Deception And Debt - OS - Page 6

Originally posted by: Metamorphmagus

Hey Aani!

I haven't read the spoilers. I never do. But I do have a general idea of what's going to happen next week thanks to some of the post titles.

Speaking of titles, what a deception. Until half way through I never realised the story was from Shagun's POV. Brilliant!😆👏

With Ashok Khanna, it is all about power play. Shagun foolishly tries to play games against him. He is a successful businessman after all. I only wish the writers would show why Ashok is not ready to commit. I mean, they are practically married. Only legal documentation is necessary.

While I like the idea of Shagun going to jail and Raman getting the custody of Ashok because it appeals to the sadist in me who wants to see Shagun cry for what she has done to Ishita, I somehow can't imagine Raman playing such a trick. The CEO in him might do that, but the father in him wouldn't and when it comes to Adi, it is the father who surfaces.

Originally posted by: -Ranju-

Such a gud os dear 👏 👏 👏
Very well written n presented 😳 😳
Raman kya baat hai 👏 👏
Wat a badla u tuk from shagun 😳 😳 😳
N ashok khanna finally unhe akkal aagya 😆 😆Shagun ko chodke 😆 😆 😆

I wish r RKB does something like dis in real in serial 😳 😳

Originally posted by: lourel24

it was so intense.liked it.But raman in order to take revenge with shagun has broken ishita miserably.I felt for ishita.Her condition was so broken n raman can't be forgiven for it.He did what shagun has done him long ago.

Originally posted by: Jyoe

Aani!!

Thanks for the PM!😊

OMG you literally threw me off edge!!! ..the first few lines I read I thought it was about Ishita and then suddenly it turns out you are talking about Shagun POV 😲. I was like..huh...did i read it right?😲

Ha ha!! Tooo Good man!! loved the twist and the plot and so wish the exact thing happens on the show also now! You indeed are a great writer and am now a fan of yours (just read 2 OS till now even then 😆)

Are you part of YHM creative team by any chance?😉 If not then you should definitely join them 😳

Loved Ashok's part and Raman was brilliant! if he does exactly what you wrote in your OS, I may think of still forgiving him😆 (not really sure though) for what he did until now to ishita and for the hurt he gave. But me thinks this will the most practical and realistic way of redeeming himself! But he will still have a lot to do of things to make up for what he did wrong!

AWESOME OS!!!👍🏼

Originally posted by: shalu79

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Originally posted by: ThruMyEyez-Nita

Have to say, I initially thought that it was Ishita that Ashok was talking too and what a surprise it was to read that it was Shagun instead, but loved every bit of it, as always.😊

Originally posted by: FieryLioness

OMG Aani this is superb...

man when i started reading, i thought its Ishita untill Ashok said shagun and she was behind bars... i was reading it so curiously thinking its Ishita😳\the moment i read Shagun and whole impact changed it turned into a fun OS for me😆

i so wish to see Shagun falling on her face in show too but don't want Raman as hero in end, like always happens he does everything wrong and then CV's show him hero in the end...

liked ashok in it... Shagun deserves a lesson from Ashok actually more then from Raman , she deserves it from Ashok...

loved it Aani :)

Originally posted by: afsanaanjum

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Hey there Aani! Sorry for being late. Had a busy day.

Hey Afsana no need to be sorry please 😊

When i read the overture i was like gosh man! I was ready to face whatever you had written with one thing in mind and that is this woman (-elder to me-😛) is a hell of a writer hence it has to be something good, so keep scrolling down!😃

Thank you 😳 thats quite some faith you have in me 😳

I read the quotes which spoke of vengeance and figured out that it is a Shagun based OS hence understood your dilemma!😃

Hmm no dilemma there but the fact is I never have written a fic which had some element of suspense/was dark in nature or from the pov of a vamp that is why I was curious to see the reaction of my readers 😳


Now the story : this girl is surely the biggest buffoon on this planet and thinks of revenge after being indignant! Like seriously?😲
- Kudos to you to portray the fact that yes few humans are born with brains without any grey matter!
You surely did justice to the character that the CVs have portrayed!👏


Like I said this before everyone considers themselves as the hero of their story even villains - what makes them vile though is they consider only themselves are have no ethics, morals that would make them conscious of their deeds



Ashok : I did find him disdainful but yes, worthy of respect for being a man in love.
In the near future he might undergo the same situation that Raman did years ago on the show too!
- Liked the depiction of : "I'm in the same situation as he was! He is unfortunately that ONE man whom i hate and is my biggest competitor! Wow!"👏

Ashok may reform in the future or may not that depends on the cvs


Raman : Mr.Smarty, pants isn't he always that?😉😃
All RKB lovers are partial towards him.

only if he shows he is Mr Smarty pants in the show again cos man I am tired of his majboor crap


Genuinely appreciate the flourish of practical thoughts and activities after getting a helping hand.

Hope he chooses the right path on the show too.🤢


Amen to that
Beautiful OS Aani. Yes different but undoubtedly great!👏

Thanks a ton for this buddy. Do keep some more coming.🤗

thanks Afsana 🤗

Originally posted by: Imanezara

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Originally posted by: paru_rox

Loved this Aani ... Both Ashok and Raman using their brains. Finally ... we can say they are shrewd businessmen :-P

Shagun's character traits were really well used by you here to show the levels she can stoop to. I just loved the Macbeth reference. Recently read an OS where Ashok talks about Gatsby.
Have started wishing that Ashok could have some depth in his character in the show too ... gosh he would be cute (Sangram is kinda cute) if he lost some of the idiotism and is shown as a grey character with some good traits too 😉