neetz - 9 years ago

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Neetz

@Neetz

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Posted: 9 years ago

#37

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kaa1202

@kaa1202

Sparkler

Posted: 9 years ago

#38

Great one Neetz...

I m sure CVs justification for Adi's won't be near to this piece..

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-Anku-

@-Anku-

Stunner

+ 4

Posted: 9 years ago

#39

Thanks so much Nee 🤗 for this wonderful birthday gift. Something I didn't expect, but you didn't plan too discreetly for a surprise so I guessed pretty quickly 😛 But this is the best gift I could have got because you know how much I love both these characters. Now, I can't wait for you to give me the rest of it too.

You've done an amazing job of expressing each of their feelings and inner thoughts in this part. I love that Ishita and Raman both have realizations that they failed their children, but mostly that they failed Adi. Because Adi indeed has had the shorter end of the stick for most of the show. He was used by Shagun and Ashok, caught in the mess between Raman and Shagun. When he finally did choose to stay at the Bhalla's he saw so much ordeal happen around him and now he's lost both his parents. One parent who was ready to die for Ruhi but not stay alive for him and the other just gave up on him. I can't believe this was the same Raman who changed to another completely different person when it came to Adi. For the same son, he has no good thing to say, no moment to spare. I am glad you didn't mince words or try and sympathize with IshRa as parents, you never justified them, you made them realize upfront and bluntly that they had been pathetic parents.

I especially loved Ishita's realization. It was her first interaction with someone from the family and faced the reality she had been running from, you depicted her emotion and her feelings so perfectly that I could picture her sitting huddled and thinking about where she been wrong..

Raman is a complex man, but at the same time he's someone who accepts his mistakes and wants to remedy them and you retained that here. He's just someone who gets weighed down by his anger and ends up saying or doing things he regrets later. His major fault being that he not only punishes himself, but even the people around him.

Lovely writing Nee, I love how your writing is so perfectly concise and crisp even though you haven't missed a single detail. And the attention to the deepest emotion of every character is awesome.

P.S - My favorite is the inclusion of those photographs that depicted some moments between the family, it teared me up

I know you'll be busy now, but I'll be eagerly waiting for the part I am sure is going to be my most favourite from your story 😃

Thanks so so much once again for this gift 🤗 Love you.

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-K.13-

@-K.13-

Sparkler

Posted: 9 years ago

#40

It was his birthday.

Like way to take my already tearful heart and jab it with a knife.

My poor Adi 😔

I jaldi want the next update so I can see how the duffer parents get their heads out of their own problems & reach out to Adi!

Wonderful writing though - just loved loved your depth of emotion. Better watch out though bc I may make future os requests to you too now! 😆

Edited by -K.13- - 9 years ago