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Posted: 11 years ago
#21

Originally posted by: Nichuss


ohh ok...so its first meeting for raman...

its ok vikas...it sounded like she was telling wt she taught...

nice try

Then any words for Megha.or Miss M or Girlfriend
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Posted: 11 years ago
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i am reading ur other stories why u always use 2nd woman to jealofy ishita ?kabhi Raman ko bhi jalao
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Posted: 11 years ago
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Originally posted by: dark.lig8

i am reading ur other stories why u always use 2nd woman to jealofy ishita ?kabhi Raman ko bhi jalao

Ishu ko jalaana asaan hain yaar.Writer's safe point.
Actually I am scared of Raman that why I always keep him in safe side as it is risky to mess with him.

Nothing like that .Raman knew Ishita well that she will never leave him and Ishita being ideal girl will not try to jallofy Raman even a heck of a charecter comes.

Then the beauty lies in Ishita's jealousy and possesiveness and Raman's protectiveness and possesiveness.
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Posted: 11 years ago
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interesting concept
chori chori chupke chupke ha
loved it :)
update soon n do pm m
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Posted: 11 years ago
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amazing story line
plz pm me when you update
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Posted: 11 years ago
#26
gud 1...well done..👏
luvd it😛😊..nd thank u 4 d pm...

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Posted: 11 years ago
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part 4

Scene starts with Ruhi entering Raman's house and they see Raman sleeping in hall before TV .(watching TV ).Ruhi rushes in side and wakes him up.

Raman "Tum iyney subha kya kar rahen hon?Tum kaisey aye?"

Then he see his wife coming inside and understood she brought her here.

Raman "Tum yahan kyon aye?I mean kasiey aye?"

Our special one "Maian yahan kyo nahee aa sakthee?"

Raman "Sawaaal ka jawaab sawaal nahen hotha."

Our special one "Mujhey gaadi chalaaney aathee hain."

Raman "Jaantha hun fir bhee tumhey address kaisey patha?"

Our "Ruhi ney bathaya kaisey aana hain."

Then she getting little courage .She had mixed feelings she is speaking to him almost after a month and Raman is behaving as why she came .She don't know how to start speaking..

Then she starts "Raman aap kaisey hon?"

Raman "Theek hun.Tum Ruhi key saath aye hon.Itnaa subaha."

Our special one "Ruhi subaha uthkar ziddd kar rahen thee kee mujhey papa key pass jaana hain.Aur mujhey bhee aaana pada.Ussney ready honey thak bhee wait nahen kiyya.Uthkar seedha aana pada."

Raman "Mainey yeh sab naheen poocha."

She gets annoyed with the reply he got .She wanted to speak to him but he is cutting the talks.

Raman "Tum wahan jaakar ready hojaon .Main khaaney key liyen kuch ready kartha hun."

She goes to that room and then Raman takes Ruhi outside and practicing her how to ride cycle.

Then Megha who got up just now came out looking for Raman then she see Ruhi playing with Raman and understood who came along with her.

Megha "Miss R mama aye hain."

Ruhi "Han.Kyon"

Megha "Kuch naheen aisey pooch rahen hun."

Then Raman and Ruhi tired after practice are coming back to house then Megha slips and was about to fall and Raman stops her from falling by holding her waist.It accidentally forms a romantic pose.

Then our lady by default enters just then seeing them in this pose.

Megha sees her and loudly "Raman tumhaare biwi dekhegee tho hummarey baarey mey shak aajayegi.Abh tho iss pose thodo."

Raman "Hummarey baarey mey kyaa shak karegi."

Megha then acting as if she just saw our JKR.

Megha "Sahuthan aisaa kuch nahen hain main bass gir rahen tho Rman ney pakada.Aur issey jyaada kuch nahen hain?Kuch nahen hain?"

She incidentally repeated her last words to increase her doubt.

Then she hugs Raman and says thankyou for helping her.She almost kisses him on his cheek but it looks a complete kiss for our special one.

Our special lady was shocked seing this and listening repeated words she got doub t that are they hiding something.Ruhi is not caring any thing as she knew Megha from so long and her nature.

Raman then noticing her "Girr rahen tho pakada thaa."

Our special "Mainey poocha naheen .Fir bhee batha rahen hain."

Then Our special one takes Ruhi inside to make her ready.

Then Megha gets to know that Raman has arranged break fast from hotel.She enjoys the break fast .Then again goes back to masthi mode seing Shauthan coming.

Megha "Tum bahuth acche hon Raman,tumhaara Biwi bahuth lucky hain tum har samay har cheez ka dhyaan rakthey hon tumhaarey saath har ladkee kush rahegi aur enjoy karegi."

Raman was shocked as these praises are too much for a break fast.But same doubt struck another one.

Raman notices her "Yeh sirf tiffin key baarey mey baath kar rahen hain."

Then Megha acts as if she saw her just then "Han Raman sahi keh rahan hain "signing as if she understood to Raman "Tho main tiffin key barey mey baath kar rahen hun."

These incidental acts of Megha are creating big blocks of doubts in our special one's mind.

Our special one "Raman aap ready ho jayiye."

Raman goes inside and she follows him to his room.(I think it's no more his room)

Raman "Kyaa tum andhar kyon aye hon?'

"Kyaa main andhar naheen aasakthee.Yeh jitnaa aapka ghar hain utnaa mera."

Raman "Tum yeh kyaa kehrahen hon.Tum bathaon tum yaha kyon aye hon?"

"Main yahan kyo nayee aa sakthee?"

Raman "Yeh mera bedroom hain.Mera"

"Dikh rahan hain.Kitnaa gandha banaakey rakha hain aapney."

Raman "Tum mujhey judge nahee karogi.Tum yahan Ruhi key liyen aye hon.Tum Ruhi ka dhyaan rakho.Main yahan kaisey rehrahan hun .It is none of your business."

Our lady got very angry over this .

"It's none of my buisenss .Raman main aapkee biwi hun."

Raman "Ruhi key liyen shaadi."

Then Raman remembers about that day where he kissed his wife by accident.

Situation happened to be Raman just enterd inside their room and she was inside .She selected his clothes for him to change and then she was going along with Mihika for shopping and got ready beautifully.Then she accidentally steps over something and she was about to fall and Raman holds her and they combinedly falls on bed.They have an eye lock.Raman lost in her eyes goes forward and kisses her over her lips.

Then next moment was she pushed Raman due to embracement .

"Aap kyaa kar rahen they.Mainey kabhee nahen soch kee aap apney line cross karengey"

Raman "I am sorry .I don't know how I did this"

"Raman aap jaanthey hain kee humara rishtha compromise ka hain fir bhee.Hummaree shaadi sirf Ruhi key liyen thaa."

Then she gives him a lecture over this and leaves.Raman was hurt by this.

Now

Raman "Hummara shaadi sirf Ruhi key liyen hain.Tum merey personnal life key baarey mey sawaal nahen kar sakthee."

Raman "Main Ruhi sey time spend kar rahan hun aur merey family mey sabsey.Then it is not your consideration as I am not even sharing anything with you."

Raman"Jab main wahan thaa tho mujhey btumhey jawaab denaa padtha tha kee hum ek room share ar rahen they.Now I don't need to answer you.

He just leaves giving her her own lesson for a small mistake.

She got hurt by this and has tears in her eyes.

Edited by SAKIV-RAM - 11 years ago
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Posted: 11 years ago
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It seems it is my worst part.
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Posted: 11 years ago
#29
Am soo sad... Ishita gets so hurt... Its emotional one...
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Posted: 11 years ago
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Originally posted by: greenie

Am soo sad... Ishita gets so hurt... Its emotional one...

It is Raman who first got hurt.Then it is Now special one's turn
I dont know whether defect in me or crazyness.But I am seing more commedy than emotional part.
Megha is fire brand creating pranks every where.
Edited by SAKIV-RAM - 11 years ago

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