Untamed - A Swasan Story-EPILOGUE (PG-30)

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Anahita_Leve

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Posted: 8 years ago

#11

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Dearest Lucky, 😊

I loved the different type of narration you used for this one... Most probably this one being a short story, the pace is faster than your usual poetic, floating motion... As far as you presented "untamed" is only inspired by Hades and Persephone's story... As Sanskar here is on sacrificial mode. He may be rugged and hard outside, but has a very soft core for his Shona... I think Ragini will play the role Persephone's mom played.

Too much longing between SwaSan would result in explosive expression of their passion.. which may cause their elopement later...or deflowering(with mutual consent) ... 😳

Love,
Dyuti

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Anahita_Leve

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Posted: 8 years ago

#12

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sorry for the extra res caused by net problem. Can't delete now.hopefully use for chapter 2

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Sanya17

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Posted: 8 years ago

#13

Interesting and quite different from other usual stories I am loving this story but swara will have very hard job to get him back or make him confess she herself hasn't realise her love yet but it is quite a sweet different story

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Nivedita

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Posted: 8 years ago

#14

OMG lucky, another masterpiece upto sleeve, haan. I loved the intro and immediately set to read the chapter 1. And what a splendid one it was. I just loved it. I'm loving this shona and sanskar too much. But sanskar was a bit khadoos type in childhood, isn't. Not having anyone to call as own used to prick him so much. But our shona was there for him right. He immediately got protective of her. Both loved each other from childhood. But it was sanskar who realised and started ignoring swara. Swara is surely going to know the reason behind his sudden ignorance and in this process falls for him. Ragini and dadi... the least said the better. But are they going to be the villains of our swasan's love story.

Update soon.

Love u loads

Nivi

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canvasrocks786

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Posted: 8 years ago

#15

beautiful story.I just got mesmerised by their friendship. pls continue soon.

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kojagorimalik

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Posted: 8 years ago

#16

Its a beautiful story loved it...

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Sakura24

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Posted: 8 years ago

#17

Originally posted by: Sakura24
Mine!

Hi Lucky,

It was refreshing to read the unique background you gave our beloved pair here. I liked the headstrong Sanskar and the angelic Swara. It reminded me initially the promos of Meri ashaqi tum se hi, although the show ruined the feels for me later...I loved that...wo Pari hai jo mere kismat mein Nahi. ...vibe.

For some reason the love stories that aren't meant to be are the ones that gets immortalised. You know the sky and earth sun and moon kinda stuff. It was an enjoyable read and one more is added to the list of stories I look forward to read more.

Lots of love,

Saku

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Cogito_Ergo_Sum

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Posted: 8 years ago

#18

Lucky sweetheart 🤗🤗

A lovely start yaar. Loved the twist you have given to the character backgrounds. Sanskaar, poor guy, my heart goes out to him. An orphan, abandoned and unloved, his heart hardened by the feeling of being unwanted, rootless and alone.

But even at that tender age, it is Swara's innocence and effervescence which thaws him, makes his hair literally stand on end with the sheer power she wields over him. That's the soul connect between this wonderful couple. 😳

I love friendship growing to love and childhood sweetheart kind of tales...and I adore edgy, intense romances with some stormy clouds darkening the horizon. 😉 And this tale has these elements in spades. 😉 Looking forward to it so much.

The way you described Swara and Sanskaar's friendship all through their childhood, the way he found a home, in a way, with Shekar, Shomi and the family...that was beautiful. That snapshot of the young Sanskaar, saying with furious intensity, that he would simply kill anyone who hurt Swara...that was amazing as well as spine chilling. 👏

So Sunny already realized that he loved Swara...but at that stage, he wanted to gradually distance himself from her, so that their friendship does not get talked about in a way that would sully her reputation. He is convinced that she is too good for an orphan, a 'sadak chaap' like him.

Wonder what would happen next. Would Lucky enter the scene, someone who tries to play with Swara's feelings?

Looking forward to the next chapter 😊

Lots of Love

Viji

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lucky.m

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Posted: 8 years ago

#19

Hello all 🤗

Thank you so much for all nice words 😛.I am happy it got to a good start.😛I had a bad tiring day and totally drained out ..I read all your lovely comments and they all deserve a proper response. Please bear with me for delay.Will revert tomorrow

Love

Lucky

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Aheli

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Posted: 8 years ago

#20

Lucky dearest, 🤗
First the Greek Mythology and next the chapter of our SwaSan linked with that mythology. Hats off to u dear. 😉 Superb chapter. 👏 Loved the undercurrent between SwaSan. 😳 Again Ragini and Dadi r the dangers. 😡 Loved SheMish and Sujoy along with Shona's love and care for Sanskar. 😃 But what aftermath dear?? 😲 Update soon sis. 😳 Thanks for the pm. 😃
With love,
Aheli.

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