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Posted: 10 years ago

Originally posted by: monalisa123

Update please Vee

Your last update left us hanging in the mid air. We have been circling at 30,000 feet above the ground for one whole week yaar., running out of fuel (just watched die hard 2 and 3 😆).
Fuel ke nam pe update dedo baba Vee 😳


Lol. Tonight.
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Posted: 10 years ago
Part 21A
"Meri Nazar Dhundhe Tujhe"

Thursday 24 September 2014
Aakash Ganga Society
10.00 am

Ishita looked at her watch in exasperation as she hurriedly pulled a brush through her hair.

She had three appointments this morning and she was running late. Blame it on that husband of hers, she thought, her lips softening into a smile.

He had called at midnight and had stayed on the phone for over an hour, telling her about his day, asking her about hers, about Ruhi, and then whispering sweet nothings to her, telling her how much he was yearning for her, how much he longed to be in her arms. Even after he had finally hung up, Ishita had been unable to sleep, his call reminding her of his distance from her, his voice evoking memories of being held in his arms, of being caressed and loved by him.

Well, the end result of her sleepless pining for Raman was that she was going to be very late today. Mihika had already left, and amma and appa had both gone shopping, so the house was empty as Ishita grabbed her handbag and car keys and pulled the door shut behind her.

She had almost reached her car when Ruhi's voice stopped her in her tracks.

"Ishima"

"Ruhi!!" Ishita turned around in surprise. Ruhi ran towards her, dressed in the pretty pink and white shorts and t shirt set they had bought in the weekend.

"Ru beta, aap school kyun nahi gaye? {Ru, why haven't you gone to school?}" Ishita dropped to her knees, gathering Ruhi to herself and quickly touching her forehead to check her temperature. "You don't have a fever. Kya hua Ruhi? Why are you still at home."

"Ishima, aaj special trip hai. School se call aaya tha. Kaha ki mujhe ghar se pick karenge." {Ishima, there's a special trip today. They called from the school. They said they'll pick me from homework}

"Trip? Kaisa trip Ruhi? Mein ne toh kal hi aap ki teacher se baat ki thi. She didn't say anything about a trip." {Trip? What sort of trip Ruhi? I spoke to your teacher yesterday. She didn't say anything about a trip}

"I don't know Ishima. Kal shaam ko call kiya tha, daadi ne kaha." {I don't know Ishima. They called yesterday afternoon. Daadi said so}

"There's something not right" Ishita mumbled to herself. She had been at Ruhi's school the previous day to talk to Ruhi's teacher about how she had been doing at school. Both she and Raman were concerned that the custody case and their complicated equation might be affecting Ruhi, and Ishita had made an appointment with Mrs Khan to talk things over with her. And she remembered clearly Mrs Khan mentioning that Ruhi would be practising an item for the Diwali celebrations the next day. Today. So what was this trip about?

"Ru beta, aap yahan akele kyun ho?" {Ruhi, why are you alone here?} Ishita asked as she fished her phone out of her bag, her appointments forgotten as an unknown fear began to grasp her.

"Daadu hai na Ishima, woh wahan security guard uncle se baat kar rahe hai. Hum school ki transport ki wait kar rahen hai." {Daadu is here Ishima. He's talking to the security guard uncle. We are waiting for the transport to pick me up}

"Mein abhi daadu se baat karti hoon" {I'll go and talk to your daadu}

Ishita had just started to dial Ruhi's school number when a mini bus with Blossom School's emblem drew up at the gates. She shut the phone and grabbed Ruhi's hand as a man and a woman got out of the bus and approached the Mr Bhalla.

The security guard had moved away to speak to a motorist who had stopped nearby. In the distance Ishita could also see the familiar figure of Romi approaching on his motorbike

"Ruhi puttar aaja. Teri bus aageyi." Mr Bhalla called out. {Ruhi, come dear. Your bus is here}

Ruhi smiled up at Ishita. "Mein jaon Ishima?" {Shall I go Ishima?}

"Ruhi, just wait, mein school call karti hoon." {Ruhi, just wait, I'm calling your school}

Ishita let go off Ruhi's hand to dial the school and just at that moment, Mr Bhalla called out again.

"Ruhi aaja puttar" {Ruhi, come dear}

"Ishima, I'm going" And Ruhi ran off towards her grandfather and the waiting mini bus.

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Khanna Mansion
10.00 am

"Everything going as planned Gupta?"

Ashok Khanna thrust aside the accounts he had been checking and turned a stern eye on the shady lawyer he employed.

"Yes Mr Khanna. We got a woman to call the Bhallas last night posing as Ruhi's teacher. She will be picked up from her house today for what they think is a school trip. Kisi ko koi shaq nahi hua." {Nobody was suspicious}

"Good. Good. And they will take her outside the city straight away."

"Yes Sir. We have arranged all that. She will be taken good care of. And we will call Raman Bhalla tonight and warn him not to call the police. Then leak the news to the media tomorrow."

"And then I can enter the picture and rescue her. Make sure we have good media coverage for that. Raman Bhalla will look like an irresponsible fool and i will be the hero. Woh kidnappers ko kuch pata toh nahi hai na mere baare mein." {Those kidnappers don't know about me do they?}

"Not at all sir. Nobody can trace this back to you."

"Good. I'm off to the Chief Ministers lunch now. Keep me posted Gupta."

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Aakash Ganga Society

"Ruhi"

Ishita ran after Ruhi, the irrational fear that was in her heart gathering pace. She caught up with her little daughter just outside the bus, where her dada was waiting for her.

"Ruhi wait" she said firmly, grabbing hold of Ruhi.

"Ishita" Mr Bhalla looked at her in surprise. "Kya hua?" {Ishita, what's wrong?}

"Woh Mr Bhalla, I'm sorry sir, lekin yeh trip Ruhi ki. Woh..." She thought wildly for an excuse. "Woh Shravu, my nephew, woh bhi toh yahi school jaata hai, Ruhi ke saath class mein hai, lekin usko trip ke baare mein pata nahi." {Mr Bhalla, I'm sorry sir, but this trip of Ruhi's. My nephew Shravau, he is in the same class as Ruhi but he doesn't know anything about this trip}

The woman standing outside the bus spoke up. She was young and smartly dressed, but Ishita had never seen her at Ruhi's school. The tall solidly built thuggish looking man with her, a smile fixed on his face, was dressed casually and cheaply, which only increased Ishita's suspicions.

"This trip is only for selected students ma'am " she said pleasantly. "Hum ne explain kiya tha phone par." {We explained on the phone}

"Aap kaun hai?" {Who are you?} Ishita asked quietly, maintaining a firm grip on Ruhi's hand. She could see that Mr Bhalla was looking at her in surprise, but a nagging fear drove her to continue her questions.

"I..I'm a teachers aide at Blossoms" the young woman said. "Mein ne abhi bataya Mr Bhalla ko. Ab hum chale Ruhi? We have to pick the other children too." {I'm a teachers aide at Blossoms. I just told Mr Bhalla. Shall we go Ruhi? We have to pick up the other children too}

Ishita tried to peer into the bus but the windows were all heavily glazed.

"Aur baache hain kya?" she asked.

The young woman shook her head in the negative. "Mein ne bataya na Mr Bhalla ko. Ruhi is our first pick up. Chale Ruhi?" {I told Mr Bhalla. Ruhi is our first pick up. Let's go Ruhi}

The woman extended a hand to Ruhi.

"No wait" Ishita took a deep breath. "I was at Ruhi's school yesterday to see Shravu. I spoke to their teacher. Ruhi ko toh aaj diwali dance practice karna hai. Mrs Khan ne kuch nahi kaha kisi trip ke baare mein. Aur mein ne aap ko kabhi school mein nahi dekha. I'm sorry, but I need to call Mrs Khan first" {No wait, I was at Ruhi's school yesterday to see Shravu.i spoke to their teacher. Ruhi was supposed to be doing her Diwali dance practice today? Mrs Khan didn't say anything about a trip. I'm sorry, but I need to call Mrs Khan first}

"Theek hai Ishita. Humme pata hai aap Ruhi ki kitni achi dost ho. Apni tasalli kar lo" Mr Bhalla was saying as Ishita flipped open her phone. {Okay, Ishita. I know you are a very good friend to Ruhi. You make your call if you feel uneasy}

Suddenly there was a scream from Ruhi.

The thuggish man had made a grab at Ruhi and had her firmly in his grip, swiftly dragging her towards the waiting mini bus.

"Time waste kar rahi ho Mona " he shouted at his accomplice, who jumped onto the bus. "Utha lete hai bachi ko." {You're wasting time Mona. Let's just take the kid}

"Nooo " Ishita screamed launching herself at the man, trying to wrestle Ruhi away.

Her instinct had been right she realised. Her child was in danger. She grabbed frantically at the man, as Mr Bhalla also rushed towards them.

But the thug was too strong. He shoved Ishita away, holding the screaming Ruhi firmly with his other hand.

To her horror Ishita felt herself falling, her grip on Ruhi weakening.

"Ruhi" she screamed, as she landed heavily on the ground, her head striking a jagged stone. She felt a searing pain. The next moment there was darkness. And then oblivion.

Meri nazaar dhundhe tujhe
Sochu yahi
Tu aa ke thaamegi Ma

Unse mein yeh kehta nahi
Par mein seham jaata hoon Ma
Chehre pe aane deta nahi
Dil hi dil mein ghabrata hoon Ma
Tujhe sab hai pata hai na Ma
Tujhe sab hai pata meri Ma

Part 21B: Hum Mar Jayenge
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Edited by Veeann - 10 years ago
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Posted: 10 years ago
sorry for the delayed comment V...
this was an unexpected speed breaker...superbly written and loved Ishita taking things into hand and stopping the kidnappers!

actually read the next part too...will comment on it in a new post!
Edited by vidya.anand - 10 years ago
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Posted: 10 years ago
I'm sorry, it's a short update and I'm not that happy with it, but I had committed myself to a kidnapping and so I have to write my way around it.
Things will take better shape in the next update which I will try to do by Wednesday. I know it's mirroring the show storyline, but I had planned this and now I'm finding it difficult to sketch a different route to reveal.

So sorry again 😃
Edited by Veeann - 10 years ago
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Posted: 10 years ago
Short ya long update...I was just about to call it a night to, only to find that you updated! After a looonnggg day...this is the best!

🤗s for you!
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Posted: 10 years ago
Wow amazing update
A cliffhanger!!!
Plz update soon
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Posted: 10 years ago
shit!!!
ruhi got kidnapped no!!!
please update soon.. can't contain the anxiety
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Posted: 10 years ago
Lovely update Vee!! 👏👏👏
The way Ishita tried to stop Ruhi from getting into that bus...wow vee it was so thrilling...goosebumps!!

Ishita is such a doting mom...love the way you portray her...I know you won't let anything happen to Ishita, but that fall and head striking a stone sounded real and scary.

I particularly loved the choice of words in this update.

"Ruhi" she screamed, as she landed heavily on the ground, her head striking a jagged stone. She felt a searing pain. The next moment there was darkness. And then oblivion."

You write so well. I lub you and I consider myself to be your biggest fan!!😳

Next update soon😊
Edited by fugitives123 - 10 years ago
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Posted: 10 years ago
Aww...last part was so heart touching...
I can imagine...Ishita screaming for Ruhi...& Your song selection...mindblowing...rula diya...😭
Chap. Name Meri Najar dhundhe tuje...to muje laga ki Raman Ishita ko dhundh raha hoga...but I was wrong...
Pls continue soon...
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Posted: 10 years ago
Vee first of all so sorry for editing my comments like after so long. Really feel awkward now esp, I was the one pushing you for update and here I am super late.

Coming to the update, so cute to see Biwi missing puttar and instead of complaining here she is blushing which is making it 😳 .. awww my poor ru is got kidnaped and loved Ishitha's tadap initially. Esp when she took her in to a hug thinking something is going wrong made me all emotional. Vee, I dont know how there is always some or the other scene i could relate with and here's one more for you and this beautiful story which is so close to the track. I am falling hard for this story more and more

Edited by Aru.Divan - 10 years ago

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