Do 'Dil' Ek Jaan! Last part on page 16 - Page 15

Originally posted by: -Raz-

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Apologies ⭐️ for being so late,i honestly thought my post went through ..but God damn the internet played with me...

Anywho let.me get to the point,i read immediately after you posted and my.exact feelings and thoughts were "PERFECT"..It was truly beautiful...not overly-too bold and not to explicit or showibg/stating too much...t was just right...exactly how every first time is expected to be i suppose...


you are a talented and beautiful writer and i wish to continue reading 100000000000000 beautiful hot. OS/SS/ff from you



raz

Originally posted by: rutu83

aww loved it! i love how your ishra stay in character in all stories
wonderful as always :)

Originally posted by: prachi_vrushan

it was romantic
n d end was so cute
Thanx for d pm

Originally posted by: Maaneet099

loved it! her hesitation and his experience we very aptly portrayed :)

loved the epilogue ;) I almost thought he would play around like the hero in the movie Alaipayuthey (remade in hindi as Saathiya) 😆

Originally posted by: dazzzling

Wow. The love making is simply gorgeously written. Blush worthy and romantic. And you say you are so bad at it? This is simply a class apart.
Now the epilogue. The icing on the cake for me. How I wish CVs give us such IshRa mornings rather than them directly in the kitchen.
Gafur tailor comment was too good. I love the way you always add that unique touch in your stories just like the moment Ishita lifted her hand to show her ring and convey to Raman her message.
Thank you so much for this drool worthy update.
Keep writing.

Originally posted by: Nichuss

im not geting words to typ...

im just in ishra land...

esply the epilogue... ☺️

monday start with ur ts... hailaa...

wen we can see these romantic gestures in yhm

Originally posted by: Liashna

Hey OSJ, great one. Loved it 😳

😆 The last lines were the best part.

Originally posted by: Jyoe

ah finally..do dil ek jaan became do jism ek jaan!! so subtle, yet sensually and beautifuly it was. loved it :)

Originally posted by: paru_rox

Oju ...completely loved it. Ishita's nervousness and Raman's passionate avataar *sigh*.

But my fave was the epilogue ... thank you my dear friend for the brilliant morning after scene 🤗. Haaye ... mangalsutra pehnaya ussney upar se naughty RKB ke one liners😳. I loved it completely.

Poora khaandaan IF se inspired hai, deets lene aaya hai about the deed 😆


PS - Waiting for your next Oju, will especially need it if the new promo is anything to go by.

Originally posted by: Arooj.M

What a perfect ending. I love how Ishita woke up a little after the consummation and was overwhelmed by it all, that scene was really well written. Enjoyed this update very much, thanks for the PM!