TEI OS: Questions - Page 2

Originally posted by: Sherni_Jerry

wow you nailed your first OS Areeba. absolutely fantastic. superb with the dialogues and emotions. very well done. pls continue 😳

thanks jerry! will write more soon if time permits.

dont lie to me! this is not ur first OS

Originally posted by: countingstarz

This is lovely ! I kinda hoped that this is how it would've played out in the show but alas the CVs have something else in mind it seems or perhaps it is still possible😆

i think knuj will definitly go see Twinkle and try to talk to her. not sure of she would come back. maybe something along the lines might happen.

I loved how you portrayed their conflicted emotions. It was so good do write more😊

Originally posted by: 3dancelover

dont lie to me! this is not ur first OS

it was amazing!

it was subtle then again it was not

the emotions were amazing

Do write more!

I wrote fan fictions before too but first for TEI/twinj. glad you liked it.

Originally posted by: mahadev07

sooo emotional...😭

I like this strong twinkle ...I don't like her pleading everything..i loved how u depicted her as a firm personality...

when kunj wished that twinkle held him...I just prayed that I get to see something like that in the epi..

overall it was an amazingly beautiful piece of writing👏👏...even though its first os...considering ur beautiful analyses..i was sure..it wud turn wonderful and it surely did👏👏

i don't know why but i usually turn every person on my writing into a person with determined voice. glad you liked.

Originally posted by: vidhu1

Wow this was perfect areeba!! The way you pened down their emotions was jUST fabulous...u indeed are an amazing writer!! 👏 gr8 job!! 😃

Thanks Vidhu!

Originally posted by: fangirl1012

I loved how you portrayed their conflicted emotions. It was so good do write more😊

im glad you liked reading it.

Originally posted by: teddyyy

YAAR I wanted to be first 😭 Chalo no problem, I'll stop whining and go read now 😆

Originally posted by: teddyyy

Maine par liya!

Haww haye, you told us to be gentle with you, but yeh kya, mera dil aur dard main ha ab :P I had expectations and you not only fulfilled them but oh my god way more than exceeded them! This was so beautifully written and I didn't think my emotions could get any stronger today but you proved me wrong. My heart constricted for Twinkle, being alone and thinking and regretting, it was all too much. I love how you say small things but they stand out SO much in terms of story telling. Like Twinkle going to her cupboard to get her old salwaar suit, shows me how she's going to try to fix things for their family while rebuilding herself. And I know how randomly the Sarnas and Tanjeas became neighbors so I LOVED how you mentioned that she lived across him most of her life and she still doesn't know much about him. But she still loves him. Their whole encounter was too much for me to deal with because Twinkle's piercing quietness, her hollowness, really got to me as a reader. The whole trust quotient was also beautifully explored, especially when Twinkle said she trusted him with more information than her own mother knew about her (something I never realized as a viewer). I could go on and on but this was beautiful! Look forward to you deciding to write again :D

this is such a beautiful comment! youre making me cry by flattering me! Omg I had to say something about them being neighbours. It was way too random for me to accept it. I had to find a logic in that front.

Thank you for honestly reviewing!