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Posted: 6 years ago
#61

Originally posted by: sumsukor

NIkkii

Maidam first hats off for the vivid description, felt like I went to the pre independence era 👏👏 excellent Niki.

True Ragkor is the major but the events surrounding play a vital part and love your detailing...

About RagKor he he kya bey 1919 ya 2019 they are advanced, kya fire rey back hugging, kissing, pinning down... ☺️super fast... thank god you finished with hugging after falling.... ufff 😉

am loving this Rana too, means business....

loving it Nikki,...... waiting for the next update....

he he sumi is following bossy footsteps now 🤣

Thanks dear......Ha ha even if i would have written about ragkor in 1857 set up , with the national uprising, back hug, side hug, neck kiss.....all would have been there....Meejay incomplete without that😉

Loved the last line.....laugh laugh....your vacation is coming to an end!

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Posted: 6 years ago
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Originally posted by: LuvSSever

ha ha...

Sumi dear can have a sweet way of getting back at her boss now😆

jokes apart, touchwood to the boss-assistant combo, its a bliss reading both of your writings dears. And both having a different style of writing is additional bliss.

sorry for bringing in a similie for both your writings again. I couldnt avoid remembering the other when I finish reading one's. so sorry for combining your both writings in my replies.

if one could create ripples within us by writing a sweet romantic scene of them, the way I like it, just like in a serial or movie, the other could just make me shed tears with her emotional writing scenes of them.

when I read nikki's, I am reminded of those sweet sweet moments of sukor, Along with their nokhjhoks,making me smile all through relishing them and whenever i read sumi's, those tear ebbing eyes of them displaying thousands of emotions erupting from their heart I could visualise.

touchwood again dears. pls continue your writings..never stop.

And nikki, that was a teaser comment to your part6..i am yet to post my main picture😁


uma.....its indeed a pleasure when efforts are appreciated....thanks a ton dear.❤️

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Posted: 6 years ago
#63

ACTION TIME:

Sachindranath Sanyal,the ‘bomb man’ as his friends fondly called him, promptly arrived the next day. He showed them how they could make bombs with a Cadbury cocoa tin packed with a pound of picric acid and three detonators. They had to then pack this into a hollowed section of a book to avoid suspicion. There was another option also. He showed them how to make a bomb which was composed of 6 ounces of dynamite, a detonator and a black powder fuse. He said that they could make any type which they found comfortable. The only condition was that they had to make as many as they could from the available raw material so that they could be used in other places too, not just in Azadganj. Also, once everything was ready, they had to arrange for the extra bombs to be sent to Lucknow from where they were to be then dispatched to different locations. He had managed to get quite a quantum of raw material with him……. no wonder then that he was called the bomb man. When he was asked how he could sneak in so much, he just gave a dubious smile but refused to divulge further.

They thanked him for all his help and he in turn thanked them for agreeing to lend a helping hand. “INQUILAB ZINDABAD” was rendered in unison and Rana went to drop him off at the bus stand. Thankfully it was only after Sanyal had left Azadganj that the Lucknow police became a little alert and guards were stationed at bus stops and railway stations to detect suspicious activities. All the revolutionaries were asked to be very careful.

Here in Azadganj, work was going on in full swing. Initially the packing and rolling took a little time but in a day or two, all the 7 of them got a hang of it and were managing it well. Ashfaqulla Khan and Peer Ali were the other two, apart from Chakor, Raghav, Rana, Vikrant and Leela in the group. Unknown to Raghav and Chakor, the remaining gang had named them Ragkor (Thanks to Vikrant and Leela) and would smile amongst themselves whenever RagKor managed to sit near each other or steal glances. Thankfully for the gang, Mr. John had guests over from England so he was a little occupied.

As a precautionary measure and to avoid suspicion, the gang decided to work in different houses everyday. Rana’s father was in service at the General Post Office at Lucknow and his mother had gone there to look after him as he was unwell…. So, Rana’s house was one place. Raghav’s room was the second and Chakor’s parents who had gone for a pilgrimage paved the way for a third house. Raghav and Chakor would never leave a chance to spend some time together. For e.g. whenever it would be Chakor’s turn to make tea when all would become tired working, Raghav would immediately volunteer to help…..Unknown to them, just for the fun of it Leela would pip in saying that she would help Chakor, but Raghav would somehow convince her!!!!…After RagKor would go to the kitchen the others would enjoy supressed giggles. The kitchen of course was witness to a few eye-locks and subtle pulls and hugs and crimson faces. Sometimes one of the remaining five would unexpectedly enter the kitchen acting very innocent and startle the duo but all in all Raghav and Chakor cherished this time.

One day Rana came looking very terrified and all worked up. Sachindranath Sanyal had been arrested with some raw material at one of the stations and he was being tortured in the prison cell to know what it was all about. Of-course he had not opened his mouth but the atmosphere everywhere was tense and now more so all the revolutionaries wanted the paln to succeed as a tribute to the effort taken by Sanya.l

In Azadganj everything was ready by the designated date. Now the big question was, who would take the extra bombs to Lucknow!!! Raghav volunteered to do so. Chakor without realizing,said a vehement No and all the others looked at her. She suddenly kept quiet not knowing that the others knew by now the reason behind her No. Raghav looked at her and said …..all thanks to Chakor and her idea, Mr. John has yet not realised that I am a part of your gang. Hence, I am the only one who can take the stuff out of Azadganj without raising any suspicion. So, then Raghav it was to be! It was also decided that he would do so within a day or two because hoarding the stuff for too long in Azadganj would be risky. On the last day, the gang worked in his room and packed all the stuff and loaded it in his Ambassador carefully. He said he would manage the rest. They wished him all the best and asked him to be careful. Vikrant hugged him lovingly and asked him to come back soon. All the while Chakor was very quiet. She stayed back after all had left saying that she wanted to discuss everything once again with him. The others just glanced amongst each other and left.

She was determined to stay with him for some time and he had to very carefully take her to his room . As soon as he had bolted the door she started sobbing. He cupped her face and said…. My dearest Chakor, what is wrong with you? This is not the Chakor I know. My Chakor was not scared of anything. She had big dreams for her Hindustan. I want my Chakor back. She looked at him and said …this Chakor loves her Raghav very much…..He has to promise that he will come back safe to her….Raghav held her hand and said …I promise dear…don’t you worry….but also promise me that once all this is over you will come and stay in this room forever. She smiled, could not hold herself and caressed his face, his stubble and hugged him. Both stayed in that bliss , again not wanting the night to end.....Finally when it was time for her to leave, he cupped her face, kissed her eyes and forehead and asked her not to worry. ....with a heavy heart she bid him goodbye.....

At the break of dawn, Raghav got ready to go to Lucknow. Mr and Mrs. Rajvanshi came to him and said that they would also be accompanying him to Lucknow. He was surprised and wondered how they had known about his plans. They just gave a smile and said ……we are your parents and parents are supposed to know everything. He tried to deter them saying that he didn’t want them to face any problem because of him. But they just wouldn’t listen. Instead they said that they had a plan. Mr. Kamalnarayan asked Raghav to put on his best clothes. When he raised his eyebrows, they asked him to keep quiet and listen to them. When he came down the stairs, he saw all of them dressed in their finery, even Girija Mausi.

As he was about to check the car once, Vikrant and Rana came to see him off …They were surprised to see the family ready in all their finery…..Raghav quickly told him how he was stumped himself when his parents said that they would accompany him to Lucknow …..Vikrant smiled and asked him to be careful and gave him a brotherly hug. Rana also embraced him and asked him to take care and come back safely. Mr.Kamalnarayan then asked Raghav to hurry and said that he had checked everything. They all waved to Vikrant and Rana and set off.

When they reached the village border on the road to Lucknow, their car was stopped for checking but the guard recognised Mr. Kamalnarayan and saluted him. Mr. Kamalnarayan engaged the guard in small talk telling him about a family wedding to be attended at Lucknow and how they were carrying gifts and sweets for all and the guard left them without any major checking. But the main hurdle they were to face was at the checkpoint at Lucknow.

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Posted: 6 years ago
#64

Nikki dear🤗

posting reply for previous while you post the next one had become habit now more than coincidence😆

Part6..

I just loved loved loved it.

So chakor too pour her heart out at the moment she thought he is in danger and the thought of what she would do without him as made her go on and on.. I loved it. The way he said thankyou, the slight hit , then chakor telling her concern about the social status but raghav babu knows to cool her down in his own way😁 ,the slight sweet kiss...the arms hugging her ,embracing her in a hug and she forever wanted to remain in those❤..

then the meeting with details good one..awaiting to see whats upnext. this mission interests me up.

Raghav wanting to drop her home and vikrant, leela leaving with suspicion..good😁

Then their walk towards home, those silence, he covering her for warmth, those slight touches ,that kiss on hand giving her a diff high and feel, loved it.


Rightly they chose to not involve raghav openly , that will create unnecessary troubles but lion was lion..he said but someone dare to touch chakor he will come in open and tear them apart..🔥

the tension thats going to build due to gobar mission makes me curious too..waiting to see what turn of events arise in, since they decided to tell their families after mission..

then final RagKor meet.. again a bouncer😍😍

chakor in saree😍 those moments of them❤ ,thise touch kisses, falling over another😍and he asking her dont you trust me and she telling i dont trust myself🙈☺😁.. and the final tight hug...again Meejalicious❤😍

entirely super sweet good one

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Posted: 6 years ago
#65

Nikki dear🤗,

Dont know , still the mission give me dread feels. see I told you , you write well as a script writer. when I was seriously reading about mission, people involved, registering the names of squad in mind, reading into details ,registering it and when i was going like a dutiful student reading a history chapter,you gave a break and left a smile on my face with reading 'RagKor' 😎😁..so the squad gave this name to them and they are unaware of it. ha that paves way for some entertainment.

thanks to Rana and leela..all working together, raghav& chakor trying sit aside and steal glance and whole group stealthily watching it..lol.. and how raghav finds ways to be with chakor, have small moments and group knows it and tease them..nice sweet moments to visualise.. its fun.

Then about the arrest and alert, again I went into serious mode. then they are done with work and Raghav choose to go...i can understand his reasoning but i can understand her 'No' too.. and her stayback and group understands it too😊

Then the sobbing, he consoling and he telling his eagle to be eagle but eagle is in sumi's birdie avatar now, so she is vulnerable and the subsequent scene of them, he consoling her with kisses and hug ..all is love❤ and they dont want this night to end.. arent they so adorable..

again he asked you have to come her and stay, once i am bck from lucknow..should we read or expect something else.. why am i again having worries.

then raghav getting ready and KN with whole family accompanying, surprised but his company might help Raghav.

And you have stopped with an intriguing end

whats in Lucknow check post..eager to read the next update...awaiting😁😎😊

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Posted: 6 years ago
#66

Uma your comments are indeed sheer delight.....I am grinning..... you have written it just WOW!!!

And I appreciate the patience you have to read each update and then write about it so wonderfully inspite of being busy with so many other things...

Love you loads for it......

And worries.....hmmmmmm.....let's see

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Posted: 6 years ago
#67

Thanks a ton Sri dear❤❤


Wonderful update Niki di👏👏👌👌flow of d story was amazing..Sanyal,d way he decribed d entire bomb making process in details, dispatching plans was so intriguing & thrilling..thn amidst all dis tensed moments gang naming Raghav-Chakor Ragkor, d way dey smiled seeing dem sit near each other or steel glances was so cute..thn Raghav-Chakor never leaving a chance to spend some quality time together, enjoying blissful moments in the kitchen😍😍nd others enjoying tht was so sweet&nice..😍😍 Thn Sanyal's sudden arrest, Raghav voluntarily agreeing to take d bombs to Lucknow, Chakor's vehement no..d way Raghav convinced everyone nd Chakor keeping quite hiding her vulnerability nd inner fear..beautifully written👌loved tht scene..thn Chakor determined to stay with Raghav as long as possible, her sobbing,d way he cupped her face & consoled her,saying I want my Chakor back, his kisses&hugs😍Chakor asking him to promise he will return safely to her😍Back to d story again d way Raghav said he ppromise bt she too needs to promise tht she will come nd stay in dis room forever was 💜💜💜Kn nd Teju going with Raghav was quite a surprise bt it's good tnx to him Raghav could dodge d village border check point personnel bt really eager to know wht will happen in Lucknow checkpoint..seems something bigger is in store for us..may b some big trouble.. can't wait to see how d suspense unfolds..superbly written update 👏👏

Edited by 77nikita - 6 years ago
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Posted: 6 years ago
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Nikki thats a WoW with both W capital.... he he whose bossy you are, my collars up...

jokes apart,,, excellent flow. loved those stealing moments of togetherness is a bliss imagining Meejay... they coined RagKor awwwh so sweet.... liking the VikLa very much and the others (god how do you get those names👏allowing their time but interrupting too he he they must be scared and well Vik knows about his friend😛

loved the pull and hug and my birdie (love you Uma) and that consoling and the promise to get back and be with him in his room.....good lubtub of heart but mind you, you are Nikki Bey and not that sadistic Pearl Gray so do whatever you want but my adories to be together ☺️

again the intrigue of the sequence very good very very action oriented. KN and Teju going hmmm good they passed through the inital hiccup. Lucknow always not good for Ragkor rather Meejay yaar... always some gadbad but still i pray Daak baba he comes back fine to her...

Now Confession time... You are not a first time writer... tell me I cant believe it.

Ok I believe ...Next update fast please.....😃

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Posted: 6 years ago
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Awwww my sumi dear.....I am very much a first timer.......and bossy only to get my favourite work done!

Btw Smita also asked about the names so I told her too that for names I googled..... there were loads... picked 3 which I found suitable for my story......

Otherwise I accept all the praises you are showering dear😍😍

Hee heee ragkor.... and you know me... simple simple... sucker for good endings..... even KN is good in my story...I am that pathetic😅😅😅

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Raghav who was driving was a little tensed as they approached Lucknow. He was wondering how they would clear the security and was trying to come up with a plan. As the check point neared, Tejaswini started palpitating and feeling breathless. She was on the verge of collapsing…. Raghav got very worried. He was about to stop the car when his father asked him to wait at the check point and get help. He said Check Point?????? His father asked him to do as he said…….At the check point the guards came running. Mr. Kamalnarayan told them who they were. The guards had never heard about the Rajvanshis but seeing their car, their attire, their jewellery, they realised that they were from a respectable family. Seeing the lady’s condition, one of them got a chair for her. Helped her to sit in the shade. Gave her water. The other guard even fanned her. After a few minutes she was feeling better. Mr. Kamalnarayan then profusely thanked the guards, offered them money for their help which they refused and said that they were getting late for the wedding and that they should leave now. The guards helped Tejaswini to the car. In all this chaos Raghav thought that the car would go unchecked. But to his utter dismay, as he was about to sit in the car, one of the guards asked him to open the boot…Raghav said….Bhaisaheb, yeh zaroori hain kya, hume shaadi mein pahuchneke liye deri ho rahi hain…But the guard replied….Hum samajh sakte hain par hum hamari duty kar rahe hain saheb….Kamalnarayan butted in between saying…Haan haan Raghav beta, inhe apni duty karne doRaghav just gritted his teeth at his father…he was very tensed….He opened the boot wondering what was coming next but to his utter relief his cartons were not there …..Instead there were wooden boxes with sweets and fruits…the guard after being satisfied with the stuff asked them to leave …Raghav almost raced to his seat and zoommmmmm the car sped….After a few minutes, when he started breathing again, Raghav scowled and asked…..Hamara saman kahan hain???? Tejaswini started laughing. Raghav couldn’t understand what was happening. Girija and Kamalnarayan too joined in. Tejaswini asked…..How was it Raghav? Raghav’s mouth opened wide….he said…maa aap thik hain?....aur aap, aap log paagal ho gaye ho kya? Hum poonch rahe hain saman kahan hain…..Kamalnarayan patted him and said …..beta aapka saman wahi hain…peeche dikky mein…...he was all the more clueless. That’s when Kamalnarayan said…..Raghav Beta, do you know why we have still kept these old boxes in our mansion? They have been passed down from one generation to the other….do you know why??? Its only because of one speciality they have……a secret compartment underneath the lining…One can never guess this by just opening the lid and peeping in…….In the earlier times, our forefathers used them to hide their jewels and precious stones whenever they feared an attack …and today we used it to hide the jewels which you were supposed to deliver to Lucknow!!!!….. When did you do all thiswhen you were busy catching up on sleep yesterday night. Ok so this mystery is solved but one thing I don’t understand is …..how did you all come to know about the jewels which I wasgoing to carry?????? Forget it son….does that matter any more? The only important thing is we fooled the guards…….all of them smiled…… Though Raghav in various ways tried to prod them, all the three refused to tell him how they had come to know everything!!!!

Nonetheless he thanked them profusely and said …Hey Bhagwan!!!…...hamara ghar anokha hain…..waise toh baap numbri toh beta dus numbri hota hain….yahan toh ulta hain….beta numbri toh baap dus numbri hain!!!!…..all of them had a hearty laugh. The stuff was then deliveredto the said address without any hiccups. As he was about to leave for Azadganj,Kamalnarayan said that the guards at both the checkpoints would suspect somethingamiss if they went back so early. After all they are supposed to have come for a wedding!!! But the father didn’t know why the son wanted to return promptly!!!!!! Nonetheless, Raghav had to agree that what his father was saying was correct and so they spent the day at Kamalnarayan’s childhood friend’s house and by 4 in the evening set out forAzadganj.

There Chakor couldn’t concentrate on anything. She only wanted news on Raghav. Rana and Vikrant told her that Mr. and Mrs. Rajvanshi had also accompanied him to Lucknow. She was all the more worried and was praying that no calamity befall on any of them. It was late in the night when somebody came knocking at her door. Her heart missed a beat. Her father opened the door and said, aap isswaqt yahan? And then a familiar voice said…hume Chakor se kuch zaroori baat karni thi…..Chakor came running…her eyes moist…Her father very politely said….itni raat gaye, kya baat karni thi aapko? Chakor came and said….Bapu, kuch zaroori hoga, tabhi toh aaye hain……warna hume yaakein hain ki itni raatgaye yeh hume yun pareshaan nahi karte…..She asked permission from her father to go out and speak with him…..She knew her parents were watching from the window. Her heart itched to hug him,to feel those racing heart beats when she hugged him, to feel those sturdy arms around her and he…..all he wanted to do was caress her face, push her dishevelled strands behind her ears and of course possess those pink buds…but the only thing they managed was…..maaf karna, itni raat ko tumhaare ghar aaya hoon…humne socha shaayad tum hamare liye pareshaan hogi…chakor….tum nahi aate toh hum tumse kabhi baat hi nahi karte….he smiled faintly….kaise ho tum….thik hoon….sab ho gaya….haankuch pareshaani toh nahi hui na….nahi…..achha chalta hoon….jaldi milengeachha! The formal talk was killing them ……..

The British had beefed up security everywhere because of the intel that something could happen on the 13th to commemorate Jallianwala Bagh. Even in the village, the no of guards had increased. RagKor didn’t want to risk anybody seeing them. It was becoming difficult for them to meet…..

The core group carried on with their day to day activities as usual…..Morchas, local school,street plays were going on with the same fervour…..Throughout the country lot of arrests were made but instead of dampening the spirits, it made the resolve of the revolutionaries more stronger.

As usual, one day, when Chakor was on her way to the local school, somebody suddenly grabbed her from behind. Before she could react, she was pulled and taken to a small shack kind of thing nearby. She was about to scream when the abductor turned towards her and to her pleasant surprise, the most handsome face she had ever seen gave her a wide grin and pulled her for a hug full of love, warmth and affection. MyGod!!!! How much she had missed those arms!!!!! Raghav then tilted her face and both drenched in that eye-lock which spoke a thousand words. He was caressing her face and saying…..how much I have missed you chakor….me too, but why did you risk……our mission in important…one mistake and it will be all over…..I know....don’t worry…..I will be soon gone….. I was really missing you…tried to stop myself but…..she cupped his face and said….I love you …..and both hugged each other again……she then said….Raghav, have you thought of how we are to go about on the 13th…….He said …yes I have a plan……He was about to say somethingwhen there was a sound of running feet and they were surrounded on all sides by guards. Mr. John came ahead and said….I knew something was going on…..Mr. Raghav I have been keeping a watch on you since some days…you can’t fool me anymore…..What plan are you talking about?.....Raghav tried to come up with some answer but by then guards had caught hold of Chakor….Raghav tried to reason it with Mr. John, but he was adamant. He said….you either blurt out the plan or I will shoot this girl here…..Chakor yelled in between…..No Raghav don’t…..Mr. John was fuming…..He said…..Don't try my patience……Chakor was blabbering non stop, trying to prevent Raghav from saying anything….TUMHE HAMARI KASAM, MUH MAT KHOLNA……AB HUM PEECHE NAHI HAT SAKTE……Mr. John lost his cool….He asked Chakor to shut up…..but she was not cowed….She continued her chatter…Raghav was trying to talk with Mr. John but Chakor discouraged him…Don’t bow to him Raghav….that was the last straw …Mr. John pulled his trigger at Chakor…..Before anybody could realise, Raghav pushed the guards who held him, covered the distance between him and chakor, shoved her aside and fell down with a thud…..The bullet had not missed its mark!!!!Chakor stood transfixed to the spot…..then uttered a wail and ran to him…..he lay motionless……She started howling……RAGHAV RAGHAV open your eyes……PleaseeeeeeWhat have you done!!!….howling had changed to sobbing!

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