Twinj + Family TS: Being Poisoned COMPLETED pg 6 - Page 4

Originally posted by: Black_Maniac

Amazing part Shakti... I loved it! So perfectly written

The way Yuvi tricked Twinkle... Just what he would do

Kunj and Usha's annoyance was perfect, never thinking about what the result could be

The way Leela pushed Kunj back, the Leela we love

And then Bebe's taunt when Usha was crying (I was very happy when she cried though)

The last words are shocking! Continue soon, can't wait to read further 👏

Originally posted by: teddyyy

Shakti every time I think you can't impress me more with your writing because I'm so in love, you prove me wrong! Honestly this was beautiful! I LOVE angsty, emotionally demanding stories haha and this surpassed any expectations I could ever have. Twinkle so desperately trying to save her hubby and then her saas. I was like Kunj pls listen you're gonna regret it later, trust her but he didn't. Twinkle made me so proud when she tried getting to the hospital and can I just say how much I loved Mahi in your story?! Like omg when will this version of her be shown on the show! She found out, went to go save Usha, helped with Twinkle and SLAPPED Yuvi. I was so proud! You broke me with Leela and Kunj and Kunj worrying and he's so broken and the last line omg. I'm hoping you're gonna give us a plot twist like she's in coma or something because imma die and this was so perfect and omg you're the best LOL. I would write so much more but I can't formulate my thoughts well right now I just wanna hug you 😆

Originally posted by: Duumps

Very well written.

Amazing update.

Waiting for part 2.

Originally posted by: Zenab78

Superb ...waiting for next one 😊

Originally posted by: ZawraMalik

OMG shakti this was brillient.👏

I loved it ..it has something realy touchy...

Usha this woman.. i hate her sooo much😡

Poor twinkle gone through soo much to prove herself...

My heart brock down when kunj said that "with whom m talking"😭

Gald mahi came to knw about uv true face..

Ohhh God your ending made me scard..😲 but sakoon ka sans aya that there is one more chap remain lol m blind this is a TS na so definitely there will be another chap..lol

But girl you nailed it awesome..

Cant wait..

Love you

Originally posted by: 17.sonal

Very nice Shakti...

Twinkle is always der for every one...

But no one understands her worth..

It ws an eye opener for Sarna's ...

Thanks..