Originally posted by: loveabletwinz
Namyyy!!!!!! We are soo so sooo sorry for replying so late to your SS!!! But we are so glad that we are here to read it after you are done writing, otherwise, tauba!! We just wouldn't be able to wait!!! Okay okay, without further ado, onto our comments :D
AnnJann, i have no words to depict my emotions in reply to your long heart-touching comments.. I am fortunate to have a wonderful friends like you on my buddy list.. Dont embarrass me by saying 'Sorry'.. I am fortunate you finally caught up with these updates..
Part 1
We absolutely loveddd the tenderness with which you wrote the first part...especially the part when Ishita is reflecting over Ruhi's defence for her, and Raman noticing Ishita as she wipes away a tear...that is so beautifully written!
His words sounded gentle to his own ears. Heck! Why did he feel empathetic for her? It doesn't suit his personality. His mind chided his heart. He searched for a self-interested reason to justify what he just said to her. But he found none. It irked him more. --- This is brilliant, Namy!!!! It is perfect to describe Raman at that moment, unsure about where this concern for Ishita is coming from! You allow us to feel exactly what Raman is feeling at that moment...for someone who is always stoic and insensitive most of the time, his own words of advice to Ishita to not wear her heart on her sleeve must have been quite suprising to him too!! What an awesome peak you give us into Raman's conscience!
Yaar it feels so great when any reader connect with the character.. I wanted to highlight Raman's subtle emotions.. happy you were able to notice those complex emotions..
He held out her gaze for several seconds, then pointed his finger at her damped eyes and spoke, "That's your weakness. Get hold of it." ---- AHHH! NAMMY!!!!!! This is amazing!!!! I love how Raman is being her pillar of strength and support without being blatantly potificating!!! I love that you write about Ishita noticing a genuinety about his words too!!
Underline- God, you're so apt with your words.. This is exactly what i tried to convey.. You girls are amazing reader!!
Part 2
Hahahha! Loved how the second part started! Classic Raman and Ishita knokh-jokh!! That was super funny when Raman wondered what that burning senstation was in his heart and concluded that it was acidity! LOLL!!! So witty, Nammy!
You are amazing with making the transition from light hearted moments to intense romance! Sigh! I can imagine that scene between Raman and Ishita, with Raman pushing back a lock of hair adorning Ishita's face.
Ohhh the wittiness in the lines you have penned down for Raman and ishita is clear as day!!! Sooo funny, yaar!! Not even for the slightest second did those lines seem out of place or character! That whole doordharshan dialaogue was epic!
I always like to pen down funny moments with sassy & witty dialogues.. Sometimes i doubt whether it sounds sappy 😆 But I am glad it turned out really witty in this update.. Its a relief.. lol
This part was so uber cute!!! Absolutely loved every scene between Raman and Ishita, and especially loved the part with Raman and Ruhi making their naughty little promises! You write about their relationship so beautifully, Namy!!!
Thank you so much again..
Sigh!!!! As much as we would love to keep reading and can't wait to see how this story unfolds, we have to bid adieu for now, Namy!!! But we shall be back shortly to read the last part and comment too!!! Till then, sending you loads of love and hugs!!!
AnnJann, love you girl for sparing time and commenting.. It really means a lot.. Thanks a ton🤗
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