The revolutionary RagKor- A different attempt - Page 11

Hee hee hee uma, they are ahead indeed...I am asking them to curb their pheelings but are they listening!!!!! A Very difficult task to keep them onscreen... they keep wanting to go offscreen🙈🙈let's see how to manage😜

Thanks for reading the different genre and encouraging me so much.... love ya❤

Thanks a ton smita dear🥰🥰🥰🥰🙏

Part 11:

Again an awesome update Nikita 👌👌. Indeed KN amazed me, without him this plan wouldn't be successful, I loved the positive KN though it's quite difficult to imagine as when I see his name, I remembered the negative & evil person of the show who was always like a thorn on his child's path, but thanks to you, here we are seeing him as a loving, caring helpful father who can did everything for sake of his son, it's quite relieving 😊😊.

Coming to the story, the continuation of lakeside scene, Chakor was palpitating , bombarding him by her uncountable questions about KN's reaction, his exclaiming😁😁 , placing finger on her lip , reassured her that he will always with her, although he was worried too but encouraged her to face the new hurdle together. Her jumping in joy to see John's exodus , Raghav was amazed by her child like instancy & innocence, his self promised to give her protection & keep her happy for life time. I thoroughly enjoyed the entire scene a lot.

Loved to see the gang's genuine happiness & frustrated, depressed John & his various expression seeing Raghav alive, realizing how big asinine he was 😂😂.

In front of KN both were so nervous but loved KN as the way he cleared Chakor's confussion about the status discrimination , made her realize that being a adoptive child Raghav was their world, their life, as their is no discrimination in love ,loved his words "person's strength of character make him rich , not the amount of money he has "🙏🙏. Not only Ragkor but me too amazed by his speech. Nikita, it's unbelievable but fact that you made him a virtuous person & I really loved it. Both KN & Tejaswini happily agreed to their marriage, gave their blessings to Ragkor. Loved their laughing moments. Ragkor walking in the serene evening, the pull, the hand kiss, the sweet conversation was so blissful, I just visualized the scene 😍😍. In the shed meeting the gang were teasing them, happily congratulating both for their new life. Loved Leela for making Raghav blush, KN was superb, Chakor made her parents agreed in the most convincing way. And finally the D day came, the most awaited, most beautiful monsoon wedding was held. Their taking 7 vows with an extra of service for the country was so impactful, so much appreciable. I just imagining Meejay as the bride & groom , made me all smiling , gleeful 😍😍. The prologue is quite interesting, waiting for some bold & beautiful Ragkor moments, some hot & romantic first night 😉😉😜😜.

Loved the different genres Ragkor story & the way you wrote it, just wow 👌👌👏👏. It's so delightful to read. And specially the dialogues & the detailing, you always maintained. Loved it, hoping to get more from you🙏🙏. Thank you.

Epilogue:

Chakor was escorted by her friends and Tejaswini to Raghav’s room. A few minutes later Raghav walked in after bidding good bye to all. The room was decorated for the night. Flowers in all their hues and colours adorned the room. Chakor’s face was covered with her pallu like any other Indian bride of those times. She was very tensed. What she didn’t know was that Raghav was equally flustered. He came and sat near her. He lifted her pallu to glimpse the moon like face. She sat with her head bent. He tipped her chin and asked her if she was ok….she nodded …..He said…..Chakor please say something. This silence is making me nervous. She smiled and said ……..the jewellery is very heavy. Can I remove it?…. I will wear it tomorrow morning before stepping out of the room…. He said …of course… I will help you and before she could say anything…..he had started removing the Maang tika, the earrings, the nose ring….. all the while exclaiming that she indeed looked beautiful. She said softly ……You too looked very handsome in the groom’s dress. He had by then reached her waist to remove her Kamarpatta, his fingers touching her bare skin there sent flares throughout her body. She tried to get up saying you are supposed to have this milk, but he held her saree pallu and pulled her back. She was blushing. He kept his chin on her shoulders and said……you shouldn’t feel shy dear…we are man and wife now…….…But I know and understand that you will need time to adjust to everything around ……. She turned and hugged him and said….. Thank you…..I love you very much….

It had stopped raining and the moon was shining bright…..It looked wonderful from the window…..Chakor who had refreshed and changed into simple clothes for the night stood near the window. She had always loved watching the moon. As she was drowning in its beauty, Raghav who had also refreshed came from behind and put his hands through her waist……She quivered with delight at his touch…..He kissed her nape…..The tingling sensation was spreading all through her body….she was shy but at the same time her heart didn’t want him to stop. She closed her eyes and bent back to rest on his chest…..He moved his finger tracing the outline of her face, something which he loved doing. That slow movement of his finger was creating ripples in her…..

His hands slowly went towards her bosom…. she was startled and turned towards him…..he said sorry….I thought you were comfortable…. Please forgive me….and she felt a tinge ofsadness in his voice…She held his hands and said…..Raghav I am sorry…I didn’t mean to hurt you…..then looking at the floor, biting her lips, she shyly said….… I don’t know anything about all this…… ……he tipped her chin, gazed into her eyes and cupped her face……my innocent sweet Chakor said he….……and placed a gentle kiss on her lips, on her eyes, on her forehead… ..She was enjoying the feel….slowly the kiss turned passionate……this time Chakor couldn’t hold back and automatically responded by kissing him. She was losing herself in him….. he then lead her to the bed never losing the contact with the lips and face…she felt weird sensations at the most unexpected places……his hands slowly went to her dress…she was conscious of that move but decided that his love for her deserved a matching response …. it was another thing that…… the varied sensations that were arising in her, while his hands were divesting her of the garb were making her lose all her sanity…..

She tried to cover herself with her hands and avoid his gaze…..but the gasp which he let out on seeing the slender curvaceous figure lying shyly on his bed turned her on…….she closed her eyes…..he came near her ears and whispered…you are very beautiful my love …she simpered, turned crimson and covered her face with her hands…..just then she felt him moving away and she was shocked when she realised that she didn’t want his touch to fade …….she was enjoying whatever was happening to her insides because of his touch ………. She moved her hands away from her face to see where he was and couldn’t but stare open mouthed at the sight in front of her…..he had removed his kurta and his well toned body was a sight to behold…..he came towards her all the while locking his eyes with her ….then he lay beside her, turning her towards him………. they could feel their hearts thumping…..the bare touch was making them crazy…… He firmly pulled her body against his and lightly slid his tongue across her bottom lip. She drew a deep, staggered breath in response to the wave of heat she felt flushing through her. Her body seemed to crave for him…….She was shocked at the responses her body was showing….it seemed that her body had suddenly acquired a mind of its own!!!!!

Raghav then slowly taught her how to make love to him and he made her sublime in his love making…he decided to make it an unforgettable experience for her ….….His breath on her, the feel of his bare skin on hers, the shudder when he took her hardened peaks , his changed voice while saying Chakor, the way he kissed her body was making her drift in an altogether different world from which there was no comeback. The feeling heightened with every passing moment. That ‘Raghav’ which slipped from her lips made him crazy and when he thought she was ready to take the plunge, he couldn’t hold it any longer.The thrust brought out a cry of pain. She dug her nails in his back and a blob of tear escaped her eyes. He felt very sorry for her and caressed her face and kissed her softly whispering sweet nothings and continuing the rhythmic movement. The sensations the rhythmic movement created made her forget the pain. She arched herself unknowingly wanting more of him. The sensations kept flaring and so did the movement and when they both reached their Zenith the culmination was something which neither had imagined.They just lay holding each other, enjoying the warmth and the silence too. They knew that they had found their hearts desire in each other.

Nikkii what should I say.

You bowled me over..

IT WAS ASTHETICALLY BEAUTIFUL

You brought the exact feel of the 1919 here🤗

Superb superb 👍🏼

Thank you dear sumi so much 🥰🥰🙏

Thankfully so much Sri for the encouragement and the lovely comments you have showered all through😘😘❤❤

Very very exquisitely written👏👏👌👌scorching hot as well as sublimely beautiful🔥😍🔥😍shy,innocent Chakor,d way Raghav slowly drenched her in d bliss🔥❤delightful to d core..loved it❤❤👌👌d entire story was a sheer treat to read..thank u so much.. u truly rocked it ,nailed it in ur first attempt Niki di👏👏........

Amazing story Nikki, loved it.

Part 10

Amazing part. dedicated only to Ragkor, loved how you portrayed Chakor's reaction when she heard Raghav's voice and her break down when she realized it's really him. It was an emotional scene, and loved Raghav's apology to Chakor.

The plan was very elaborate, KN outsmarted Raghav 😆. I love this KN, he's smart and can make plans but he's a good guy.

Raghav as a ghost 😆😆, the plan fits well with Raghav's character.

Ragkor romance 🔥🔥😍😍. Chakor suddenly realizing KN knows about them 😊, she doesn't have to worry about this KN, he's very nice.

Part 11

It was realistic how Chakor bombarded Raghav with questions and Raghav hiding his worries and reassuring her.

I can imagine John's reaction on seeing Raghav, it was a very satisfying scene.

KN is love ❤️, loved his answer to Ragkor, their family moment was sweet.

Ragkor's friends teasing them 😆, that's what friends are for.

Ragkor . Loved how Chakor convinced her mother.

The extra wedding vow was a nice touch, it was the fight for the nation that brought them together.

Epilogue

Feel sad that the story ende, hope you pen a new one soon.

Ragkor's first night was beautifully written: Chakor's hesitation and Raghav's understanding and how they gave in to their emotions once Chakor was relaxed.

Nikki Dear🤗

omg I thought I replied but havent🙄 how I missed, may be I would have wrote it in one of my latenight sleep mode. Arghhh..

apologies for being late.

And I know you , see I told you, I trust the screen play writer in you.

Wow that was a typical 1920 love era treat. with shy chakor innocent about that😉 Raghav making her know it in his lovable way and then both subliming in the bliss.❤

thats just aww so beautiful❤

Their convo, he understanding her , that moonlight , his back hug, that touch of him creating ripples in her, yet she sweetly shocked on first bold move, his frown face, but she assuring that she doesnt knew all this, then they slowly learning it together😉..cool sweet.

And her responses , slowly both giving in, and again she being sweetly surprised on the way her body responds, all too good.

Entirely Ragkor and their journey was

but did it ended..🤔 I still feel much more story is there. Are you ending it😔 I am sad.

Want to read more from you, please comeback with the new one.

And thanks a lot dear for this story🤗🤗. The genre, backdrop of story, Ragkor, the way you wrote it, I loved all and it was

bang😊😊

@mesh.....thank you so much mesh dear for 10, 11 and epilogue❤️❤️

@uma.......ufff those gifs are amazing.....that chhota bachhu toh i will eat off.....thank you so much once again.....hmmmm tried my best to keep it at 1920's level😉

thanks to all for the encouragement.....loved trying to write this.

Hey how did I forget this one!!!! Thank you Smita so much dear🥰🥰

Epilogue :

What a wonderful epilogue dear 👍👍 , such a beautiful 1st night, appropriate scenario for that period👌👌. Loved each & every bit of it. Everything was so pure & beautiful. It seems like I'm watching an old hindi movie. Their sweet conversation, his touch, her trembling, the removing ornaments, the shyness of the new bride , the nervouseness of the newly married couple ❤❤😍😍. Everything was there , beautifully executed. It was bold (specially the last portion , make me shy & blushing 🙈🙈)but elegant too. You maintained it's charm & also the decency all over the scene.

I have thoroughly enjoyed the whole story, you've written like an expert😊😊. Your 1st attempt is quite amazing, beyond the expectations . It was so perfect that anyone could make a film with the story. You have just aced it. Hope we'll get more from you in future as you have increase out expectation🙏🙏. Thank you.