My dream track (unnamed)finished

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part 1

The situation in Bhalla house is different now as Raman has gone missing from it for almost a month.Raman got a busy schedle and he was trying hard to cope up with the changes his company got.Due to increase in foreign clients PSR got now a few changes and their was extra night shift in employees.So Raman was supposed to handle the situation even in nights as it is newly started and they need Raman more.

So Raman was supposedly go in middle of nights or would be coming in late nights.So Raman decided to stay away from here near by office untill this matter is resolved.He got a house near by office and has been staying there alone for almost since a month .He will showup few times in Bhalla house to show his face to his parents.Then Raman will pickup Ruhi from school and spend time with her in evenings in his new house.Then Romi will be taking Ruhi back home.

In all this scenario one very important character went missing .You would have guessed by this time.

Raman very seldomly calls home as he has a big time jumble running on his neck now.Ruhi is happy that however busy Raman is he is playing with her and helping her in maths and science for her studies.That one amazing person has almost never seen Raman whole month but even her parents met Raman seldomly as he used to come to Bhalla house in afternoons as our special person would be in clinic.

Our special person was even unable to call him as he used to scold her when ever she called as he would be busy and her timming is worse along.

Location Bhalla house.Ruhi just arrived from Raman's house and is happy.

Ruhi "Aaj main papa key saath bahutha saarey games kheeli aur home work bhee karlee.Papa maths kitney acchey bolthey hain.Mujhey miss ney A+ diya thaa mera homework ko."

Special person smiles and "Han papa ney kyaa kahan ."

Ruhi "Kuch naheen ,mujhsey kuch naheen poocha jho main bol rahen thee who sun rahan thaa."

Special person got pissed as their was no where discussion about her for Raman.She is unable to show his anger to anyone as she just can't say Raman is ignoring her as Raman was in touch with everyone except her even Mihika met Raman in few meetings .Ruhi is meeting him.Then she cant blame as he din't call her as he is not calling any one and no one is calling him knowing his busy schedules.

Our special person "Ruhi tum jaakar ready hojaon, main abhee aathee hun."

Then she calls Raman and as usual Raman din't take her call timing is bad as Raman was in meeting.

The Raman calls her after few minutes and she gets excited "Tumney phone kyon kiyya.?"

She don't have an answer.

Raman "Jaldee bolo mujhey kaam hain yahan."

She then fakes up "Ruhi ghar pahunch gayee yeh bathaaney key liyen phone kiyya."

Raman "Bathadee naa.Abh kuch aur bakee hain?"

She angrily "Naheen ."and he cuts the call irritating her more.

Except Ruhi and Romi no one in Bhalla house hold know where is Raman's new house.So neither does our special person or else .

Special person in her room scolding Raman.

"Insane .Ussey kuch farak padtha bhee yaa naheen."

"phone kiyya tha fir bhee baath karney mey problem hain."

"Uss samay busy thaa but baath mey tho phone kar hee sakth hain naa."

"Why should I think about it."

"Main kuch poochungi tho mujhey yaad dilaayega kee shaadi sirf Ruhi key liyen hain aur Ruhi sey time spend kar rahan hain."

"But mujhey kyon separate kiyan,ghar mey sabsey milrahan hain.Ek baar clinic bhee aasaktha hain naa."

"Mujhey kyon avoid kar rahan hain.Almost ek mahina hogayya.Uss kaam kabh khatam hooga."

"Even neelu ney bhee ussey dekha main kyaa.?"

She was totally pissed at treatment she is getting as she used to remind him about this marriage well.Even Ruhi don't have any complaint as she don't know that Raman have'nt met her for months.She is enjoying her time with Raman as all restrctions of Bhalla house will not be applied their and she will get all her candy chocolates and icesreams and video games.

There in house Raman was enjoying his few days bachelorhood as no one is there in that house to stop him.He neither followed any restrictions.He used to dring when ever he want and watch match untill he gets a call.

She will neither tell her mother about this.

One day she was supposed to attend parents meeting in school and as Raman wont be able to come.

Then on return journey wanted to meet Raman but deiver was informed to take home directly.

Then in middle car gets repaired and driver says it would be time taking.

Then Ruhi who took the chance starts running on road as she is familier with that area,

Special person "Ruhi rukho kahan jaa rahen hon.Girr jaogee.Road pey aisaa naheen dhoudthey."

Driver "Madem saabh ka ghar yaheen hain aap wahan wait keejiyen.Main gaadi repiar karoonga."

She was shocked as Raman's house is nearby and understood Ruhi was running there only.So she follows Ruhi's steps.

Then when she enters inside Ruhi was playing in her new cycle which Raman brought to teach her how to ride cycle and she was enjoying it.

Special person sees Ruhi happily playing and decides to look for Raman in house but he was not there but Ruhi know where keys are.

She looks inside and is shocked to see the mess in all rooms except hall.It is place where Raman and Ruhi spend time and only maintained neat.

Raman was living in exact opposite ways as she would have wished Raman to be in.

Then after few minutes she hears some sound of car coming and she looks outside and she is hell shocked to see scnario there.

Some lady was hugging Raman and Raman is happily smiling saying "I missed you."

Our special lady was hell shocked seeing some lady hugging Raman before her eyes.

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Posted: 11 years ago
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It would be my most experimental track as I am going through different approach.I just hope you like it.Opinions are welcome.By accident I din't got any name for it.So please suggest a name.

Thanking You.

SAKIV!VIKAS Chandra.
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arrey...khatm kyu kiya...???
continue ...please...😲😲😲
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Originally posted by: punkprincess...

arrey...khatm kyu kiya...???
continue ...please...😲😲😲

darling yeh sirf part 1 thaa.continue hooga.
But one question did you notice one thing in it.
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Originally posted by: SAKIV-RAM

darling yeh sirf part 1 thaa.continue hooga.
But one question did you notice one thing in it.


wot????😲😲😲
continue soon...i'm curious 2 read more ...i can guess😃😃
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Originally posted by: punkprincess...


wot????😲😲😲
continue soon...i'm curious 2 read more ...i can guess😃😃

Yaar in whole part I did one thing different .Did you notice it atleast?It is your question?

Then next part before 12 o' clock
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part 2

Scene starts with our special lady seeing some lady hugging Raman.She is shocked as Raman says "I missed you."

Our special lady unable to control plans to break it but then thinks Raman may say something related to their contract marriage.Then stops.Then she signs Ruhi not to tell that she is here.

She then calls Raman and Raman incidentally cuts the call.

Raman notices door was opened and goes inside worried and sees Ruhi there who was watching cartoons.

Special lady was seeing this hiding in other room.Then other lady enters inside.

Raman "Ruhi tum kabh aye.Akeley aye hon?"

Ruhi "Han gaadi kharaab ho gayee thee tho main yahan aagayee .Aur masti kar rahen hun."

Raman "Akeley ayen hon.Driver ney tumhey Akeley kaisey choda.?"

Ruhi confused "Miss M ."

Then lady smiles.

Lady "Miss R tum kaisey hon.Bahuth din hogayen tumhey dekhkar.?"

Ruhi "Main theek hun.Aap yahan kyaa kar rahen hain Papa key ghar mey."

Miss M "Kyaa na main ney tumhaarey mama key sauthan banney ka plan banaaya issliyen main yahan rukhungi."

Our lady was shocked listening this reply and her situation become worse in that untidy room as she could'nt breath properly.

Ruhi "Theek hain."

Then again shocked as Ruhi accepted simply.

Ruhi "Mera mama banna hain tho special hon a chahiyen.Tumhey mujhey daily gifts dena hoga.Chocolates,cakes, merey saath video games khelna hoga aur "

Miss M "Han movie le jaana hoga hugs and kisses I know.Tum papa sey pooch main in sab mey expert hon."

Our lady was confused to hell as even Ruhi who always never let any woman near her father is not even caring about her and she telling him that she is expert in hugs and kisses.

Raman "Shut up Megha.Bacchi sey kaisey baath kar rahen hon tum."

Megha "Jeeju main mazaak kar rahen hun."

Our lady gets amessage that car is ready and she goes out secretly as she has fear that Raman may catch her trailing on him.

Then she goes home in her car she is hell scared seeing the closeness between Raman and Megha.

Our lady in house to herself.

"Kaun hain yeh Megha.Raman ko aisey kaisey galle laga rahen thee.Raman bhee.."

"Ruhi ko bhee koi farak naheen pada ussey dekhkar?Kaun hain?"

Same time some one knocks the door .Our lady opens it and is shocked.

Megha came taking Ruhi along with her.

Megha shouts loudly.

"Buan aap kahan hon.Main yahan main aye hun."

Toshiji listens this and gets excited and comes in Rush.

Toshiji "Megha tum kabh aye?Mama papa theek hain ?"

Megha hugs Toshiji.

Our lady was again shocked as even Toshiji knew Megha,all except her knew her.

Megha "Sab log theek hain.Mujhey job milee India mey .Issliyen main yahan aagayee."

Toshiji "Yeh tho accha khabar hain.Kahan?"

Megha "Jeeju key company mey."

Toshiji "Raman key saath."

Then Toshiji and Megha notice our lady there.

Megha "Aap Ruhi kee maa hongee."

Toshiji "HAN Raman ke biwi hain."

Megha "Let me introduce myself.I am Megha main Raman ka girlfriend hun."

Toshiji gives a small hit on Megha's head smiling.

Toshiji "Janglee besharam.Abh bhee aisey bolthee rahogi." Smiling.

Megha "Buan main badalney walon mey sey nayeen hun.Jeeju mera best friend hain. Aur main unkee ek friend hun fir girl hun tho girlfriend banee naa."

Toshiji notices our lady confusion.

Toshiji "Megha merey bhai kee beti hain.Sydney sey ayeen hain.Raman sey close hain aur hummesha masti karthee hain.Raman ka girlfriend kehthee hain khudko."Smiling.

Romi comes there.Again Megha goes to him and does some masthi and gives a patting hug .

Megha "Mr R tum kaisey hon.Suna hain tum bhee merey boyfriend key saath kaam karthey hon."

Romi funnily "Han bhabhi thoda thoda seekh rahan hun."

Our lady was full of shocks with this mystery lady who is proudly proclaiming as Raman's girlfriend.

The she meets with everyone and whole house turn to be happy seing her except our lady.

Around 9 O clock Megha was leaving.

Toshiji "Kahan jaa rahen hon yahee rukho naa.?"

Megha "Secret bathaon main naa apkey betey ko rape karney jaa rahen hun.Issliyen mujhey aashirwaad deejiyen."

Everyone laughs at this except our special one

Megha "Main jeeju key ghar mey rukh rahen hun office key pass hain naa."

Then she notices our lady and then funny mode.

Megha "Raman kee biwi hin naa tum.Abh thak tho tum jaangayee hogee kee main kaun hoo.Mujhey kissey ko naam lekey bulaaney kaa aadath naheen hain bad manners hain naa badon ko naam sey bulaana isslieyn aapko main kyaa bulaungi ."

She thinks for few minutes and then

Megha "Milgayee.Tumho mera SAUTHAN."

Our lady "My name is Dr ..."

She was interrupted in middle.

Megha "Han Dr Sauthan.Good night.Main aapkey husband ko rape karney jaa rahen hun."

Megha leaves but it was our lady who is more worried over her visit.

She is scared of Megha now.She is scared that she really may do something as she never saw Raman that smiling before .

Our lady thinking "Who ladkee samajhthee kyaa hain khudko .Main sauthan hun.Raman usska boy friend."

"Raman key saath Akeley ek ghar mey .Iss ladkee ka speed dekhkar tho sach mey lag rahan hain.Raman ko kuch karbhee degee."

Our lady was thinking over Megha .

She din't saw Raman for more than a month and finally she saw was that he was hugging Megha and Megha claiming Raman as her boy friend .It multiplied our ladies worries tens and hundreds.


Edited by SAKIV-RAM - 11 years ago
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Posted: 11 years ago
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Good to see you again in a new dream track. Carry on dude and pls update first
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poor ishu...btwn y u was referring her as spcl person...raman doesnt feel for ishu...hmmm
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Originally posted by: Nichuss

poor!$h0...btwn y u was referring her as spcl person...raman doesnt feel for 1$h0...hmmm

nothing like that I took a challenge to do this one differently without using her name any where that's why will be using some random words there.

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