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Posted: 6 years ago
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The Final Chapter

The Dark Knight rose with his armor shining thou.

Dare touch! Hell will break loose for they area phoenix to rise from the ashes...

KY was on his way to the Haveli.. he was carrying the sketch of the culprit as described by the girls.

He just could not believe himself... Oh god we were milking the snake in our yard!!

How come Chakorji could not read the eyes???

How did my police brain fail...God if anything had happened to Rajoo... to Anjor

He was driving fast... at the same time calling Chakor... Chakorji please why am I not able to reach you???

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Raaghav held the collar of Aakash... He was so close to Aakash... He was shocked...

You... he started but...

Aakash smiled... as Raagahv was hit in his head from behind...

He was carried away in a van...

Chakor heard some noise... she saw a van leaving... and she saw...

Her eyes froze in shock...

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KY reached the Haveli shouted , Chakorji, Chakorji, Raaghav

Jyoti and Rohit came down along with Rajjoo and Girija

Inspector, all are in the hospital, as Anjor has taken sick,

Tejaswiniji has gone with Aakash to the hospital

What... Aakash is not in the Haveli...

He quickly called the control room, check all the vehicles with the sketch I am sending now on MMS and WA.

Jyoti could not understand anything...

KY showed the sketch to her...saying this is the culprit...

Jyoti couldnot move her lid... It was the sketch of eyes and brows with the birthmark covered with a mask. Its Aakash, No how can it be,,, no no something is wrong, she broke down...

Do you know anything about your husband? Whats is his background? No he is very sweet, he said his mother and brother died in an accident and in memory of them he helps all children and accident victims..

KY shouted, bakwaas he is the second son of the evil minister Rajeshwari Dev and brother of Vikram, the heartless trio along with BP scarred and marred so many young children and made girls victim and preyed upon their modesty. Last week he had injected the children with the harmone injections and one of them gave this description. Please I am going to the hospital, I am leaving two of my constables here for your safety. If he comes here please call me immediately. He asked Rajjoo to say safe..

Lets go to the hospital... He called Chakor again

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Chakor saw the van, her eyes froze, shocked, it was the same black van which had the symbol of the evil trios. She sensed danger...

So the evil was here at the hospital... Wait a minute... birthmark???

Oh god she visualized, oh god how can it be...How did I not find it???

She ran outside to see the van vanish... she called Raaghav, Raaghav but no sound, no he must have taken Raaghav with him. He has hurt Anjor now its Raaghav...

The moment she came out she saw numerous missed calls from KY... She called him... Inspector Sir, Chakorji... Its Aakash she said... KY was shocked, yes Chakorji, I am coming to the hospital... She said everything is over, Anjor is traumatized and is in the ICU but but but Raaghav, Raaghav has been taken away by Aakash, please save him she cried profusely... I am coming..

She ran inside the ICU... Called Teju and told her everything very short... she said I have no time, please take care of Anjor, Rajjoo came running... didi, yes I know... You stay safe, be with Ma and take care of Anjor... I am going to save Raaghav

Raaghav I am coming... Daak baba please save that innocent soul... Why my heart is cringing... I am unable to breathe too... what is happening to me... Oh god please give me strength... She ran and took her car, she called KY to track the car which started from the hospital...

The control room checked the cctv of the hospital and found the car no. and were trying to locate it... but they lost track...

Chakor was stuck... She drove to the place ...

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He was motionless, he was tied to a pillar ... the goons hit him again and again and one hit him in his head...he could not move his head, he was lifeless...

AAkash was seated, smiling beside the pic of the evil Trio.

Ma, bro and friend, I will now take revenge of Chakor as she will be alone...

I could not kill Rajjooo as she escaped because of that inspector but now she is harmless.

Anjor now knows the truth so she will hate Chakor and also Raaghav.

This Raaghav looking at him, why man, why did you come into my web like an insect.

I was happily moving my coins to close down on Chakor and kill her and inject Anjor again. Those stupid guys got those three girls and Anjor was not there. But since they saw me so I injected them, they must have been dead by now...

I thought Chakor is alone, but you turned into her savior, protecting her, I sent my goons when she was returning form lucknow to kill her but from no where you came in and spoiled all my plans.

Now see your plight, just because you are looking like Suraj does not mean you can become Suraj... Poor Suraj is already dead and gone... and now for helping Chakor though I don't have any enmity still you are going to be dead. I pity you, laughed the evil.

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Anjor slowly opened her eyes... Mumma, daadi... Dadee dadee she was palpitating.

Teju hugged her she cried, Anjor beta please donot strain yourself, everything will be fine.

No daadee nothing is fine ... This Raaghav is not my daddee, he fooled fooled all of us... and that man said that my daddy my daddy is no more... I donot want any one I want my Suraj daddy... she cried ... Doctor were attending to her...

No beta, Teju said, he did not fool any of us...Yes he came for money but your love Changed him completely , he became very affectionate to you. Did you see any false love in him? Did he ever made you feel short of Suraj?... but dhaadi he is not your son or my father na...

He came here to save you, and lived selfless only for you. Whenever you were in trouble who rushed to you first!! He practiced all that you wanted him to do to become a perfect father...

Yes no body can take Suraj's place, my son but he is also like my son, he had no reason to change but he changed for you dear..

Beta, keep your hand in your heart and close your eyes... Think through the days of him with you and feel and tell if he is good or bad...

Anjor playedback her times with Raaghav, how he braided her hair, danced with her, made her happy at every stage, played with her, exercised with her and always supported her when Chakor was strict with her... Tears flowed... she said daadhi yes he is good still he is not my father, I will not hate him but I will respect him as a good person but will not accept him as my daddy she cried... Hugging Teju and Rajjooo... she wanted to see Chakor, she was shouting asking her to be taken to Chakor as she was fearing her mom also may be killed...

She asked Teju, daadi mumma always says that bhurai never wins only sachaai wins but if daddy helped the village why did god kill him?? for which Teju could not give any answer...

They did not know what to do... but she was adamant...

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Chakor went to Rajeshwari's bungalow it was ruined...she had a gut feeling that Raaghav must be here... She went to the basement...

She cried, praying to her Daak Baaba, why are you testing your chakoriya..

She saw the men there outside and she broke the window and saw, she was shocked to see Raagahv tied to a pillar lifeless, his head was bleeding and he was hanging his head...

Raaghav she called, she slowly went inside not to create a noise, hugging him, crying inconsolable, Raaghav please open your eyes...

She is hugging me crying inconsolable... Her tears all over me... I cant see her face, she is small but fit into me perfectly... Why is she crying, why is it shady, not clear, she is hugging but I am unable to move my muscle too... Who is she...

Raaghav please don't go away like my Suraj... Please... I need your help... Please forgive me as I hurt your feelings by not accepting your love. But I will be only for Suraj... What they have done to you... Oh god I will take you from here.. She tried to

Surajjj... she is hugging me and crying... whats is happening to my head, its swirling, my blood is gushing...

She skipped and the goons heard the noise came running... AAkash walked in smiling evil...

Chakor Baabhi... I should appreciate you as you are not easy you found me out here. I am really surprised as you never accept your defeat but always fight back.

See what I have done to you, Raaghav will be killed, I will kill you too and will take Anjor into my custody and do whatever I want to.

Dare not talk about my daughter, donot spell her name also from your mouth. You cannot do anything to me. You are a big fool and you did a mistake coming into my path. When I could ruin your mom and your brother you are a small fry. Evil can never win she raged angrily, holding on to a stick nearby asking Raaghav to wake up.

Evil cannot win Aakash laughed, you could not do anything to me though I was under your nose... And where did good win, Suraj was killed in the bomb...

Surajjj... why is my veins gushing... she is crying...

Aakash dare not to any harm to him for I will burn you alive.

Aakash asked the goons to catch her and beat her...

She tried to defend and beat the goons, turned into that tigress to save the wounded tiger...

He said your Suraj is dead, Anjor will die too soon and Chakor will also be dead.

She shouted bleeding, Suraj is not dead he lives in my heart, in my nerves, in my breath, in every part of mine.

Don't even try to do harm, god will never allow evil to thrive.

Aakash was laughing saying Suraj is dead and this fellow who came to help you is also going to die now... He is lifeless...

She cried, please wake up, see Chakor is being harmed... your maidam is harmed... Suraj's Chakor is being beaten, they slapped her that she fell on Raaghav holding him.

Surajj... Suraj's Chakor is being harmed... She is hugging me and crying... she is she is ...it... was getting clearer, its her, her, maidam, no no my Chakor... She is being harmed... No No... she is crying while I am being lifted... She is crying no I have to go to her. She cannot cry... I cannot see her cry...

She clung to him crying wake up please, mere liye... Remove her and stab her shouted Aakash she has done enough destruction to me..

The blood gushed gushed... his veins protruded, his fingers twirled, his eyes opened slowly, his blood was flowing, she was clinging to him... with all power he breathed ...he broke the chains he was tied to...

The goons tried to pull away Chakor. He held her by her waist tight to him no air could come between them, suffocating her,,, one hard hit at the goon, he saw stars all over and the next one he lifted his legs and bashed the other sending him to the corner of the walls.

It was Thunderous,

Dare touch Chakor... Don't touch Suraj's Chakor... that voice, that rage, that anger, that eyes, broke hell loose.

AAkash was shell shocked, he saw the goons near dead without a sign of life. He came to him hey Raaghav ... leave her.

Chakor slowly woke, coming to her sense, she was lifted by him, his left hand holding her safe towards him.

With all his might he shouted AAkasshh... Raaghav nahi... Suuuraaj Suuraj Rajvanshi hai Ham raged the sun.. roared the Lion... reverberated the walls...

Hamara hothey huey hamara Chakor ko koi haath nai lagengey..

Haath laga kar dekho kaat daalenge... His eyes emit that fire that Aakash was thrown towards the door.

Chakor was trying to sense his hold his hold... Raag...Suurajjj...How is it possible, How is it... She was smiling but crying...

He was to throttle Aakash, bahut bahut burai kiya thum ne hamara pathni ki saath aur hamara beti ke saath. Aaj thu marna hai...

Aakash could not breathe...

Right enough KY came in with his squad arrested Aakash.

Aakaash was confused... How did you know its me and how did you find my hiding.

You don't know with whom you have waged the war it is with Chakor Rajvanshi, she had shared her GPS with me and I could track and come here. And the girls whom you injected are not dead, they are alive, they gave your description and the town is full of your sketch... You cannot escape bacha!!!

Enough of your play now get to going to your real sasural house. He arrested him..

Chakor could not understand anything but was feeling dazed...

Chakorr that chakorr brought her to senses, inconsolable tears were flowing...

She hugged him tight tight fusing into him... Chakor ham aagayee thumhara Suraj aagayeee

An ambulance came to take Chakor and Suraj

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They were at the same hospital,

Anjor came running to them... she smiled at Raaghav (she did not know that it was Suraj) and said, I am sorry I cannot take you as my daddy but will respect you and thank you for saving me and helping my mom..

Suraj and Chakor smiled... arey he said my daughter has grown big, like her mother, big at heart, accepting me but not as her daddy... He laughed, extending his hands lifting her high above and saying, hamara bacha... Saanvi ya Anjor... Tears flowed down Anjor's eyes, she clung to him tightly... daadeee...

Teju was in tears... Mummyyy that mummy brought everything back... all were happy as both were taken into the treatment ward...

Daadeee Anjor shouted running to the ganesh idol at the hospital... Mumma is always right, Evil can Never Win only Truth Triumphs...

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Some sukor moments...aham aham a bonus

Edited by sumsukor - 6 years ago
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Posted: 6 years ago
#72
Beautiful ending to a beautiful story🤗
No words for it, will miss this story😭
Loved how KY & Chakor used brain to find out the culprit is Akash👏
Loved how Teju explained Anjor about Raghav's good nature & how he helped her to recover
Wished to see this in show
Loved the sensible Anjor😊
What a perfect way for making Suraj remember his memory, one scratch on Chakor & the dark knight Suraj rises🤗
Loved the way Akash & the goons were thrashed👏
The last Sukor & Anjor Teju part was emotional
Waiting for the bonus
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Posted: 6 years ago
#73
😳

Originally posted by: katheriene

Beautiful ending to a beautiful story🤗

No words for it, will miss this story😭
Loved how KY & Chakor used brain to find out the culprit is Akash👏
Loved how Teju explained Anjor about Raghav's good nature & how he helped her to recover
Wished to see this in show
Loved the sensible Anjor😊
What a perfect way for making Suraj remember his memory, one scratch on Chakor & the dark knight Suraj rises🤗
Loved the way Akash & the goons were thrashed👏
The last Sukor & Anjor Teju part was emotional
Waiting for the bonus


thanks Sonali

i did a marathoning story 😆😆

loved you loved it and the moments of SR coming bang is felt...

Feel happy

uff story writing is indeed not easy(may be being the first one of course the last one too.)

Wanted a beautiful beginning for my adories.

yes...

Sukor child needs to have some sukors brain na... I would even change her name to Sanavi... if was allowed...

ha ha bonus...

😳😳

yesss will need to take my antennas which are inside the oil soaked 4 months back.

he he need a break

Will surely get back within a day or two.

Thanks a lot for the reading🤗
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Posted: 6 years ago
#74
Fantafab sumi dear 👏👏👏
Suraj comeback full on whistle whistle 😳

Thanks for fulfilling our wishes!!!

Chakor being smart, police also kadak...its such a pleasant change from the actual😉

Cherry on top was the way teju explained things to anjor... that's what grandma's 's are supposed to do, right? I felt that was seriously lacking in the serial... they would just show anjor running away and teju making her wierd faces and that's it... no explaining, no trying to make a kid understand stuff... very wierd that was...

So thank you so much for writing this...

Waiting for the bonus😳
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Posted: 6 years ago
#75
Great 👍🏼
Hamara suraj wapas agaya
Eagerly waiting for Bonus 😳
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Posted: 6 years ago
#76

Originally posted by: LuvSSever

Sumi dear 🤗

Aww how beautifully the emotions are flowing in👏. Raghav being suraj was indeed the best feel we could have.

How soothing it was..

first i was thinking to paste the parts i loved , then thought, oh i loved all :)

Oh why I could not say anything back? Why her look just makes me keep quiet? When she sees my eyes why I am unable to move my eyeballs! Her tears !! why it makes me feel sad!!!


to see her behind through the mirror above. His heart suddenly felt calm, looking at her face... She is indeed crying... She is vulnerable but still strong!! She woke up felt surprised, how did I sleep, I feel something different...


these two , just made me to go to meejay land, aww it would be to see their expressions.

and then that thought of his on seeing the photo.. the day he understands that, omg i am waiting for it.

thanks sumi dear for such a nice writing that makes me connected so easily since it had similar lines with raghav on show and your twist of raghav being suraj



Thanks Umaaa deary... well late of replying as I was more focussed on the deliverable. He he.

I enjoy my writing more when you highlight it... get the feeling yes it has touched the right chords.. thank you for that..

thanks all for the encouragement
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Posted: 6 years ago
#77

Originally posted by: 77nikita

Interesting very very interesting...

Thank God rajjo wasn't raped...I had hoped that you would write it like this😳

I think I loved this chapter the best uptil now😃

Suraj traits coming to the fore😳😳

Waiting waiting for the next


Thanks Nikki


No way playing with modesty even for drama sake, we have better ways to portray... he he and you know be.

This chapter best until now

Suraj traits...wait for more to come😉
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Posted: 6 years ago
#78

Originally posted by: katheriene

Interesting update🤗

Your version of the entire Rajjo incident was much better than the serial👏
Everyone were in action mode Chakor, Suraj & KY👏
Suraj's death truth is now known to all except Anjor😭
Suraj accidentally called Chakor Jagatmata
But Chakor's mind is clouded by the bomb blast😕
Suraj is getting attached to Maidamji & Anjor
Let's see which moment will tigger his lost memory
Akash wants to target Anjor & Raghav
Glad that Chakor is thinking about the culprit
Teju's reaction at the end was perfect which was missing from the show
Teju & Chakor heard Raghav's confession to Anjor
Interesting precap
Waiting for next


Thanks Sonali

Thanks yes Rajjoo cannot play with and thanks you liked it this way.

Yes I felt there should be a balance of all and everybody,, Chakor cant be everywhere but her brain can be everywhere she has to delegate...

Teju was missed so atleast a solace for us...
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Posted: 6 years ago
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Originally posted by: LuvSSever

Sumi dear 🤗

muaahs for this part dear, omg where should i start, I just loved it.

loved Raghav part, his emotions erupting seeing his madamji and the action sequence.
he counter analysing how she fits into him so well and fall for his madamji too.

loved chakor part, as always quick to react,,infirmed inspector too..and finally handling everything all alone.

love Raghav-chakor part, he calling her Jagatmata..that swirl of emotions..

loved teju part too, the much needed consoling which we expected and didnt get.

And finally Rajjo, thats well written, so apt , making mind free from that disastrous harassment she had in actual epi.

And then, how can i forget, u have added KY to have a part too in saving :).. loved that too

overall..superb sumi dear, awaiting next.

now even Teju and chakor know raghav's feelings, i am waiting to see how their raghav and chakor journey from here to sukor ends up.


umaaa 🤗

I loved the way you loved this Chapter, guess this is the best reading Nikki's too ha ha

I can really see the excitement and happy about it...

its like hearing that I passed out with Merit after the examination😆😆

about KY yes your dosth😉 how can i leave him and the one and only sensible inspector we have in udaan land and when I write about him I feel Uma will be excited😉

Thanks deary...
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Posted: 6 years ago
#80

Originally posted by: LuvSSever

Sumi dear🤗

things are happening at a fast pace but never missed the flow.

loved it asusual.
Teju allowing chakor to cry her heart out, to see the real chakor, raghav maling anjor sleep, those slight smiles of chakor, all i could visualise.
Teju trying to make sense, chakor thinking about his future, his confession , her reaction, his decision, the boom, akash spoiling it by revealing truth to anjor.
Raghav-chakor knowing the culprit is in haveli.

raghav being hit on head, intrguing precap..

awaiting eagerly for next part..


yes its faced and he he i was also loosing patience as I wanted my sukor back😉

thanks again deary

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