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Dazzler

Posted: 9 years ago

#11

To tell you the truth.. I was really confused about the story..couldn't understand what is happening and what has happened.. But then 'Raman' and I grasped it instantly.

A really nice take on what could have happened.

Please do write more such stories but the next one should be on Ishra (I know I am being greedy lol)..

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Dazzler

Posted: 9 years ago

#12

To be honest.. I couldn't get the story initially.. but then :Raman' & I grasped it instantly. A nice take on what could have happened after Raman's hospitalization. Please do write more but the greedy Ishra fan in me wants the next to be on Ishra..

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sukanksha

@sukanksha

Rocker

Posted: 9 years ago

#13

Different one and a superb one.
I wish cvs learn from this one at least

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chami sanjeewani

@ranisa123

Inactive

Posted: 9 years ago

#14

awesome os dr.quite different but nice

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lakshmi

@maduragymhasium

Rocker

Posted: 9 years ago

#15

sorry for late reply dear

beautifully written

you show the father pain to away from his son amazingly dear

so emotional

but more excellent dear

love it so much dear

👏👏👏👏

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Nikki

@desire_nikki

Dazzler

+ 4

Posted: 9 years ago

#16

Awsome Os yr...

I do have a slightest of idea that it was about Raman..

yippe i guessed it right..

it was so emotional...

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996541

Hibernated

Posted: 9 years ago

#17

Originally posted by: gargpoo
Awesome OS dear...
CVS turned this emotional track into a comedy wen Raman WS hospitalized...
Wish v cud get hv something like this
Loved it totally

Thank you so much! Glad you liked the OS! I was very disappointed by this track and how the buildup was spoiled by the comedy they turned it into and penned down a portion of what I wanted to see! Thank you so much for liking and commenting!

Originally posted by: ..Honeydukes..
Superb OS dear
Loved it

Thank you so much! Glad you liked the OS! Thank you so much for liking and commenting!

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996541

Hibernated

Posted: 9 years ago

#18

Originally posted by: florine_20
Res

Unres soon!😊

Originally posted by: Sk-Sharmin
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Unres soon!😊

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996541

Hibernated

Posted: 9 years ago

#19

Originally posted by: Albeli26
hats off to you prabh for this commendable job
really liked this one yaar. I am actually unable to understand why cvs always end every sensible track on joke. but yup leave it and trust me it was simply fantastic

Thank you so much! Glad you liked the OS! I don't think we will ever understand how such beautifully tracks can be royally ruined! Thank you so much for liking and commenting!

Originally posted by: akriti154
Lovely os
a father's emotions were portrayed vry well
thnxx 4 pm

Thank you so much! Glad you liked the OS especially all the emotions! Thank you so much for liking and commenting!

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996541

Hibernated

Posted: 9 years ago

#20

Originally posted by: -K.13-
Prabh - this was beautiful! I loved seeing the depth of Mr. Bhalla's anguish. Initially I thought this was Raman's POV but was pleasantly surprised at the end!

Can't wait for your next bit of inspired & emotional writing! 😃

Thank you so much! Glad you liked the OS especially his inner turmoil! If not for the end portion, it can be an OS on Raman's feelings and it can easily be taken off the child swap track! But thank you so much for liking and commenting!