The Greener Pasture....My first & final Story on my Sukor , my ado - Page 3

Created

Last reply

Replies

109

Views

8.2k

Users

10

Likes

288

Frequent Posters

LuvSSever thumbnail
17th Anniversary Thumbnail Rocker Thumbnail
Posted: 6 years ago
#21
Sumi dear 🤗
so beautifully written. blended with emotions , realistically..
heart goes out to chakor.
And sad on suraj state.
if only we could have seen something like this in epi.. only we can imagine now :(

so loving the route you are taking and the way story is shaping up
Sukor7 thumbnail
7th Anniversary Thumbnail Explorer Thumbnail
Posted: 6 years ago
#22
Thanks sumi dear!

You story sure going to heal my wounds ..

Happy suraj is raghav 😉

Eagerly waiting for ur udaan upcoming 😉
Ayur123 thumbnail
Posted: 6 years ago
#23
Superb dear.. waiting 😃
77nikita thumbnail
7th Anniversary Thumbnail Dazzler Thumbnail Visit Streak 30 Thumbnail
Posted: 6 years ago
#24
Sumi dear 👏👏👏
Mazaa aa raha Hain...likhte raho...

Send your senior mgmt packing😉😉 update soon...

Can't wait😳
sumsukor thumbnail
8th Anniversary Thumbnail Rocker Thumbnail Commentator Level 1 Thumbnail
Posted: 6 years ago
#25

Chapter III

The Pathway ...with thorns

She couldnot cry as she was dry... No tears... only puffed eyes... Everything seems pale... its dry... sand... her life is a desert but she has to keep her promise...

The cab started... with Rajoo beside... She made Rajoo to promise not to tell anything about Suraj to anyone.

Behind was two eyes noticing... He was far away... his eyes were red.. Chakor you killed my mom and my brother... good Suraj is killed but I will not leave you or your Anjor! He vowed...Aakash!!!

The monsoon was very bad she took 2 days as the cab broke and the roads were bad to reach AZ, she did not speak... she went to the hospital...

Teju came running to her, Chakor beta what happened its been 10 days now, Anjor is better but still in ICU, she needs Suraj, where is Suraj ,

The doctor shattered her more saying Anjor is vulnerable, she cannot handle any shock, she will go into trauma and cannot be revived.

What will I say to her, how will I say, I lost your son!, I lost my soul, I lost my life, I lost Anjor's father, am I so cursed that I could not see him at all... Has he really left me? How could he? Too many questions...

She told Teju , ma Suraj had to go to Lucknow regarding the case, he will come in few days!!! She told that Rajoo helped them a lot and she will stay with them as she has no one...

Teju was shocked as Chakor spoke without life... She was all the more shocked when she received a call... from the long lost brother... the brother in death bed who has become pauper with his son, daughter and son in law. She went to see them.

Chakor stayed outside the ICU with Leela...

Her phone rang , it was Inspector Kaushal Yadav.

Chakor madam please come to Lucknow, I have to show you something...

*************************************************

The Spring

He lifted his head, why is she holding me and crying, who is this young lady, I can't see her clearly...she is like a shadow... But she is making me light... Who is she...??


Raaghav!!! Called the mother... He jerked and found there was no one... Where has she gone? Who is she?

Raaghav beta am so happy to see you are pretty fine, blessed are those powerful herbal medicines.. She thanked the old man, kaaka, dhanyavaad, ham le chalengey mera bete ko...

The old man told her, Its magic, absolute magic as some force within him has healed him.. He looked at the guy, and spoke to himself looking at the Bajrangbali and Danvatri (the healer god) idols.

Beta I don't know who you are but I know you are not able to recollect your past due to the wound in your head. I know this lady though in a village near Lucknow, keeps coming here every week in search of her son! Should I say it is for some reason of God that you did not breathe last and made this mother breathe well!

He turned to him and said, Raghav, Bagwan ka chamatkar thum zinda ho. You are fine Please take care of your amma. Just have those medicines for your hand... his right hand wrist was tied with a bandage as it was burnt and healing now.

He was also getting used to this Amma seeing her unconditional love towards him. Amma spoke to him non stop, she was so excited, she spoke to him about his young age, his naughtiness everything...how he always was cheerful and at the same time warned him not to run away doing petty thefts as dharoka is very angry with him. She told him not to run away to the wedding procession which is coming up. He started to talk with amma and adhered himself to her description.

But during the nights he was disturbed... Who is that lady holding me and crying... She is small but she fits into me so well!!!

Amma and Raaghav boarded the bus to Lucknow

____________________________________

Precap: the meeting of chakor and Raaghav😳

Edited by sumsukor - 6 years ago
sumsukor thumbnail
8th Anniversary Thumbnail Rocker Thumbnail Commentator Level 1 Thumbnail
Posted: 6 years ago
#26
Girls hope this is going fine.
Thanks for your comments

I wrote two chapters

the next one will post it by tomorrow evening😊

C Ya
Shivi_forever thumbnail
13th Anniversary Thumbnail Visit Streak 365 Thumbnail + 5
Posted: 6 years ago
#27
Chapter 3
Poor Chakor😭
She is so broken
Akash made an appearance
Teju shocked by Chakor's state of mind
Anjor is in icu😲
What information inspector yadav want to give
Chapter 4
Suraj lost his memory😲
He sees Chakor in his dreams
The image is unclear
Amma is nice, she lost her child😭
The ved told Suraj about old lady's dead son
Interesting precap
sumsukor thumbnail
8th Anniversary Thumbnail Rocker Thumbnail Commentator Level 1 Thumbnail
Posted: 6 years ago
#28

Originally posted by: katheriene

Chapter 3

Poor Chakor 😭
She is so broken
Akash made an appearance
Teju shocked by Chakor's state of mind
Anjor is in icu😲
What information inspector yadav want to give
Chapter 4
Suraj lost his memory😲
He sees Chakor in his dreams
The image is unclear
Amma is nice, she lost her child😭
The ved told Suraj about old lady's dead son
Interesting precap


Thanks so much Sonali
Oops am I not clear. The ved did not tell him about the old lady. He speaks to himself not to Suraj.


Shivi_forever thumbnail
13th Anniversary Thumbnail Visit Streak 365 Thumbnail + 5
Posted: 6 years ago
#29

Originally posted by: sumsukor



Thanks so much Sonali
Oops am I not clear. The ved did not tell him about the old lady. He speaks to himself not to Suraj.


So Suraj is still unaware
LuvSSever thumbnail
17th Anniversary Thumbnail Rocker Thumbnail
Posted: 6 years ago
#30
Sumi dear🤗

its hard to detach present emotions and read story on new note dear.

so this line
She is small but she fits into me so well!!!

made me so emotional again.. those hugs, where she perfectly fits onto him😭 , sorry for spamming dear.

coming to story.
well written, exactly the way i wanted to see Sukor's story.. she devastated, sad to see her like tht..and he seeing her in his thoughts but not clearly seeing her.. too good

akash and mamaji clan made appearance here too..ok..lol

anjor, let her be in that state only..with current emotions,i dont want her to getup at all😡😆


Related Topics

Top

Stay Connected with IndiaForums!

Be the first to know about the latest news, updates, and exclusive content.

Add to Home Screen!

Install this web app on your iPhone for the best experience. It's easy, just tap and then "Add to Home Screen".