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all i can say is wowwwwwwww
loved it....i love da interaction btw aisha n her frnd
n da date wid yusuf was too good 😛
awwww aisha n yusuf makes a grt pair..i hope she agrees 4 da marriage soon 😊
u said its a long chappie but i loved reading it i wished it didnt ended.........i wanted to read more n more
eagerly waiting 4 da next chappie
pls update soon

Wow Suhana!

I don't generally read this story but I just happened to read this part and I
am hooked! Wow, the flow of words is just brilliant in ur fic, as is they flow
of time. Everything is real and u get a pleasent feeling while reading. As
soon as my exams get over and I return from holiday I will check out this
story properly. 😃

P.S. I still have no clue who the characters are 😆

wow!! this is my best chapter I just loved it......especially the interaction between yusuf and ayesha 😳 ....aww yah hasan wud surely want her to move on na....he loved her ..and now I am loving yusuf and hasan 😳
awww I wish hina wasn't so sarcastic but it's understandable 😊 ...afterall she lost her bro
pls do continue sooooooon..........I just want more and more of ur story

aww i loved this chapter it just made me feel good 😳 i wish ysuf and aisha get together and samira and rehan too 😃 really enjoyed it
thxx and plzz update soon

omg

suhanaa


UPDATE ASAPP
plssssss 😛
THIS IS AMAZINGGG..goodddd job! its fantasticc !

Originally posted by: tnbedi

all i can say is wowwwwwwww
loved it....i love da interaction btw aisha n her frnd
n da date wid yusuf was too good 😛
awwww aisha n yusuf makes a grt pair..i hope she agrees 4 da marriage soon 😊
u said its a long chappie but i loved reading it i wished it didnt ended.........i wanted to read more n more
eagerly waiting 4 da next chappie
pls update soon

aww, thanks so much Tina! Glad you enjoyed it. Aisha and Radhika's conversation was probably the most natural and enjoyable part for me to write...maybe because something about Radhika's character is very familiar to me though I can't identify who its derived from.

I love Yusuf and Aisha too! And Aisha really needs things to go well after what she's been through, so I'll try not to put too many obstacles in her path (at least for a while)...I hope Yusuf came across as a charming and funny guy, cuz that's what I've been intending.

Will try to update by next week!

Originally posted by: putturani

Wow Suhana!

I don't generally read this story but I just happened to read this part and I
am hooked! Wow, the flow of words is just brilliant in ur fic, as is they flow
of time. Everything is real and u get a pleasent feeling while reading. As
soon as my exams get over and I return from holiday I will check out this
story properly. 😃

P.S. I still have no clue who the characters are 😆

Omg, its so nice to see you here! I love your writing style, so I'm excited about getting feedback from you. Please give me any advice you have!

Thanks for the compliments. I was thinking about how you said "everything is real" and I figured I should tell you one thing. The basic concept of my story is kind of "fairytale/zee tv drama" inspired, but the way I lay out the scenes is very much derived from everyday life. So before you expect it to be a very realistic story (like yours is), I just wanted to let you know that it really isn't. But I hope that doesn't stop you from reading it!

Good luck with your exams, and hope to see your comments soon!

Originally posted by: nitu07

wow!! this is my best chapter I just loved it......especially the interaction between yusuf and ayesha 😳 ....aww yah hasan wud surely want her to move on na....he loved her ..and now I am loving yusuf and hasan 😳
awww I wish hina wasn't so sarcastic but it's understandable 😊 ...afterall she lost her bro
pls do continue sooooooon..........I just want more and more of ur story

Thanks Nitu! I love how your feedback is always so detailed. It's very helpful for me. I haven't really described Hasan, but if he loved Aisha, I'm sure he would want her to move on, just as you said...and I think you interpreted Hina's behavior the same way as I intended. I didn't want her to be seen as a bad person, because she's not. She just hasnt' gotten over the pain of her brother's death.

Will update soon, as long as I don't have writer's block!

Originally posted by: alydesi_chick

aww i loved this chapter it just made me feel good 😳 i wish ysuf and aisha get together and samira and rehan too 😃 really enjoyed it
thxx and plzz update soon

Thanks girl! Yay, seems like you're a regular reader now. I'm glad you enjoyed the chapter. The two couples you mentioned are definitely perfect for each other...but things don't always work out perfectly. I'm not trying to hint anything...but I just don't want my readers to become too sure of anything, because I love twists! I'll try to update by next week...Thanks for your feedback.

Originally posted by: DesiChocolate

omg

suhanaa


UPDATE ASAPP
plssssss 😛
THIS IS AMAZINGGG..goodddd job! its fantasticc !

lol, thanks Priya. I am so happy that you liked...no, loved it! 😉 Next update is hopefully soon.

Absolutely mind blowing chapter. The beginning itself (Aisha's coming home happily for B'Day) is very refreshing. The love between the siblings like Sabah & Samira planning for a meet for Aisha & Yusuf. It was really natural.

And the way you have narrated the story is also very good. Really can't wait for the next post. Wish Aisha says yes to Yusuf. Keep it up. 👏

wwwwoooooowwwwww
you r a gr8 writer!!!!if only i was good at writng)im thinking about posting my own story here 😳 )loved every bit of the chapter and continue writing!!!

Originally posted by: aditi1412

Absolutely mind blowing chapter. The beginning itself (Aisha's coming home happily for B'Day) is very refreshing. The love between the siblings like Sabah & Samira planning for a meet for Aisha & Yusuf. It was really natural.

And the way you have narrated the story is also very good. Really can't wait for the next post. Wish Aisha says yes to Yusuf. Keep it up. 👏

Thanks Aditi! After so many positive responses, I am starting to think that this is probably my best chapter. Thanks for your feedback!

Originally posted by: Monika__29

wwwwoooooowwwwww
you r a gr8 writer!!!!if only i was good at writng)im thinking about posting my own story here 😳 )loved every bit of the chapter and continue writing!!!

Mallika, you should definitely post your own story...I will be one of your first readers for sure. Thanks for the wonderful comments. Next chapter will hopefully be posted by the end of the week!

this story is amazing. i read it from beginning to the end. i simply luved it. though i find there r too many characters and find it hard to imagine 3 pairs between 2 families.

u have described every characters emotion very well esp mariyam's outburst/ jealousy. and also aisha's depression.
rehan's fear is also well depicted.

yusuf seems like a nice guy, but we dont know much abt him other than he is a to be med student. even the youngest bro of that family, he doesnt say anything at all. but there is sumthing mysterious abt him, u want to know wat he knows, the secrets he is keeping.

i liked that scene of the outburst against the father. that he is nvr at home. i feel so sad for the children. doctors shud also get a weekly break and earthly timings.

the 4 kids family seem very idealistic everything seems to be right. while the other r filled with problems.

the poor lil kid, how can he read books, n doesnt he play outside sum cricket or catch- catch with his friends.
rehan is so goody goody, like the ekta kapoor's ideal bahu character except he is a guy 😆 . he is so caring and considerate.

in all i luv the story its really nice. 😳